dex-entries-discussion

[rich goblet]

"Entries should be consistent with the content in this lorebook rather than attempting to change the accepted lore."

By attempting to change the style of the Pokédex, that is an attempt at changing lore.

[viscid light]

Reasonable enough

Read the lore book best I could (on phone), so I can understand the Porygon fusion

[zinc patrol]

Are these three suitable for release?

[rich goblet]

Getting to it now

POKENAME can simultaneously restore health and accumulate psychic energy with sunlight. If necessary, POKENAME can convert energy stored in its buds into psychic energy, but this will lead to prolonged weakness.

POKENAME spends most of its life either basking in the sun or protecting its flower bud. The rest of its body soaks up any attacks made against it. Sometimes simply staring at its bulb the wrong way can scare it away.

POKENAME collects a large amount of withered plants inside its shell, and then hangs itself in a cool and ventilated place using vines. Although the fermented liquid has a fragrant scent, its most suitable use is as a fertilizer.

[zinc patrol]

It seems that I added an extra line break when I uploaded this just now...

[rich goblet]

I’ll fix it tomorrow, just a small thing

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+shuckle/
POKENAME collects a large number of flowers in its shell and then uses vines to tie itself to a tree to camouflage. The flower tea fermented inside its shell is very fragrant, but most bug Pokémon dislike it.

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+magcargo/
POKENAME uses corrosive liquids to dissolve rocks to supplement nutrients. Its buds gradually warm up as activity increases.

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+corsola/
The branches on POKENAME's head are loved by many Pokémon and are also an excellent spice. When there is a supply of pure water, the branches of POKENAME regenerate very quickly, which is why many trainers raise POKENAME for profit.

[rich goblet]

Very cool entries, I've marked my approval with the "Post It" emoji

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+delibird/
POKENAME's tail is filled with soil. When it basks in the sun, this soil becomes more fertile and is then used by it to fertilize plants that are waiting to bloom.

[rich goblet]

I think the tail might actually be a bag, like a delibird bag

[zinc patrol]

Yeah, I didn't mention that directly because the shape of the picture makes it obvious that it's a bag

[rich goblet]

What may be obvious to you may not be obvious to the player.

[zinc patrol]

POKENAME has a bag-like tail filled with soil. When it basks in the sun, this soil becomes more fertile, and then it uses it to fertilize the plants waiting to bloom.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME has a bag-like tail filled with soil. When it basks in the sun, this soil gains more nutrients, which it uses to fertilize plants waiting to bloom.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+houndoom/
POKENAME lives in groups and is hostile to all outsiders. The flames in its mouth have a unique ability to strip the life from its enemies while preserving nutrients in the ashes.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME lives in packs that are hostile to outsiders. The flames in its mouth have a unique ability to strip the life from its enemies while preserving nutrients in the ashes.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+blissey/
The buds carried by POKENAME have the power to dispel pain, and just being nearby can heal illnesses. Although the weight of the flowerpot is negligible to it, the size of the buds is already to the extent of affecting its field of view.

[rich goblet]

The buds carried by POKENAME have the power to numb pain, as simply being nearby can soothe inflammation. The weight of the flowerpot is negligible, but the size of the flower obscures its vision.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/2.243/
The pot that POKENAME carries on its back is filled with a liquid that turns into incense as soon as it flows out. Although there is a legend that POKENAME can bring wealth to people, all the plants around it release terrifying lightning.

Ideas about wealth come from: 1. It includes legendary Pokémon. 2. Meow statue. 3. The pokinder shows that it carries incense, which indicates that this image is at least related to some kind of worship.

[rich goblet]

The pot that POKENAME carries on its back is filled with a liquid that turns into incense as soon as it flows out. Although there is a legend that POKENAME can bring wealth, approaching is difficult as the plants around it produce frightening sparks.

[zinc patrol]

What's wrong?

[rich goblet]

Had to fix something

[zinc patrol]

Was it a grammar or phrasing fix? The text the translator gave me didn't even change

[rich goblet]

I meant I had to fix what I wrote with an edit

@lone prism Please only type your username when submitting entries. Since your display name can be changed at any time, we rely on discord usernames to track authors. For example, my username is "quackquackattack".

It will be fixed this time but if it happens again we will be denying future entries.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+pupitar/
POKENAME flies to areas with more sunlight by spraying gas. Although the gas carries a floral fragrance, the sand particles in it may cause lung disease.

[rich goblet]

Neither of the Pokémon that make up the fusion can fly, so it doesn't make much sense. I'd fix that before we continue.

Pupitar is more like a cocoon.

[zinc patrol]

The illustrated book shows it can move by jet, and the Chinese illustrated book translates this as jet flight, which I think is basically the same thing.

[rich goblet]

I need to see the source on this.

[zinc patrol]

https://bulbapedia.bulbagarden.net/wiki/Pupitar_(Pokémon)

[rich goblet]

Oh

[zinc patrol]

The illustrated part of the third generation

[lone prism]

( o3o) ...both my display and username are empathnaga...?

[rich goblet]

POKENAME flies to areas with lots of sunlight by propelling itself forward with a burst of air. Although the gas carries a floral fragrance, the sand particles in it may cause lung disease.

[rich goblet]

In your case, do not capitalize your username.

It should be empathnaga

[zinc patrol]

By the way, I mentioned flying when I wrote the original version of this entry.
https://www.fusiondex.org/bulbasaur+pupitar/

[rich goblet]

I'll look into it

I already gave you a reply

POKENAME flies to areas with lots of sunlight by propelling itself forward with a burst of gas. Although the gas carries a floral fragrance, the sand particles in it may cause lung disease.

[zinc patrol]

Oh, that was wrong, I thought I did, but the wording only mentioned taking root.

[rich goblet]

It's fine, don't worry about it

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+bonsly/
Although POKENAME's head looks completely like a flower bud, most of the exposed part is a stony shell. The real flower bud is in the gap at the top of the head, and the viscos liquid that flows out like honey is actually bitter brine.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME's head looks like a flower bud, but it is made out of a stony shell. The real flower bud lies within the gap on its head and releases a viscous, bitter brine that flows like honey.

[hexed fog]

ok I'm gonna bang out the heart list today

[rich goblet]

Go for it

[jagged ledge]

Why would it be made of steel? Neither components are Steel type?

[rich goblet]

Don't worry too much about it, it has been dealt with. The entry is also from two months ago

[jagged ledge]

Pokédex entries don't activate based on inventory?

[jagged ledge]

Sorry, saw them being brought up and some of them just make me concerned lol

[rich goblet]

Understandable, that is why I told them that they should post entries here until they align with the guidelines in the lorebook.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+magnezone/
POKENAME has a strong sense of territory and will clear any plants growing within it. Its slender flower buds can sense plants that are growing.

[rich goblet]

This one is a funny sprite

[rich goblet]

POKENAME is a territorial creature and will clear plants growing within its domain. Its slender flowerbuds can sense plants that sprout.

[pale venture]

Plants.. stop growing?

[rich goblet]

oreee relies on a translator to write entries, so I've been charitable with translations

[pale venture]

Oooh right, my bad

Sorry I forgot, I've been super busy recently

I haven't been able to write an entry in weeks

[rich goblet]

It's alright, I know its finals week for some folks, and work ramps up around summer time for others

[zinc patrol]

To put it bluntly, try electrocuting those seeds that are trying to germinate

[pale venture]

https://tenor.com/bxHIV.gif

[zinc patrol]

If it wasn't a special effect, it would be a terrible accident

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+tangrowth/
Except for its flower bud, POKENAME can quickly regenerate other parts. It usually puts its flower buds and leaves on top of its head to bask in the sun, and when it encounters danger, it hides them in the vines.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME can regenerate most of its body quickly, but cannot do so for its flower bud. The flower bud and leaves are left exposed to absorb sunlight until it is in danger, enveloping the delicate bundle with vines.

[hexed fog]

@viscid light Please make sure you are posting your entries here for review for a bit before submitting further 🙂 Thank you

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+gardevoir/
POKENAME already has strong psychic abilities, needs to concentrate beneath sunlight to focus its powers. It can predict when flowers will bloom, bringing its Trainer over for the two of them to enjoy the display together.

[jagged ledge]

Maybe instead of "still needs to grow further in the sunlight", you could specify "needs to concentrate beneath sunlight"?

Trainer should be capitalized. But also, specify "flowers" instead of "plants". Instead of "enjoys appreciating this moment", which implies that you mean the very moment the person is reading the entry, you could refocus it to say "It can predict when flowers will bloom, bringing its Trainer over for the two of them to enjoy the display together."

[zinc patrol]

is that so? ?client=gtx

…I’m pretty sure the translator still doesn’t work correctly this time, at least it doesn’t have capitalized initials.

[jagged ledge]

Well make sure to read the first part too. I recommend needing to concentrate beneath sunlight because growing further would be evolution, while this should be a self-contained entry. So "needs to concentrate beneath sunlight to focus its powers."

[zinc patrol]

I noticed it while reading and then copied the original text from the wrong place when revising

[viscid light]

That's what I do

[jagged ledge]

No worries, it all works out in the end

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+spiritomb/
POKENAME resembles a flower bud in a planter. When it releases spores, it steals the life of plants within its range.

[jagged ledge]

We would also like to request that you refrain from pinging Spriters for the entries you write for their Sprites until the Entries are approved by us.

If you give a Spriter an Entry that we have yet to review and they submit it under their name as you request, then that will be breaking the review process and we will be unable to track the entry that you wrote because it will be under their username and they won't have the answers to any potential questions when we need to review them.

[rich goblet]

I’ve got to cook breakfast, take the wheel Wildheart

[jagged ledge]

I got like an hour at best, but I'll try

[jagged ledge]

The only real issue I can think of is to say "in a planter" instead of "in a flowerpot" just to avoid repeating "flower", but otherwise it looks pretty solid.

[hexed fog]

If we discover anyone is submitting an entry under someone else's name ever I will be banning them from entering future entries

If we can't trust someone to write their own name on a form we cannot trust them to write entries

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+mawile/
Although the back of POKENAME's head is actually a big mouth disguised as a flower bud, the liquid that flows out is real nectar. Because the bud-shaped mouth cannot open very wide, POKENAME tends to capture smaller prey.

[rich goblet]

I've got a breakfast burrito

[hexed fog]

oh wait

we did leg list already

Oceanbirb List is up

[zinc patrol]

I edited it. Just now the translator regarded the back of the head as the head.

[rich goblet]

It's still fine, see emoji

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/2.302a/
The mouths on the vines can only chew and digest, and only the largest mouth can absorb nutrients for POKENAME. Although the main body crawls slowly, the vines can detach, move quickly, and remain active for several weeks.

[severe scroll]

Hello Dex Writers!

[rich goblet]

The mouths on its vines chew and digest food before giving it to the main mouth to absorb nutrients. Although the main body crawls slowly, the vines can detach, move quickly, and remain active for several weeks.

[rich goblet]

Howdy PirateKat!

[severe scroll]

Wait, that actually happened?!

This is why we can't have nice things...

[hexed fog]

yes

one of the times was with my name lol

I was like "uh I didnt write that"

oceanbirbs def still need some attention

[severe scroll]

Oh shoot. Damn, play stupid games, win stupid prizes.

[viscid light]

...reasonable enough

[hexed fog]

I wanna hear about flight patterns, boardwalk thefts, ugly nests, flocking and beak uses

[jagged ledge]

I can get on them tonight if there are any left, I'll just be a bit busy until later

[viscid light]

You don't get that in controlled environments, you get it in natural environments

https://tenor.com/view/shrek-smirk-shrek-sus-shrek-smile-gif-4983018699107868283

And that, I'd be more than happy to provide

[severe scroll]

I can do that!

Sablgull (421.516)
POKENAME are notorious thieves who steal unguarded accessories. POKENAME use these necklaces, bracelets, and rings to build their nests. When their chicks hatch, the chicks will eat the jewels off the jewelry while waiting for their parents.

Beautigull (508.516)
POKENAME are found living in flowering trees near the beach where they can collect pollen from the tropical flowers. Tourists enjoy taking pictures of these beautiful Pokémon, but they will become aggressive and attack anyone who comes too close.

[rich goblet]

Remember to not mix it/its/is and they/them/are when referring to a species of Pokémon

but they will become aggressive is the easiest fix I think

[severe scroll]

There was one more plurl error that I fixed

Cargull (478.516)
Living deep within coastal caves, POKENAME make their nests out of the moss that grows on the cavern walls. Flocks of these Pokémon gather for grooming, using their soft feathers to clean the jewel-like beaks, tails, and wings on one another.

Corpgull (548.516)
The claws that make up POKENAME's wings are strong, but hollow, allowing it to fly for short distances. This Pokémon is mainly found on the beach, scavenging for food from tourists, snapping its claws at people who refuse to share.

Dhelgull (453.516)
POKENAME forms its nest on a buoy floating out at sea. When Wailord and Wailmur swim to the surface, POKENAME will sit atop one of the pod members and feast on the vitality of that Pokémon through its seaweed-like feathers.

(Image is not updated on FusionDex)

Grogull (317.516)
POKENAME makes its nest in the shrubs near beachside cafés where its natural camouflage makes it difficult to spot. When tables with food are left unattended, POKENAME will hop out and steal the leftovers from the meal.

(Image is not updated on FusionDex)

Kligull (397.516a)
Every flap of POKENAME's wings causes the gears on its body to turn and click. This Pokémon steals the nuts, bolts, and screws out of unattended furniture to consume for sustenance.

Kligull (397.516)
POKENAME's body hovers more than it flies, opting to use its wings when it needs to gain altitude. It tends to avoid the water and makes its nests on top of small buildings using shiny paper and metal scraps it scavenges.

[viscid light]

Pelimagius / 517.255
Often found floating next to anchored ships, POKENAME are notorious for their combination of faithful reliance as sailor companions, and for explosive outbursts of disdain whenever anything doesn't go their way. It is deemed bad luck to anger a POKENAME intentionally.

[rich goblet]

beachside is one word, otherwise fine

[viscid light]

Peliunny / 517.354
Using their wing-like ears as spoilers while skating across water, POKENAME have been recorded crossing seas at 65 miles per hour. They are praised by sailors across Hoenn thanks to this, and serves as the symbol for Hoenn's Mail Service.

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Sandygull (459.516)
Hiding in the beach sand, POKENAME waits patiently for a person to approach with food. When close, POKENAME will squawk and flap its sandy wings, startling its target and causing it to drop what its holding and flee; children are its main target.

[rich goblet]

Is tracked the best verb here? Maybe recorded instead?

[severe scroll]

This one may have gotten lost. How is it?

[rich goblet]

Yeah should be fine now

[rich goblet]

I replied here @severe scroll

[severe scroll]

mb, didn't see that

[rich goblet]

You’re fine

[rich goblet]

Actually on second inspection is Sea Mail Service a thing? We might need to make it generic, like Hoenn’s postal services

We aren’t allowed to make new organizations I believe let me check

Yeah we have to use a generic stand-in

[viscid light]

Winkull / 516.311
"Woe to Me, Woe to You, Woe to We, Woe to All. The Black Beak. That Gold Eye. POKENAME will never let go." - A sea shanty describing the merciless nature of POKENAME, whenever someone enters its' view.

[severe scroll]

That's a cool way to write an entry.

[rich goblet]

You cannot have sea shanty lyrics in the entry itself

[severe scroll]

Unfortunate.

[jagged ledge]

But not exactly fitting of Dex Tone. It would be more fitting in a myth or fantasy setting than an actual encyclopedia.

[severe scroll]

Fair enough

[jagged ledge]

I remember someone once had really cool descriptions of mythology because they wanted to make their own fantasy world, but while I fully encouraged them to pursue their own writing in ways they enjoyed, I also had to remind them that entries have a specific format/tone for a scientific encyclopedia. Obviously you can still convey a unique voice and utilize different subjects or themes, but there are limits.

[severe scroll]

Zigull (504.516)
Due to the shape of their wings, POKENAME fly in zig-zag patterns. Curious creatures, they will approach people in hopes of getting something from them, be it food or something they can use for their nest.

[severe scroll]

Yep! I read through the lorebook and saw the things to avoid. It actually helped a lot with the understanding of what is expected out of dex entries.

[jagged ledge]

Much appreciated!

[rich goblet]

You’ve earned a Spheal of approval

[severe scroll]

Yay!

I have now submitted 10 Wingull fusion entries, @hexed fog

There are 14 left on the list.

I'm going to take a break.

Also! Thank you for including what 'what has happened prior to the game' and 'what happens while the player is playing' in the book. Reminding people that the Dex entries are supposed to be written prior to the game's official beginning is huge.

I'm also curious to see what happens in the Hoenn game because I read that PIFH takes place 3-years before the mainline games.

It would be cool to meet the main protagonist of the games as a child/before they start their journey!

[rich goblet]

I think Hoenn is set to happen at the same time as PIF:1, it should say in the FAQ in #pif-hoenn-discussion

[severe scroll]

I didn't see it in the FAQ, but that's fine. Thank you for the input!

[rich goblet]

Oh no, maybe I misremembered

[narrow cosmos]

At first glance it was thought that POKENAME produced large amounts of warm water from its tongue-covered body, until further research revealed it was actually expelling large amounts of excess saliva.

Enjoy the image.

[storm light]

Oh that's fuckin gross

[narrow cosmos]

Imagine being the researcher that first found it being like "oh, refreshing water, thanks Lickicoal!

Then discovering the truth.

[storm light]

burh I just ate

[narrow cosmos]

[keen kestrel]

i feel like it's an unspoken rule in the pokemon world that you don't drink the water shot out from squirtle's Water Gun or whatever 😂 clean enough for a nice shower. not potable

looks like you can actually teach this fusion Rain Dance in game

terrible. love it

[rancid sun]

I wanna know who made a Lickilicky/Torkoal fusion and decided to make it a giant salivary gland

[hexed fog]

I could see it happening

[hexed fog]

Who knows why we are working on these

🤷‍♂️

🤷‍♀️

[severe scroll]

[pale venture]

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/2.317/
The bud of POKENAME exudes pigment-filled liquid, completely changing the color of the soil shell. The pigment secreted by POKENAME is a fairly well-known agricultural product.

[hexed fog]

@proud cosmos please continue to post entries here for review before submitting 🙂

[proud cosmos]

okaaay

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/2.317b/
POKENAME's shell is covered with grass, which uses the sunlight that passes through POKENAME's leaves to survive. These grasses provide perfect camouflage, both in color and in smell.

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+torterra/
Although the buds on the tree on POKENAME's back look like peaches, they are not suitable for consumption. These buds, which never bloom, lock in a charming fragrance and are often picked to be used as fragrance.

[rich goblet]

The bud on POKENAME’s back oozes a pigment that changes the color of its shell. This pigment is also a widely-used agricultural product.

[rich goblet]

Both Pokémon in this fusion are quite slow, I’m a little confused where you are getting fast from

[rich goblet]

Although the buds on the tree on POKENAME's back look like peaches, they are not suitable for consumption. These buds, which never bloom, lock in a charming scent and are often picked to be used as fragrance.

[zinc patrol]

Faster than close relatives. My idea is that the movement of many large organisms is limited by oxygen, so if the plants on its back directly supply oxygen to it, it can enhance its movement, at least faster than other members of the same species.

[rich goblet]

That concept doesn’t make sense, like if I give a marathon runner an oxygen tank it would not make them faster

[zinc patrol]

I originally wanted to refute it based on the difference in cardiopulmonary function, but then I suddenly realized that turtles can hold their breath for a long time. Well, you are right.

But I wanted to keep the grassy part on the back, which explains why the dirt shell is green. I would replace the second sentence.

[rich goblet]

Maybe repost the entry with a different second sentence yeah

[zinc patrol]

Check out this version

[rich goblet]

POKENAME's shell is covered with grass, which uses the sunlight that passes through POKENAME's leaves to survive. The grass provides perfect camouflage, both in color and in smell.

[fresh cliff]

oi como baixa o jogo eu nao to consigindo

[rich goblet]

<@&306953740651462656> Does anyone speak Spanish? I have someone who looks a little lost

[junior osprey]

thisaint spanish

jeez

[rich goblet]

Oh shoot

My bad

[junior osprey]

#português

[zinc patrol]

Portuguese

[rich goblet]

Sorry

[zinc patrol]

In fact, I really wanted to answer him, but I came here just for the entry in the first place and didn’t know how to download it

[hexed fog]

Omg

I thought it was Spanish too... my abuelita is turning in her grave

[rich goblet]

I don’t encounter Portuguese everyday so I wasn’t sure

[storm light]

Same, i keep thinking it's spanish when it's portugese, I feel bad for every time I mix it up

[willow venture]

Yknow I'd have figured one of you guys here is at least Brazilian lol

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Wingull (516.516)
POKENAME's flight pattern and movement speed is similar to a Yanma. Using this agility, POKENAME swoop down and steal food from unsuspecting people and Pokémon before returning to its nest with its stolen goods.

[finite salmon]

"POKENAMEN"

[severe scroll]

Thank you

[rich goblet]

What is the connection between this Pokemon and a Yanma? I’m confused

[severe scroll]

The flight pattern and speed. I'm mainly referring to how the wings flap. Plus, the two Pokemon's speeds are very similar

[rich goblet]

I would simply say its wings flap quickly, as it currently relies on knowing that Yanma flaps its wings fast

[severe scroll]

I could also say 'dragonfly' but I wasn't sure.

[rich goblet]

What’s wrong with saying that it rapidly flaps its wings?

[severe scroll]

Nothing, but I was wondering if that way would work as well?

[rich goblet]

Dragonflies don’t exist in PIF

[severe scroll]

That's what I figured.

[rich goblet]

Yeah

[severe scroll]

Wingull (516.516)
POKENAME flap its wings in alternating patterns creating rapid motions that increase its speed. Using this agility, POKENAME swoop down and steal food from unsuspecting people and Pokémon before returning to its nest with its stolen goods.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME rapidly flaps its wings in an alternating pattern to increase its speed.

Otherwise looks fine

[severe scroll]

Whismgull (520.516)
POKENAME lives in the tall grass near the shore. The sounds of the ocean waves help calm the nerves of this extremely timid and easily frightened Pokémon. It hops around to move, flapping its wing-like ears to gain extra distance.

[clear hollow]

This Pokémon is a pretty agile swimmer but isn't very fast outside of the water. To help itself with hunting on land, POKENAME crafts spears out of the rocky scales it occasionally sheds.
465.159 Lycanroc-Midnight/Croconaw
Mergemay Day 9 - Obsidian

[clear hollow]

Bales of POKENAME are commonly found floating above the rainforests. When wind travels through their turbines, these Pokémon collect and absorb moisture from the air to power up their Water-type attacks.
9.189 Blastoise/Jumpluff
Mergemay Day 10 - Technology

bales is how the groups of sea turtles are called. Blastoise appears to be a tortoise, but since it's a water-type mon, I thought mixing them up a bit won't do much harm

[clear hollow]

The fruits this Pokémon grows inside its crown are sweet and nutritious, but are also covered in hundreds of tiny needles. In POKENAME's natural habitat, only Numel and Camerupt are adapted to eating these fruits without hurting themselves.
457.492 Cacnea/Slurpuff
Mergemay Day 11 - Desert

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+groudon/
POKENAME's body has a complex array of plant species. When it releases its power, plants grow uncontrollably over a wide area, causing a green disaster.

[hexed fog]

The 17MAY2026 Dex Update has been sent. Please allow it some time to activate. You don't need to manually update it will happen automatically as you open the game.

[acoustic scarab]

I don't often look at the submissions spreadsheet, but did so today, and it's a little funny seeing the chunk of time where it was just me submitting entries

for, like, 7ish hours

(not that I was solidly submitting entries in that time, just funny that nobody else was)

[proud cosmos]

If a POKENAME’s flame ever goes out, it will slowly start to die. Even from birth, the flame provides POKENAME with the nutrients needed for it to survive.

[hexed fog]

This is pretty much just a charmander entry

[proud cosmos]

I realize that now

I wanted to inplement the bulb as well but im not sure how to do that

If a POKENAME’s flame ever goes out, it will slowly start to die. Though the flame burns its entire life, its bulb never burns up.

Good?

[severe scroll]

How about...
The bulb on POKENAME's back contains the fuel it needs to keep the fire going. This Pokémon produces this fuel through photosynthesis. If POKENAME's flame goes out, it will need to rest in the sun and sleep or risk perishing.

Look at that nice round number!

Bugull (400.516)
During the spring, POKENAME's body feathers will begin to produce a layer of pollen that it spreads when it flies. During the winter, POKENAME will remain in its nest, wings tight against its body, and endure the cold weather.

Lomgull (496.516)
POKENAME dives into the water to pluck sea grass that it uses to build its shoreline nest. The lily pad on its head helps provide cover from potential predators. If something gets too close, POKENAME flaps its wings and squawks loudly to scare it.
https://infinitefusion.net/customsprites/CustomBattlers/496.516.png

Lugull (389.516)
When POKENAME fly in flocks, electricity can be seen transmitting between their tails. When resting for the night, rhythmic electrical pulses can faintly be heard within the flock as they sleep, wordlessly communicating their feelings.

Field researcher PirateKat reporting from the beaches of Lilycove City! Many Wingull seem to have gotten their beaks on discarded Splicers. Will report more on the behaviors of these fused Pokémon as they are seen.

[pastel depot]

So I had a bit of an experiment. I wrote a dex entry withiut any particular mon to reference and quite like how it came out. However... i now need a mon for it. (It also might be a tiny bit too long im not sure)

The gem in the center of POKENAME's face perpetually reflects the night sky, even in the harshest of weather. In areas where wet seasons dominate much of the year, astronomers will often use this pokemon to study and map the stars.

Anybody got ideas? Im thinking its gotta be a staryu or starmie head of some kind but not sure on the body at all.

[severe scroll]

I might have some suggestions

Clefcie #35.500

Dianfairy #500.35

Clefeon #35.196b

Clefsian #36.53

@pastel depot Any of these work?

[acoustic scarab]

god, that's a gorgeous sprite

[severe scroll]

Clefcie also has one without the moon

[severe scroll]

I'd recommend the Dianfairy (500.35)

Clefyu #35.120c

Starfairy #120.35

[pastel depot]

My only issue is the several mentions of harsh weather and rain with it. I like the clefairy and diancie, just not with the weather parts

[severe scroll]

Starfable #121.36

This could be good

[severe scroll]

The Clefairy line may be your best bet. I gave a bunch of options that could work. Up to you though.

We are down to 5 Wingull fusions left on the list

Shroomgull (404.516)
POKENAME build their nests in tall grass near the beachfront. When startled, they expel a Stun Spore cloud from their heads, then fly away while their opponent is paralyzed.

Surgull (518.516)
POKENAME skate across the surface of river waters near the ocean using the tips of their wings. They dive their beaks into the water to catch small prey or gather sea grass for their nests on that river bank.

Venigull (422.516)
POKENAME can sense the movements of potential prey in the air around it using its head feelers. Using the height advantage from its tree-top nest, POKENAME will dive bomb its prey and bite down on their body, injecting it with a paralyzing poison.

Ningull (382.516)
A nocturnal creature, POKENAME will flutter near palm trees and use the antenna on its snout to find openings in the soft bark. POKENAME will absorb the nutrients from the tree for sustenance before returning to its ground nest at dawn.

Tailgull (514.516)
POKENAME migrate to warm beaches during the winter time to avoid the colder climates. These gutsy Pokémon will fight larger sea birds, as well as steal food from tourists' hands, all without fear.

Tailgull (514.516a)
These Pokémon are determined fighters, fending off foes of all sizes from their nests. When hungry, POKENAME will locate outdoor cafés and hop near tables, cheeping up at tourists in hopes of them sharing or dropping their food.

@midnight siren, or any other Unown, do you mind looking these 6 entries over and letting me know if they're good to post?

[midnight siren]

just the last 6 you posted?

[severe scroll]

Yes please

[midnight siren]

heard chef

[severe scroll]

These are the last Pokémon on the Oceanbirb list

[storm light]

I just got back from doing yardwork and was about ready to help with the list

[severe scroll]

[midnight siren]

ok so “edges of the beach” kinda makes it sound like they all live by one specific beach (specifically because “edges” is plies and “beach” is not). I have a couple of options depending on which you prefer:

1. “edge of beaches” -> just flipping the pluralisation fixes this issue, as they are nesting in various beaches by that beaches specific edge
2. “near the beachfront” -> this is more of a flavour change, but this would also work, as a beachfront is the edge of a beach

there are other options (most notably “edges of beaches”) but these are my recs for which to go with

[severe scroll]

I like the 'beachfront' option

[midnight siren]

Aesthetic change:

you could change “cloud of paralysing poison” to “Stun Spore”, thus allowing you to change “stunned” to “paralysed”. This is an entirely optional suggestion, there is nothing technical that this fixes, I just think it’d be nice to be able to say they fly from a paralysed foe without reusing paralysed

[midnight siren]

ok so pet peeve moment: remove the word “can” from your second paragraph. if the fusion uses its beak for hunting and nest building, you don’t need to launder your point by adding “can”. “Might” and “may” also fall under this category often

[midnight siren]

“River bank” is a compound word, so shouldn’t have a space between words. Also I’m not sure if “Brackish” would count under FAQ6 (technical language), but either way I would suggest changing it to “rivers” for clarity sake

[severe scroll]

Brackish is a mix of fresh and salt water, which is calmer waters. I wanted to specify that because ocean water near the beach isn't calm enough for a Surskit to skate on.

[midnight siren]

I say rivers as, to my understanding, “brackish waters” are slightly salty waters that feed into the ocean, so saying “rivers near the ocean” or “river water near the ocean” would still give this info in a clearer way

[rich goblet]

I’m sorry I haven’t been active today, feeling a little blue

Yall be nice to each other now

[midnight siren]

ok quick couple of things:

1. “movement” -> “movements”. this is a minor tweak, but it flows better with the same meaning
2. “tree” -> “tree-top”. saying “its tree nest” implies that the nest is within the bark of the tree. tree-top nest, however, implies that the nest is at the height of the tree

I’m also thinking that “it’s body” and “injects it” might be a bit uhh not vague? just not 100% clear. I can’t think about how to fix it, although I think changing it to “their body” and “injects them” should do it, as the specific creature being attacked has been established so the singular “they” is applicable here

[storm light]

No

[severe scroll]

Character limit is also rough.

[rich goblet]

No cookie points for you

[storm light]

I will just steal them

[midnight siren]

ok so you have 1 plurality/singularity inconsistency here:
Nocturnal creatures, POKENAME -> this implies that POKENAME are plural, as it refers to them as creatures. the rest of the entry is 100% singular, so this could be changed to A nocturnal creature, POKENAME to fix this

[severe scroll]

I have two cookie points! 🍪

[midnight siren]

damn thats crazy

[storm light]

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/240196923644968960/1428161600694521956/caption.gif

[midnight siren]

it looks alright by me

[midnight siren]

i would remove the word up, but thats not a specific issue just a preference, i just think it flows better

[severe scroll]

Thank you!

@hexed fog The Oceanbirb list is done!

[midnight siren]

[pastel depot]

Which member of the clefairy line is clefyu? I kinda like the idea of that

Found it

Its Clefairy

I like that ill post it under that soon

Assuming it doesnt have a dex

[pastel depot]

Actually

Am I allowed to say "areas where wet seasons dominate much of the year?"

Or does that break a rule of some kind?

[pastel depot]

Hey @midnight siren congrats on being the most recent unown speaker in this chat. Whats your opinion?

Dex entry for reference:

The gem in the center of POKENAME's face perpetually reflects the night sky, even in the harshest of weather. In areas where wet seasons dominate much of the year, astronomers will often use this pokemon to study and map the stars.

I know its probably a bit long ill fix that in a bit, I wanna make sure theres no canonness problems and stuff of that like first

[midnight siren]

i don't see a specific problem personally

[fading shale]

no entrys from me today
im sick af xd

[pastel depot]

I guess my worry is with canonness/in PIF Universe, since as of now theres not really an area with wet seasons most of the year. (Not that normal pokemon has one either, given wet seasons are typically associated with africa)

Actually

Now that I think of it, do any of the continents on the southern hemisphere have a region?

[hexed fog]

YESSSSSSS

[fading shale]

huh

[hexed fog]

Chewfish List is up

[fading shale]

ahh

[hexed fog]

It's a list that is high priority

for some reason

😉

[fading shale]

lol

[severe scroll]

I did a bunch of the last list, so I'm going to take a small break and go back to my Torchic line work.

[fading shale]

zekrom line

[severe scroll]

Curious

Torchpie (279.10a)
POKENAME is a common target for bird Pokémon due to its bright color palette. When attacked, POKENAME will spit fireballs at the predator using its internal fire, then flee.

Compod (280.11)
While unable to move much due to its fragile state, POKENAME will harden and heat itself to endure hardships. This Pokémon will hold a grudge and seek out any attackers on evolution.

Comfree (280.12)
When POKENAME flies, it scatters ember-like scale from its wings. This Pokémon will seek out weaker Pokémon being attacked and aid them. It will also pick up fallen cocoon Pokémon and place them back on a branch in the tree above them.

Weechic (13.279)
When using the horn on its head or tail to strike a foe, POKENAME injects the opponent with a poison that burns the target. The injection site becomes inflamed and swollen if it is not treated immediately.

Kakchic (14.279)
The shell surrounding POKENAME is tough, but is flexible enough to allow this Pokémon movement; however, it opts to stay in a safe area while awaiting evolution. If it senses danger, POKENAME will harden and heat its shell to ward off predators.

Kakchic (14.279a)
POKENAME can be found in clusters within a nest as they await evolution. If they sense danger, heat will begin to radiate off their shells to ward off potential attackers. The parents patrol the area to ensure the safety of their young.

Torchuna (279.14)
The feathers on POKENAME's head are covered in a sticky substance that helps it cling to tree branches as it awaits evolution. When attacked, POKENAME spits fireballs at the attacker. If touched, the poison on its shell will harm the foe.

That's the rest of the Caterpie line done, as well as the Weedle line, with the Torchic line fusions.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/2.352a/
The leaves on both arms of POKENAME have a unique fragrance, while the flower buds on its head are actually odorless. Relying on the highly toxic trichomes on its leaves, POKENAME can effectively hunt medium-sized prey such as Rattata.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+rotom/
POKENAME's plasma simulates the shape of a flower bud, teaching it how to stabilize electric charges. POKENAME is often trained to use plasma vines to temporarily maintain power supply during circuit failures.

[rich goblet]

I think I've gone through everything in the past couple of hours, I'll be around just give me a ping if you need me, I'll be watching a movie so I won't be able to tell unless you do

[zinc patrol]

If I write something, I will accumulate 3 and wait for you to come back

[rich goblet]

Nah, I'm just babysitting kids today

They're a bunch of brats, no big deal

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/bulbasaur+galvantula/
Because POKENAME has fewer legs than an average spider, its hunting relies on electrified webs. Its webs are mixed with sunlight-powered components, allowing them to remain charged for a long time without its maintenance.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME relies on its electrified webs for hunting, as its legs are fragile. Its webs are mixed with photoreceptors, allowing them to remain charged with electricity for long periods of time without maintenance.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+golurk/
POKENAME will proactively settle in the ruins of the jungle. The growing plants fill the damage POOKENAME’s body has suffered over a long period of time, while allowing the plants to use and replenish core energy.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME actively hunt for empty jungle ruins to settle in. The plants sprawling across their body fill in cracks and wounds that may have accumulated over the years. These plants rely on the core's energy to continue growing.

[rotund oxide]

since im doing the kyogre mergemay concept arts i might try my hand at the groudon mergemay prompts for dex entries

[severe scroll]

Pidchic (16.279)
POKENAME flock near small towns, taking shelter in the trees nearby. Their inner fires make their feathers warm to the touch. Many children befriend POKENAME by offering them berries and seeds, and these Pokémon will follow them afterwards.

Pidchic (16.279a)
Spending most of their days in the safety of the nest, POKENAME cry out to their parents when they get hungry. If this Pokémon goes too long without eating, it will spit fireballs in a temper tantrum.

Pidbusken (16.280)
POKENAME fight dirty, both literally and figuratively. In combat, this Pokémon will use its feathery arms to whip up sand and dirt to blind their opponents. While the foe is disoriented, POKENAME rush forward and deal harsh blows with their kicks.

@rich goblet

Why did you change your name?

[rich goblet]

Inside joke, don't worry about it

[severe scroll]

Pidgechic (17.279)
When this Pokémon creates a nest, it considers any area it can see from its home its territory. POKENAME will use its talons, beak, and fire attacks to fend off opponents to encroach on its land.

[rotund oxide]

https://www.fusiondex.org/rapidash+flareon/ Day 1 - Burn
POKENAME's fur burns brightest when it is frolicking through large fields or chasing other Pokémon playfully. Without proper area to roam, its fire will dim and falter.

i feel like this could be better but i cant figure out how

[severe scroll]

Pidgebusken (17.280)
POKENAME flies around the land it considers its territory seeking out prey. Once this Pokémon spots a target, it will dive from the sky before outstretching its taloned claws and dropkicking the foe. With its fresh catch, it returns to its nest.

[rich goblet]

I think it is fine as is, maybe you can mention split the first sentence in two so that you can establish how it needs lots of space

[clear hollow]

With the powerful psychic waves emanating from POKENAME's tail, it can make two living beings fall madly in love with one another. Because of this, people have worshipped this Pokémon as a deity of love in ancient times.
315.567 Arceus/Swoobat
Mergemay Day 12 - Beginning

[rich goblet]

With the powerful psychic waves emanating from POKENAME's tail, it can make two living beings fall madly in love with one another. Because of this, people have worshipped this Pokémon as a deity of love in ancient times.

Because a pronoun REFERS to a noun or TAKES THE PLACE OF that noun, you have to use the correct pronoun so that your reader clearly understands which noun your pronoun is referring to.

EDIT: Stolen from Purdue OWL

[clear hollow]

got it, thank you! I mess this particular part up more often than the other parts 💦

edited!

[severe scroll]

I wrote 21 entries today!

Good night, Dex Writers

[fading shale]

Lol

[abstract tusk]

POKENAME is a really friendly Pokémon. It radiates a icy aura that can cool off any creature it comes in contact with. POKENAME uses that ability to help other ice Pokémon lower their temperature.

Beware of POKENAME when diving too deep in aquatic cave systems. It's really territorial and will furiously attack anything that dares come near its lair.

POKENAME is capable of swimming comfortably through boiling waters near undersea vents. In ancient times, its sudden appearance in shallow bays was feared as an augury that a new volcano was about to erupt from the ocean floor.

I wanted to do an oarfish inspired tale for this one, but maybe it's not as connected as I wanted to? Maybe say they are capable of creating the volcanos themselves? It's the closest I can think of to bring the sun inspiration from volcarona? Maybe instead of volcanos say it radiates as strong as a sun and makes the surrounding water boil?

[zinc patrol]

I like this. Volcarona's entry should indeed be so powerful, at least the original entry is full of its legend.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+garbodor/
POKENAME's body is covered with various plants. Although its body can support the growth of other plants, it is still toxic to non-plant organisms.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+sandygast/
POKENAME prefers light more than most Ghost-type Pokémon. To protect cactus buds, POKENAME no longer actively hunts and instead strives to survive by relying on sunlight.

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+palossand/
POKENAME uses a small amount of nutrients to create an active lure that looks like a Bulbasaur without a bud. POKENAME's bud is 4 meters high, and when it hunts, moving sand covers the surrounding dozens of meters.

[eternal notch]

412.562 Joltik/ Clamperl
POKENAME commonly live inside of caves with an abundance of Electric-Type Pokémon. They wait inside their shell for one of them to approach before snapping their shell closed and feeding on their static electricity.

245.51 Suicune/ Dugtrio
POKENAME are only ever seen in pure clean water, yet the same POKENAME can appear in multiple places. This has lead to a theory that there are a vast number of underwater tunnels that POKENAME use to move between bodies of wates.

57.64 Primeape/ Kadabra
POKENAME's psychic powers originate from and are empowered by its anger. It is said that if a POKENAME ever becomes calm, it will lose all of its psychic abilities.

5.405 Charmeleon/ Shuppet
This Pokémon loves feeding on the feelings of battle such as anger and passion. The flames that surround it burn brighter the more it has consumed.

191.508 Sunkern/ Beautifly
POKENAME spend nearly their entire lives on a single flower, only ever leaving this plant if they are attacked. Their low energy levels allow them to live subsisting only on the nectar of the flower.

360.394 Whimsicott/ Feebas
POKENAME leave their pond homes and float away on windy days. If a person ever comments on a POKENAME's appearance while its flying by, it will float through their house and scatter cotton before moving on.

436.446 Carvanha/ Goodra
In the right mindset, POKENAME can be scourges on ships on the water. However, they often lack enough motivation to actually attack the ships and are more commonly kept as rowdy pets than seen as actual dangers.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME is a friendly Pokémon. It radiates an icy aura that can cool off any Pokémon it comes in contact with. POKENAME use this ability to help other Ice-type Pokémon lower their temperature.

[rich goblet]

Divers should beware when diving deep in aquatic cave systems, as POKENAME is likely nearby. It is territorial and will furiously attack anything that comes near its lair.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME is capable of swimming comfortably through boiling water near underwater geothermal vents. In ancient times, its sudden appearance in shallow bays was feared as an augury that a new volcano was about to erupt from the ocean floor.

[rich goblet]

What are non-plant organisms in this case? Other Pokémon?

[rich goblet]

I don't understand the first sentence, is the cactus not part of its body?

[rich goblet]

I don't understand what you mean by moving sand, can you clarify?

[eternal notch]

Raichu/ Vigoroth 26.386
POKENAME's fur is constantly brimming with electrical energy, powering their incredibly active and aggressive lifestyle. When POKENAME run, you can see a trail of lightning flow behind them.

[rich goblet]

@eternal notch Due to the recent influx of new authors, I would like to ask you to limit yourself to roughly 3-4 entries per check. This is not an official rule, but rather a request since there's so many people writing entries now.

[eternal notch]

sorry

[rich goblet]

No worries, you didn't do anything wrong.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME commonly live inside caves with an abundance of Electric-Type Pokémon. They wait inside their shell for one of them to approach before snapping their shell closed and feeding on their static electricity.

I removed the "of" since it is unnecessary in this context.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME are only ever seen in pure clean water, yet the same POKENAME can appear in multiple places. This has led to a belief that there are a vast number of underwater tunnels that POKENAME use to move between bodies of water.

I changed theory to belief because this fusion does not actually use underwater tunnels to move between bodies of water

[rich goblet]

This is fine as is.

[rich goblet]

This Pokémon loves feeding on the feelings of battle, such as anger and passion. The flames that surround it burn brighter the more emotions it has consumed.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME spend nearly their entire lives on a single flower, only ever leaving this plant if they are attacked. Their slow metabolism allows them to live subsisting only on the nectar of the flower.

I changed energy to metabolism since it relates to food

[rich goblet]

This entry is confusing because it implies that all members of the fusion fly through houses to scatter cotton?

[rich goblet]

comma after however

[rich goblet]

This is fine

[rich goblet]

On second glance, I'm not sure how the Pokémon being friendly relates to its other abilities...

[rich goblet]

After looking at this again, I would make the following change:

POKENAME live in aquatic cave systems and are incredibly territorial. Divers should beware when exploring these cave systems as they are known to attack anyone in their lair.

We want to establish that the Pokémon lives in the cave system before we introduce the divers.

Hope this makes sense!

[eternal notch]

Its based on whimsicotts which does say that they spread cotton through peoples houses as pranks

but fair

[rich goblet]

Ah, right, one moment then

[abstract tusk]

Maybe saying social is better? In my mind it was more of a "Oh, I have this power and I love others bc I wanna be friends"

[rich goblet]

POKENAME leave their ponds and float away on windy days. If a person ever comments on a POKENAME's appearance while it is flying by, it is that it will float through their house and scatter balls of cotton to create a nest before flying away.

[abstract tusk]

I'll change in their lair to near your lair too because (for me) it sounds more dangerous that way

[rich goblet]

POKENAME is a social Pokémon that enjoys helping others. It radiates an icy aura that can cool off any Pokémon it comes in contact with. POKENAME harnesses this ability to help other Ice-type Pokémon lower their temperature.

This should be better, but may be changed by Wildheart when they do their check, same with the other two entries

[abstract tusk]

hahah yeah thanks a lot either way! ^^

max characters was 250?

[rich goblet]

Yeah I think they should be fine? Let me check

[abstract tusk]

yea yea

I wanted to add some words

POKENAME is an extremely social Pokémon that enjoys helping others. It radiates an icy aura that can cool off any Pokémon it comes in contact with. POKENAME harnesses this ability to help other Ice-type Pokémon lower their temperature when in need.

248

😌

[rich goblet]

Sometimes simplicity is better. I would get rid of "extremely" and "when in need" because those accentuate parts of the entry that don't need to be

[abstract tusk]

Hmm I'm a bit of an over the top person so I believe you, I'll change it back XD

Thanks! ^^

[jagged ledge]

https://tenor.com/view/we'll-get-there-eventually-marques-brownlee-steady-progress-is-being-made-mkbhd-gif-5794005359675374795

(But genuinely, thanks for the help )

[rich goblet]

I certainly try, thanks for the help you provide too

[storm light]

My chart's lookin a lot more green :)

[severe scroll]

Which chart?

[storm light]

This one! You can get your own on the infinite dummies site in the pins

[rich goblet]

I apologize in advance for making it hard to find a Psyduck fusion

[severe scroll]

What the heck?!

[rich goblet]

Yeah, it’s a pretty handy tool

My boxes should be complete but I’ll check that when I have time

[zinc patrol]

Humans, other Pokémon, microorganisms, etc.

[zinc patrol]

Sorry, accidentally linked to other entries, I will rewrite it

[rich goblet]

POKENAME has a body that is covered with various plants. Its body can support the growth of these plants by allowing them to feed off its sludge, but then they become toxic to Trainers and Pokémon.

[zinc patrol]

Feeling like this? Although the gif is actually gold, let’s treat it as sand for the moment. Forgive me for sending the gif. I tried to revise the words repeatedly, but the translator gave me nothing but moving sand.

[rich goblet]

Oh I get it now

[rich goblet]

POKENAME expends a small amount of nutrients to produce a small decoy that looks like a Bulbasaur. Its bud can reach four meters high and envelops foes in a sandy tomb when it hunts.

[rich goblet]

Not the most intuitive concept but it works

[zinc patrol]

How is it now?

[rich goblet]

One sec

[rich goblet]

POKENAME prefers to live in bright deserts surrounded by the sun, absorbing the glowing rays. To protect the cactus on its head, it abstains from hunting to minimize its risk of injury.

[hexed fog]

We need more info on sleeping pokemon

[clear hollow]

POKENAME are commonly found in hot areas, their favorite habitat being dried-up reservoirs. Scientists speculate that these Pokémon used to live underwater in the past but were forced to adapt as the climate changed and their homes dried out.
537.301 Numel/Lileep
Mergemay Day 13 - Eruption

[rich goblet]

in hot places - You do not need "the" in between

Otherwise looks good

[clear hollow]

cool!

[rich goblet]

wait wait

my bad, remove the "the" in between being and dried-up

Now its good

There we go

[clear hollow]

thank you!

[regal cedar]

I was wondering something. I assume not, since it's not reflected in gameplay, but, just in case: can items that contain DNA (such as fossils or Old Amber) fuse with alive Pokémon?

[rich goblet]

@regal cedar I think this section applies? If not I would ping the dex managers

This was found in the lorebook

[regal cedar]

Yes, that explains it.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+meloetta-aria-forme/
In many ancient settlements, failing to show gratitude upon seeing POKENAME was regarded as a provocation to the group. Many people were willing to give everything just to hear POKENAME's singing.

[short jasper]

724 ENTRIES BABY

Anyone else get so anxious waiting for your new entries to be approved? I was at 699 so I was so eager to get past 700

[rich goblet]

What is the group in this instance?

[zinc patrol]

People at those ancient settlements

[rich goblet]

In many ancient settlements, failing to show gratitude upon seeing POKENAME was regarded as a provocation to the settlement. Many people were willing to give everything just to hear POKENAME's singing.

[short jasper]

NOOO they changed my entry! It originally said “difficult spill” as an Omega Mart reference to match the sprite, but they rephrased it 😭 is there any way to get them to change it back?

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+wimpod/
POKENAME consumes large amounts of various debris it encounters, trying to supplement its nutrition. POKENAME concentrates the waste from the food on the outermost petals and periodically sheds them.

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+chesnaught/
POKENAME's wooden shell is not only hard but also recovers quickly. The bud on POKENAME's head looks like a weak point, but in fact it is extremely tough due to its high cellulose content.

[rich goblet]

Read the pinned posts in #custom-dex-errors and make a report

[rich goblet]

POKENAME consumes large amounts of various debris it encounters to supplement its nutrition. POKENAME concentrates the waste from the food on its outermost petals and periodically sheds them.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME's wooden shell is hard and restores itself quickly. The bud on POKENAME's head may look like a soft weak spot, but it is in fact extremely tough because of its high cellulose content.

[rich goblet]

I also realized that you wanted to make a reference to other media. We are not allowed to do that in PIF, just so you know.

[short jasper]

It wasn’t a lore-breaking reference. The phrase also made sense in the context of the entry. I’ve written numerous entries with references, typically for sprites that also use references.

[rich goblet]

Make the report in #custom-dex-errors and I’ll leave it to the Dex Managers to figure it out. Be sure to follow the guidelines on how to fill it out in the pinned posts.

[willow venture]

Holy schnozz Omega Mart reference

This girl knows ball (that makes me feel old)

https://tenor.com/view/i-love-this-lemon-omega-mart-lemon-omega-mart-lemons-love-gif-478536014692969703

[rich goblet]

I'm still new enough that I don't know the line for these sort of references, so I will have to wait until a dex manager helps

[willow venture]

It doesn't directly reference things surely it's fine

Or can people not use certain phrases if the mods know it as a reference to something even thoughh it's never explicitly said

[rich goblet]

You know what, good point. I'll bear the brunt if it means otherwise but you provide a valid point

[rancid sun]

How's this for a sentence?

[rich goblet]

POKENAME spreads toxic spores in the water it resides in.

[dapper patio]

Typo go brr

[rich goblet]

where's the typo, I might be blind

Oh, found it

[rich goblet]

Please make a report in #custom-dex-errors with the template in the pinned comments

[thorny turtle]

This feels like it's not quite right, can someone help me refine it?

[rich goblet]

POKENAME can destroy a five-story building with a single shout. This ability was thought to be metaphorical hyperbole until seen in action.

I made heavy modification to the second sentence in hopes to spark some new words that you might use. Feel free to use as much or as little as needed (provided the entry is still grammatically correct)

[thorny turtle]

I feel like that loses part of the spirit of the second sentence, unfortunately

maybe that's neccessary, maybe not, but still

[rich goblet]

Ah, maybe I'm not getting it then, my bad

[thorny turtle]

no worries

[hollow nimbus]

I think "metaphorical representations" is a bit redundant, since metaphors already are symbols and representations, so you can simplify that to metaphors for natural disasters

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+surskit/
The bud on POKENAME's head can secrete a complex mixture, which contains components that most predators find repulsive. This mixture can be processed to extract various spices and seasonings.

[rich goblet]

What is the mixture made of? Since we never introduced what it is made of, the introduction of the word is confusing

You can say it is made out of sap and pollen or whatever but just make sure you let the reader know what you mean

[zinc patrol]

sap

[rich goblet]

One second then

[rich goblet]

The bud on POKENAME's head can secrete a thick sap, which contains chemicals that most predators find repulsive. This sap can be processed to extract various spices and seasonings.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+claydol/
When POKENAME opens its mouth, the upper part of its head completely hovers in the air under the influence of psychic power. It almost only moves in sunlight and falls asleep when away from the light.

[rich goblet]

Change the second sentence to the following and it should be good:

It only moves while in sunlight and falls asleep when it is dark.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/ivysaur+tropius/
POKENAME leaves a fragrance behind when it flies. The bud under its neck produces honey quickly, which is often used for brewing.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.3b/
POKENAME becomes more active after fusion, preferring to hunt actively rather than absorb sunlight. Its flowers constantly emit a charming fragrance, attracting Bug-type Pokémon.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.9e/
The stamens of POKENAME form a large-caliber cannon barrel. As needed, POKENAME can shoot sunlight energy or water jets from the cannon.

[proven grail]

sup guys

y'all should make a dex entry for my sprite

[storm light]

Which one?

[thorn ingot]

We have to wait two months for them to be added to the game before we can

[proven grail]

awwww

[thorn ingot]

I mean they can write them right now but they won’t be there until the sprites are there

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.22a/
POKENAME's main feathers are red petals, and the stronger the individual, the more vivid the color. POKENAME lives in groups in the forest, using its bright colors to intimidate enemies.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME are more active than its unfused counterparts and prefers to hunt for prey rather than absorb sunlight. Its flowers release an alluring fragrance, attracting Bug-type Pokémon.

[rich goblet]

The stamens of POKENAME form a large-caliber cannon barrel. POKENAME can shoot solar energy or water jets from the cannon.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME's exterior feathers are red petals that grow more vivid as POKENAME become stronger. They live in groups in the forest, using their bright colors to intimidate enemies.

[rich goblet]

@dapper patio You have submitted two entries for the same sprite. Please pick one to keep.
A)
475.300.png POKENAME is predator that makes its home in coral reefs. Though it is slow, its powerful jaws can crush rock, so it seeks out prey that can't run away from it: shelled Pokémon, which those massive jaws have no problem breaking open.
B)
475.300.png POKENAME are opportunistic scavengers that crawl along the seafloor looking for sunken carcasses to eat. If they come across any Pokémon smaller than them, it will lash out with surprising speed and pierce their prey upon their claw-tipped tentacles.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.25a/
The grass-type part of POKENAME has high self-discipline. When POKENAME needs to control this part, it must fasten the green cap on its head to connect the nerves, during which time the other parts will react sluggishly.

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.26b/
POKENAME's tail can attract lightning due to its height. It can survive just by occasionally receiving lightning, yet it still actively collects berries.

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.28a/
POKENAME's posture is fully adapted to desert life. The flowers on its back mimic various cacti and only bloom after rain, allowing it to perfectly blend into the desert environment.

[thorny turtle]

How does this look?

[rich goblet]

This entry is confusing, like why do we need to split between the Grass type part when it is one Pokémon? Fusions are only a single Pokémon, so referring to one part or another can be confusing to the reader.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME’s body is fully adapted to desert life. The flowers on its back mimic various cacti and only bloom after rain, allowing it to perfectly blend into the desert environment.

[rich goblet]

This has several issues that I will numerate below:

1. Red light frequencies do not make the Pokémon invisible, it just darkens their appearance so much that they appear black.

2. While this rule has not been strictly enforced, it is suggested that you use "courtship" instead of mating.

3. "dances" put in quotation marks is a euphemism and does not fit the tone of the Pokédex, dances without the quoation marks is fine and should be used.

[rancid sun]

A is better to me tbh

[fading shale]

POKENAME are often seen hanging from the ceiling of caves, forming large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, making only their blueish ears faintly glow in the darkness.

[rich goblet]

It is not your choice The author has to choose.

[thorny turtle]

Does 2 apply for "mating season" specifically? AIUI "courtship season" isn't a phrase

[jagged ledge]

"Hanging together from the ceiling of caves" if you want that to be what indicates them gathering, but swarms often indicate motion or collection, so I might recommend changing either the end of the sentence or what they're seen doing to form the swarm.

I want you to reread that second sentence for me and see if you can tell me what's wrong with it.

[fading shale]

that perfectly hiding doesnt go well with faintly glow being seen? xd

[jagged ledge]

Among other things

[fading shale]

from the grammar or the reasoning

[jagged ledge]

Both

[fading shale]

heh

[rich goblet]

I had to google this to make sure, you're right, courtship season as a phrase doesn't really exist. Go ahead and ignore point number two for now, I'll be asking the rest of the team for insight.

EDIT: "as a phrase"

[fading shale]

blusih ?

[jagged ledge]

How do you spell the plural of body?

[fading shale]

bodies

[jagged ledge]

Mhm

[fading shale]

yea ?

oh

wtf

[jagged ledge]

Also this isn't a possessive in this case, which made it even more confusing

[fading shale]

wdym

[jagged ledge]

You said "Their body's".

Apostrophes are used for either contractions like making "It is" into "It's" or for possessives, meaning that something belongs to or relates to someone. "Ash's Pikachu"

[fading shale]

oh

is it better now ?

[jagged ledge]

Well now you need to generally restructure the second sentence and listen to my suggested revision of the first sentence.

[fading shale]

i changed it into forming a group instead of swarm

[jagged ledge]

Ok question.

When you say "Hanging, forming", do you mean they're seen flocking to that spot and then hanging together, or do you mean that they're already hanging there in a group?

[fading shale]

the just sit there when they are not flying

[jagged ledge]

Also I said to add the word "together" to communicate that they would be spotted in a group, not that the act of hanging from the ceiling makes one form a group

[fading shale]

hang there

[jagged ledge]

Then maybe say "arranged in a group"?

Because "forming" describes an active process.

[fading shale]

why do i need to specify them being together or arranged, a group is multiple bodies of whatever being together no ?

they fly
then eventually tuck to the ceiling, and when multiple do that they form a group naturally

like well bats

[jagged ledge]

Yes, but you are saying they are seen once the group has already been formed, so that's why I'm saying either establish that the group is formed while it's being seen by saying that they're "seen hanging together" or describe that the group was already there with past tense like "arranged" or "gathered" instead of the active tense "forming."

[fading shale]

its both somewhat
they can form such a group on the ceiling but its more of a lifestyle fact not a must have in that moemnt

since when do we need to write the dex entries as if we were in the middle of the action right now ?
especially with pokemon who could just do who knows what
if they form a group now or in 5 mins should irrelevant no ?

i also wrote stuff like "has seen to do this and that"

[jagged ledge]

🤦 It's how grammar works

[fading shale]

alr
so u want me to add together yea

[jagged ledge]

"Can be seen" > conditional timing.

"hanging from a ceiling" > what they are being seen doing

"arranged in large groups" > secondary description that establishes how they are hanging.

"forming large groups" is wrong because it describes a secondary action or effect, not a description.

It works if you are describing something chronologically or specifying the effects of something, such as

"I looked through the fridge and realized I had no milk, deciding that it was time that I went to the store."

Vs

"I saw my friend go to the store, going to the movie theater."

See how you're describing two things at once to opposite effects and why I'm trying to connect the actions and descriptions to help communicate your intended visual?

[fading shale]

so the are is the issue
and it should be "can often be seen" ?

to make it like not an always thing

[rich goblet]

hanging from the ceiling and forming groups are happening at the same time.

The Pokémon exist in a state of being complete and becoming complete.

[fading shale]

im lost

[jagged ledge]

Thank you

[fading shale]

or just stupid

[jagged ledge]

Ok, if I said: "This Pokémon is often seen sitting and watching TV, doing its daily round of jumping jacks." Then that wouldn't make sense because I'm describing them doing a passive activity, "sitting", and an active activity, "doing jumping jacks"

How do bats each individually hanging from a ceiling form a group unless they are inherently hanging together?

Or alternatively, how do bats that are already hanging from the ceiling form a group that is already assembled?

[fading shale]

it isnt
they may assemble it

like birds who sit ona tree

sometimes one comes and joins

etc

[rich goblet]

So I have been told that the Unown team is avoid all instances of the term mating moving forward. The term "courtship rituals" is preferred in this instance, please let me know if you have trouble fixing your entry and I will have a look again.

EDIT: The term "seasons of courtship" could also work here

[fading shale]

if they find multiple they band together
or not if they are alone

and the group isnt just there
it forms
and disbands
as i said like birds

[jagged ledge]

But you don't put a condition on forming the group, you say that them being seen hanging from the ceiling forms the group!

[fading shale]

a condition ?
like resting ?

[jagged ledge]

Yes, but that's why I'm trying to say hanging together or that you replace forming with assembled to communicate the visual instead of the active summary because the summary isn't grammatically correct.

[jagged ledge]

No, like "can be", "often", "occasionally", "once in a blue moon", things that aren't guaranteed or have to meet criteria. Things that realistically could be cut to make an entry clearer, but tend to add flair or specifics when done correctly.

[fading shale]

POKENAME are often seen hanging together from the ceiling of caves, forming large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, making only their blueish ears faintly glow in the darkness.

? so just one word would fix the sentence ?

[jagged ledge]

Well now the second sentence. How do their bodies hide them? In the darkness? Describe that with the process of hiding. But why does the act of hiding make their ears glow?

[fading shale]

the bodys are black

the hiding doesnt make the ears glow
they just glow naturally
or if someone gets to close maybe if thats not enough for an entry xd

[jagged ledge]

"The hiding doesn't make the ears glow"

"Their black bodies perfectly hide them, making only their blueish ears faintly glow in the darkness."

This is why sentence structure matters, it reads like you are saying that the primary subject/contents of the first sentence: "Their bodies hiding them" "makes" the second part of the sentence happen.

[jagged ledge]

Yes, the bodies are black, how does that hide them? What if they're in a completely white room?

[fading shale]

they arent they live in caves

like dark caves

[rich goblet]

That context needs to be added though, like not everyone who plays the game knows what a bat is.

Admittedly, Pokémon was my first introduction to what a bat is, funny enough

[jagged ledge]

Well not just that, but there are bats that are part scorpion, bats with heart noses, dragon bats, and you could hypothetically encounter the fusion anywhere, not just in caves.

[fading shale]

POKENAME are often seen hanging from the ceiling of pitch-black caves, forming large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, making only their blueish ears faintly glow in the darkness.

[jagged ledge]

The word you're looking for instead of "making" is "leaving".

[fading shale]

oh yea

[jagged ledge]

And you should change "glow" to "glowing"

[fading shale]

glowing ?

[jagged ledge]

Yes, to fit with the active tense of "leaving their ears faintly glowing"

[fading shale]

POKENAME are often seen hanging from the ceiling of pitch-black caves, forming large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, leaving only their blueish ears faintly glowing in the darkness.

[jagged ledge]

"Assembled in large groups".

But then also, if you're saying that their bodies hide them completely and the caves are pitch-black, how can they be seen hanging?

[fading shale]

why do i have to say assembled and not formed when they form said group

is there another word i dont like assembled

[jagged ledge]

Gathered? Arranged?

[fading shale]

gathered yea

[jagged ledge]

Thank you

[fading shale]

POKENAME are often hanging from the ceiling of pitch-black caves, gathered in large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, leaving only their blueish ears faintly glowing in the darkness.

no wait

POKENAME are often hanging together from the ceiling of pitch-black caves, gathered in large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, leaving only their blueish ears faintly glowing in the darkness.

[jagged ledge]

I said you needed to add the word "together" to keep it active tense, if you're changing to past tense for "gathered", you don't need it any more.

Also you can shorten "are often hanging" to "often hang"

[fading shale]

POKENAME often hang from the ceiling of pitch-black caves, gathered in large groups. Their black bodies perfectly hide them, leaving only their blueish ears faintly glowing in the darkness.

?

or gathering in large groups

it should be gathered no

[jagged ledge]

Correct, it should be gathered.

[fading shale]

finally xd

what a nightmare

[jagged ledge]

Agreed lol

[fading shale]

HEY

this was a patience test for u alr

u passed gj

[jagged ledge]

Don't make me fail

[fading shale]

never

[jagged ledge]

If you say so

[rancid sun]

I only did 4 entries this week

I gotta step up my game

[storm light]

Don't push yourself too hard. These will get done eventually

[rich goblet]

The entries aren't going anywhere

[jagged ledge]

I alternate between up to around 20 entries in a day and 0 entries for a month outside of my designated event, you're totally fine

It's not about sheer quantity, it's about passion and quality.

[shy portal]

the entries are growing legs actually

[rancid sun]

I should swap the places of these two sentences

[rich goblet]

That's not the problem here...

What do you mean by "where the crystals build them up?"

@dapper patio You have submitted two entries for the same sprite. Please pick one to keep.
A)
475.300.png POKENAME is predator that makes its home in coral reefs. Though it is slow, its powerful jaws can crush rock, so it seeks out prey that can't run away from it: shelled Pokémon, which those massive jaws have no problem breaking open.
B)
475.300.png POKENAME are opportunistic scavengers that crawl along the seafloor looking for sunken carcasses to eat. If they come across any Pokémon smaller than them, it will lash out with surprising speed and pierce their prey upon their claw-tipped tentacles.

Second Attempt

[dapper patio]

Seems I messed up on the google form. Entry A is meant for sprite 475.300.png. Entry B is meant for a different sprite, 475.302.png

[rich goblet]

Cool cool, I'll fix those since I have the sheet open

Thank you for the prompt response

[dapper patio]

Of course.

[fading shale]

The growths on the back of POKENAME are a sort of glowing mushroom. They can produce spores loaded with electricity and send them into the air, immobilizing any threat that breaths them in.

[rich goblet]

You can just say that POKENAME has glowing mushrooms on their back, you don't have to hedge your bets on calling it a mushroom

[fading shale]

oh

okay

[rich goblet]

Fix that and I'll get to the other grammar stuff when you do that

[fading shale]

[rich goblet]

@fading shale

I'm assigning you a reading: #dex-entries-discussion message

I will be back in like five minutes to keep helping, need a snack so I'm just giving you tools to improve your writing

[fading shale]

i see

so one sec

[rich goblet]

I'm back, you ready for feedback?

[fading shale]

POKENAME grows a pair of glowing mushrooms on its back . They can produce spores loaded with electricity which they can launch into the air, immobilizing any threat that breathes them in.

[rich goblet]

Very close!

1. How many mushrooms are there?

2. breathes them in (that one's a freebie)

[fading shale]

breathing them in is unncessary ?
i thiought i mention it since spores could also have effect when touched

i specifically ment targetted breathing them in

[rich goblet]

No no, breathes there has an e between h and s

[fading shale]

oh

[rich goblet]

breaths is plural of breath

breathes is a verb

Confusing I know

[fading shale]

it is

[rich goblet]

Also there are TWO mushrooms on its back so mushrooms is plural

[fading shale]

yea forgot that

think i get better slowly but surely XD

[rich goblet]

Post an updated version of your entry here once you're ready for one last check

[fading shale]

i edited it

[fading shale]

^

[rich goblet]

1. Extra space before the period.

2. Change they into it

Let me know when it is done

[fading shale]

POKENAME grows a pair of glowing mushrooms on its back. It can produce spores loaded with electricity which it can launch into the air, immobilizing any threat that breathes them in.

man who invented grammar smh

[rich goblet]

ALL theys into it please 🙏

Now it is submission ready

[fading shale]

[fading shale]

POKENAME love to harvest nectar from flowers, which gets absorbed into the bloodstream. Their whole body is almost fully black but the nectar they collected turns the blood bio luminescent, making their beautiful wing patterns visible

or is that a bit to abstract

[rich goblet]

POKENAME loves to harvest nectar from flowers, which gets absorbed into its bloodstream. While its body is black, the nectar coursing through its body glows through bioluminescence. This glow creates vivid patterns in its wings.

[fading shale]

hell yea

how can i avoid many they or their etc

and when is it better to write with It and Its instead of they

[rich goblet]

You can write it with they/them but I usually keep those for humanoid Pokémon because it takes more space than it/its

I'm going to assign you some more homework.

@fading shale This post addresses the plurality agreement thing, its a common issue.
#dex-entries-discussion message

I expect a ten page report in 30 minutes, failure will result in a removal of brownie points

[fading shale]

[rich goblet]

Joking aside, do take a glance at the post, its short

[fading shale]

while i do that

POKENAME is often spotted on the roof of tall buildings during a thunderstorm. It enjoys the dense air filled with static electricity which it can absorb through its fur to enhance the body's agility.

i was always like
if i say It it implies there is only one of it

[rich goblet]

If it helps, POKENAME is just a really fancy word that means both they and it depending on the context.

If we replace POKENAME with it, the first sentence would go

It are often spotted on the roof... etc etc

See the problem word yet?

[fading shale]

so are should be is

but if they works too
it needs to be are

so it doesnt matter ?
or more like depends on how u continue

[severe scroll]

Torchsaur (279.3)
POKENAME enjoys its days sunbathing, taking in nutrients it needs to keep the plant on its back healthy. When POKENAME is startled, an eruptions of blazing hot spores are released from the flower's stem in self-defense.

[rich goblet]

When you use POKENAME you only replace the pronoun with one at a time. So if you choose "it" don't replace the pronoun with "they" for the entry

[rich goblet]

This part is correct

[rich goblet]

Immaculate, full send it

[fading shale]

UNFAIR

[rich goblet]

Alright, you spot a grammar mistake then

[fading shale]

pff

[severe scroll]

Comeleon (280.5)
These competitive Pokémon are always looking to get into a fight, whether it's to train or just prove they're stronger than another Pokémon. POKENAME are known for their blazing kicks and boastful attitudes in combat.

[fading shale]

so hows mine

[rich goblet]

Send it!

[fading shale]

hhhh AHHHHHH

yei

[rich goblet]

This looks fine

[jagged ledge]

"during thunderstorms", "that it absorbs", "enhance its agility."

[fading shale]

POKENAME is a jolly creature even in heavy thunderstorms. It absorbs nutrients through its feet or electricity through the leaves on its head. The nutrients are stored in its tail to consume in times of need.

[fading shale]

thats a bit to late i already sent it

[jagged ledge]

Well then someone will fix it on the sheet I guess.

[fading shale]

[rich goblet]

I'll do it

[severe scroll]

Bladrill (281.15)
POKENAME ignite their stingers while diving towards Pokémon that encroach on their territory, driving them from the area. When enraged, these Pokémon will set their legs and wings ablaze.

[rugged socket]

DexSlog Grid #6: Terraforming - 43/100 entries! 🎉 If you haven't tried it yet, come and help fill in the grid!

Get involved here: https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1eEDisY-UaS44v_kBY8tNA4qmVEP6fToEKTzBPN_bcro/edit?usp=sharing

[severe scroll]

[fading shale]

bit scared of new things

[jagged ledge]

Grammatically looks good, I just have a question on the difference between lighting the stingers and lighting everything else. Maybe you could build slightly to say "If the trespassers don't get the hint, the POKENAME will set their wings and legs ablaze out of rage and work even harder." or something like that. Might be too many words, so adjust as needed, just my take.

[rich goblet]

I do not suggest participating if you do not have a good grasp of English grammar and syntax, it becomes a headache if an Unown has to keep certain arbitrary conditions. Particularly the homophone one.

[severe scroll]

Thank you for your help though.

[fading shale]

[jagged ledge]

You pointing out syntax and homophones in a conversation around video games reminded me of a YouTube video called "Ganon with one N" where he says "Sin, Attacks, and Syntax are my favorite things."

[rich goblet]

While I do not know the reference, that sounds hilarious

[severe scroll]

Bladrill (281.15)
POKENAME ignite their stingers while diving towards Pokémon that encroach on their territory, driving them from the area. If the trespasser continues to loiter, these Pokémon will set their legs and wings ablaze to appear more intimidating.

[fading shale]

[fading shale]

im just ass in grammar atm

i will evolve

[rich goblet]

No worries, it doesn't stop entries from being approved

I work hard to make entries passable, you should see the back end sometime.

[jagged ledge]

Ducky, I hand this to you, I got DnD

[severe scroll]

Torchgey (279.16)
POKENAME enjoy sitting in the sun during the day. They snuggle into their nest at night with their inner flame keeping them warm. These Pokémon make excellent pets for retired older folks as they enjoy the constant companionship.

[rich goblet]

I think you want to split the first sentence since there's two different subjects (sitting in the sun and their inner flame)

The transition between day/night is a bit awk

[severe scroll]

How's that?

[rich goblet]

How does being in a thunderstorm affect its mood? I'm confused

Also sorry for not doing them in order, I'm hooman

[fading shale]

no its jolly even in bad weather

[keen kestrel]

most animals aren't terribly happy about thunderstorms haha

[rich goblet]

This should be fine

[keen kestrel]

oh, but you did say "is a jolly creatures" not "is a jolly creature"

[rich goblet]

POKENAME remains jolly even during heavy thunderstorms. It absorbs nutrients through its feet and electricity through the leaves on its head. The nutrients are stored in its tail, and can be consumed in times of need.

[fading shale]

feed

[rich goblet]

I'm on mobile, you can endure a bit of autocorrect doing the wrong thing

[fading shale]

alr thats it for today time for b ed

[rich goblet]

rest well

[severe scroll]

Comotto (280.17a)
The feathers on POKENAME's head help with its aerodynamics, preventing it from losing speed when having to make sudden adjustments in combat. This speed helps POKENAME swoop down and scorch potential prey that are in its territory.

[rich goblet]

I will be headed to the store to grab some food, yall just keep posting (within reason)

[severe scroll]

Comotto (280.17)
POKENAME use their talons as their main weapons. Strong and sharp, these Pokémon can carry objects more than half their weight far distances with them. When injured, POKENAME do not give in and will ignite their feathers to show its fighting spirit.

[zinc patrol]

Okay, I have to admit that my wording is a mess, both before and after translation. I didn't really want to deal with the grass attribute alone, I just wanted the hat on its head to be some kind of temporary neural connector (which makes sense for the electric attribute), and I was really messed up about what it connected to. But considering that it is a Bulbasaur hat, it must be related to the plant or grass attribute.

[zinc patrol]

Well, my automatic translator will translate any evolution of Bulbasaur into Bulbasaur. I'm referring to the one numbered 3.

[severe scroll]

Venusaur

Comgeot (280.18)
This Pokémon possesses not only powerful talons, but also long, razor-sharp claws hidden beneath its wings. Using its incredible speed, POKENAME can slash a small target to ribbons in a single flyby.

[severe scroll]

Blageot (281.18)
As POKENAME soars through the sky at incredible speeds, the flames at the tips of its wings leave blazing streaks in its wake. The sight is dazzling to onlookers and terrifying to its foes.

[hexed fog]

Still so many mons from the mystery list

Guess we arent getting the super secret info

[severe scroll]

I'll take a look

[rich goblet]

I'm back, give me a bit to process everything

[rich goblet]

POKENAME wears a special cap that connects to its brain, allowing it to gain new and shocking insights into how to harness its powers. This burst of insight is followed by a period of sluggishness that is only resolved by lying in the sun.

Is this better?

[rich goblet]

This one was tough to keep in the character limit

POKENAME use their talons as their main weapons. Strong and sharp, these Pokémon can carry objects more than half their weight for long distances with them. When injured, POKENAME persevere and ignite their feathers to show their fighting spirit.

I should be all caught up, speak now or forever hold your peace

[rancid sun]

Looks good to me

[severe scroll]

^ This one

Torchvanah (279.436)
POKENAME can live on land or in the water thanks to its fins and legs. However, this Pokémon struggles to run, constantly tripping over its own feet and rolling forwards. It also has problems navigating in the water because of its small fins.

[rich goblet]

Ooooh one sec

Looks fine

[rancid sun]

We need one for the Combusken fusion too! 🙂

[severe scroll]

Working on it!

Comvanha (280.436)
POKENAME's mouth is lined with a lava-like substance that can melt metal boat hulls it bites into. Sailors who get crafty will utilize the melted cuts POKENAME provides to create metal tools and objects to aid them.

[rich goblet]

provides with an s if you are using it/its pronouns

it provides

they provide

[severe scroll]

Blavanha (281.436)
POKENAME's devastating jaws make it a fearsome predator. Using its legs to maneuver through swamps and forests, it hides in tall trees and ambushes prey by leaping down from above.

Sablvanha (421.436)
This Pokémon lives in deep underground rivers where gem stones are plentiful. Swimming in packs, POKENAME will jump out of the water and clamp its powerful jaws down onto the gems to break them into pieces it and the pack can consume.

Ralvanha (285.236)
Using the fins on top of their bodies, packs of POKENAME can locate vulnerable targets for their next ambush. They communicate silently through subtle fin movements before striking as one.

[rich goblet]

Because a pronoun REFERS to a noun or TAKES THE PLACE OF that noun, you have to use the correct pronoun so that your reader clearly understands which noun your pronoun is referring to.

Stolen from Purdue OWL

[severe scroll]

What part of the sentence are you referring to here? Sorry.

[rich goblet]

Its coming before POKENAME

[severe scroll]

Ah

[rich goblet]

You want the subject (the POKENAME) to come before the pronoun (they/it)

[severe scroll]

Right

[rich goblet]

That way the pronoun refers to something

[severe scroll]

Thank you for that clarification!

I, unfortunately, posted it already, though it is the most recent one.

[rich goblet]

I'll get it, just remember it for the future

[severe scroll]

Thank you. I will.

[rich goblet]

clamp its jaws down, since you said This Pokémon in the first sentence

[severe scroll]

Zigvanha (504.436)
POKENAME approach boats and bite on the siding in an attempt to play with the people on board. These curious creatures are prone to creating holes in these vessels due to their strong jaws while unaware of their own strength.

[rich goblet]

@severe scroll Want to know a neat trick?

I read entries aloud. Like with the voice aloud. It almost always makes sure that I find some weird phrasing right away

[severe scroll]

I never thought of that. Thank you!

@hexed fog There's 6 Chewfish off your list.

Ratchic (19.279)
Timid by nature, POKENAME bolt at the faintest sound, clumsily scrambling away in fear. They will only approach trainers they trust, avoiding food left behind by strangers until the area is clear.

Last one for the night.

I'm at over 300 entries now! Not on the site yet, but in total

Night Dex Writers!

[rich goblet]

rest well

[clear hollow]

A part of nutrients POKENAME receives from food gets stored in the yellow seed it carries inside its mouth to later feed its offspring with. The seed is protected by a toxic slime that young POKENAME are immune to.
102.535 Exeggcute/Gulpin
Mergemay Day 14 - Slimy

[storm light]

Swalin #536.535a (Tarr -Slime Rancher)
https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/536.535a/
POKENAME's body has the consistency of tar and shines in several colors when in light. Despite its small size, it has an extremely fast metabolism, leading to a seemingly endless hunger. It attempts to sate itself by eating anything it can find.

Beautin #508.535a (Flutter Slime - Slime Rancher)
https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/508.535a/
POKENAME are a common sight in meadows where flowers are plentiful, fluttering about in small groups. As they drink nectar from flowers, their body leaves behind a slime on the petals that is collected and processed into hydrating skin lotions.

[rich goblet]

Second sentence should say:

The seed is protected by a toxic slime that young POKENAME are immune to.

Otherwise, feel free to submit and I’ll fix it tomorrow

[clear hollow]

Got it, will edit in a minute! I'm not submitting this until July 1st tho

[rich goblet]

Looks fine enough, I’ll fix anything minor tomorrow morning or so

[rich goblet]

Cute entry, same deal

[storm light]

I've got more slime rancher ones to do later

I think these are the rest of the ones that you made that don't have entries tho, milchik

if you got more lmk

[clear hollow]

This Pokémon roams cemeteries, drawing supernatural energy from the graves. Some say that the butterfly-like spurts of flame emanating from POKENAME's torch represent human souls being guided to the afterlife.
366.483 Lampent/Braixen
Mergemay Day 15 - Death

once again, I'm not sure if I should put "the" before something or not before cemeteries, in this case

I know the difference between "a" and "the" ofc, but it's a bit hard for me to grasp if I should put any articles before some words or not sometimes

[dapper patio]

Out of curiosity when do dex updates happen? Like is there a pattern or cycle or

[storm light]

~ every 2 weeks or when izik feels like it You can see the date of the last one in the pins

[dapper patio]

Got it, thanks!

[acoustic scarab]

I feel like they're updating a bit quicker recently

[storm light]

probably bc the 'secret' lists are getting done and since they need to be done for a mysterious reason, they get pushed out quicker

[willow venture]

The very Hoenn-shaped mysterious reasons one might say

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.57/
POKENAME's fur is covered with plants. Its muscles are basically torn in fights, and in older POKENAME, almost all of its muscles are replaced by tiny vines.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/3.60/
POKENAME uses its suction cups to anchor itself in shallow water currents, with its leaf-shaped tail floating on the surface. Its skin is tough and elastic, and it relaxes upon impact to be propelled away from danger.

[zinc patrol]

https://www.fusiondex.org/venusaur+poliwrath/
When POKENAME swims, the leaves on its back can be opened as needed to aid swimming or folded to reduce resistance. Its wooden fist can absorb impact, allowing it to go all out.

[hollow nimbus]

In general, use the when there is only one of that thing or you have already previously mentioned that thing

[clear hollow]

so I remove "the" in front of "cemeteries" right?

[hexed fog]

Ducky is a big part of that. The backlog is pretty much nonexistent

[foggy matrix]

https://www.fusiondex.org/zubat+unown/
POKENAME are a pest in any cave. Their psychic powers allow them to detect food even in perfect darkness, and their flat bodies and sharp fangs make them difficult to remove once they've latched on.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME's fur is covered in plants. Whenever it pulls a muscle, the tear is replaced with plant matter for added strength. This is particularly common among older POKENAME.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME uses its suction cups to anchor itself down in shallow water currents, with its leaf-shaped tail floating on the surface. Its skin is tough and elastic, and it relaxes when struck to propel itself away from danger.

[rich goblet]

When POKENAME swims, the leaves on its back can be opened as needed for precise swimming or folded to reduce resistance. Its wooden fist can break rocks and other projectiles, allowing it to go all out.

[rich goblet]

POKENAME are a common pest found in caves. Their psychic powers allow them to detect food even in perfect darkness, and their flat bodies and sharp fangs make them difficult to remove once they've latched on.

any in any cave is a bit redundant so I replaced the word to make it less so

[foggy matrix]

https://www.fusiondex.org/hoothoot+dragonair/
It can sense time down to the second, and always emerges from its home at the exact same moment each day. It is currently unknown how far its body can extend, nor where the rest of it goes.

[raven wave]

Is it generally OK to submit different dex entries for each different sprite (that doesn't have an entry, of course) that a Pokemon has?

[rich goblet]

@raven wave Please note the following:

1. When submitting your discord username, please do not capitalize any part of your entry, as the discord username is always lowercase. This is important as having your exact username allows us to track authors so that we can deliver messages, such as this one.

2. Your entries were denied as it is clear that you have not read the guidelines before you submitted the entries. I suggest reading the lore book in the pinned posts to learn more about how to represent Pokémon and Fusions.

3. Please post entries here to ask for feedback before continuing to write entries, as this helps ensure that the entries are of a quality that is acceptable to have in game. Once you reach a sufficient level of quality expected of authors for the game, at that point you may independently submit entries for the game.

4. Just because an entry is denied, it does not mean you are barred from writing the entry again with revisions or edits. Please feel free to resubmit entries once they have been looked at.

[raven wave]

Noted! I did read the guidelines, but I didn't read the lorebook, I'll check it out

[rich goblet]

There were several entries where you mention the fusion name rather than use the keyword POKENAME. We have an automated system to replace POKENAME with the fusion name so that there are fewer errors with naming

[foggy matrix]

auh does that mean the ones i wrote b4 finding this channel were autodenied

[raven wave]

Yes, that was my mistake early on, I fixed that after a while

[rich goblet]

I'll investigate that shortly, give me like ten minutes

[rich goblet]

I'll do a thorough investigation after finding out if the other person here has been auto rejected

[foggy matrix]

oh no wait some of mine are on fusiondex nice

[raven wave]

There's no need to look too deep into it, if I've consistently made errors it's fine if you dump the ones I've made before making myself more familiar with the lore and guidelines

[rich goblet]

You are fine, just note it for the future

[raven wave]

As you noted, I didn't post anything here for feedback so it's understandable for them to be dismissed with the same effort that I put into making them lol

[rich goblet]

No no, if you have a few with POKENAME then it should be looked at properly. The ones without POKENAME I will keep on Not Approved status but the ones with POKENAME I will give a fair shake

[raven wave]

Yeah I've submitted probably like 30ish of them, and only the first few didn't use POKENAME properly

It said so right there on the submission form so idk how I missed it the first times anyway

[foggy matrix]

slight rewording
It can sense time down to the second, always emerging from its home at the exact same moment each day. It is currently unknown how far its body can extend, nor where the rest of it goes.

[raven wave]

I also wrote entries for the Mewtwo/Aegislash fusions which definitely made it sound like there's only one specific Mewtwo/Aegislash rather than a species

Which goes against the Mewtwo Lore Document™

[foggy matrix]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/556.132a/
Its body has the smell and consistency of mushed Tropius fruit. At night, it [[???hides in the banana skin how do i phrase this part]] to protect its soft body from danger.

[raven wave]

What a cutie patootie that sprite is...

I wanna eat him...

Anyway let's see

[jagged ledge]

Well technically, you should avoid describing singular instances of any Pokémon, not just Mewtwo, but I appreciate you doing your reading. 👍

[raven wave]

Yeah I know, but it's only Mewtwo that I described that way on account of his famous origin

[jagged ledge]

Good to learn from then.

[raven wave]

"retracts into its peel" is probably fine

[foggy matrix]

oo yea that works

[raven wave]

retracts is actually kind of bad, maybe retreats into, or "reseals its peel"

[foggy matrix]

Its body has the smell and consistency of mushed Tropius fruit. At night, it hides in its outer peel-like shell to protect its soft body from danger.
^?

or just hides in its outer peel

[raven wave]

Yeah that's fine too

[foggy matrix]

peel-like leaves? it is grass type

[raven wave]

I think just peel is fine, if it can literally have leaves it can literally have a peel

It's not like one kind of plant part is more plausible to have than another

[foggy matrix]

real

[rancid sun]

GREAT GOD GROVE PFP

[foggy matrix]

https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/300.300a/
ok last 1 ive got for now
POKENAME uses its cute face and demeanor to lull its opponents into complacency. However, since both sides think it's the cute face, it just ends up going in circles, confused.

[foggy matrix]

sniles

[raven wave]

No notes it's very cute

[rich goblet]

@raven wave Just so you know, a lot of your entries are really close to being good for submission, but there are cliches and bits of narrativizing that make them lose the tone of the Pokedex. Since the Pokedex is an authoritative document, using lots of metaphors and similes lose the focus that is needed.

It isn't bad, its just a styling issue.

Lots of people start in a similar place, I know I did

[raven wave]

Metaphors and similes? I don't include things like that intentionally, do you have any examples? I do definitely do a little narrativizing, like I know I made an intentional joke in mawile/magcargo

I can also think of making a reference to ballerinas being jealous of hawlucha/galade too, I can understand how that could correlate with what you said

[rich goblet]

It's said that POKENAME is actually more dangerous when it's sleepy, because the air released when it yawns is hotter than the surface of the Sun. This is only an urban legend, the air it releases is always that hot.

If it is hotter than the surface of the sun then it'd be pretty hard to approach

[rich goblet]

Wait I misremembered I might just be referring to hyperbole

Yeah I was referring to hyperbole my bad

[raven wave]

Well yeah, that one I just made as a joke to reference Magcargo's notorious pokedex entry saying it's 10,000c (which is indeed hotter than the surface of the sun)

But I understood the tone of it was certainly cheeky

So I understand it being no good

[rich goblet]

Cheeky is something that our version of the Pokedex tries to avoid

We're actually a bit stricter than the normal Pokedex, or we try to be

There's a section in the lore book that says we shouldn't exceed 5000 Degrees

[raven wave]

Yeah as it happened I read that part as we had this conversation lol

And of course it specifically mentions magcargo

[rich goblet]

Yup yup, the lore book helps so much with this sort of thing

[raven wave]

(for the record the surface of the sun is also only around 5,000c, so it doesn't fully contradict that rule lol)

[rich goblet]

(Fully aware, just keep the hyperbole reasonable, you shouldn't imply the destruction of the world around it with its existence)

I found one entry that passed

While Wurmple spend most of their time eating in order to evolve, POKENAME doesn't need to eat. It's said its sustenance comes from absorbing the souls of those who touch its shadow while it hangs from the branches of trees.

Rumors and legends are allowed, just remember to keep it vague, otherwise looks pretty good

[raven wave]

Yeah I mean that's why I have a lot of "it is said" and "some believe"

In all the entries

[rich goblet]

I'm aware, which is why I'm doing a manual check

Before my tenure as an Unown some perfectly good entries were denied over the username issue, but now that I have the power ™

I can fix things up so entries can get approved

Also, since we're on the topic of feedback

[raven wave]

The username thing is obnoxious but I'm glad you're fixing that now, I'll have them in lowercase from here on

[rich goblet]

Remember that subjects come before pronouns, the pronoun refers to something so we try to introduce the Pokémon first

It dances with POKENAME's fans is wrong

POKENAME dances with its fans is right

[raven wave]

Yeah I do know oftentimes I just say "it" or "this pokemon" but I do think most of the time I don't start with that and then mention the name afterwards? Well, I'll keep it in mind to make sure it's a mistake I don't repeat

[rich goblet]

Oh right

@raven wave You probably already saw but once entered into the form the Unown has the right to fix up entries to make them game approved as needed

I have done that once so far, and we aren't allowed to completely gut an entry

It was in fact the pronoun issue I fixed

[raven wave]

Yeah I mean aside from ones that are obviously no good under the guidelines like the magcargo one obviously I'm glad to have you make whatever alterations are necessary

Really I'm just interested in as many fusions having dex entries as possible

[rich goblet]

Some people aren't, hence the disclosure

[raven wave]

It annoys me whenever I fuse something and there's no dex entry, so I figured I may as well put the effort in to help fix that problem especially since I'm in no position to do spriting right now

Like half of all fusions in the whole game have sprites, but way fewer than that have dex entries (way WAY fewer when you consider all the alternate sprites)

Somebody has to do something

[rich goblet]

Coincidentally, entries will always be less than the number of sprites since we can only make entry for custom sprites

[raven wave]

Yeah but the non-custom sprites don't really count

All due respect to japeal but his are a stopgap necessarily

[rich goblet]

japeal sprites are funny and messy

I prefer custom ones though

[raven wave]

https://fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/219.344a/
Though it's overflowing with lava, POKENAME never burns the ground because any that drips off of it is immediately teleported away. Some believe it is teleported directly into volcanoes, making POKENAME the source of all geothermal heat.

[rich goblet]

The last sentence doesn't make much sense on a macro setting level because that's not how plate tectonics work

[raven wave]

Sure, but admittedly that is the same kind of nonsense that you always see in legendary pokedex entries. Maybe the pokemon experts just aren't experts on plate tectonics

[rich goblet]

Maybe you can say

"...Making POKENAME the source for many eruptions."

That way it doesn't literally fuel the planet's core while still seeming mighty

Also, there are some tame legendaries if they are fused with baby Pokémon

[raven wave]

Maybe, I do still like it being at least a little eyebrow-raisingly implausible, if not totally impossible

Let me think of some way to tone it down

[rich goblet]

Legendaries have been a chronic problem for the Pokedex, we've had everything from blowing up the world to changing the pokedex itself, all rejected of course

[raven wave]

Though it's overflowing with lava, POKENAME never burns the ground because any that drips off of it is immediately teleported away. Some believe it is teleported directly into the ground, transforming many otherwise-stable mountains into explosive volcanoes.

[rich goblet]

Let me pass you off to one of the other Unown, I still need to go through yesterday's entries

<@&1210701164426039366> Anyone want to help give feedback for this entry?

#dex-entries-discussion message

[raven wave]

I do try to make my legendary entries largely based on hearsay and rumor and speculation, since I do subscribe to the opinion that even in the original pokedex a lot of stuff about legendaries is mythologized and probably played up

If Palkia was really the one and only god of space itself it seems implausible a little child could trap it in a ball

But it's no fun for an entry to be like "well, it's the Palkia, but it's not that big of a deal"

[rich goblet]

Give it some time, most of the Unown are probably just waking up or at lunch, I'll get back to you if no one does

[raven wave]

I'm not in a rush

[pastel depot]

Hey

Uhh I need word help

Is there like alfictee. But a real word?

[raven wave]

What in the word is alfictee supposed to mean

[pastel depot]

Aflict-ee

Is aflicted by someone

[raven wave]

Oh I see, the like

Receptive noun form of afflict

I don't think such a word exactly exists but I'm sure something semantically similar does

What's the sentence you're going for?

Looking into it technically people have said "aflictee" before but it's a vanishingly uncommon word so best to avoid

[rich goblet]

those afflicted is the closest you will get

There is no word for afflictee sadly

[rich goblet]

After coming back to this, I am even less sure of my stance on this entry, so I will let another lore savvy Unown pick it up

[pastel depot]

You think I can get away with it or?

I guess i need the entry to show yall huh

One sec

The silk surrounding POKENAME is exceptionally sticky, often causing it to become attached to other people and Pokémon. Removing this is nearly impossible, and the unfortunate aflictee must often wait for POKENAME to evolve and remove the silk itself.

Im not fond of aflictee here either but not sure what to replace it with

-# A better word than aflictee probably

[rich goblet]

The silk surrounding POKENAME is exceptionally sticky, often causing it to become attached to other people and Pokémon. Removing this is nearly impossible, and those afflicted must, unfortunately, often wait for POKENAME to evolve and remove the silk itself.

[pastel depot]

I think i can now get away with removing unfortunately now, so that helps too

Thanks

[rich goblet]

Cool

[pastel depot]

The silk surrounding POKENAME is exceptionally sticky, often causing it to become attached to other people and Pokémon. Removing this is nearly impossible, and those afflicted must often wait for POKENAME to evolve and remove the silk itself.

? Good?

[rich goblet]

Good enough, I'll deal with it tomorrow

[pastel depot]

Also does it make sense for my mon in mind (cascoon/drifloon)?

(Inspo is the whole balloon static electricity thing but with sticky silk.)

Actually silcoon is the sticky one isnt it

Hmm

Yea silcoon is the one more known for just hanging on things

Is there a silcoon/drif?

[rich goblet]

You could add strings to the sentence somewhere and it might work

[pastel depot]

No why would there be :/, that'd be too easy

[rich goblet]

The silk strings surrounding POKENAME are exceptionally sticky, causing them to attach to nearby Pokémon. Removing this string is nearly impossible, and those afflicted must wait for POKENAME to evolve to remove the strings.

[pastel depot]

You think I could use that for cascoon?

[rich goblet]

Sure, I don't mind

My job is to help you all write entries

[pastel depot]

Maybe ill move it if it ever gets sprited, but I ain't doing it and even if it does get done it'll be like 3 months after that

Till then, casc/drif

Thanks for the help

Oh character count needs checked huh, one sec (im thinkings its good just in case tho)

224 im good

(Caps 250 right?)

[rich goblet]

250 cap correct

[pastel depot]

Submitted

Did I submit my mini reverse exercise i forgor

Lemme check Iol

Nope

[rich goblet]

What's a mini reverse exercise

[pastel depot]

The gem in the center of POKENAME's face perpetually reflects the night sky, even in the harshest of weather. In areas where wet seasons dominate much of the year, astronomers will often use this pokemon to study and map the stars.

[pastel depot]

Wrote an entry before picking a mon

Then found a mon that fits it

Entry is above, its now going to a clefairy/staryu

[rich goblet]

I... don't recommend doing that, its like shoe-horning in an entry

[pastel depot]

Yea i know. It was more a test lol. I had fun writing it tho, thats the important part

I had to try it once lol

[rich goblet]

Submit it if it fits the Pokémon

[pastel depot]

I think it does

Water type space mon gem in face

[storm light]

Beein #15.535a (Honey Slime - Slime Rancher)
https://www.fusiondex.org/sprite/pif/15.535a/
POKENAME's body is similar in consistency and smell to honey. They squeeze into Beedrill hives and disguise themselves as part of the comb so they will be fed honey. Beedrill that grow suspicious of POKENAME in the hive are eaten during the night.

[rich goblet]

Solid entry, go ahead and shoot it

[storm light]

ngl i thought it would have to be edited

[rich goblet]

What would need changing?

Your plurality is on point that's for sure

[storm light]

like the third sentence and how it (in my mind) doesn't seem clear that POKENAME are the ones eating the beedrill