dex-entries-discussion

[jagged ledge]

Ok cool, then I'd be happy to give it a shot.

[jagged ledge]

Oh it's like a photoshoot, that makes more sense.

[mellow imp]

lowkey kinda unrelated but just like in biology

it kinda fascinates me there are still so many plants and animals out there that we dont have so much as a irl "pokedex" entry for yet

mostly plants but, if so its just as long as a pokedex entry

[jagged ledge]

The world is a big and varied place

[cedar sigil]

got a typo in it. "for due"

its either, not both

[rich goblet]

That is something I didn’t know! Thanks for looking out!

Weird how it works sometimes

[mellow imp]

i did an entry for magikarp its sprite umm

this one

i lowkey wanna change disparaged to disavowed

[rich goblet]

not sure if you can change after submission

Maybe just send a new one with corrected info? Not sure there

[hollow nimbus]

You just ping an Unown and we can fix it for you

[hollow nimbus]

What's the filename for the sprite you've written for?

[rich goblet]

What’s an Unown?

Like the pokemon?

[hollow nimbus]

Unown is the name of the role given to PIF Pokédex Editors

[ebon warren]

#become-a-staff-helper message

[rich goblet]

Oooooooh

My bad

[hollow nimbus]

If you hover over the Unown next to my name, you can see that I am an editor

[rich goblet]

Sorry I’m a bit new to the server

I’ll do that instead of resubmitting next time WHOOPS

try to DIY doesn’t always work

[jagged ledge]

Guys

@narrow cosmos especially

Look what I found

An entry from January!

[rich goblet]

OMG

That is stupid funny

Like I’m laughing on the bus

[jagged ledge]

Yes, but I also do need to communicate a potential revision

[rich goblet]

Pluralization?

[jagged ledge]

The entry seems to describe a trait of the plural species but uses the singular subject, yup

There can be individual descriptions, but that is more in the nature documentary sense of "The POKENAME" or "A POKENAME" to refer to the species

[narrow cosmos]

Noooo, I just got to work, you're telling me some of my entries are visible in-game now and i can't see them?

[rich goblet]

Lolololol

[narrow cosmos]

Ironically i think this is after it already got revised for grammar too.

Still, it's nice to see

I'm glad it made Ducky laugh.

[jagged ledge]

I'm sorry, please try to focus on your job!

[narrow cosmos]

Well, I know what I'm doing after work at least!

[jagged ledge]

Well hey, it's a great concept, but third try's the charm

[jagged ledge]

Sounds like a plan!

[mellow imp]

358.129

[narrow cosmos]

I wonder, you think resubmitting/editing the entry would cause it to be removed from the game? Not sure if it would auto-update or erase it until the next time Frog pressed the button.

[jagged ledge]

I believe we do have to wait for the next dex update, but it'll automatically fill in when it happens.

@boreal prairie

[narrow cosmos]

Really disinclined to get it fixed then, I don't wanna risk one of my entries disappearing for a month after I just got to see it in. XD

[boreal prairie]

My work! Its real!

[jagged ledge]

How it works is Frog imports the list every update. It's not that the current version would disappear, it's that next patch, the new version would replace this one because it overlaps the file.

[dense shard]

YIPEEEEEEEE

[narrow cosmos]

Ah, i see! Well, I'll try to remember to adjust it sometime after I get home.

Pity we don't have listed dates for when an entry was accepted, so we know the current cutoff and i don't go looking for a bunch of entries done after a few weeks ago.

[jagged ledge]

Well if you write it here, once we revise it, I can update the already approved entry slot for you.

Also I'm not sure of the exact cutoff either, but I can confirm there are at least entries up to January 14th.

[timid sky]

So, I just checked to see if my entries were in game, and they weren't, but then I checked again and they were.

[rich goblet]

Magic!

[timid sky]

Anyway, give me a number between 1 and 7

[small nest]

4.3

[rich goblet]

4

[timid sky]

4 it is then

[hollow nimbus]

pi

[timid sky]

POKENAME lures prey with the smell of honey, then launches a flurry of punches and chops once they get close. Once the prey is knocked out, POKENAME lifts it up with its four arms and swallows it whole.

[timid sky]

pi isn't a generation of Pokémon that I can take dex entries from

[hollow nimbus]

Well you didn't specify that

[hollow nimbus]

Change 4 to four and you should be good

It's a case of a little-known grammar rule where whole numbers less than 11 should be written in word form

I wonder if that applies to negative numbers, though

[timid sky]

I mean, negative numbers are less then 11

[hollow nimbus]

I looked it up
Apparently, you shouldn't use - for numbers at all

You would say negative five or negative 12

[timid sky]

Sorry, what was that? I couldn't hear you over Hitmontop's B2W2 and X entries

[timid sky]

Oh, and also its BDSP entry

[small nest]

This fits right in with the "dex entries are written by ten year olds" theory.
"It, it spins SOOO fast, it makes it so much more strong!"
"How much stronger does spinning make it, Tummy?"
"It makes it, it, it boosts its power by... ten!!"

[timid sky]

As long as it has its leak in its hand, POKENAME will keep spinning. Those who are able to take a spinning POKENAME's leak are heralded as master martial artists.

[boreal prairie]

congratulations to everyone getting to see there entries in game. ive been very busy this week but i should be able to help with entries tomorrow

[boreal prairie]

As long as its leak is in hand, POKENAME keeps spinning. Those who can take a spinning POKENAME's leak are heralded as master martial artists.

concision suggestions. (the harshest editor would call "keeps" a filler word and encourage you to replace it with "... POKENAME spins [description of spin]" 😉)

[small nest]

take a spinning POKENAME's leak

[boreal prairie]

POKENAME lures prey with the smell of honey, then launches a flurry of punches and chops once [they get close]. Once When the prey is knocked out, POKENAME lifts it up with its four arms and swallows it whole.

repetition of once. "once they get close" is sort of an awkward phrase some maybe replace that and you can keep the second once as is.

[small nest]

Personally I suggest "After knocking its victim out,"

[boreal prairie]

Yeah, more active sentence

[small nest]

The spreadsheet (and the corresponding edits) aren't linked to the game directly. As far as I know, every couple of weeks, Frog just overwrites the game's dex entry database with the entire contents of the APPROVED sheet. So if an entry is edited, it will stay the same in-game until Frog updates the list after which it will be the edited version.

[hexed fog]

I'm nowhere near the computer but did anyone make an entry for dratini/yanma (drama)? Maybe like "the gem on its head detects negative thoughts. It buzzes while flying near those who have disagreements, delighting in the entertaining drama."

I need it

[fair thicket]

*leek

[timid sky]

Yeah, well that’s the Unown’s problem now

[narrow cosmos]

Spent a good few minutes gathering up screens of my entries in-game, hard to believe it's real now. Though the downside is it was already a big effort collecting good screens of custom entries before, now there's hundreds more, and in my case alone around 700 to look for.

My eagerness to be a part of all that sweet flavor text has backfired on me.

[gentle frost]

Alright, my g gundam refs should be in the game now, guess that means it’s time for me to submit their entries

[uncut plover]

Yippee!

[narrow cosmos]

Wildheart's work spotted in the wild

[rich goblet]

What do you all think of this one? Also guess which pokemon it is 😄

[narrow cosmos]

I'm going to guess something Ice-type mixed with a Horsea line or Octillery. 😄 Also, for some grammar-based adjustment, I'd think something like...

"POKENAME has adapted to live in the most frigid of oceanic environments. POKENAME is able to spit out a chilling ink, allowing it to freeze its predators and give it the chance to escape."

My version of adjustment, if you want to use it. 😄

[rich goblet]

Ooooh! Clever

[jagged ledge]

[candid plank]

Question : in this channel i wrote a dex-entrie so now that the patch is out my sub is on the game ?

[rich goblet]

#dex-entries-submissions Is where you submit it, and it depends on what pokemon you wrote in, maybe?

[candid plank]

Lurantis + greninja (Plant/dark type)

[boreal canyon]

also, did you submit it to the form ?

[candid plank]

No i didnt

[boreal canyon]

then it would never be in

[rich goblet]

Yeah they only accept it through the form in #dex-entries-submissions

[boreal canyon]

[rich goblet]

That too!

Also make sure to check the tracker to see if/when your dex entry is approved!

[candid plank]

Okay but i dont have acces to the channel 😢

[rich goblet]

#dex-entries-discussion message

Try this.

[boreal canyon]

... you're litteraly in the channel

[candid plank]

So i need to submit here ?

[boreal canyon]

in the form

[candid plank]

(I'm french be cool)

[boreal canyon]

ok, @candid plank go to #français i'll explain it to you

[candid plank]

Okay

[dense shard]

It's looks are so stunning that just a glimpse may cure light diseases and muscle injuries. However, if it gets mad, it will display enough strenght to squish a submarine like a tin can.

Man, I miss Iker Muniain, I hope he recovers well

[boreal prairie]

Its looks are so stunning that a glimpse cures light diseases and muscle injuries. However, if upset, it can squish a submarine like a tin can with its strength.

some concision/clean up suggestions

strength maybe could be another more unique word. fury. ire rage strength feels like, default word for pokemon power

[gentle frost]

Can I submit entries if I know a sprite should be in the game, but it’s not listed on fusiondex yet?

[boreal prairie]

id just wait a day or two for fusiondex to update to be sure

[gentle frost]

Only asking since my g gundam refs are in the game with the recent sprite pack, but fusiondex ain’t got them showing up yet

[limber parrot]

You can see POKENAME frolicking around in piles of petals during cherry blossom season. Sadly, when the trees revert back to green, it goes into a deep depression.

[dense shard]

Thx 💎

[boreal prairie]

POKENAME frolics around in piles of petals during cherry blossom season. Sadly, when the trees revert back to green, it falls into a deep depression.

small concision suggestion. very cute idea. is this your sprite?

[limber parrot]

yes, this is my sprite!

i'll keep your edits in mind for when i actually submit it

[boreal prairie]

@jagged ledge these are good to go to be gridded! #dex-entries-discussion message

[dark hedge]

Thank Arceus the AI feature is gone

[boreal prairie]

Sure thing! They are always suggestions just to help trim them down so they can avoid redundancy, or have more room for more details if you think of them! The specific thing that I edited here about taking out "you can see" is because, in narrative description, anything that you describe is sort of implied to be "being seen," so it doesn't need to be stated directly!

[jagged ledge]

Alright cool. I will do so by the end of tomorrow.

[small nest]

Infinite Dex might be a more up to date source, are the refs on that site?

[gentle frost]

Nope, just checked, guess I have to wait for whenever they update with the January sprite pack just released

[rich goblet]

When's the next expected review board meeting? /joke

[jagged ledge]

I'm not doing much now and I'm awake, I can review a few. Worst comes to worst we can talk things out in the morning.

[jagged ledge]

129.60: "This POKENAME are" is incorrect on multiple levels. "This Pokémon is" or "POKENAME are" would be what you're looking for.

Suggested revision:

POKENAME are naturally slow swimmers due to their rotund bodies and small fins, struggling to gain enough push to move efficiently. A cornered POKENAME will repel threats by confusing them with the spiral pattern on its chest.

129.6 and 129.61 are the same entry, I'm assuming you meant this to be for 129.61? Also again, This POKENAME is not grammatically correct in this instance, because it sounds like the Pokedex is referring specifically to the one Pokemon in front of you.

[jagged ledge]

Hmm, I think I'm starting to get a better understanding of your style. I marked a couple as Unsure because the ideas are there, they just need a bit of ironing out. For now your Magikarp/Bibarel got in no problem, but I'll gladly help with the rest in the morning.

[rich goblet]

I appreciate the feedback! I've already submitted quite a number of entries prior to this point, but I will halt the submissions on my end and make sure those sort of errors are fixed.

Also I slept early and woke up early... enough to be at 1 am

[jagged ledge]

No worries, I'm just overtired and winding down at this point. I appreciate your patience and cooperation and will be happy to properly resolve this once I have more energy lol

[rich goblet]

Oh please rest! I think the whisker line does need fleshing out, and will make a quick summary of what ought change to make sure its more cohesive

I also am (re)studying articles (A, the, etc)

I can FEEL my brain turning on when I do this, I haven't had to write this well in ages

[rich goblet]

130.61
Aggressive and territorial, POKENAME challenge other POKENAME by using their hands to pull against the challenger’s whiskers in a tug-of-war. The winner of such challenges enjoy the sweetest of berries.

129.61
POKENAME are often seen lying flat in marshlands, using their sensitive whiskers to detect changes in the mud. POKENAME will wander towards sources of activity, making them inadvertently great for wildlife rescuers.

129.62
POKENAME have a peculiar ritual of challenging other Pokémon in an area to tug on its whiskers. Those that manage to cause the POKENAME to budge are rewarded with berries, or other items collected by the POKENAME.

I decided to scrap the friendliness idea for 129.61 and begin with the idea that whiskers are sensitive. I then split the 130.61 and 129.62 into two seperate

[edgy sleet]

is this good for grourem? (341.351)

"It is said that the magma flowing through POKENAME's body would burn hotter than the sun if not for the ice on its body cooling it constantly. No one is quite sure how the ice never melts."

i know its not a fire type, but i based it on the sprite :>

i have another one for 289.347 (shedrai) but im not as happy with it, still think its decent though.

"Many believe this Pokemon to be some sort of divine entity, though in reality it is just the result of a Darkrai reaching the end of its life cycle."

[hollow nimbus]

This suggests that this is not a Shedinja/Darkrai, but rather that it is an old Darkrai, which is incorrect

[edgy sleet]

oki doki

what abt the one above it

[jagged ledge]

Well for starters, you're totally good on the referring to the sprite regardless of typing aspect.

Part of me is saying to focus more on the description of temperature regulation than the mythical side of it, but nothing is sticking out as actively wrong to me right now.

[candid plank]

Insane

[boreal prairie]

Magma flows through POKENAME's body that would burn hotter than the sun, if not for the [description] ice that cools it. No one is sure how the ice never melts.

some concision suggestions. I think that for legendary pokémon it is fine to just say crazy powerful stuff is true without hedging. I [noted] a place where you could add some creativity by giving the ice an evocative quality.

personally i find that unsupported but described theories are more fun than just saying nobody knows. come up with some fun sci-fi fantasy idea, and thats where you can put hedging phrases in if needed!

[boreal prairie]

Believed to be a divine entity, in reality its a Darkrai at the end of its life cycle.

some drastic concision suggestions. more done just to show you how brief the idea really is. However, this means you have lots of space to add another fun idea! I agree with others that perhaps it is mot best to claim definitely that "in reality" it is a Darkrai. Also, sort of confusing because its not super clear legendary pokemon or ghost pokemon have "life cycles." It made me think of something about like... maybe it comes from when "nightmares" die? could that add to your idea?

and remember, my notes are always suggestions and to help you enhance your writing skills and create the best version of your good ideas 😄

[hexed fog]

I am just finishing off the prior to 2/1 entries

so gimme a bit

[jagged ledge]

Also @rich goblet I'm available to help when you're ready, apologies for the delay

[rich goblet]

You're good!

I have decided to add more/edit the whisker line, since I found that it was in fact lacking

130.61
Aggressive and territorial, POKENAME challenge other POKENAME by using their hands to pull against the challenger’s whiskers in a tug-of-war. The winner of such challenges enjoy the sweetest of berries.

129.61
POKENAME are often seen lying flat in marshlands, using their sensitive whiskers to detect changes in the mud. POKENAME will wander towards sources of activity, making them inadvertently great for wildlife rescuers.

129.62
POKENAME have a peculiar ritual of challenging other Pokémon in an area to tug on its whiskers. Those that manage to cause the POKENAME to budge are rewarded with berries, or other items collected by the POKENAME.
I decided to scrap the friendliness idea for 129.61 and begin with the idea that whiskers are sensitive. I then split the 130.61 and 129.62 into two seperate

Sorry in advance, those were my first few entries

[jagged ledge]

It's ok lol

So 129.6 was an error, correct?

[rich goblet]

Correct, scrap entirely

[jagged ledge]

Gotcha

[rich goblet]

It looks like while my grammar is horrible, the entries were ultimately accepted

I wish I had some sort of feedback though, since I do want to improve said grammar

[jagged ledge]

That's because Izik is currently going through the approval process. I was marking some as Unsure or Needs Fixes for reviews, but I can edit as necessary even if things have already been approved.

[rich goblet]

Oh cool! That's good to hear that you're not the only one 😂

[jagged ledge]

Nah, I'm actually the second newest one on the team lol

[dense shard]

Hey, about my 335.335 entry

"Its looks are so stunning that a glimpse cures light diseases and muscle injuries. However, if upset, it can squish a submarine like a tin can with its strength, while maintaining its gorgeous shine."

There is no record about Milotic being able to do that but this is the Milotic self fusion we're talking about

I thought it would be fine bc of FAQ 4 and FAQ 18

[jagged ledge]

Sorry Ducky, one second

[rich goblet]

It also looks as though there's a duplicate of it towards the end

[jagged ledge]

I mildly agree with you, but I still think that part of the issue is the question of how it happens and the description of how it's done.

How does looking at something physically cure you? Also the second sentence reads as a little clunky, no pun intended with the crushing metal lol

[dense shard]

I thought like is not actually the looks, but rather healing moves that could not be seen by the person who recorded the entry studying that species

[jagged ledge]

Maybe something like "The dazzling appearance of POKENAME entrances those that look at it, giving it a soothing and comforting aura." ?

[dense shard]

Like a "uncertainty" about a certain phenomenon which can be seen in many dex entries

[rich goblet]

Perhaps not seen but felt in some way. It needs some description of at least 'vibes' like Wildheart has presented

[jagged ledge]

Gestures vaguely at the "It is said" loophole.

[dense shard]

Ol' reliable

I'll later check it out then

[jagged ledge]

The dazzling appearance of POKENAME entrances those that look at it, giving it a soothing and comforting aura. Despite its graceful appearance, it is strong enough to crush a submarine without displacing a single scale.

Thoughts?

[dull folio]

POKENAME are surprising aggressive and hostile when approached. They can heat their fangs to be hot enough to melt through even the toughest steel.

[dull folio]

What Pokémon is this for?

[rich goblet]

Seems like cresselia self fusion

[jagged ledge]

Mitotic self-fusion

Ok Ducky's turn

[dull folio]

I can’t think of any improvements for it of the top of my head 👍

[dull folio]

Also if anyone has improvements on this let me know

[rich goblet]

I believe the first sentence should be 'have been recorded', has been recorded sounds like the Pokemon went extinct to me 💀

[dull folio]

Lmao I see your point

Maybe just cut that bit out and say pokenname if surprisingly aggressive?

[jagged ledge]

130.61. Does the challenger pull on the challenger's whiskers? That should likely be changed to opponent. Also your description makes it sound like they're fighting over territory, but then focuses on berries. Who determines or arranges the sweetest berries?

129.61. Overall pretty good, I just think the phrasing of "Wildlife rescuers" is a little vague.

129.62 So this makes more sense that they actively gather berries, but this reads more as a quirky NPC in Mystery Dungeon than part of an ecosystem. Also they challenge other Pokemon to something where they give away food? Where is the benefit to them? Or unless it's supposed to be like how Magikarp is kinda ineffective? There's almost too many layers here I think.

[rich goblet]

I think I get the picture here, Back to the drawing board on those two. Also I remembered that it's pokemon rangers that go out and help folks, so maybe that would work

[jagged ledge]

Probably.

"Inadvertently helpful during times of crisis" maybe?

[rich goblet]

I'll probably DM you a final copy of the changes I've made to those three entries when I'm done if you're okay? To give space for other folks.

[jagged ledge]

I'm flexible, whatever works.

I need to scroll up and figure out which entries I need to fix because some have been resubmitted and some haven't and Izik already went through most of them

[rich goblet]

130.61
Aggressive and territorial, POKENAME challenge other POKENAME by using their hands to pull against the whiskers of an opponent in a tug-of-war. The winners of such challenges enjoy the comfiest of resting spots.

129.61
POKENAME are often seen lying flat in marshlands, using their sensitive whiskers to detect changes in the mud. POKENAME will wander towards sources of activity, making them inadvertently helpful during times of crisis.

129.62
POKENAME have a peculiar ritual of challenging other Pokémon in an area to tug on its whiskers, facilitating baby Pokémon to play games of tug-of-war. Despite its appearance, POKENAME are gentle and protective of those who play their games.

Take your time, I just find the whisker idea very amusing

Tug of war

[hexed fog]

432.296.png POKENAME draws out different auras by dancing in different ways. This relaxing style allows POKENAME to draw out a psychic aura.
433.296.png POKENAME draws out different auras by dancing in different ways. This haunting style allows POKENAME to draw out a ghastly aura.
430.296.png POKENAME draws out different auras by dancing in different ways. This graceful style allows POKENAME to draw out a fiery aura.
431.296.png POKENAME draws out different auras by dancing in different ways. This energetic style allows POKENAME to draw out an electric aura.

@prime garnet would you like some assistance on writing these? I understand they are all oricorio but they deserve their own unique entries. (especially since the only difference is 2 different words in each entry)

[rich goblet]

Stupid ah question, metric or american

[dense shard]

Excellent, I'll touch it a little bit, then submitting

[jagged ledge]

How are these?

130.61: Aggressive and territorial, POKENAME challenge each other to duels over resting places. They compete by tugging on each other's whiskers until one falls over.

129.61 looks good.

129.62: A POKENAME is very jovial and caring, looking after baby Pokémon and entertaining them with its whiskers. It almost always lets the smaller Pokémon win in their tug-of-wars with its whiskers.

[rich goblet]

I love it! Thanks for helping me out with this 😄

[jagged ledge]

Of course! No problem! I do really appreciate your passion and ideas, and I'm always happy to help give a bit of guidance or revision.

[narrow cosmos]

Lots of new entries getting put out while I was taking a break over the weekend, looks like I need to get back into business before all the fusions are snatched up.

[rich goblet]

Just let me have the sea critters if you can

[mellow imp]

mine got denied rip

or alot of them did

one of them does not even have reasoning 😭

what is this "dex tone"

and since when is Pokemopolitans not official lore

what was wrong with this one?

POKENAME try to trick environmental auditors into thinking they use electricity, the truth is they still run on natural gas. Watch Out! Their gas is odourless but still just as toxic.

[rich goblet]

That one just brings up a lot of random questions not in the tone Pokemon, not including other issues.

Why are they tricking environmental auditors?
Why are they running on natural gas? How?
Where do these auditors even come from?

So forth.

Not an exhaustive list, of course

[mellow imp]

cuz their fused with rotom so implicity you would assume they use electricity 😅 , well the rest is a little joke ig

its lr

i will go back to the drawing board

resubmit

[rich goblet]

Pokedex entries tend to be a little more naturalistic

They are often more direct than what you've posted too

[sturdy void]

ew, british spelling

GO BACK TO ENGLAND, YOU FILTHY BRIT

🇺🇸

🦅 🦅

[rich goblet]

Huh?

[sturdy void]

🫡

[rich goblet]

I'm confused but also this is the dex-entries channel

[sturdy void]

Yeah no I'm aware

[rich goblet]

Actually, want to help me?

[sturdy void]

Oof

[rich goblet]

Describe this pokemon

[sturdy void]

Lemme cook something up

You want me to write a dex?

[rich goblet]

Because every part of my soul wants to say other pokemon bully it

Just like ideas you have when you look at it is fine

I just can't help but thinking it gets bullied a lot 😂

[sturdy void]

"POKENAME is unable to escape quickly from predators, so it will shoot ink from its mouth to blind the pursuers."

This could be useful

[rich goblet]

I like that

[sturdy void]

A bit short

[rich goblet]

I'm going to expand on that

[sturdy void]

I've done a few of these

[sturdy void]

perfect

Well, it might have errors, but at a brief glance it looks good

[rich goblet]

Thanks! That's all the horsea ones done for now. Time for I think Seadra

Yeah I'm never sure about hyphenation but it should be decent enough to get past production

The best part of doing this in bulk is that I can arrange pokemon so that I get to come up with creative evolution patterns

[hexed fog]

I can't find anything regarding Pokemopolitans in anything besides a fangame... can you advise the img number?

[hexed fog]

I challenge you to find any entry in any game that says 'Watch Out!'

This would have been denied for lacking a pokedex 'tone' that matches the writing style of a pokedex entry

[hexed fog]

which one is that? can you advise an image number?

[hexed fog]

Oh I see, the Pokemopolis ep. one sec

ok I'll get that one approved, my apologies, I mustve mistyped my google search

[hexed fog]

none of that here. ever.

[sturdy void]

Oh yeah for reference

I had my pfp and name as Soldier TF2

So it was fully in good humor and nothing else

[rich goblet]

I don't think that excuses it, especially since it was so easily taken out of context. I'd just be careful next time

[sturdy void]

It was taken out of context because I changed my info

aaaaaaanyways yeah

[mellow imp]

Its from the OG tv series

[mellow imp]

fair enough

[hexed fog]

yeah I saw that 🙂 got it approved. again that was my error sorry!

[mellow imp]

this is the umm entry for koffing from the OG game

which is sorta similar

In hot places, its internal gases could expand and explode without any warning. Be very careful!

but i understand the diffrence

[hexed fog]

if you have more questions always feel free to ask, it isn't uncommon for me to make an error

[sturdy void]

this is such a gen 1 entry

I wouldn't recommend referencing those too much, they're often very short

That, of course, can lead to them potentially sounding weird or not fitting in with the style of the later games

[rich goblet]

Alright, time to begin batch 1 of horsea line updates. Stay tuned for funny or interesting pokedex entries in the approval logs

[mellow imp]

*POKENAME cries ceaselessly. It is said they cry because of their foreshortened lives, they had just been an egg, and now they have passed from this world into the next. Few trainers have ever managed to soothe it. *

too morbid?

[rich goblet]

D'oh. @hexed fog Could I ask for a small revision to a number I submit recently?

The most recent instance of 116.80.png needs to be 116.86.png

Sorry, screen is tiny right now, hard to submit from

[hexed fog]

Kk sec

Done. My phone came through

[rich goblet]

Thank you so much 😄

[stuck shoal]

"POKENAME are full of paralyzing spores they can expel at threats. Too much pressure on their heads or tails also trigger the spores to spread, so trainers are advised to be gentle when petting POKENAME."

sorry fixing the pronouns used here

[mellow imp]

thougts?

POKENAME's healing moves are state of the art and no Pokémon can supass its diagnostic prowess. With its discovery, the Chansey has now increasingly come to represent the archaic past in PokéMedecine. This Pokémon is the envy of every Pokémon Center.

[rich goblet]

Immediate thought: Nix the reference to Chansey, mainly because these are meant to be standalone entries (usually)

[mellow imp]

Do you think it refrences a pokedex entry?

more like pokemon lore id say??

cuz chanseys in every pokemon center in the show games etc

but i see where ur coming from

[rich goblet]

https://tenor.com/bb7bt.gif

I'm not the expert here, just seeing what I know others have been dinged for

[mellow imp]

true

i think it could be worded better too

but maybe ill take my chance

how r yall so fast lol

i take so long

[rich goblet]

Oh believe me, it comes in groups for me

Like I take two lines of pokemon, and three evolutions each, that's six entries in my head already

[mellow imp]

good idea lowkey

just finished the laundry squirtle line lol

btw for 358.7.png i forgot to put a "of" in between "because" and "its"

my b

[stuck shoal]

501.470.png
"The Luvdisc portion of POKENAME mellows it out, even when in a more powerful state. It still remains dangerous thanks to its physical and special might, even accidental hits dealing a decent amount of damage."

501.470a.png
"Reseachers are unable to tell if POKENAME's segments are separate sentient Luvdisc or if POKENAME is simply mimicking the appearance of a hoard. Experiments have proved that separate pieces respond differently to external stimuli, such as petting." (this doesn't make any sense, what the fuck)

102.498.png
"POKENAME generate heat when moving at high speeds. This cooks their innards which in turn, strengthens their psychic energy."

102.499.png
"In battle, POKENAME shed their shell to increase their power and speed to defeat an opponent. If their fragile core is popped, they will flee and hide until their shell regrows."

[edgy sleet]

Magma flows through POKENAME's body that would burn hotter than the sun, if not for the opaque ice covering its body that cools it. The ice covering its body is pure Never-Melt Ice, thus it withstands such temperatures without melting.

(let me know if you didnt want me to ping)

[boreal prairie]

a great embellishment! (you are always elcome to ping me!) There could be some more tweaking to do to tone down the repetition of "ice" and "melt" but its really looking good!

[edgy sleet]

hmm leme see what i can think up

Magma flows through POKENAME's body that would burn hotter than the sun, if not for the crystalline layer covering its body that cools it. The aforementioned glaze is pure Never-Melt Ice, thus it withstands such temperatures without evaporating.

hows that?

im also trying to think of a new one for shedrai with that idea you gave me. :>

[edgy sleet]

Whenever a Darkrai causes someone to pass away, this is left behind. This empty shell is then brought to life via the raw emotions caused by the never-ending nightmares the person suffered and wanders this plane of existence endlessly.

thoughts?

[mellow imp]

Having lost the ability to use psychic powers in their new form, POKENAME keep baby Solosis inside their metal frame. When POKENAME decides it needs to teleport, it delivers the Solosis a tiny electrical shock, forcing them to teleport for it.

can this be rephrased better?

feels confusing to me

[runic flare]

i

[mellow imp]

I feel like this breaks a rule but I thought it was kinda a funny idea

There was at one time a group who believed the Elite Four put hypno's in the TV's to control the region. No one believed them. We now know this to be at least partially true. POKENAME are known to live in houses almost completely unnoticed.

or maybe

There are some driven crazy by the thought that their scheduled TV programming is trying to brainwash them. What is more likley the case is that a POKENAME inhabits their home. They are known to live in houses almost completely unnoticed.

maybe the second is more clear

[runic flare]

I would definitely use taht skin

[timid sky]

Every punch that POKENAME throws is packed with electricity. However, it often uses up too much electricity and runs out of energy after only a few punches.

[regal cedar]

first electricity wouldn't be capitalized

[dense shard]

Any way to not repeat "electricity"?

Like "voltage"

[boreal canyon]

first electricity => static energy ?

[timid sky]

I've already submitted it, so any edits will have to be done by an Unkown at this point

[boreal canyon]

oh okay

i was just suggesting stuff )x

[dense shard]

You can submit it again corrected, they'll discard the old one and approve the newer one

[dense shard]

Seems good to use static (since being Pichu a weak electric type pkmn) but I almost hear no one using the term "static energy" to reffer to "static electricity" (at least in spanish)

[boreal canyon]

my bad, just checked, it's static electricity so it won't work ...

oh, maybe "sparks" could work for either of the electricity

idk

[edgy sleet]

@boreal prairie let me know what you think of these when you have the chance, no rush tho

[boreal prairie]

looks great!

[edgy sleet]

so should i put it in the google form? also hows the second one look?

[boreal prairie]

I might change a little to something like

When Darkrai scares someone to death, this husk may be left behind to aimlessly wander the mortal world. The raw emotions spawned by the never-ending nightmare they endured animates the empty shell.

it is more of a all around edit than mormally I do, but i found your idea inspirational! i tried to keep your main idea but fluff up the language a little

[edgy sleet]

that sounds perfect

[boreal canyon]

Idk if it's following faq

[boreal prairie]

When you're ready with the entry, yep, you just put them in the Google form! Then unown's might do their own small edit passes or ask you if there are big picture problems

[boreal prairie]

I did have that thought, but it isn't gorey or violent

[boreal canyon]

Because the thing is that it seems your dex only consider the darkrai part

[boreal prairie]

The husk is shedninja

[boreal canyon]

Faq is in the pin

[boreal canyon]

Yeah but it's kinda treated as 2 different beings imo

[boreal prairie]

So is Shedninja lol

[boreal canyon]

@hexed fog are you available to take a look?

[boreal prairie]

My apologia for @edgy sleet 's entry is that Shedninja is a fundamentally unusual pokemon that largely is discussed as the animated remains of another Pokémon, so it is natural for entries to reflect that directly

[nimble sage]

hey, check this out

PSA: If you want to ping someone for help or feedback, there's a list of active Unowns on the UnownList tab of the entry spreadsheet! The <@&1210701164426039366> role itself is also pingable!

[boreal canyon]

Imo it's kinda a faq 19 thing

[boreal prairie]

I don't see how you could say this is only about the darkrai half when it is about a reanimated husk

replace the word "Darkrai" in the entry with "a Ghost". Does it still seem "not about Shedninja"

[ebon warren]

I didn't see the sprite itself but the entry reads as though the victim of the "scared to death" is the husk. That's not the fusion

[hexed fog]

I'm not home ;;

[small nest]

We try to steer clear of directly saying "Here's how this thing was made, and it wasn't a DNA splicer," because there's a good chance the player will have just made it with a DNA splicer. I would personally not approve the entry because of that, but can't recall the FAQ at the moment.
The gist of the entry is that it's a husk reanimated by Darkrai, not a fusion between Darkrai itself and something else.

[small nest]

I agree with this point personally as well.

[small nest]

That said, it's a very cool entry... could definitely be reworded and keep the same melancholy feel.

[edgy sleet]

i thought of a way better one that mixes the ideas of both mons, if someone wants to hear it

If you were to look into the hole in POKENAME's neck you would be subjected to horrific, never-ending nightmares. It is believed that the souls of those who fall victim to this will never be able to rest.

[boreal prairie]

That is fine, but there is a different FAQ that contradicts this position.

[small nest]

I love that. Shedinja's hole and Darkrai's nightmares are an excellent combo

[boreal prairie]

I also like this!

[edgy sleet]

[small nest]

Which FAQ is that? Don't think I'm familiar

[edgy sleet]

im sorry my original entry caused so much strife

[small nest]

Don't worry about it! The way the lore and FAQs work mean that entries like this need a good discussion

[boreal prairie]

its good to have a swipe of shike strife once in a while

[edgy sleet]

[boreal prairie]

you're making me open this accuraed spreadsheet again...

[boreal prairie]

FAQ 12 says pokemon fusions can happen without dna splicers

[small nest]

FAQ 14 does as well, but instructs us to keep the exact method vague.

As per Frog, there are two methods of fusion - first, splicers, which are fairly recent and have become widespread. A lot of wild fusions would be the results of splicers (released fusions, two Pokémon happening on a discarded splicer, their descendants, etc.)
The second, much rarer method happens naturally without splicers and has been around for as long as anyone can remember (so it's OK to talk about fusions being around before splicers), but no one knows how or why it happens.

So yes, fusions can be of an unknown origin as per FAQ 12, but we shouldn't specifically describe the origin.

[edgy sleet]

this is good to know, since i plan on writing alot more

my way of doin it is every time i catch/fuse something in my new randomizer run that doesnt have a dex entry, i try to think of one for it

[small nest]

Great to have you around, hope to see a lot more from you! Make sure to submit the Darkrai/Shedinja one through the submission form (in case you didn't know)!

[ebon warren]

You can phrase it as a rumor or a myth how it is formed, perhaps making it seem like it's speculative or even a wives' tale? Making it a story or tale isn't claiming it as fact, so that could work, depending on how it is phrased

[edgy sleet]

did

also when submitting the reworked grourem dex, i forgot to put the b at the end of 341.351b

[edgy sleet]

the old version of the same dex entry got accepted, but i want the newer one to be used instead if possible

[boreal prairie]

i been struggling with my latest prompts lately urg been busy

[boreal prairie]

when I launch me coup against the unkowns i will free of from the tyranny of "According to legend" 😛

[hollow nimbus]

If you really want to control the lore that much, you could also make your own fangame

[narrow cosmos]

Hmm, think I found a minor bug, not sure what's causing it, maybe a very specific placement of words/spaces, but a few of my entries have a word getting swallowed up between page breaks.

[rich goblet]

uhhhh

Did someone approve the bad examples?

@hollow nimbus I think these should be rejected(?)

[ebon warren]

Note the explanation at the far right, those have been added for a specific purpose

[rich goblet]

OH

Pfft sorry though I thought they were being added to the main game

[ebon warren]

We haven't figured out the best process but we are needing to take screenshots of "bad entries" for examples of how to report them

So they may but we will update them later so they are correct, don't worry

[rich goblet]

👍

[ebon warren]

Those were all written and discussed and submitted by the Unowns

[rich goblet]

Just want to make sure

You've probs seen that I wrote quite a few

[ebon warren]

No you're great, the attention is appreciated

[rich goblet]

So I'm invested in this

[ebon warren]

Don't worry, we are too, and we appreciate everyone in the community

[boreal prairie]

just wanted to make it clear I was just being silly i respect the unowns and am not planning a coup against any of them

[small nest]

why not take over the institution from the inside? You know you want this sweet Unown-D icon

[boreal prairie]

I do like the icon but I simply have not the time to be a meaningful part of the team. I will serve humbly as the concision-suggester and prompt-reciever and leave the unown mysteries to my betters 🫡

and every once in a while I will say that don't we all feel "according to legend" is basically implied on every entry and then be shunned for my insolence, and return to my sad cave where I plot my coup work on another prompt entry

[ebon warren]

https://tenor.com/view/watching-you-watchingyou-gif-18126667

[autumn leaf]

Okay, so I know this is probably a very often discussed and perhaps even something being worked on thing, but I would be remiss not to ask...

Is there something being done by fusions that share names?

[rich goblet]

Example?

[autumn leaf]

Nidoran + Ratata AND Nidorino + Ratata = Nidotata

[rich goblet]

We use POKENAME to insert the name of the pokemon

So I imagine it would be fine

[autumn leaf]

A variable, I assume then and an algorithm that changes names accordingly?

I figured it was a little displeasing to the eye. But then going through and individually renaming everything would be very task intensive for this many pokemon.

[rich goblet]

See #dex-entries-submissions for more details I suppose?

[autumn leaf]

I'll do that. Thanks for the info. 😀

I'm not trying to be difficult; I'm autistic and I guess I notice small things like this that I care about. This project is a labor of love, after all.

[rich goblet]

You're good, I generally try read everything before I get started on things

So I know a bit more than some folks who just jump right in

[autumn leaf]

That's normally what I do too if I am about to start working on something, but sometimes it's faster to just ask a question too. I'll start reading more intensively now. First I want to play a bit more though. 😂

[candid plank]

Long ago, POKÉNAME was the secret weapon of a forgotten kingdom. With its mesmerizing dance and mastery of sword and shield, it could single-handedly annihilate armies of over 50,000 men. Legends say that no foe could strike back, as its movements were too hypnotic to follow. Today, this Pokémon serves as inspiration for the creation of spinning tops, keeping its legacy alive in a new form.

I want to know if this is good enought to be posted ?

[boreal canyon]

i don't see the issue

[rich goblet]

Character limit > 250

[candid plank]

https://tenor.com/view/bruh-meme-gif-26978290

[rich goblet]

It's the second bullet point in #dex-entries-submissions

[boreal canyon]

Also, most dex try to have a two sentence style

(it's very rare in official dex to have more or less than 2 sentences)

[candid plank]

Long ago POKÉNAME was a forgotten kingdom’s secret weapon. With its hypnotic dance and mastery of sword and shield it could annihilate 50000 men alone. Legends say no foe could strike back, entranced by its movements.

Better ??

[boreal canyon]

i don't really understand last sentence

[candid plank]

T fra ?

[boreal canyon]

yes i've already helped you in #français

also

no french outside of #français

[candid plank]

Pepole are hypnotised by her fighting skills

[candid plank]

So can I submit it now ?

[boreal canyon]

Long ago POKÉNAME was a forgotten kingdom’s secret weapon. With its hypnotic dance and mastery of sword and shield it could annihilate 50000 men alone. Legends say no foe could strike back, subjugated by its lethal dance.

Imo, this is a better way to tell what you want

[candid plank]

Yeah i think you're right

[rich goblet]

I should finish up my horsea line today

Been writing lots

?

[candid plank]

Seen This Pokémon means that you are very lucky but also that also mean that you are already dead

I think this is pretty good

Seeing this Pokémon means you are very lucky, but it also means you are already dead.

[narrow cosmos]

POKENAME are much more passionate about observing battles than participating in them. If many gather together to watch a fight, their supportive dances and cheers can even bolster the strength of the combatant being cheered for.

[grand bear]

POKENAME posess powerful technopathic abilities. They can control and disrupt electronics from 100 feet away.

Idea 2: POKENAME are capable of controlling electronics with their minds. They can cause a computer to short-circuit from 300 feet away.
(I personally like this one a little more)

[regal cedar]

I like the direction taken here!

[regal cedar]

Should be 'possess'. Aside from that, this is pretty solid.

[grand bear]

Whoops. Good catch! Thanks for the feedback /gen

[jagged ledge]

Yup, they automatically fill in the corresponding name by saying POKENAME. As for Fusions with the same name... I mean there are already two Nidorans, just try not to mention the other ones by name I guess?

[small nest]

This is why it grinds my gears to see people referring to fusions by their condensed names. Yeah, I'm sure you love your Cacnx, but that doesn't tell me whether it's Cacnea/Shinx or Cacturne/Jynx.

[jagged ledge]

"I'll write an entry for Nidosaur."

"Which one?"

"The poison type."

"Which one!?"

[jagged ledge]

This would be denied for multiple reasons.

[grand bear]

REAL. Like, when someone says 'Nidosaur' they could literally be referring to EIGHTEEN different fusions! Makes me crazy

[candid plank]

Why ?

[jagged ledge]

1. It's not between 100 and 250 characters.

2. What makes it lucky?

3. Actively describing the player as dead.

4. Contradictory without properly establishing either idea.

[narrow cosmos]

The naming thing is giving me a bit of heck now that I'm having to rename the files I had of screenshotted custom dex entries. Originally labeled with numbers and the fusion name, the numbers no longer work so I'm naming them all by their fusion components now, which means having to parse apart which suffixes and prefixes are being used at a glance.

Is the Nido for this nido or that nido, is -sect mushroom boy or robo-bug, etc.

[jagged ledge]

[chrome oak]

First time doing this, since the event I'm partecipating in requires it, I'd love to hear feedback!

The rampanging POKENAME likes to start fights with the first pokemon it lays eyes on, headbutting them with no mercy.
The holes on it's shells helps them to cool down during the duel, heating everything around it instead.

[narrow cosmos]

Doesn't help that I had about 2000 pics saved before the new update made them moot and adding in my stuff made my collection urge surge

[chrome oak]

(Right, a good question to ask is if I should use it or them to describe a pokemon, kinda used both, which may be bad)

[jagged ledge]

No worries! We're happy to have you! Anyone is welcome and we're all here to help!

First off, "This rampaging POKENAME" describes a singular instance or scenario. It would be more fitting to say "Rampaging POKENAME like to" to describe the species behavior or "A rampaging POKENAME likes to", to show it's an example of species behavior.

[jagged ledge]

No worries! You're not the first and definitely won't be the last lol

[craggy beacon]

this is what im saying, even beyond this channel... 😭😭

[jagged ledge]

So basically think of it as It describing a singular subject and Them describing a plural subject. There are ways to use Them singularly, such as referring to a gender-neutral descriptor, but I mainly reserve that for more humanoid or reference sprites.

[chrome oak]

Got it! really usefull!
If you got something else, don't spare anything, I work best whith a lot of feedback!

[jagged ledge]

Don't worry, I'm here to help lol

[chrome oak]

wrong "it's" used, just realised lmaooo
I think I'll have to use their in that sentence anyways, since I'm describing the species as a whole

[jagged ledge]

Its vs it's. While most cases, adding 's to something determines ownership, in this case, the apostrophe is used as a contraction such as in don't, couldn't, can't, etc. If you see "It's", you can mentally sound out "It is" to see if you're using it correctly or not.

[jagged ledge]

You beat me to it

[chrome oak]

ahahahah

[jagged ledge]

But genuinely that mentally sounding out "It is" trick helps, would recommend

[chrome oak]

I used to read other people using the wrong it's and thinking, how can somebody make that type of mistake? but recently, let's say this is not my first time doing so...
maybe that trick will help!

[jagged ledge]

Before I suggest the rewrite/show the edits at work, a question. Do you want this to be singular, showing one as an example "A rampaging POKENAME likes" or describing the species as a whole "Rampaging POKENAME like"

[jagged ledge]

It's always easier to critique someone else's work than your own. It's why we Unown can't approve our own entries

[boreal canyon]

[chrome oak]

I went with what to me sounded better to me, so I'm thinking of changing it into "A rampaging POKENAME likes"

[jagged ledge]

Got it, sounds good

[chrome oak]

kinda only now realized what you meant by unknown, cool role name!

kefky, unknowns, they really went hard with the pokemon theming

spriters are just called spriters tho lmao

[regal cedar]

Hi @mortal elm ! I was curious about this entry, for Wigglytuff/Charmeleon.

"Many people keep POKENAME as pets, due to their soft, silky fur from their Wigglytuff side and their playful demeanor from their Charmeleon side. Whenever they get angry, however, the tufts of fur on their tails are prone to catching fire."

While the overall direction this entry takes is fine, I would like to note that Charmeleon's official entries repeatedly describe its nature as 'hot-headed', 'barbaric' and 'merciless'. The first sentence should be reworked as a result.

Please let us know what you'd like it changed to!

[chrome oak]

super sorry about this, but what do you mean by "Before I suggest the rewrite/show the edits at work"? could you elaborate? (when you finish what you are already writing obv)

[jagged ledge]

Overall a good idea and description, just needs a little tweaks.

A rampaging POKENAME likes to start fights with any Pokémon it lays eyes on, headbutting them with no mercy. The holes on its shells help to regulate its temperature during duels, heating up everything around it instead.

[chrome oak]

oooh I see

that's what you meant

[jagged ledge]

Oh I just like helping write up ideas for a revised draft to demonstrate or inspire fixes for the final submission. Feel free to take or leave any of them, just trying to make it cohesive based on what we talked about

Yeah, I just had to ask because I wanted to know your idea for the subject to make it consistent in my version. I didn't want to just assume one or the other

[chrome oak]

thanks a lot! Since its pretty much the same concept as what I already wrote, just with the fixes we already discussed, I think I'll use this directly
I may return here at a later date to add entries for all my sprites, until then, have a nice time!

[jagged ledge]

Sounds good, thanks! We look forward to working with you more!

[narrow cosmos]

Some stories say POKENAME are the souls of warriors fallen in battle within icy plains, forever bundling themselves in a vain attempt to stave off the endless cold, and striking vindictively at all who draw near.

[ebon warren]

||I'm unable to help haha. But everyone else, yes||

[hollow nimbus]

Oh, I know
I was being silly too

[jagged ledge]

Well you know what I meant lol

[rich goblet]

<@&1210701164426039366> Small typo made on line 18289 for entry for 116.437.png -- name is quackquackattack (surprised it took me this long to typo that)

[hollow nimbus]

Okay, just give me a moment to pull up the sheet

Nothing like an overheating laptop on a cold day

I wonder what will happen when the entry sheet becomes too big to load

[rich goblet]

We should split it every 10K (10.000) entries ngl

[hollow nimbus]

Due to the appearance of their fins, POKENAME are often bought for casino aquariums. When food sinks to the bottom of the tank, POKENAME use their snouts to eat, emphasizing the coin-like fins to guests.
This one?

[rich goblet]

Correct, author name needs to be:

quackquackattack

Discord user I mean

[hollow nimbus]

Ah, that explains why I couldn't find any typos in the entry

[rich goblet]

It's much faster for me to just retype over copy paste it 😂

[hollow nimbus]

Question: How does using its snout to eat emphasize the fins?

[rich goblet]

It requires thinking about it while looking at the respective sprite, one moment

https://www.fusiondex.org/116.437/

Tell me those DON'T look like coins

[hollow nimbus]

Those don't look like coins
My question is more about the relationship between eating with a mouth and the fins becoming more noticeable

[rich goblet]

LOL

When flipped on its size, it emphasizes those fins

Like spatially

I suppose we could make a minor fix...

"POKENAME turn on their fins to eat..." so forth

[hollow nimbus]

Would you mind if I changed the second sentence to When food sinks to the bottom of the tank, POKENAME turn to use their snouts to eat, showing the coin-like fins to guests. ?

[rich goblet]

Beautiful

Yeah some of these might not be the best, I have low quality internet while working on them due to being a caregiver

When I get home my internet imrpvoes a lot

[hollow nimbus]

Entry processing complete

[rich goblet]

I am happy with the backlog I've made for now

Feel free to ping me with questions 😄

[ebon warren]

That's my problem every time I access it, my computer wants to murder me

[rich goblet]

ngl being paid to take care of my family rocks, it's why I have so much time to write these

[timid sky]

We might need a second entry sheet

[rich goblet]

I've got a stupid request

Can we make a counter for approved entries?

Like if we use the =unique command then do a =countif it should work?

[ebon warren]

There an Approved tab, you can just see the last row for the count

[fair thicket]

fusiondex is updated with credits now

[narrow cosmos]

It feeds on static electricity, but is fearful of painful repercussions from larger prey. Because of this, it sticks to clinging to children to take theirs, ironically earning the ire of their parents.

"That Kangaskhan would probably hurt me if I tried to take a little static from it....I know! I'll nibble on the baby a little when the mom's gone, that's perfect!"

[boreal prairie]

It feeds on static electricity, but fears the painful repercussions of attacking larger prey. Instead, it clings to children [to take theirs], ironically earning the ire of their parents.

Concision suggestion (the grammar was just weird in the first clause, idk that im is that much better). I think that it is not really clear [here] where the static is coming from? In my head I was imagining lile, hiding on human preschooler's sweaters of something, but your little riff implies you think wild baby kangaskhan have static?

in the strictest sense "earning" is an unnecessary gerund, but the natural verb form sounds more awkward without more severe reordering. (and ironically earns)

[boreal prairie]

anybody who posted earlier today that still wants feedback let me know ill scroll up

[narrow cosmos]

Joltik's original dex entry implies it feeds on static electricity from bodies in something similar to zubat draining blood, by biting or such to store it in their pouch, so I made Joltik entries under the assumption they siphon it through bite or claw from the bodies of their targets. 🤔

[boreal prairie]

True! I've read them now. I wouldn't know if that is how real life would work one way or the other haha. Was just noting it!

i like siphon instead of take

just as a less generic verb

[narrow cosmos]

I like it, too, it sounds fancy, but sometimes you gotta layman it, if sometimes just for character count.

Also I've been on a decent roll today, I'm past 40 submitted entries today, most all of them on the high priority tab.

...My brain is melting a bit.

[rich goblet]

@narrow cosmos Same, I've done a decent bit off the high priority tab

Mainly water types

Because water

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah, I saw the horsea tab and thought "duckman wants those, I'll leave 'em."

Though infected by a parasite, maternal love still shines forth, now directed at young Paras. Ironically, POKENAME tries its best to make sure the Paras it raises never evolve and have their mushrooms overtake them.

[analog mountain]

That's a god tier design and pokedex entry. Nice

[small nest]

https://tenor.com/view/ironic-star-wars-chode-gif-5274592

[peak oracle]

Originally mistaken for sea mines, groups of POKENAME can sink ships with a single swing of their large, heavy tails.

[timid sky]

Maybe replace "Originally" for "sometimes", as I feel that people could still mistake it for a sea mine if seen from a distance

[peak oracle]

"sometimes" might imply that sea mines are still around, which i'd certainly hope isn't the case

[timid sky]

There are Quillfish, which are partially based on sea mines IIRC

[peak oracle]

none of its dex entries mention the likeness

but i definitely see it

the hisuian shiny is even grey/silver

[timid sky]

Yeah, doesn't help that pufferfish already kind of look like sea mines

[boreal canyon]

also, the sprite isn't a qwilfish but a dhelmise

[peak oracle]

well yeah

[timid sky]

I know, I was just saying

[peak oracle]

more to the point; no flagrant rule violations here?

[timid sky]

Not that I can see

[boreal canyon]

i don't see any

[peak oracle]

good

this might be my favorite thing about Fusions, pretending these pokemon existed before/indifferently of DNA Splicers

[timid sky]

They do exist quite frequently in the wild

[peak oracle]

-# oh i only play randomized with pre-fused encounters off

[boreal canyon]

do you want to try and give two dex for one of my sprite (one for sfx al and one for the no sfx) ?

[peak oracle]

if they are sufficiently inpsiring i would love to

[boreal canyon]

they should be in game now with the latest sprite pack

https://www.fusiondex.org/340.484/

yup

[peak oracle]

In ancient times, POKENAME was the protector of a city by the sea. When a cataclysmic battle between the Titans of Land and Sea threatened its safety, it hid the city and itself at the bottom the ocean.

https://tenor.com/view/pokemon-kyogre-and-groudon-water-vs-ground-water-pokemon-ground-pokemon-gif-17939730

[timid sky]

https://tenor.com/view/rayquaza-pokemon-rayquaza-gif-6558496472961700506

[dense shard]

Maybe a second sentence with something about its grass typing?

[narrow cosmos]

POKENAME's size and robust body make it a potent powerhouse in combat, good for any trainer's team. However, most find themselves quickly put off by its victory celebration, where it sprays milk above the heads of it and its teammates.

Miltank fusions never stop providing fuel for slightly cursed imagery.

[peak oracle]

god i hope that doesnt make it in

needs like a body horror content warning

[narrow cosmos]

You should see some of the entries that ARE in, friend. This is kinda small potatoes.

[small nest]

There are some Pokémon so one-note that both their head and body fusions have to focus on it. Miltank heads and bodies both have udders. Muk heads and bodies are both made of drippy goo

Such Pokémon have neither purity of essence, nor purity of form

[peak oracle]

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah, sometimes you gotta stretch creativity or just go in a completely different direction to give them dex entries, because some don't have a lot to go on.

It gets very hard to make a bunch of unique dex entries if all the flavor you have to go on is "Kabuto is an ancient Pokemon from ancient times. Dat's it."

[narrow cosmos]

[peak oracle]

the curse of the author searching for freedom in confined space

[small nest]

And then some Unown comes along to say well ackshually

[peak oracle]

i just looked at miltank/gastly.

[narrow cosmos]

Nothing to do but keep trying until something sticks, at least I haven't had too many rejections thus far

[peak oracle]

why did i do that.

[narrow cosmos]

I'm a very strongly resisting the urge to show dex entries for other Miltank

[peak oracle]

bring me to the light that burns the mind, sheperd

[rich goblet]

I'd like to think I do a good job of writing dex entries

[peak oracle]

post em if you got em

[rich goblet]

I have a bunch of submissions already but let me make one on the spot for ya, going to do the krabby line soon

99.91.png

https://cdn.fusiondex.org/GdaA05L1d7R4sTLhL-n8zQ90/dn/pif/99.91.png

This one is a reference to shell smash

@peak oracle I figure you might want to see this one

[peak oracle]

just wrote it?

[rich goblet]

I just wrote it yes

Got any tips or whatnot?

[peak oracle]

my 2 cents.jpg

[rich goblet]

Oooooh! Thank you @peak oracle

Updated thing

A lot of my entries can seem a little basic, so any and all feedback helps 😄

https://cdn.fusiondex.org/_5YaPL5yokbfHmDSAEkBeGdp/dn/pif/99.42.png

I should really move this to an excel sheet...

I do so many

[timid sky]

That is an abomination

[rich goblet]

NO IT IS NOT

They're kinda menacing but not that

[timid sky]

Anyway, I think you should call it a mouth instead of a beak, since bats don’t have beaks

[rich goblet]

Oh good point

Yeah I'm suffering from overconfidence lately, so if any are particular bad just ping me. I have like 30 in limbo in the submission form

Guess which two these are for 😄

[peak oracle]

hoping for sacks

-# is that one me?

[rich goblet]

SHOOT TYPO

That was meant to be snacks

[peak oracle]

since im in english teacher mode anyway;

always proofread!

[rich goblet]

That's why I'm posting them here today, I normally don't even have enough internet for discord and just read it aloud if I'm by myself

[peak oracle]

https://tenor.com/view/pikachu-sadness-pet-head-caterpie-sad-gif-16792400

[rich goblet]

I need feedback, but I love this idea

It's like a whole ecosystem

I meant to write fifty

How did it autocorrect to five

[timid sky]

Let’s be honest, five would be funnier

[rich goblet]

LMAO

I want it to be realistic though if they work with scientists

[narrow cosmos]

Man, Ducky's gonna singlehandedly stack the dex with new entries, Izik has competition, while I get left in the dust.

[rich goblet]

Yeah just you wait until I get mass rejected one day

[hollow nimbus]

Heyo, some grammar edits for ya:

Either remove the comma from the first sentence, or add a subject to the second half of the sentence. I suggest adding that are before on beaches so that people don't think that it's the sailors that are on beaches.

For the second sentence, either remove come or change wave to waving so that the verbs are in tense agreement. I also suggest removing 'in a form of' to make the writing a little stronger.

I would change quacks to quacking to emphasize that they are producing the noise rather than simply using a noise. For the second sentence, I suggest changing an to that to better link it to the previous sentence.

In the first sentence, fifty year old person should be hyphenated to fifty-year-old person, since those multiple words are part of the same adjective. Additionally, I would add and after the comma. Being studied does not necessarily mean a thing is smart, so you need a conjunction that shows the two ideas are not as closely related as that.

The lore is great

[rich goblet]

All very insightful! I will make those respective changes before submitting. Also please let me know if existing submissions have issues, and don’t be afraid to ping me

[hollow nimbus]

Sure, but if I'm looking at an entry you've already submitted, I'm more likely to just fix it and approve it
If I notice a certain mistake is being made repeatedly, I'll leave a note with one of the affected entries, so if you're really curious, just check the sheet every now and then

Actually I'm still dealing with The Izik Backlog

[rich goblet]

Oh okay!

I see existing notes often have the grammar tag

Is there like a grammar checker tool I can use? Apparently I have horrible grammar

At least I’m edit friendly I suppose though I do want to improve

[jagged ledge]

Hey that's what counts, cooperating and learning. You're doing great so far.

[jagged ledge]

There are a few grammar check tools in Google Drive, I would just advise against Gemini because well... any active AI reading my writing as opposed to just an algorithm check just always weirds me out a bit. But both could always be wrong or not understand the context so sometimes it's best to study or peer review.

Also of course all the big things were happening yesterday while I was busy

I'll try catching up later tonight or tomorrow.

[rich goblet]

I'll move my things to google then, been using libreoffice for a while

[rich goblet]

98.86.png
POKENAME crawl on their stomach across the ocean floor, using their claws to grab onto food. POKENAME prefer warmer climates, as they have yet to develop enough body mass to preserve enough heat.
99.86.png
POKENAME crawl on the ocean floor with their claws clearing the debris in front them. POKENAME do this because they prefer to slide on smoother surfaces, as debris and other irritants cause them pain.
98.87.png
POKENAME slide across the ocean floor by freezing the water in front of them. POKENAME prefer colder climates as it is easier to freeze water in such climates.
99.87.png
POKENAME slide on their stomach along the ocean floor by freezing a path in front of them. These paths allow POKENAME to wander without worrying about colliding with debris on the ocean floor.

I think I'm getting the hang of it

[hollow nimbus]

Also, I'm pretty sure google hast started using AI for grammar and spelling suggestions because it has suggested some nonsensical things to me before

[rich goblet]

Uggggggggh

D'oh

[jagged ledge]

Dang it

Idk then

[rich goblet]

[rich goblet]

<@&1210701164426039366> Can I request the following be rejected?

If you need a reason: Author of entry requested retraction

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I need to start asking for help in case I do make mistakes

[small nest]

If none of us are active in the chat, you can always ping one of us if you'd like a second look at an entry

[rich goblet]

OH

I'm allowed to just do that?

[small nest]

For sure!! We all signed up so that we could look at people's entries and give feedback, we love it

The most recent pinned message here even has a link to a list of active Unowns, none of us will mind.

[small nest]

I denied the entries for you.

[ebon warren]

You did ping all of the Unowns four messages prior and nothing exploded
Just keep in mind, everyone on here is in a different time zone and has a life. So even if we don't respond immediately, as long as we have a ping, we can find the message and respond

[proud basin]

Pokemon: Ivyinder (ivysaur + fletchinder)

dex entry: The flower on its head lures bug type pokemon to make for easy prey

[warped panther]

I don't think that's in IF. :thinking: Did you misspell something?

[reef pine]

https://www.fusiondex.org/303.48/
thinking about this one

Millions of years of evolution has fused POKENAME's hairs into rocklike armor. It uses this exterior as camoflague as much as defense, waiting to ambush smaller prey along rocky riverbanks.

orrrrr

Millions of years of evolution has fused POKENAME's hairs into rocklike armor. At the slightest threat it tucks itself up and rolls away from harm.

[small nest]

I love the concept, but we're not supposed to describe fusions' features as evolved (FAQ 30 on the submission sheet). Perhaps switch "millions of years of evolution" with "the fusion process?"

[small nest]

Neat concept! It's a little short - what about adding a second sentence talking about how it catches the Bug-types once they're lured in? You could incorporate something from Fletchinder.

[rich goblet]

For once I am not asking for grammar but for INSPIRATION since I would love to write for these two but they are remarkably too lapras like in my opinion

https://www.fusiondex.org/98.131/
https://www.fusiondex.org/99.131/

<@&1210701164426039366> I feel as though this is okay to ping about, since I want to improve my subject matter as well. I have a pattern of describing physical features often

[hollow nimbus]

I can get to you as soon as I finish wrapping things up with the event I'm running

Okay, I'm back
For now

Okay, my advice for when you're stuck on writing for a specific fusion is to start listing concepts associated with each pokemon

For example, Krabby/Lapras:

Krabby: Hard shell, pincers, tasty, ocean floor

Lapras: Singing, rare, ocean travel, hard shell

Then you can take two concepts, one from each list, and figure out a way to combine them

I can see four pincers on this sprite, so maybe it uses them while travelling the ocean

I'll say that while it travels over the ocean's surface, if any fish Pokémon swim too close it, it grabs them with its pincers

[rich goblet]

Hm...

OH!

I've got it

[hexed fog]

You can always bug me for prompts if you want a general direction ducky 😛

[rich goblet]

POKENAME can be found in aquariums, as they are caring and gentle. As a result, POKENAME are trained to dive and ferry folks down underwater, using the air vents on their shell to maintain an air bubble to breathe in.

POKENAME are a favorite of the tourism industry, as their air vents on their shell can be used to maintain a bubble for eager tourists to breathe in. In the event of emergencies, POKENAME are also known to defend tourists and bring them back to beaches.

I need to work on the second one more but coneptually I think this is cool Fixed this particular issue

@hollow nimbus @hexed fog Any opinions on this one on a conceptual level? Both of them rather

[hollow nimbus]

They look fine

[rich goblet]

Yippee

[grim totem]

I have a couple for a geodude/carbink fusion, do I need a role to be a dex entry writer?

[boreal canyon]

nope

just discuss it a bit here

and when it's all done

you'll find a form in the pins

or in #dex-entries-submissions

[grim totem]

cool!!!!! I also have one for a klefki/rotom one if that one isn't note yet

[reef pine]

ah good to know, thank you. in that case hmmm, i dug up a synynom for "fused" as well, maybe recombined

The fusion process has recombined POKENAME's hairs into rocklike armor. It uses this exterior as camoflague as much as defense, waiting to ambush smaller prey along rocky riverbanks.

[reef pine]

Debating fur instead of hairs, but i dont think insect fuzz is called fur. Maybe "fuzzy exterior" to underline the contrast with rocklike

[reef pine]

I like these

[rich goblet]

Thank you!

I plan to release these along with others in bulk

[small nest]

It ruthlessly nips ankles, car tires, and pets. With its tough shell protecting it from most retaliation, a single POKENAME can terrorize an entire village. Ice-type Pokémon are often the only thing that can can convince it to move on.

[runic flare]

yes

[terse pawn]

God its like a chihuahua with even more agressive entitlement. Love it

[ebon warren]

||Assuming you aren't baked OR swamped with too much from PIF Projects ||

[ebon warren]

And ARMOR

[hexed fog]

;A; i always have time for prompts

[vapid tulip]

I have a question about dex entries but idk where to ask it, and I don't wanna sound like a jerk

[spark magnet]

I had a question, does any dex entry use measurement units which are named after scientists? Like Joules or Watts for Energy and Power etc..

[narrow cosmos]

There's a short handful of entries in the approved section that have watts being used, at least.

[small nest]

You're in the right place. I promise I won't take offense.

[spark magnet]

I'd like a review of this entry please:
Despite possessing the ability to materialize diamonds out of thin air, most jewels in POKENAME's collection are stolen. It commands a "gang" of Carbink to perform its bidding. Those who refuse, find themselves frozen eternally in tough crystal.

[small nest]

We actually have an FAQ on that topic waiting for Frog to answer. The official games uses volts, which were named after Alessandro Volta, so my personal opinion would be that units named after scientists are fine (though I'd steer clear of really obscure/specific ones).

[rich goblet]

most (of the) jewels in POKENAME @spark magnet

That one is one small grammar thing I caught

[small nest]

I like it, a great fit between the mob boss theming of one half and the jewel theming of the other! Just one note - the comma after "bidding" should be a period.

[spark magnet]

Yea had to omit it because it teeters on the world limit

[rich goblet]

Hm...

How about...

[small nest]

I think this one might actually work either way, but my actual grammatical knowledge is on the low end relative to some Unowns.

[rich goblet]

Possessing the ability to materialize diamonds out of thin air, most of the jewels in POKENAME's collection have been stolen. It commands a "gang" of Carbink obey its every order, lest they find themselves encased in tough crystal.

Does this still keep the vibe of what you want without removing too much?

Let me check char cnt too

[spark magnet]

most of the jewels in POKENAME's collection get stolen
Well I don't think "get stolen" would be appropriate here

Since it's the one stealing the diamonds lol

Although the encased part works

Thanks for that

[rich goblet]

Replaced with has stolen

[small nest]

If you did want to shorten it a bit, you could do something like Its "gang" of Carbinks obey its every order, lest they find themselves frozen eternally in tough crystal.

[spark magnet]

Oooh I like that

Thanks a lot!

[rich goblet]

Merged with previous suggstions above

[small nest]

It would be "have been stolen" 😉

[rich goblet]

tenses right

[small nest]

At least we don't have to conjugate many verbs. For all of English's inconsistencies, it does do some things well.

[narrow cosmos]

POKENAME have been observed attending wakes, moving at a slow rhythm before rubbing themselves against the most mournful. Those who were touched swear they heard the voice of the departed speaking to them one last time.

[rich goblet]

(what are wakes?)

[narrow cosmos]

Funerals, essentially

[small nest]

(funerals, but happy. Well, happier)

[rich goblet]

Noted

[small nest]

Eerie yet touching, I like it

[narrow cosmos]

Sometimes I share these more just to share the ideas and incite some discussion over seeking any fixes, sometimes I just like the ideas that come to me. :p

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah, sometimes I like to twist the aspects since normally the Sensu bird is apparently about powering itself through ghostly malice.

How about something happier because of fur-boy. :p

[rich goblet]

Ghosts aren't about malice but the dead, and all that means

I wish pokemon did a better job with that

<@&306953740651462656> I think this a bot message

Thanks!

[sinful patrol]

https://tenor.com/view/inspector-gadget-minecraft-minecraft-movie-brown-bricks-brown-bricks-in-minecraft-gif-11488613102745152145

[radiant dirge]

nuh uh

[spark magnet]

Another one I'd like a review of:
(Diancie + Litwick)
The flame on POKENAME's head burns bright pink due to a great concentration of Lithium. Recent studies have discovered that the wax which drips from its body can yield Lepidolites of immense purity when subjected to high pressure and temperature.

[small nest]

Nothing better than flipping the script on Pokémon's one-note "ooh all ghost types are evil and out to get you" by fusing them with a small happy creature that loves everyone.

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah! I try to mix it up and have some of the more traditional stuff, it's good practice for writing to do some serious/sad along with the silly/sweet, but it's always fun to keep things lighthearted. Like twisting around Paras entries.

[small nest]

Sorry, Shedinja, your hollow shell doesn't eat souls anymore.
At first glance, the hole in POKENAME's back reveals only an empty shell. However, those close to it know the shell is filled with concentrated joy. POKENAME shares its stock of joy freely, giving extra-pure portions to those suffering from loss.

[small nest]

I would probably define "lepidolite" since it's not a common word. Something like "Studies show that when subjected to high pressure and temperature, the wax which drips from its body can yield lepidolite, a beautiful lithium-based crystal." Also, no need to capitalize the mineral names.

[spark magnet]

Thanks a lot!

[narrow cosmos]

POKENAME will spread spores on spots it claims as its territory. The spores are harmless, but agitating to the eyes and nose of anything but itself. Trainers have found that spraying POKENAME with water helps discourage this behavior.

[vapid tulip]

I fell back asleep earlier but my question is if there's a whole discussion that happens, and I see it happening where people correct tenses and stuff, and there's a rule in submissions against grammatical errors in dex entries, how do I still find so many when I play? Should I let someone know? I don't want to shame the authors of those entries

[narrow cosmos]

I think you could screenshot and present them in the bug report area, or potentially here as well to point them out, as things like this will likely slip through the cracks at times.

I've been collecting screens of them myself and I've noticed on some of my accepted entries the new two-page format swallows up entire words and breaks the sentence structure at times, not sure how that'd get fixed.

(Keep in mind due to the infrequency of updates to the dex part of the game any fixes done might not be reflected in-game for some time though, if fixes get made.)

[regal cedar]

We will actually have something regarding this soon! Let an Unown know the details, for now.

[vapid tulip]

Okay, I'm out and about rn, should I just dm you then or smth when I get back?

[regal cedar]

Sure.

[small nest]

The custom dex entry project is also quite new. The majority of entries still use the old autogenerated system, taking the first sentence of one entry and the second of another, with no grammar checks.
But yes, even in custom entries errors can still slip through, and we'll have a formal way to report this soon (tm). For now, this channel or DMing an Unown is fine.

[rich goblet]

https://www.fusiondex.org/98.235/

Making canvases out of stone instead of parchment, POKENAME use their sharp claws to carve into stone. POKENAME utilize many art styles, ranging from realistic, to abstract, to stylized and cartoonish.

@small nest @regal cedar What you think?:D

[regal cedar]

Concept seems fine! General writing rules seem to pass from a cursory glance from me.

[rich goblet]

Thankies

I like the idea of Smergle using differnet mediums

I might do the smerge ones after I wrap up the high priority krabby ones

[narrow cosmos]

Ducky says nobody else gets any, all the dexes are for him, he's channeling his Izik.

[rich goblet]

Nooooooo

@narrow cosmos Anyone can DO them, especially if I don't get to them first

I just state that as a way to say I ENJOY doing those more than a random one

[narrow cosmos]

No problem, I'm just playing around.

[rich goblet]

So I'm digging into my grammar book, and I realize I have an issue identifying when I should use present perfect vs past perfect tense

Does anyone have a good way to summarize the difference between those two?

[small nest]

We currently have entries for just 9.4% of custom sprites, there are plenty for everyone

At our current rate, if no new sprites were ever made, it would still take almost two years to make an entry for every sprite.

[small nest]

I'll have to leave that to the other Unowns unfortunately

[rich goblet]

One thing I do at the moment is swap "THEY" with POKENAME until I need to change certain parts

Because we are talking third person plural as the subject

well, usually

[narrow cosmos]

I'm assuming that counts for alts of the same fusions, but even if it didn't, I doubt our percentage would increase that much.

[rich goblet]

For Example:

POKENAME have been using their claws to dig for gems

VS

POKENAME had been using their claws to dig for gems

Tense is a little muddled but I should air on past tense right?

I might be conflating something here, but I think I can at least write my simpler sentences without mistake now that I have read this grammar book section on verbs

😂

OH

Present Perfect generally continues to the present

[boreal prairie]

Neither are grammatically incorrect (at least from what you've shown) but both are unecessaryily wordy.

[rich goblet]

Hm, back to reading

[boreal prairie]

Post your whole entry i can respond better

[rich goblet]

One moment, let me find it

Actually, let me simplify my question a little

@boreal prairie If I want to describe a Pokemon doing a certain habit up to the present, I think I should phrase it like this:

POKENAME have been dancing every night... (so forth).

[boreal prairie]

I need the so forth

[rich goblet]

POKENAME have been dancing every night, flapping their wings in rhythm with each other.

As example, since I have a few in my current batch with similar formatting

I picked up a pattern in my mistakes, they are usually tense related

So I'm deep diving and trying to practice identifying them in how I write

[boreal prairie]

So, level one advice: Present and past tense basically accomplish all goals, because pokedex entries are contextually about abstract descriptions or regularly recurring events.

[rich goblet]

Good! I find that I get dinged for have/has often (or have been/has been)

[boreal prairie]

[It dances every night] = [It has been dancing every night] in 99.99% of situations, and is shorter. So, I would advise just, not using perfect tense.

However, if you want to understand the perfect tense, it is about delineating the relation between different moments in time

(again, something not really worth doing in Pokedex entries, because they don't happen in time)

[rich goblet]

I think I get it now, sometimes simplifying the verb is better

[boreal prairie]

I'm working on an explanation for you, i'll edit this as I write it.

The important part of perfect tense is that when not used for emphasis, [Have you walked to the park? I have walked to the park.] it is about comparing moments in time for events that recurred.

The birds have danced on Sunday. (At least once on Sunday, but maybe more, the birds danced)
The birds had danced on Sunday. (At least once on Sunday, but maybe more, the birds danced, but not any more.)
The birds have been dancing on Sunday. (The birds dance on Sunday, and they keep doing it (but might stop))
The birds had been dancing on Sunday (The birds danced on Sunday, they did it more than once, but have stopped)

also, have you read my writing tip ducky?

#dex-entries-discussion message

[rich goblet]

This isn’t pinned I think so no! Will read now

On mobile so bear with me

Oh this helps a ton!

Helps me with my active voice too

[boreal prairie]

it is confusing to explain because it is so specific

[boreal prairie]

I keep asking for it to be pinned but i am ignored

[boreal prairie]

And, the reason it is so specific, is because really it is a tool for verbal communication where you try to massage the context of a specific conversation where both parties understand more than is necessarily spoken.

Hence why, it is not really useful for a project like this.

Especially when, "The birds danced on Sunday, but not anymore " is so much easier to write if you aren't super sure, and also, is more broadly legible.

since even native English speakers only understand complex tenses on an intuitive level, not a intellectual one.

[rich goblet]

I think I get a lot of what I wrote is a fluff or just something not necessary for the core concept

[boreal prairie]

Fluff is normal! It is the way we speak naturally and that's often how people get their ideas out. But after it is written, the next step is noticing the fluff and knowing how to slice it out 😁

Also many people aren't taught well in school about what the point of writing is, so they get bad habits to match the school system.

but that is really less of an impact than some snooty writers think, really it is just verbal and written communication are different

Lile if I was talking to you and said, "I was like at the park, i had been going there for a few months, there was this like, weird tube thing, and these kids, probably like 10 or 11, like 6th grade, they were always going up the slide the wrong way to get into the tube, and really they have been doing this for months, like this had been going on since I went there, but this last time, well, either the last time or the last last time, this one boy fell out the slide, I mean, fell off the slide, and twisted his arms real bad." That would be completely followable as a spoken communication, but it is hell to read.

[proper bolt]

'Warowl, the Owl Turtle Pokémon, is a rare fusion of wisdom and resilience. Born from the mystical union of an ancient turtle and a nocturnal predator, it glides through the skies with its powerful wings while maintaining the sturdy defense of its shell. Legends say Warowl was once a guardian of hidden lakes, using its keen eyesight to detect threats and its aquatic abilities to protect sacred waters. Mysterious and intelligent, it is both a formidable aerial hunter and a serene water dweller, embodying balance between land, sea, and sky. 🌊🦉'

[boreal prairie]

Lots of cool ideas! However, your entries can be 250 characters max. I could help you trim it down, or give you some more specific feedback after you pick your favorite ideas!

[narrow cosmos]

A faint scent emitted by POKENAME's hairs induces drowsiness and contentment in those who smell it. Many enjoy using it as a pillow to nap on, which POKENAME doesn't mind at all.

[small nest]

Torterra/Kyogre
Although sailors sighting POKENAME report full-scale mountains and a tree of gargantuan proportions, (scientists/botanists) insist it would defy (science/botany/biology). Since it submerges before observers get close, its true size remains a mystery.

Not sure quite how to word that one phrase. Opinions welcome.

[reef pine]

Not sure this helps but thinking about how big a creature can get led me down a bit of a rabbithole. It appears the limiting factor on size for a marine animal like a whale is prey availability https://www.science.org/doi/full/10.1126/science.aax9044

[small nest]

I imagine the kilometers-tall tall tree would photosynthesize a fair amount

[timid sky]

POKENAME spar with one another to bolster both their physical bodies and their electrical powers. There are often lightning storms in the areas where POKENAMEs train.

[timid sky]

POKENAME smashes boulders to pieces so it can eat them. It climbs mountains both to train its body and to find boulders to eat.

[timid sky]

POKENAME roll down mountains, destroying anything in their path. Sometimes, they will try to stop others of their kind midroll to test their strength. Should POKENAME succeed, the one who was stopped acknowledges the other as superior and will follow their every command.

[regal cedar]

Scientists and Biology, I'd think.

[regal cedar]

Hi @celest gate, I was wondering something about this entry of yours!

(406.478) (Solosis/Carbink)

"It floats around caves with other POKENAME, trying their best to hide from threats. The gems on its body is solidified slime and is used by locals as medicinal cream."

I'd like a bit of clarification: Is it saying the 'gems' are not actually gems, and just slime (which is how they'd use it as cream), or am I misunderstanding something?

[rich goblet]

I recommend the following if it fits their vibe

"The gems on its body are a crystalized slime, which are melted and used by locals as medicinal cream"

[celest gate]

Yeh I agree! That was what I was going for, but your suggestion makes it much more clear

[rich goblet]

@regal cedar I believe me and Krune are in agreement then, that the crystals can be melted to be used. I think Krune approves of the edit I proposed (plus any additional changes)

[regal cedar]

👍

Is that okay, @celest gate ?

[floral seal]

My first attempt at a dex entry! Would love some thoughts

POKENAME’s garbage is unusually sticky, forming an eggshell-like layer to protect its owner. When the shell becomes too heavy, POKENAME will shed its trash, leaving a massive trail behind itself.

[rich goblet]

I get the vibe you're going for, it might need some rephrasing. Would you like me to try?

Also Apostrophe's (This character ') is known to break on occasion, so folks try to avoid it

[celest gate]

Yup

[floral seal]

yes please!! ik its rough lol

[rich goblet]

POKENAME have a shell made out of garbage, forming an eggshell using scraps of melted plastic. When the shell becomes too heavy, POKENAME will dumpster dive, shelling its old shell.

OR (If you want a trail)

POKENAME have a shell made out of garbage, forming an eggshell using scraps of melted plastic. When the shell becomes too heavy, POKENAME will shed the old shell, leaving a trail of goo as the new shell forms underneath.

@floral seal Gave ya two options

[spark magnet]

BTW, lore question, what is Mawile's big... thing called?

The jaw thing

[rich goblet]

If I had to call it something it'd be like "Seconary head"

I am never touching mawile tho ngl

[boreal prairie]

I think this is great, especially for a first attempt!

Its garbage is unusually sticky and forms an eggshell-like layer to protect its body. When it becomes heavy, POKENAME sheds the shell and leaves a trail of trash behind it.

small concision suggestions. my edit suggestions are always recommendations to help the sentence feel more punchy and direct without big changes, you can take it as is, or individual suggestions you like and rewrite yourself!

[boreal prairie]

pokedex entries just call them jaws, but say they are actually horns that act like jaws

[spark magnet]

So are its movements controlled by Mawile or is capable of autonomous thought?

[regal cedar]

Please refer to them to how the dex refers to them. (EDIT: It usually refers to them as jaws, but yes, some entries do mention how they're actually horns!)

I would become familiar with Mawile's dex entries before writing about them, as I would say about any entry.

[spark magnet]

true

sorry!

[regal cedar]

And yes, it can use them.

Consciously.

[floral seal]

The issue for me is that both descriptions repeat ‘shell’ four times :// thank you for the ideas tho!

[floral seal]

Thank you!! i’ll take a look at all three ideas together and workshop later appreciate y’all!

[spark magnet]

POKENAME's headset allows it to simulate battles without sustaining any injuries. Gaining combat experience makes these simulations increasingly accurate, therefore, it actively seeks out stronger opponents, in hopes of refining its databases.

I'd like a review, ty!

[boreal prairie]

Its headset simulates injury-free battles, but as it gains practical fighting experience the simulations grow increasingly accurate. It seeks out strong opponents in hopes of refining its combat database.

some concision suggestions, and rebalancing the weights of the two sentences with some slight reordering.

[regal cedar]

I actually prefer the original, I think. Just has a better flow and order of information.

I like the concept you presented!

[autumn leaf]

I mean, anatomically speaking it might be called posterior cranial maxilla and mandible but that's a mouthful. Posterior jaw, is probably easier.

[regal cedar]

POKENAME flutters through the air, dropping the seeds that develop on its wings. In time, the grassy plains it travels above will become huge forests. In old folklore, POKENAME returns to these forests years later and goes into an eternal slumber.

[small nest]

Hey @prime panther, just looking at this Sableye/Wigglytuff entry:
POKENAME often hoards evolution stones to themselves, which is why Pokémon such as Clefable and Ninetales are extremely rare in the wild. This Pokémon frequently fights with other Pokémon over their belongings, including other POKENAMES.
The second sentence makes it seem that the other POKENAMEs are included in the other Pokémon's belongings. Mind if we reword it to This Pokémon will start a fight over any posession it covets, even those belonging to other POKENAME.?
Also, we should change the first sentence to ...which is one reason Pokémon such as Clefable and Ninetales... so that it doesn't seem like this fusion is the ONLY reason they're rare.

[prime panther]

I don't mind at all, go for it! that sounds a lot better anyways

[small nest]

Done! I love the concept of this little gremlin just hoarding rare stones

[prime panther]

honestly making this dex entry makes me wanna resprite it to give em more personality

[small nest]

https://tenor.com/view/do-it-star-wars-emperor-palpatine-palpatine-gif-799657800635657398

I've found that making dex entries as I sprite the fusion is a great source of inspiration.

[prime panther]

I should start doing that, sounds like fun

[regal cedar]

POKENAME is thought to be a cocoon for a being of pure power. Some believe breaking open the cocoon by force will result in a myriad of catastrophes that could destroy the world. Scientists, however, remain unconvinced.

[rich goblet]

I've done so many dex entries I've probably made a backlog of them

😂

[small nest]

The number of unreviewed Ducky entries is currently decreasing

[narrow cosmos]

My cataloging screenshots of custom dex entries is gonna be a lot easier with the new update to debug mode, nice.

Now I just gotta get through the weekend to a day off so I can spend all my free time Dex-ing.

[rich goblet]

https://www.fusiondex.org/98.459

POKENAME carry the shells of once living Pokémon, and scuttle along shores. Children often say that POKENAME remind them of pets they once had.

This one too spooky for PIF? Just want to make sure it’s okay.<@&1210701164426039366>

[regal cedar]

Nah, I don't think so. That said, I'd wonder how they remind them of their pets...just in general demeanor?

[rich goblet]

I need to flesh this out but it’s implied it is their former pet

[regal cedar]

Yeah, I got that impression!

[rich goblet]

Maybe you can help me? It’d be nice

[regal cedar]

It's vague enough to where it's not confirmed but has the obvious implication.

[rich goblet]

Oh I know

Once living pets

Boom

[regal cedar]

Let's see. It carries the shells of living Pokemon...in this case, Krabby? Or any other Pokémon, too?

[rich goblet]

Oh just krabby

But krabby are pets in my headcanon

[regal cedar]

Hmm, I think that's pretty specific, not all Krabbys would be pets, but I do like the overall direction this takes.

[rich goblet]

Maybe the other unown have input

It has room after all

[regal cedar]

Yeah, I agree.

[ebon warren]

You could make it a plural generalization and add some key word to emphasize an uncanny feeling of familiarity?
First, I'd change the first comma to simply be the words as they so it flows better.
But for the second part, could be phrased Many children feel a deep sense of nostalgia when they are around this creature, like a familiar pet has returned. or something

[rich goblet]

Both suggestions accepted

POKENAME carry the shells of once living Pokémon as they scuttle along shores. Many children feel a deep sense of nostalgia when they are around this creature, like a familiar pet has returned.

[regal cedar]

Those who stare at POKENAME's paintings grow extremely drowsy, but only before the fluid completely dries. The paintings it produces are abstract and ethereal in subjects; scientist believe it is trying to replicate what dreams it eats.

[timid sky]

I love it

[regal cedar]

POKENAME chews lazily on whatever is in front of it: fruits, rocks, and even sleeping Pokémon. Oddly, those who are bitten actually have their external wounds healed after a few minutes.

It sleeps on the sides of cliffs. A biodegradable substance somewhat similar to mercury leaks from its tail when it hunts. When two POKENAME fight, their cries reverberate throughout the area.

[timid sky]

POKENAME collects food so that it can eat whenever it feels like it. Traveling trainers often use them to carry excess food that won't fit in their bag. They also have it carry a Poke flute so that they can wake it whenever they need its assistance.

[regal cedar]

It is most active just after rainy days, when bug Pokémon scurry out of their dens. While wild POKENAME have an aggressive disposition, properly trained POKENAME are quite friendly.

The beating of a POKENAME's wings is loud and distinct. When it picks a location to fly to, it will recklessly and tirelessly travel to it, even if it strains itself doing so.

[hexed fog]

lets see what yall are up to with your entries

[hexed fog]

275.227.png Its feathers are lenses that every few days "reflect" the events of the same stadium, with people playing football and a large crowd watching. However, no stadium like that seems to exist within this world.

can we change this to

Its feathers are lenses that every few days "reflect" the events of a mysterious stadium, showing people playing football and a large crowd watching. However, no stadium like that seems to exist within this world.

@dense shard it's slightly different than your original meaning but it also flows slightly better

[mellow imp]

i see a few of my entries were neither approved nor denied, does that mean i should edit them as suggested or just wait till a decision is made?

[dense shard]

"Its feathers are lenses that every few days "reflect" the events of a mysterious stadium, showing people playing football and a large crowd noisily cheering. However, no stadium like the one shown seems to exist." would be ok?

[regal cedar]

If there's a specific note. Or, you can always address it in here

[mellow imp]

well some of them have no note some do? having a note ig means try again with the suggestions even if it dsnt say denied?

[regal cedar]

If there's no note, we may not just have gotten around to approving your entry yet. If the note has some concerns, maybe try addressing them here.

[mellow imp]

oh i see it just confused me cuz there in the middle of the list if that makes sense 😅

[regal cedar]

👍

[hexed fog]

I like it

[dense shard]

I resubmitted it down below

[dense shard]

I forgot to add "within this world" at the end

[hexed fog]

you booger

sec lemme pull it back up

[mellow imp]

Having lost the ability to use psychic powers in their new form, POKENAME keep baby Solosis inside their metal frame. When POKENAME decides it needs to teleport, it delivers the Solosis a tiny electrical shock, forcing them to teleport for it.

for this entry, it says solosis is too particular, im kind of confused what this means for my second try ?

ig just scrap that idea althogether?

[dense shard]

Thx a lot and sorry

[hexed fog]

lol it's not a big deal

[mellow imp]

also

POKENAME is beloved by Trainers for its ability to steam clean, wash, dry, and tumble all their owners clothes for the week. However if their socks go missing, just know this Pokémon has probably eaten them.

this one does not have a note? is there smnth wrong with it?

[gritty wind]

POKENAME yearns to see their long lost love once more, but they are doomed to blindly wander endlessly, waiting for a reunion that will never come. Their sorrow lingers in the air, whispering softly to those who dare to listen.

I was thinking of having that with 201.287b, will that work?

[regal cedar]

I feel like that describes an individual, not so much the species.

[narrow cosmos]

I forgot there were Slay the Princess reference sprites in here, crazy

[rich goblet]

I'm going to check on my entries later tonight

Hope more get approved

[hexed fog]

;;

I'm sorry i only did a few entries tonight

[rich goblet]

You're goooood

[hexed fog]

I'll run through tomorrow promise

[rich goblet]

I'm happy if any make it thru

117.73.png

Are we really disputing that those are eyes under the mask?

That one is an interesting question, they LOOK like eyes

[regal cedar]

Are we referring to the red orbs?

[spark magnet]

I'll need a review:

After a territory feud with Honchkrows, POKENAME, using their ability to communicate with them, have ratted on the gangs' activities to law enforcement. This has resulted in a great rivalry between the two, with clashes being sporadic and brutal.

[jagged ledge]

When you say "communicate with them", do you mean the law enforcement or the Hochkrow? I know the rulings on fusions being able to speak English are one of the stricter ones.

But your sentence structure makes it sound like they're communicating with Hochkrow?

[spark magnet]

Yea the Honchkrow

I know it's a bit misleading but it went over the Char limit

[jagged ledge]

Ah ok, I know that struggle.

May I suggest a few tweaks?

[spark magnet]

Absolutely

[jagged ledge]

POKENAME scout out gangs of Honchkrow, hiding in darkness and listening in to schemes before running off back to the law enforcement that employ them. They will bark rapidly upon arriving at the station if criminals are about to strike.

I wasn't quite sure how to incorporate the territory aspect, but I thought that making the fusion go on a Stealth Mission of sorts could be fun.

[spark magnet]

Makes sense to me too, although my original idea was them tranforming from loyal members of the Gang to rats after the territory feud

[jagged ledge]

Which is a good idea... hmm... maybe something like

Formerly mischievous pranksters, they turned their back on crime when Honchkrow took over their territory. Now they work for law enforcement, staking out schemes and barking out reports of criminal activities.

[rich goblet]

I would like to make the following replacements if an unown could help me.

478.1.png

POKENAME dwell deep within caverns, where the precious gems on their backs are mistaken for being part of geodes. They are considered at risk of being endangered due to the fact that people disturb their homes in search of their famous gems

478.3.png

POKENAME create burrows by using the gems on their backs to smash rocks into each other. POKENAME continue to smash rocks until an area becomes a comfortable space to rest.

<@&1210701164426039366> Thank you!