#The Delusional Poet

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placid thorn
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Now that you are gone...
Who would sing these poems to me;
Who would be my alibi,
Who would ask me my pains no-more and to what things I suffer by;
Please... Come back;
I have not lived ever-since you left my dear,
For life was like sleep to me...
And you, ||my lullaby. ||

All of these, I only write to your name my dear,
And I know that you.. do knowet. (knoweth)
So a fragment of you, they (readers) all bestow it;
When together,|| a shrunken Lovat;||

The only bias I love you baby, is in this below sonet...

||A God to all, I was from birth my dear...||
||But to you of all,||
||A Drunken Poet. ||

But they all took you away from me;
They ||r a p -ed|| you daily and you were far from free,
I got the news as I sipped my tea...

(Documentary style news starts playing in the TV)
(E--L-- H--d--n has been found dead and is suspected of Suicide.)

That loss made me gain my insanity,
The pain too deep, I had to turn it into vanity.

I had avenged you my dear...
Two weeks ago I met them in an alley...

I gave them all the suffering they needed,
So that they they might've heeded,
Our disbands...
Our disband that they caused my love,

Their body hides, emptiness resides...
For heavens to weep, our love abides.

But I'm not lying to you anymore...
This blood is theirs on your given brands;
Regretting everything they did and didn't; lying to weep below the sands...
I would have not turned out this way meri jaan...
But khair, it was thanks to you...
For your absence made me Shah Jahan, my dear;
And your memories,
had me ||sever|| their hands.

Signing off-
The Delusional Poet

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1st stanza: The poet says 'no-more' becuase he was weeping as he wrote so and was tangled in the rules of this philosophical arbitrational language we call English.
2nd stanza: The Poet writes about her in all his poems so in some way or the other when the readers comment on his poems that they respected it then indirectly they are respecting her.
Shrunken Lovat: meaning the color blue and green has shrunked (The color blue-green represents sadness in the already made standards of colors. You can search it up to conform.) when the poet and she are together.
3rd Stanza: The only bias, 'bias' here refers to that the poet doesn't love anyone and so is biased towards them for loving her in particular.
5th stanza: Just demonstrating what happened to her in the past and the way she died. (I really do miss her ngl.)
Last stanza: Shah Jahan was a famous emperor famous for his love to his queen for who he gave the order to built the Taj Mahal and it is rumored that after the completion of the project he cut off all the hands of the architects and the builders that were involved in making it so that another masterpiece and beauty like it could never be created.
The poet is that beauty, she is the queen, they are the architects who cause much pain that they made the poet a tragedy, and so he cut off their hands for his lover and mainly so that no one like him could ever be created anymore and that is why in the 'Signing off-' The delusional poet is written because the poet is delusional in thinking that he did all that for her while did all of this for his individuality complex.

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@sturdy solar
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@daring wolf

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@sturdy crater
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@rustic token

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@ionic vault
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celest python
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I am proud to say.

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I simply need more of these.

placid thorn
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@sturdy crater
@cloud finch
@amber herald
@river island
@thorny wedge

grizzled timber
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Oh god this gave me goosebumps

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Especially the shah jahan reference

placid thorn
cedar zephyr
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this encapsulates the feeling of grieving for someone you love. At the first and sec paragraph, it showed the raw emotion of a person and yearning for them to come back when it's clearly impossible, it's great !! Is this a story? it can be used for a musical play

placid thorn
sturdy solar
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sturdy solar
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Searching for what made you so talented

placid thorn
sturdy solar
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Hmmm... I see

solemn olive
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omg the shahjahan reference
"for life was like sleep to me and you my lullaby" bruh demn

ionic vault
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solemn olive
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@ionic vault

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@sturdy solar

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@junior mural

solemn olive
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@daring wolf

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This empty screen fills my heart a void.

solemn olive
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brrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr

daring wolf
placid thorn
daring wolf
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@solemn olive I wish keed was here to see all this, read this poem of mine that I wrote sitting under the chimes and give me a proper feedback on the song and the rhymes.

placid thorn
solemn olive
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Man

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I wish she was here and not in Shimla

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She was cold enough.

placid thorn
magic lichenBOT
solemn olive
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im not in shimla 😭

solemn olive
placid thorn
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Man I wish I could talk to keed and tell her about all the days that have gone by and how we have all had our tea parties.

solemn olive
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yea ik I missed today's tea party

placid thorn
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I know she misses the tea parties, I bet the citizens of Shimla are starting to hate her already.

solemn olive
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no they actually hate you for your dhaniya tea

placid thorn
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@solemn olive Man I wish keed becomes 'The Poet' in my poems.

solemn olive
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are u indirectly calling me delusional

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wth

placid thorn
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@solemn olive Man I wish keed understands what I just said. She would definitely say, 'wth'.

solemn olive
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@sturdy solar ask him to stop with his third person convo game

placid thorn
solemn olive
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🔪die

placid thorn
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@sturdy crater

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@serene marlin

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@iron wasp Wanna review this?

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@slate lodge

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@delicate ginkgo

sturdy crater
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sorry

placid thorn
solemn olive
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I can sense her saying, huh

sturdy crater
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just to let you know

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it is not bad

placid thorn
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ik that much bro

sturdy crater
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I think it's a fine fine poem

placid thorn
sturdy crater
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it's not a review

iron wasp
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amber herald
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Woah!! That was a rollercoaster! I love poems about depression.

placid thorn
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Sisy's here!

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@knotty bloom

knotty bloom
placid thorn
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I wish to send you on a quest.

sturdy crater
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Wow
The explanation given makes it more understandble
I liked it
Also the poet did fair and the dogs deserved it,oh dogs are still good they are worst than animals
Last lines were just muwah
Like from where in the world you got the idea to compare
Nd the contrast explained in last line of explanation understandable

knotty bloom
sturdy crater
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Idk if I have the audacity to say
But the girl in poem is your noor and made your life charisma

placid thorn
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In return I promise to make one of your wishes come true.

placid thorn
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magic lichenBOT
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Wait I have a better one.

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From a girl in my poem,
to the girl in my poems.

placid thorn
magic lichenBOT
placid thorn
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@knotty bloom You still here? sry for disturbing.

knotty bloom
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Ah I'm reading it~

placid thorn
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Mimi-san!

knotty bloom
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This poem is very sad. It made me sad. If that was the goal - good job. 👏
Sadly the references are lost on me. I don't know who all the people named in the last stanza are catCry3

daring wolf
knotty bloom
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Ah I didn't realize the drunk poet itself is a reference too.

placid thorn
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daring wolf
knotty bloom
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Mimi-san!

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dafuq

knotty bloom
lucid joltBOT
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iron wasp
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I love how you add a little theme song with every poem! It really adds to the essence—makes the poem have a bit more spice. Not only that, but the usage of spoilers. I thought they were there for trigger warning reasons—but I now realize you intentionally added them there to add suspense! That's very, very creative.. I had never seen any other poet also use discord's features to their advantage. Your creativity goes far and beyond, perfect! (Pun intended) heartpotat

Now onto the poem itself.. The way you address such dark topics is just both admiring and GUT-WRENCHING. soluscry You tell such a tragic story in such a poetic way.

My favorite stanza from this one would probably:
A god to all, I was from birth my dear...
But to you of all,
A Drunken Poet.

I think, from my interpretation, from birth you were a 'god' in the sense you were respected, beloved and admired. But it is only to that person that you show your other version: The drunken poet.

The title adds a bit of intrigue aswell, a drunken and a delusional poet? Delusional because they still wish for their 'lullaby' to come back?

placid thorn
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iron wasp
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@sturdy crater

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@fiery elm A review please good sir?

sturdy crater
# placid thorn Theme song:

hey man.. too good of a poem.. 9/10. BTW where do u find the themes.. wud u mind droping references for em

placid thorn
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sturdy crater
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i mean the theme song

sturdy crater
placid thorn
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My spotify playlist

sturdy crater
placid thorn
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Song's name: Los Que Siento

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by cuco

sturdy crater
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thank u

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would like more o' these

placid thorn
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sturdy crater
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mind reading mine

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i dont do much

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but yeah

placid thorn
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link?

sturdy crater
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i have this

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i do have a theme song

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but too long

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so yea

placid thorn
sturdy crater
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There are no rules that it needs to be short or long enough to satisfy.

placid thorn
magic lichenBOT
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@knotty bloom

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@coarse heart

sturdy solar
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What does it mean?

placid thorn
# magic lichen

"My jokes are much worse." is what I would tell @solemn olive only if she was here.

solemn olive
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*leaves

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*ignores

solemn olive
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*already left

placid thorn
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*ignores

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@sturdy solar Where the hell are you

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*Waiting for his spokes-person to arrive.

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@ionic vault How did your internship go? BTW get the goods quick.

sturdy solar
placid thorn
solemn olive
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*ignores

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Bruh my internet went out

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dafuq happened

sturdy solar
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So many mentioned msgs

placid thorn
sturdy solar
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What you talking about ummm

sturdy solar
placid thorn
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*let's you sit in the front seat as the driver drives us to the meeting place. @sturdy solar

solemn olive
placid thorn
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Get the tea sis

sturdy solar
sturdy solar
solemn olive
placid thorn
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You are promoted my spokes-person.

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Congratulations.

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*Cheers

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*Sips tea

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*gets high

sturdy solar
sturdy crater
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We need @ionic vault
To save us from @placid thorn

He's missing you Ak
He's high on your dhaniya tea

sturdy solar
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All day he has been like this

placid thorn
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*wuraets da gwereatest masturpiece evor.

placid thorn
solemn olive
sturdy crater
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sturdy solar
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placid thorn
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depresasion

sturdy crater
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Backlogs be calling you brother
Pay heed to them

placid thorn
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depprresion

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derresion

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depirse nsf

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depresseoni

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Big sad

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I have Big sad.

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First try.

sturdy solar
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Really?

placid thorn
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Don't mention her.

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I'm serious.

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Do.

sturdy crater
placid thorn
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Not.

placid thorn
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*sips tea again

sturdy crater
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I take my words back

sturdy crater
placid thorn
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I gtg

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*ignores

sturdy crater
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Bye everybody

placid thorn
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@sturdy solar dahell are you

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Cmere

sturdy solar
placid thorn
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*throws you in the car

sturdy solar
placid thorn
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Driver let's go to the playground

sturdy crater
placid thorn
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*ties you on a ferris wheel

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*waits and sips tea

sturdy solar
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Sir lets be respectful

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I wont crash the car nor I'll try to kill you

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I expect the same

placid thorn
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*I'm already dead my spokes-person

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I'm already dead.

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*sips the Hennessey

sturdy solar
placid thorn
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Alcohol brand

sturdy solar
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*gets off the car

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I hate alcohol

placid thorn
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Driver: Should I fetch her sir!?
Me: Let her go.

sturdy solar
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Pleasure working with you but I'll send the resign letter soon

placid thorn
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Drive to the nearest playground driver.

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Driver: We're here sir.

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Me: Take your kids on a vacation. *throws money at him

sturdy solar
lucid joltBOT
placid thorn
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Drive: But sir- I don't have any kids

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Me: Then take your neighbour's kids.

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Driver: It was my pleasure sir, to be walking with the greatest.

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*climbs on the ferris wheel

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What a world

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Too blant to deserve me.

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*Jumps

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*Dies

sturdy solar
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*claps.
What an acting!

placid thorn
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*ignores

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*leaves

sturdy solar
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Have a good day!

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Oh sorry good night💫

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@delicate ginkgo

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yea

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Now read this and gimme a rating (I'm definitely not high)

delicate ginkgo
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after 2am

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with a back flip

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gotta live up to my name yk

delicate ginkgo
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......

placid thorn
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You don't even need to read this

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just gimme a rating on intuition

delicate ginkgo
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8

placid thorn
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(I have no idea what I'm saying)

placid thorn
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Now off you go.

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But.

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Remember.

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Don't.

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Tell

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Anyone.

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and I mean anyone.

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about what happened here.

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You may leave now @delicate ginkgo (says in the sweetest voice ever)

delicate ginkgo
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...

serene marlin
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this is definitely your best work so far

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It's still more prose than poetry, which is fine, I just think that you can add a lot more meaning by playing with line breaks. I will say I like the way you used spoilers here, and in your future works I will wait to reveal them till I get to that point in the poem. That was creative, good work. I really like the reference to Shah Jahan. I can tell you're getting more confident in your writing style. I still think it's a little too literal. Honestly that's just a preference of mine, though. It's much harder for me to feel emotion if I'm told to feel a certain emotion, rather than if it's described viscerally to me.

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I do actually think you should have written a real sonnet though. Either that or change the word to song or smthn

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Someone earlier in the thread mentioned that it sounds like musical writing; I agree with them, kinda

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It's written more like a play imo than a poem

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which, again, is fine

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Keep improving, I can see the progress!

placid thorn
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@solemn olive Man I wish keed was here to see this.

daring wolf
solemn olive
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@solemn olive Man I wish keed was concerned about my sleep.

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Would've been fun

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and sad

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and emotional

sturdy crater
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Hey.

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i liked how you hid the words, it felt like there was heavy emphasis on those specific lines. really nice!

placid thorn
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solemn olive
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placid thorn
sturdy crater
rustic token
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Ping the poem I can't find it 🤡

placid thorn
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rustic token
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Found it nvm

rustic token
sturdy crater
placid thorn
placid thorn
sturdy crater
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Yeah, seems like your rizz is poetry

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Wanna check out my work?

placid thorn
lucid joltBOT
sturdy crater
rustic token
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Ooh! Amazing poem. Filled with sadness again man. this poem is so... Painful to read. I have nothing to say, this is just too great! Good job man

placid thorn
mild star
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wow this was really amazing ! great job writing this poem ! very complex too, 9.5/10 for me

placid thorn
placid thorn
agile flare
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but who hurt u bro

placid thorn
agile flare
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ok i need to lock in 💀

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this is motivating i'll write good poems too thanks 😭 @placid thorn

placid thorn
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Off you go sis

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make me proud.

agile flare
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yess lets go

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(and bring Kurkure for the party )

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(ofc)

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oh wait ive got an indian ish poem too

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lemme post

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kk

placid thorn
civic shuttle
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YES

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bro

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I gasped

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This is a beautiful poem

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and the lore and sheer effort put into it

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I love it

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you have done an amazing job

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keep going 💙

placid thorn
normal pewter
placid thorn
normal pewter
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For it enrages me

placid thorn
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My madame spoils me

normal pewter
placid thorn
normal pewter
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Which part is true?

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*sighs

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*leaves

normal pewter
sturdy crater
loud kernel
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I would know so as I happen to be an old rival of his.

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Now we're just two brothas who share the same field.

sturdy crater
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rivals to brotherhood

loud kernel
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Mhm

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Rivals to Enemies to Brotherhood.

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I would bring it back up, but I don't want to open up wounds.

sturdy crater
loud kernel
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We dissed each other back and forth.

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It was a rioting three days.

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We had so much dirt kicked up.

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The only reason we stopped was because we just admired our works too much.

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It just wasn't right to slander someone you admire.

sturdy crater
dusty quiver
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I loved this poem, it is the raw emotion of yearning the loss of a loved one and wanting revenge to those who made her give up on life. 😭

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swift ruin
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Dang this is old

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solar knot
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This poem hits close to home for me. Its portrayal of grief, longing, and the struggle to make sense of tragedy reflects my own journey through loss. Your descent into madness and desire for revenge resonate with the complex emotions I've felt in similar situations. It's a stark reminder of the intense pain and confusion that can accompany profound loss. I love it!

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