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that seems sensible

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i could replace "difficult" with "arduous" cause this word really fits the context

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btw repetition of "children's"

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i surfed through the sample and the general ideas were the same

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@proper sapphire

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i guess youre not joking

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did you ever doubt me

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biggest challenge is actually being able to write like that in a real test, without being able to look up anything, in just 40 (or less) minutes

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but for practice, this is great already

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this topic is stupid, everything seems vague but is still acceptable

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and biology quick fact shits

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it is understandable that this takes time and some effort to study their "common sense"

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@twilit beacon wheres ur comparison of a library gone

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I deleted the msg

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That parapgraph had some mistakes, but i haved fixed them

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# crude orbit <@1358670074768261180> wheres ur comparison of a library gone

The layouts illustrate how a bookstore has changed over the past twenty five years.

Overall, seating and refreshments have been introduced to the bookstore, along with the relocation of different genres.

The bookstore in 2000 served only the purpose of introducing books. The entrance was to the left of the store, with a service desk located in the lower left corner, while the non-fiction area was in the lower right corner. Different book genres were featured in the center of the store, divided into two sections: one right in front of the service desk, showcasing travel and new books, and the other opposite to the non-fiction shelf, including three shelves for hobbies, cookery, and art. In addition, a long shelf, which was placed against the upper and half way the right walls, was dedicated to fiction books.

Additional facilities have been added to the bookstore in the present. Art and cookery materials have been moved to the upper shelf to be presented along with fiction, creating space for a new table and chairs. Another notable change has been the opening of a new cafe where the non-fiction books used to be located, which has been moved to the shelf on the right wall, replacing fiction. Other than those changes, the rest of the facilities have remained intact.

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thats the sample essay

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the questions were choosing main features to report and make comparisons where relevant

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Its an ielts machine

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I found a few errors, mostly wording related. I'm going to list and explain everything I can.
In the second sentence of the second paragraph, you talk about "why" it can be disadvantageous for children to own a pet, but you don't use "because" at all. The structure is flawless as it is, but the absence of because after "Most likely" ruins the flow a little. "behaviours, such as" the correct word choice would have been activities, as you exhibit a behaviour not "perform" it.
Alternatively, you could have said "natural needs".

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Beautifully written though.

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My topic sentence is an introduction to a bunch of reasons that make owning a pet bad

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The word "behavior" is not correct yeah cause i picked it up from other essays

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In that essay behaviors are exemplified with barking and meowing

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Pooping is an activity yes

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My teacher prefered the latter but the bot said its informal

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I'd choose the latter for normal conversations.

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I've heard people say the latter way more tbh.

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I need you to help me with this essay

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Parents are putting a lot of pressure on their children to succeed.
What are the reasons for this?
Is it a positive or negative development?

In today’s world, it is common for parents to pressure their offspring to succeed. This situation can stem from various reasons, particularly social pressure. Although this strategy potentially induces conflicts between family members, I concede that it is beneficial for children's future careers.

There are two primary reasons for this phenomenon. Firstly, community pressure plays a significant role. This is because some parents adopt a competitive mindset and fear being left behind by their successful neighbors or colleagues, prompting them to push their children for greater achievements. Another driver for this trend is that many families desire stability for their children in the future. To achieve success, individuals must acquire specific skills, whereas pressuring children to study can significantly enhance their preparedness for future careers, potentially contributing to a more secure and successful future. For instance, Magnus Carlsen began playing chess at a very young age, which contributed to him becoming the youngest world champion.

I believe this trend brings an overall positive effect. On the one hand, this trend may have detrimental effects on children. Pressuring them may undermine family bonds, as not every child shares the same ambitions as adults, who often worry about their fame or career prospects. As a result, forcing young children to rush toward success may create tension within families and strain relationships.
On the other hand, this pressure can offer various significant benefits. One of the advantages is that children can live a more worthy life. Those who work hard from a young age can achieve their goals more quickly, allowing them to allocate time for other important objectives, such as financial independence. (Msg limit)

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Additionally, parental pressure can motivate children to develop personally. Meeting high expectations encourages them to manage their time effectively and cultivate discipline, which can serve them well in adulthood as they may face demanding work schedules.

In conclusion, the pressure parents place on their children to succeed is driven by community expectations and a desire for their children to achieve success. While this pressure can harm family relationships, I believe it ultimately fosters children’s future potential and personal growth.

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Anybody willing to review my AP Lange rhetorical analysis essay? Struggling with analysis and link to society

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Bro reads. Nice text

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Can someone proofread my essay to end the semester off for about 5 precent of my grade (simple essay)

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semantics?

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these are some shitty definitions lol

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Hey! I made a Macbeth revision guide because I kept forgetting quotes 😭
It covers key quotes, themes, and exam tips.

If anyone finds it useful, here’s the link:
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hello! anyone interested to proofread a project? just hit me up.

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Easy peasy

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But ask me if you want to torture and help me improve my text evaluation skills

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Unfortunate indeed. I hope you're managing well, though.

I'm doing alright

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What is the content of this group?

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How’s this? I’m doing this as a hobby, complement to reading

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@pseudo stag Is this what you meant?

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anyone who wants help with pronunciation can dm me 🦕 (rawwwwwr)

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But yeah might use it, i think pronounciation is what im best at teaching for now happy to correct anyone that wants

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I gave you the permissions

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Hello! I would like to ask some helps abt writing task 2 on introduction point?

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Type discussion both view and give your opinion

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While generating employment in sectors such as BPO and OFWs and expanding market access, it also challenges local industries, agriculture, and contributes to income inequality

This study aims to examine the effects of globalization on the Philippine economy. Specifically, it seeks to answer the following questions:

1. How does globalization influence employment opportunities and labor migration in the Philippines?

2. What is the impact of globalization on local industries and small businesses?

3. How does globalization affect income distribution and economic inequality in the country?


The study investigates whether globalization creates economic growth and BPO employment and international market access or whether it increases income inequality and job losses and economic difficulties for Filipino farmers and local businesses. 
The study investigates four key questions which explore the relationship between globalization and economic development and employment levels and international trade capabilities of the Philippines.```
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anyone plss this is ai so i want you to correct my structure and sentence with statement of the problem

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Thank you ma’am bleep and students! It really is an amazing opportunity for me to be a part for this event and to see everyone participating, especially the ones who took part of dressing up into their favorite book character! bleep still love your costume by the way, of course mine is number one. Anyways a final congratulations on my behalf and to everyone's behalf for all the people who made this event possible! Don’t forget! Thank you for the authors who have written for the world, without them this event wouldn't even happen in the first place! Nah I’m kidding. Today’s English month event reflects how authors, writers have shown us the freedom of expression! Margaret Atwood once said "A word after a word after a word is power." like my speech! Talking and talking yet in these talking holds words that convey deep feelings and my gratitude that I want to express to you all! Once again thank you teachers, especially our amazing, literate and youthful English teacher ma’am bleep Let’s not forget the staff and the student council for being able to make "just a plan" come to life! Thank you and Godbless! Stay active! Stay literate!

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Hello! is this good enough for a 200 word closing speech? context is, this is for the english month event

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Research Objectives
To identify the extent of students’ social media use
To assess the level of students’ time management skills
To describe the levels of students’ time management skills
To determine the relationship between the extent of social media use and students’ time management

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It’s bad? 💔

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Who—

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That guy is dead? 😭

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It’s just normal research, we’re going to write it until chapter 3 not 5

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Exactly?

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@junior cradle we can be friends if you want for your English practice ig

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Im trying to write a book

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but i need someone to say me if my text looks natural

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What's the proofreading?

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I am preparing for the ielts examination and finding difficulties in writing

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How can upload my handwritten essay

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Could someone please help me with the following:

Directions: Identify the noun clause. Identify what it is modifying. Then determine how it is used in each of the sentences (Subject, Indirect Object, Direct Object, Predicate Nominative, Appositive, Object of a Preposition, DO of a Gerund, DO of an Infinitive)

sentence:
According to Sulloway, whoever is born first into a family identifies strongly with established authority, while later-born children are family underdogs who tend to question authority.

here's what I'm thinking:
noun clause: "whoever is born first into a family"
modifies: N/A
type: subject noun clause
noun clause (again?): "who tend to question authority"
modifies: family underdogs
type: not sure
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Dear Mr. Geissel

Thank you for your application I was happy to tell you I read your resume and would like to have an interview with you

Which day is best for you

Monday 5 April 14:00
Monday 5 April 16:00
Tuesday 6 April 14:00

When you chose a day I will send you a zoom link please go to the zoom meeting at the time and do not come early

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Because of your Japanese level we want to make some of the interview in Japanese

If you have questions please ask

We look forward to meeting you

Hisa -------

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Could someone please proofread the message above? Thanks

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# light flax Dear Mr. Geissel Thank you for your application I was happy to tell you I read...

Your main issue is punctuation. Here is a very minimally modified version, with punctuation (amongst other things) corrected:

Thank you for your application. I am happy to tell you that I read your resume and would like to have an interview with you.

Which time of the below is best for you?

Monday 5 April 14:00
Monday 5 April 16:00
Tuesday 6 April 14:00

When you inform me of the best time, I will send you a Zoom link. Please join the Zoom meeting at that time and do not come early.

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Because of your Japanese level, we want to make some of the interview in Japanese.

If you have questions, please ask.

We look forward to meeting you.

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If you'd like to make it more formal, I can modify it to be so

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# light flax Yes please I am making interview for a foreign worker

Here you go. I've left a few things between square brackets that you should fill in before sending the e-mail.

Dear [Enter Interviewee's Name],

Thank you for your interest in [company name]. We have reviewed your rĂŠsumĂŠ and would like to conduct an interview to further discuss your application for the position of [Enter the Position's Name] at our company.

The interview will last [Enter Length of Time] and will be conducted via Zoom. Kindly inform us of your availability at the following times:

  • Monday, 5 April, 14:00
  • Monday, 5 April, 16:00
  • Tuesday, 6 April, 14:00

As you have an [Enter the Interviewee's Fluency Level] grasp of the Japanese language, the interview will be partially conducted in Japanese. [Enter Any Other Details about the Interview if Needed].

If none of these times suits your schedule, please reply to this e-mail with when you will be available. If you have questions regarding the interview, please feel free to ask.

We look forward to meeting you.

Kind regards,
[Enter Your Name]

It's probably best to have this part in your response to the applicant's response:

When you inform us of the best time, I will send you a Zoom link. Please join the Zoom meeting at that time and do not come early.

Here is my rewriting of it (follow-up e-mail after they respond):

Dear [Interviewee's Name],

Thank you for confirming your availability.

Below is the Zoom link for your interview:
[Enter Link]

We kindly ask that you only join the meeting at the scheduled time.

We look forward to speaking with you.

Kind regards,
[Enter Your Name]

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Thanks very much it's so good

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Hi Guys, I have tried writing a short piece on the topic "SHOULD JUSTICE PRIORITIZE FAIRNESS OR EFFICIENCY" . It would be really helpful if you take a minute and read it. U can share ur feedback too.

"As human beings, we want fairness as well as efficiency. But we weigh Fairness over efficiency, as we would want the right person to get the punishment and not someone who's been used as a cover up or a innocent man who is trapped falsely. But here's the downside, if the criminal has power and has contacts with people at higher position of society, they can delay the judgement and the criminal can live a happy life. I would say Fairness above all yet. Efficiency can be improved, including Fairness as it is a advancing tech edge, we can use AI judge, AI proof detection softwares. Can AI judge hallucinate? Yes, but comeon, AI in the future in 20 years will be much more improved and versatile. Like we ve seen how much it has improved over the last 20 years. the justice system can assign petty matters to AI and focus on hard cases. Inspite of all that, with a sad remark I have to end. Its difficult to get fair jusgdement. We have plenty of cases where the innocent is falsely accused and their life is wasted in prison, and the system didn't couldn't give that person back what he lost. people with strong influence can buy off punishment like its a piece of cake for them. So its a unfair world and I cant pretend everything is fair, when it isn't."

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Hello guys I just made this essay can anybody criticize and help me improve this essay that I made

Good evening everyone, today im going to discuss an important topic which is "the impact of technology on students daily lives. Before we start to talk about what the impact of technology on students lives, it's best that we talk about what "technology means" in my opinion technology is an application of knowledge, skills, and processes being simplified for human beings. So technology is basically something to ease our daily lives, for students technology could be really helpful for their daily lives because they have tons of homework and other tasks that is related to school and their daily lives. For example they can use the technology to ease off their homework and help out their school work and make a to do list or reminder so they don't forget about their homework however if this technology is I'll used for excessive entertainment and procrastinating therefore as a result of their procrastination they lose their focus and concentration on what they're doing.

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This does seem like it doesn't have a good structure

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# heavy blaze Hello guys I just made this essay can anybody criticize and help me improve this...

You have a clear topic and a good central idea..its a good topic for a speech.
For a formal speech you need to break it into clearer sections ; include an opening, a benefits part, a drawbacks part and the closing. Everything is clumped together.
Check on sentence structure . In speeches , short sentences are preferred to maintain the audience's attention.Long sentences loose people quickly.
Your description for technology is good but try stronger definitions that have less words.

Another thing is that you need more depth , try giving more examples and better definitons to your points.
Try fixing the flow ,be more direct and avoid repetition.
e.g Instead of saying ''procastinating therefore as a result '' you can pause after procastination and start a new sentence . ''procastinating. As a result....' that flows much better or ''procastinating.Therefore ....... pick one between therefore and as a result of since using them together is repetitive
Improve punctuation - dont forget capitalisations especially at the begin of sentences and for the word ''I'' and dont forget to close your quotation marks.

One more thing about the structure is dont hop to the next section quickly.Your transition from benefis to drawbacks is too abrupt , try to signal the shift clearly
You could have said something like ''However,technology also has its downsides....... ''
Include an ending ..a closing statement that summarises everything and leaves the audience with some kind of thought to go home with.
Its a good speech and just needs a bit of organising

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Hi guys, could anyone check this FCE cambridge essay?
TASK:
"In your English class you have been talking about education. Now, your English teacher has asked you to write an essay for homework.
Write an essay using all the notes and giving reasons for your point of view.
Some parents teach their children at home rather than sending them to school.
Is this a good or a bad thing for the children?
Notes
Write about:

  1. having a parent as a teacher
  2. making friends
  3. ....................... (your own idea)"
    MY ESSAY:
    "Nowadays, there are many pupils which are taught at home by their parents. However, as a teenager who goes to school, I don't agree with them, and, according to this, if I were father I wouldn't opt for this kind of teaching.
    First of all, it may be thought that having a parent as a teacher is a wonderful thing, because you study at home and you don't have homework. Nevertheless, it could be embarrassing to be taught by your parents, and, above all, it is difficult for them to give you a honest mark.
    Moreover, not going to school rules out the possibility for a child to make new friends. In fact, according to the statistics, 80% of relationships between teenagers are fostered at school.
    Besides this, home-schooling is said to blur the lines between school and home. As a result, if you had your parents as teacher, they would remind you to study in every moment of your life, making you go in burnout.
    To sum up, I think that it is better for a child to go to school. Not only does the school provide you a lot of knowledge, but it also allows you to socialize."
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# slim frost thanks!

No problem at all however I did notice a few more things that could make your essay sound more natural, especially with the phrasing and sentence flow

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# cosmic oar Could someone please help me with the following: **Directions:** Identify the *...

Hey! You’re on the right track! 👍

  • “whoever is born first into a family” → correct, that’s a subject noun clause

  • “who tend to question authority” → modifies “family underdogs,” also a subject clause in a relative sense

There’s a simple trick I use to spot these clauses instantly in any sentence — it really changes how you approach homework like this.

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"no needed to be sorry"
Is the grammar correct in this sentence even in slang?
Does any slang or anyone say this sentence like that

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i think it depends on context

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not really slang per say

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Need some proofreading or changes, for C1 CAE exam,

An autobiographical essay: Birthdays
How do you feel about birthdays? Do you think they are important? How would you choose to celebrate your birthday if you could do anything you wanted?

Write your autobiographical essay.

Birthday: a special day people celebrate to mark the completion of another year of life.
But what is actually special about this day? Many hold it dear as their most joyful day of the year, whilst for others it is not.
For me? It used to be. It was once a magical time in my life, but over time my birthdays lost their shine, each passing one feeling less special than the last. It’s a mixed bag of feelings, almost like a love-hate relationship. Nowadays I find my birthday inconsequential; I used to invite friends I considered close, but in the end only a handful would show up.
On the other hand, I deeply treasure other people’s birthdays, always trying to make the most of them and turn each one into an indelible experience.
What I dream of is a simple birthday: celebrating with my closest friends and a big cake, wearing light clothes under a lush tree in the park, the sun shining in the sky, a gentle breeze in the air—a simple yet unlikely desire, as my birthday falls in February.
Maybe one day I will get to enjoy such a day. A fleeting wish perhaps—but one worth holding on to. In the meantime, I will continue making other people’s birthdays as memorable as possible.

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# cloud patio Need some proofreading or changes, for C1 CAE exam, An autobiographical essay: ...

Nowadays I find my birthday inconsequential***.*** I used to invite friends I considered close, but in the end only a handful would show up.

There isn't a strong enough connexion between those clauses to justify a semicolon. I'd recommend transitioning from the first point by presenting the fact that you don't invite friends anymore as an indication of how you've come to view birthdays as inconsequential.

The mention of some of them not showing up felt unnecessary. It ties to nothing in the text and supports nothing. It's just there

Overall, I'd try to tie ideas together a little more.

Reworked a fair bit, but you can take inspiration from (or copy) this:

Nowadays, I find my birthdays inconsequential. Although I once would invite friends whom I considered close to my birthdays, I have ceased to do so, an attitude largely due to my new-found indifference to the occasion.

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But what is actually special about this day? Many hold it dear as their most joyful day of the year, whilst for others***,*** it is not.

Add a comma there.

Note: this transition seems to indicate that you're going to discuss what makes birthdays special; however, you simply state that for some they are special and for others they are not, without breaking the expectation set-up by the question

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Also, your tone is rather informal. Your rhetorical questions are too frequent

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It's almost like you're giving a speech or monologuing with some degree of emotionality, rather than writing an essay

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Whilst some intimacy of language is inherent to autobiography, I believe yours is far too informal

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This sentence starts nicely, save for a missing comma, but then you throw in 'mixed bag of feelings' and 'almost like a love-hate relationship'. You should phrase that more elegantly

It used to be. It was once a magical time in my life, but over time***,*** my birthdays lost their shine, each passing one feeling less special than the last. It’s a mixed bag of feelings, almost like a love-hate relationship

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However, again, even your transition into that sentence is too casual: 'For me? It used to be.'

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This feels less like an essay and more like a blog post you might find on a Japanese site

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Your initial definition is 1. too biased in language (definitions ought to be as neutral as possible) and 2. inaccurate

Birthday: a special day people celebrate to mark the completion of another year of life.

I'd also expect teh definition to be incorporated into the prose in an essay, instead of having its own line at the start like that

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You could reference a dictionary for a definition, or make your own, but try to look at how dictionaries define it

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Here is a proposal:

A birthday is the anniversary of the day of one's birth, conventionally treated as a cause for celebration. Said festivity might take on the form of a large gathering or a smaller outing with close friends or family and is regarded as a special occasion by a great many.

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You might take inspiration from (or copy) it

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Your definition of 'birthday' was biased and did not refer to the idea that it's on the day of birth specifically

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Incorporating the definition into the prose as above can help to smooth the transition between the idea that it's a celebratory event and that you don't regard it as such, since the transition can be built into the sentence

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On the other hand, I deeply treasure other people’s birthdays, always trying to make the most of them and turn each one into an indelible experience.

This is your best sentence so far. The transition works well, contrasting with your earlier statement of how you have grown jaded vis-a-vis your own birthday. 'On the other hand' is a bit informal, but not outlandishly so

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The next section is much more disparate. It's not at all immediately apparent what your ultimate goal is or how the sentence after the one above relates to the same. You also don't expand at all the idea of preferring the birthdays of others to your own. You leave the reasons for the decrease in your liking of your own birthdays unspoken. You claim to wish for a simple birthday without diving into what makes birthdays complicated for you.

All these loose threads will leave your reader uncertain if they've read anything of import. It's as though you gave no thought to the points you'd like to make to convey your experiences with birthdays to the reader, and simply tried to use your emotions as your only tool regarding what ought to go into in this 'essay'. You make reference to each of the questions asked in the prompt but do not link the answers together fluidly

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I'd recommend a rewrite.

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I’ll send everything you said to my friend , she’s the one taking the exam, i havent been learning english at all in the past year so i was sure i couldnt help her much so i asked here rather than give bad adviceblossom

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How have you been?

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one small thing though, some sentences feel a bit too long so breaking them could improve clarity

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# glad charm I'd recommend a rewrite.

She sent me this, took her quite a while of revision with a bit of my helpSadHamster

A birthday is the anniversary of one’s birth, traditionally marked with a celebration; yet the significance one attaches to it differs considerably from person to person. For some, it represents the highlight of the year; for others, it passes with little ceremony.
My own relationship with birthdays has grown complicated over time. There was a period in which I looked forward to them with genuine anticipation, but that enthusiasm has since faded — each passing one feeling less significant than the last, until the occasion itself became something I approached with indifference rather than excitement. That nonchalance was not arbitrary; it grew from the repeated experience of organising celebrations for people I considered close, only for the occasion to go largely unattended. In time, I stopped extending the invitation altogether.
And yet, this disillusionment never carried over to other people’s birthdays. If anything, I deeply treasure other people’s birthdays, always trying to make the most of them and turn each one into an indelible experience.
What I would want for myself is modest: close friends, a good cake, an afternoon outdoors — light clothes, warm sun, under a lush tree, a gentle breeze in the air. Regrettably, this is something February seldom allows.
Perhaps one day the circumstances will align. Until then, I find quiet satisfaction in giving others what I have rarely had the occasion to receive myself — a birthday that feels, without question, worth celebrating

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# cloud patio Need some proofreading or changes, for C1 CAE exam, An autobiographical essay: ...

out of curiocity I put this paragraph in rewriteit.net and it returns this, I kinda like this version

Birthdays mark the end of another year alive, a day people celebrate.
But what truly makes this day special? For many, it's the happiest day of the year, though not for everyone.
For me, it used to be. My birthdays once felt magical, but over time, they lost their sparkle, each one feeling less significant than the one before. It's a complicated feeling, sort of a love-hate thing. Now, my own birthday doesn't mean much to me. I used to invite close friends, but only a few ever came.
Yet, I really value other people's birthdays, always trying to make them unforgettable occasions.
What I'd love is a simple birthday: celebrating with my best friends and a large cake, dressed lightly under a leafy park tree, with the sun out and a soft breeze—a simple dream, but one that's unlikely since my birthday is in February.
Perhaps someday I'll have a day like that. It's a faint hope, maybe, but one worth keeping. Until then, I'll keep making other people's birthdays as memorable as I can.

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In the memoir Shooting an Elephant written by George Orwell, he illustrates that colonized nations are destined to fail. He portrays this by contrasting the nature of powers of both the colonized and colonizers. Initially, Orwell's experience working as a police officer conveys that in regular actions, the colonized possess tangible power. Such is shown when he says, "I often wondered whether any others grasped that I had done it solely to avoid looking a fool." He had solely killed the elephant to avoid looking "a fool" to the natives, notwithstanding his moral objections. The colonized voiced their desire for him to kill the elephant, and Orwell ultimately did. In regards to palpable actions, otherwise known as tangible power, the colonized people still had power as they were the majority. Thus, the colonized's power over the state comes not only from the fact that they perform the predominant quantity of operations within the state, thus giving them tangible power, but also comes in the form of influence over the colonizers, known as abstract power. On the other hand, the colonizer's power comes exclusively in an abstract form. The colonizer's power is evident when Orwell says, "I sent an orderly to... borrow an elephant rifle". Orwell, the colonizer, had the power to instruct others, a form of influence, to let him "borrow an elephant rifle". Such conveys the abstract power the colonizers possessed. They had authority over others, the ability to influence them. However, to have authority over a group of people, one must have agency over that group of people. Abstract power derives from having tangible power, and in the case of the colonizers, the abstract power was derived from when the state was colonized, they had more tangible power than the native inhabitants. Thus, when the colonized invaded they established a certain magnitude of abstract power over the colonized, however as the majority of colonizers left the state the tangible power left with them. Thus the abstract power the officers representing the colonizers have, does not have a basis, and thus deteriorates over time. Therefore, as the abstract power keeping the colonized state under the colonizer's control slowly diminishes, for the authority the colonizers have, merely becomes a construct of a system they instilled, and can no longer enforce. Consequently, the people of the aforementioned state are able to reclaim the state; ultimately, Orwell illustrates that any colonized state that is not actively inhabited, thus keeping the colonizers tangible power, is destined to fail for the abstract power any state establishes fades without the tangible power to uphold it.

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i think you should avoid repetition of some phrasing, i think you repeated 'tangible power' and also 'abstact powe'r quite often. try varying the phrases to sound more sophisticated

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i also think each paragraph should begin witha strong arguable claim, not just a description

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you could also refine your introduction and conclusion...something like " In the memoir shooting an elephant, George Orwell illustrates the inherent instability of colonial rule, suggesting that colonized states are ultimately destined to collapse"

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lastly, some sentences are a bit long, which can make what you're trying to put across abit confusing

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Can someone help suggest how to make this better? It's what I want to put in my yearbook description but I think it might need some tweaking. Any feedback?:

I want to be an author, but I don't want to be just any author. I want my books to be like dandelions, words spreading like the pappus when someone makes a wish. And then, I want my words to finally land on another persons heart and bloom like a dandelion in early spring.

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Could you guys tell me if there's something unnatural in the sentences that is under this text ? so I'm able to figure out how to make it sound better...

I finally wrapped my head around the case and why they had specifically considered him the primary suspect, and it vindicated him by proving he was innocent, although he had done nothing wrong. They had found him guilty at the time based on no specific evidence, only trivial assumptions.

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You basically said he was innocent twice with saying he was innocent then did nothing wrong

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They had found him guilty sounds like the court found him guilty

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If not it should say they treated him as guilty

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Without any specific evidence is smoother sounding than based on no specific evidence

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Welcome, members!thusky This channel is meant for sharing your essays, texts, articles or anything related to English that you wish to have reviewed or corrected by other members regarding its structure or grammar. 📝

⚠️Please note that we won't give answers to homework or complete any assignments for you, this is purely intended to correct your submissions.

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Can ya pls improvise it

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Can u pls improvise everything and give me more ideas
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Just evaluate it and gib me nice ideas

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It's about what an astronomer would do in his childhood

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That I wrote today

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It was a summer night with no clouds in the sky. I was a 12-year-old kid at my grandmother's house for summer vacation. We had our dinner and headed to the rooftop to sleep. It was so calm that we can hear the sound of summer breeze. My eyes caught the magnificent picture of the clear black sky teeming with extremely bright stars. I lost my time processing the beauty of the nature.
As time passed, I had an epiphany that made me both exited and cold at the same time. It was about the loneliness of the earth in a vast universe. The thoughts of people who live on other planets brainstormed me. I wanted to know if there are people just like us who live on other planets exist. I wanted to know how they look, what they eat, what they wear and what they do to live. I couldn’t sleep that night.
Next day, early in the morning, I took my grandfather to the neatest town’s library to find information on the extra-terrestrial people and found a bunch of books about aliens. I took them home but the wording in the books is too hard to read so my grandfather read me the summary. My enthusiasm had no bounds.
These unsolved questions got me attentive towards space related topics. I started watching sci-fi movies every weekend on my phone as they acted as catalyst for my passion towards space. I joined a group of millennials who plan to travel to dark-sky reserves once every month to gaze stars. Moreover, we planned to buy our own personal telescope by gathering funds but didn’t as we were alot short so we aborted it.

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I joined several seminars on celestial objects on internet to gain knowledge of the universe. I learnt astronomers and astrophysicists are working together with the help of space organisations to find our neighbours and decided to become one. I committed to become an astronomer and planned to pursue my college with Astronomy as major.
I would become a professional Astronomer and will chase the mystery of this universe. I know we are born too late to explore world and too early to explore space but just in time to get involved and pave the path to REACH the SPACE INHABITANTS.

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PLS EVALUATE AND IMPROVISE IT

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Aslo suggest me great introduction and conclusion pls

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# carmine briar It was a summer night with no clouds in the sky. I was a 12-year-old kid at my g...

These improvisations are just based on the extent of my current state of processing schtuff, so don't expect much.

It was a summer night with no clouds in the sky. I was a 12-year-old kid at in my grandmother's house for a summer vacation. We had our dinner and headed to the rooftop to sleep. We headed to the rooftop after we had our dinner to sleep.

It was so calm that we can could hear the sound of the summer breeze. My eyes caught the magnificent picture of the clear black sky teeming with extremely bright stars. I lost my time I didn't notice the passage of time as I was processing the beauty of nature.

As time passed the night went deeper, (you just said you didn't notice the time) I had an epiphany that made me both excited (retyped; you had a typo) and cold (wdym cold?) at the same time. It was about the loneliness of the earth in a vast universe. The thoughts of other people who live living on other planets brainstormed baffled (perhaps?) me. I wanted to know if they there are people just like us who live on other planets exist. I wanted to know how they look~~,~~ and what they eat, what they wear**,** and what they do to live. I couldn’t sleep that night wondering.

The next day, early in the morning, I took my grandfather to the neatest nearest town~~’s~~ (possessive not that necessary) library to find information on the extra-terrestrial people and . I found a bunch of books about aliens~~.~~ and I took them home**.** However, but the wordings in the books is were too hard to read**,** so my grandfather decided to just read the summary to me. My enthusiasm had no bounds.

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These unsolved questions got me attentive towards space**-**related topics. I started watching sci-fi movies every weekend on my phone as they acted as a catalyst for my passion towards (incorrect prep.) for space. I joined a group of millennials who are planning to travel to dark-sky reserves once every month to gaze at stars. Moreover, we had planned to buy our own personal (redundant) telescope by gathering funds, but we didn't collect much so we just put that to an end.

I joined several seminars on celestial objects on the internet to gain knowledge of the universe. I learnt found out (better wording) that astronomers and astrophysicists are working together work together with the help of space organisations to find our neighbours // and decided to become one. (I don't get this part, become one what?)

I committed to become becoming an astronomer and planned to pursue my college with Astronomy as a major.
I would will (claim it lez goo) become a professional Astronomer and will chase the mystery of this universe. I know we are born too late to explore the world and too early to explore space, but just in time to get involved and pave the path to REACH the SPACE INHABITANTS.

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Therefore, planned to pursue my education till graduation with astronomy as major

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Pls evaluate this sentence

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"Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat.Rather achievement can beall the more satisfying because of obstacles surmounted"
I need to write an essay on this topic in 300 words
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I don't know what this is saying

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That day was very foggy. The visibility was so low that most of the people struggled to see even their shoes. Mr. Ericsson just walked out from his house in London and got onto his car to go to the annual meeting of Woodwill bank.
When he arrived, he greeted with another bankers waiting in hallway and went with them to meeting room. After a while, the debate was in full swing. “We should change that,” said Mr. Roberts. Then suddenly the alarm started ringing. Someone breached into the vault! Fortunately, one police patrol was nearby so it arrived very quickly. Captain Greetings, accompanied by Mr. Ericsson secured the vault. And he found something very interesting!
Red scarf. “This scarf belongs to my secretary!” Shouted Mr. Ericsson. That was the end. Because the robber was quickly recognized, it wasn’t problem for police. Just half an hour later, the treacherous employee was arrested.

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Greeted other bankers

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Went to the meeting room with them

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It wasn't a problem for police

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Everything else is fine I think

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Ok thanks much

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Also I think it'll be got into the car

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ok thanks very much

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:))

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For da police

rugged prairie
# limpid shadow That day was very foggy. The visibility was so low that most of the people strug...

That day was very foggy. The visibility was so low that most of the people struggled to see even their shoes. Mr. Ericsson just walked out from of his house in London and got onto into his car to go to the annual meeting of Woodwill bank.
When he arrived, he greeted with another other bankers waiting in the hallway and went with them to the meeting room. After a while, the debate was in full swing. “We should change that,” said Mr. Roberts. Then suddenly__,__ the alarm started ringing. Someone breached into the vault! Fortunately, one police patrol was nearby so it help arrived very quickly. Captain Greetings, accompanied by Mr. Ericsson__,__ (appositive) secured the vault and . hefound something very interesting!
A red scarf. “This scarf belongs to my secretary!” Shouted Mr. Ericsson. That was the end. Because the robber was quickly recognized, it wasn’t a problem for the police. Just half an hour later, the treacherous employee was arrested.

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The spealling here is correct? "Difficulty need not foreshadow despair or defeat.Rather achievement can beall the more satisfying because of obstacles surmounted"

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despair or defeat? Is that correct

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Hi there guy's is here anyone who could read my text and maybe correct it of mistakes and maybe give me some tips on what to write more on it or maybe to write it in another way. Context: Me and my friend have to make a Project documentation about our Electric car and in the documentation we have a little English part where we have to present "Our Team" and describe the project briefly in english. We appreciate you're help and understanding. <3

2.1 Our Team
"Our team is made up of 2 people ________ and _______,
we are two school colleagues going in the same class but not only that, we are very good friend's too.
That's why when our teacher first told us that we will have to work on a group project we allready knew that
we will be a team."

2.2 Project

        "For our project we decided to construct and engineer a model car which is powerd by an electric motor and build 
     it afterwards by producing the needed part's, putting them together and installing the electric part's which make
     the car functional and complete."
rugged prairie
# viral sigil Hi there guy's is here anyone who could read my text and maybe correct it of mis...

Please take a look closely at the text as I changed multiple parts of it

2.1 Our Team
"Our team is made up of two people: Lorem and Ipsum.
We are two school colleagues going into the same class, but not only that, we are very good friends too.
That's why when our teacher first told us that we would have to work together on a group project, we already knew that
we would be a team."

2.2 Project

        "For our project, we decided to construct and engineer a model car that is powered by an electric motor. Then, we will build 
     it by acquiring the necessary parts for it. We will put them together and install the electric parts that make
     the car functional and complete."
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Pls evaluate the letter my councellor wrote for me!
I'll send u in a short time

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On one day, Jimmy and his best friend, David, both very passionate hikers, decided to try one of the most favourite tracks in the world – Pacific crest trail. They packed their gear and went for it!
First month they had no problems. The weather was quite stable, and they really enjoyed all the great views what being in mountains can provide. But one day, the weather prognosis wasn’t very good. “Will we risk it?” Asked David. “Yes, we are professionals!” Repeated Jimmy confidently. It wasn’t a good decision. Just two hours later the weather rapidly changed. It began to wind and snow heavily. “We need to get to the valley!’’ Jimmy was screaming.
As they came to the crossroad, they immediately turned left, instead of right, because the path sign was covered in snow. While they were walking past that path, suddenly it stopped snowing and the sky cleared. Twilight was beginning and they were in the middle of unknown...

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Can you guys please check it?

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hallow night
# limpid shadow <@!401342909288415233> what do you think about it?

On One day, Jimmy and his best friend, David, both very passionate hikers, decided to try one of their the most favourite tracks in the world – Pacific Crest Trail. They packed their gear and went for it!
The First month they had no problems. The weather was quite stable, and they really enjoyed all the great views what being in mountains can provide. But one day, the weather forecast prognosis wasn’t very good. “Will we risk it?” asked David. “Yes, we are professionals!” Repeated replied Jimmy confidently. It wasn’t a good decision. Just two hours later the weather rapidly changed. It began to ~~wind and ~~snow heavily, and the wind picked up speed. “We need to get to the valley!’’ Jimmy was screaming.
As they came to the crossroads, they immediately turned left, instead of right, because the path sign was covered in snow. While they were walking past that crossing the path, suddenly it stopped snowing, and the sky cleared. Twilight was beginning and they were in the middle of unknown...

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hallow night
# limpid shadow <@!401342909288415233> what do you think about it?

So a few things:
Pacific Crest Trail should be capitalized like that, because it's like the given name of something.
"Prognosis" sounds very weird when talking about the weather. It's best just to say forecast.
"Repeated" shouldn't be used for that one line of dialogue that Jimmy says, because he never said it before.
"It began to wind" isn't said, so I corrected it to "the wind picked up speed." There are other ways to say it though.
Crossroads almost always has an s at the end, even if it's a singular noun.
"Walking past that path" gives the impression that they're passing by it and not walking on the path.

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@limpid shadow if you have any questions, reach out, I hope that was helpful blobhalal

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ok thanks

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hello all!

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Would love to ask for your various feedback.

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It's supposed to be an essay for a scholarship.

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Any feedback helps.

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Please do not hesitate to ping me!

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I’ve been trying to regain control over my life again.

When the pandemic forced the schools to close, I’ve barely/just finished middle school. After the coup, My life was put into a disarray afterwards. That was ~the period~ when I discovered the very confusing world of preparing for international college.

As a 16-year-old teen, I am naturally (remove comma here) financially dependent on my parents. As I wish not to trouble them, I always have to come up with makeshift solutions to my educational journey. When I looked into what I could do at the moment, I was confronted with a situation where financial support was required. Currently, I do what I can with accessible resources. But without official textbooks, I find it very hard to manage and have had to put studying some subjects on hold. With the provided support from the scholarship, I will finally be able to buy the various textbooks and materials I need and continue/expedite my learning process.

I also love languages. I have learned English by myself since I was young. I am also interested in German, and I have gone as far as using my monthly allowance for SUM’s German class. Afterwards, I’ve been learning German by myself, but it has proven difficult. The financial support would allow me to attend German classes again and help me prepare to go to Germany for further education.

I would love to see myself attending university abroad in three years, and I’m doing what I can at the moment to realize it. However, to be realistic, at the moment I feel like I have no control of my future. and There’s only so much I could do with my circumstances. Therefore, your scholarship will greatly support my journey and accelerate my studying.

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@opaque horizon I'm no professional writer but I feel like this should be alright. If you wanna know why I made certain changes, feel free to ask!

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Alright!

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Thanks! @proper sapphire

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bababooey

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@heady nova here are u?

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and u @proper sapphire

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yes

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it's my text

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have i mistakes?

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can you copy the text into chat

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yes

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it'd be easier for us to make changes

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My name is dato, i am student at BTU,faculty of information technology and i am going to talk about how to write a good CV.
If you ever sent a CV and the company did not contact you, it may be because you had bad CV and not because you are not good for the position.
"Failure doesn't mean you are a failure it just means you haven't succeeded yet." —Robert H. Schuller
Someday everyone will need to create a CV, in order to please the employer, we must first have a well-compiled CV.
I want to start with what can not be written in CV. this is very important.
1 ) your date of birth or age
2) a funny or rude email address
3) work experience or interests that are not relevant to the job
On the next slides I will add more.
Firstly, CV must be in PDF format, it should be easy to read, the recruiter should take about 15 or 20 seconds to read.
It will be better if we use only black color and it will not be colored, because the recruiter has to read a lot of cv and not be tired.
If you want to beautify, you can use the appropriate icons.
Some people think that a cv should definitely have a photo of themselves, but this is not correct because the employer does not care about your photo and additionally fills in the cv.
And finally most importantly, do not lie in our skills and experience.

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I think first you should capitalize words like your name or 'I'
-> "My name is Dato. I am student at BTU, faculty of information technology and I am going to talk about how to write a good CV"

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next you might want to use less commas. Some sentences can be split into more sentences
-> "Firstly, CV must be in PDF format and be easy to read." (first sentence)
"The recruiter should take about 15 or 20 seconds to read." (second sentence)

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My name is Dato. I am student at BTU, faculty of information technology and I am going to talk about how to write a good CV.

If you ever sent a CV and the company did not contact you, it may be because you had a bad CV and not because you are not good for the position.

"Failure doesn't mean you are a failure it just means you haven't succeeded yet." —Robert H. Schuller

Someday everyone will need to create a CV in order to please the employer. We must first have a well-compiled CV.

I want to start with what can not be written in CV. This is very important:
1 ) Your date of birth or age
2) A funny or rude email address
3) Work experience or interests that are not relevant to the job
On the next slides I will add more.

Firstly, CV must be in PDF format and be easy to read. The recruiter should take about 15 or 20 seconds to read.

It will be better if we use only black color and it will not be colored because the recruiter has to read a lot of CVs and not be tired.
If you want to beautify, you can use the appropriate icons.

Some people think that a CV should definitely have a photo of themselves. This is not correct
because the employer does not care about your photo and additionally information in the CV.
And finally most importantly, do not lie about your skills and experience.

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most of the text is fine, I only made a few minor changes

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Someday everyone will need to create a CV, in order to please the employer, we must first have a well-compiled CV. this sentence is correct?

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don't be afraid to use shorter sentences

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you don't need the first comma

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okay thank u very much ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

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this part is also not very necessary (we must first have a well-compiled CV.) but you can leave it there if you want

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good luck with your presentation

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yeah it’s correct tho

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PepeWonder
**Child discipline **

A well-known American coach once said, "Success isn't measured by money or power or social rank. Success is measured by your discipline and inner peace. " When a child is born, he or she doesn’t know anything about the world. They learn everything from the environment around them. Therefore, it is an extremely important duty of parents to teach discipline to their children. Because discipline is an important part of human nature, Discipline is one of the reasons humans are so different from other species. And discipline is not something that can be taught overnight.

I add a quote. But for some reason, it doesn't fit in. pepe_cry it's my first time using quotes.

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it's perfect

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I am 100% sure

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thanku

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bababooey

heady nova
# pearl orbit <:PepeWonder:809877907526647818> **Child discipline ** ``` A well-known America...
  1. Within the quotation marks, correct the spacing. From this:

"Success isn't measured by money or power or social rank. Success is measured by your discipline and inner peace. "

To this:

"Success isn't measured by money or power or social rank. Success is measured by your discipline and inner peace."

  1. If you're writing a formal paper, avoid using contractions. For example, contractions include "isn't" and "doesn't."

Because discipline is an important part of human nature, Discipline
The discipline after the comma should not be capitalized.

And discipline is not something that can be taught overnight.
Awkward.

  • "And" should be swapped to "Furthermore."
  • "Taught" should be changed to "Develop."
    I'd recommend: "Furthermore, we humans cannot develop discipline overnight." Then proceed to describe how self-discipline is gained.

Despite the little errors, the paper is perfectly comprehensible, and you are progressing well on your English-learning journey.

pearl orbit
heady nova
fierce wing
# pearl orbit <:blobCookie:911544336930447380> thank you, <:pika_heart2:896009906291896350><:p...

I wanna add something that can improve your essay (not much about grammar though).

Because discipline is an important part of human nature
You should add some reasons why that is the case. Or better, imagine a circumstance when discipline is needed, then get to the conclusion.

Since you're comparing human with animals, why don't you give some example that they don't have or rather don't need discipline. (e.g a rat doesn't need permition to have a party in your trash can).

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Hi I have a speech homework and I finished my introduction can someone take a look at it please

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Thank youuuuu

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Do I send it here?

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yah

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Ok so the title is

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Are video games actually bad for you

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Have your parents ever told you gaming is bad for you and you will become stupid if you play too much. I think we all have. we’ve all been told that video games are just for fun and anything you achieve are useless in real life. But is it? I believe there’s always something you can learn that will benefit you in someway wether it’s video games, movies, etc. so I’m going to explain why video games aren’t just bad for us and debunk this urban myth.

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@proper sapphire

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this is a speech assignment right? Meaning you'll have to read it out loud to the class?

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Yes

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alright let me see

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Thank you

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Please tel me if anything is bad

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It’s been along time since I last did one

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Have your parents ever told you gaming is bad for you and you will become stupid if you play too much. I think they all have.
We’ve all been told that video games are just for fun and anything you achieve in them are useless in real life. But is that true?
I believe you can always learn from everything you watch, read or do. Whether it's video games, movies, etc., it will benefit you in some way.
So I’m going to explain why video games aren’t just bad for us and debunk this urban myth.

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Most of what you wrote is fine. I made a few changes to make it clear what you're referring to in a sentence

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Oh I thought this whole thing was wrong lol thanks!!

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one more tip

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Yes

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you might want to say hello to your class and introduce your name before starting the presentation

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it's one of the things I learned in public speaking class

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might help here lol

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Ok thanks

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The others didn’t say hello and your name was for like contest and public speeding and stuff

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it might make a better impression with the teacher and get you a better grade

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I'm not sure, maybe it depends on the teacher/school

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anyway, good luck with your presentation!

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Thank you very much!

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anytime

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Punctuation needs correcting, too.

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hii

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so im writing an essay on who influence me the most/who do i look up to and i can't quite understand what questions i'm supposed to be anwering

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like i know that i have to write who influences me and why but from that i feel like it's lacking something; what can i add ?

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you can copy the whole essay here too

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Who influences you the most. If you could grow up to be like someone else who would it be? Do you have a role model

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i havent started writing it yet tho

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do you understand the question yet?

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you're supposed to write about a person that inspires you to be like them

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for essays like this, you should start by introducing this person, who they are and what they do (especially for other people/the world)

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and near the end you should include what you've done to be like this person as well

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for example, if the role model founded a charity organization to help children, you can say you've volunteered at the local charities

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good luck with the essay!

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we/I can help you check for grammar once you're done if you need it

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okay thank you!pepe_love_you

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Hello can someone help

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I have a question and it's to describe a diagram in 155 words

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can I send the answer with the question so someone can review and get back to me with feedback

proper sapphire
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you can send it right on this channel

foggy narwhal
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oh, well then you can drop it in my DMs

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I did

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Should I drop in your dm?

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If it's a 6 page long love confession then go ahead

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**Essay Topic: **
Google and Apple have their own operating systems used in mobile technology such as smartphones and tablets. Compare or contrast Android with iOS.

**Introduction: **
In the era of modern computer science, mobile phones are like the threads that connect us with the modern internet world. It literally is the key to communication. That’s why the famous CEO of Yahoo, Marissa Meyer, said that: "the mobile phone acts as a cursor to connect the digital and physical." And this mobile phone production is dominated by two major companies, called Apple and Google. These two companies offer two different types of operating systems to manage smartphones all over the world. Apple uses iOS as their operating system and as for Google, they collaborate with other phone manufacturing companies and use Android as the operating system.

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pepeprison i don't have much experience.

proper sapphire
# pearl orbit **Essay Topic: ** ```Google and Apple have their own operating systems used in m...

"And this mobile phone production is dominated by two major companies, called Apple and Google."
I think you should delete the comma here. I don't think it's incorrect to have it there but the sentence flows better without it
Also, usually you don't start a sentence with "and", so you should delete it also

Actually, since there aren't any other mobile phone productions, you shouldn't refer to it as "this" either, so here's another way to write the sentence above:
Today, mobile phone production is dominated by two major companies called Apple and Google."

"Apple uses iOS as their operating system and as for Google, they collaborate with..."
"And as for" sounds redundant. You can change this sentence to:
"Apple uses iOS as their operating system while Google collaborate with..."

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I'm sure others might have more ideas but this is all I can think of right now

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In the era of modern computer science, mobile phones are like the threads that connect us with the modern internet world. It literally is the key to communication. Today, mobile phone production is dominated by two major companies, Apple and Google. These two companies offer two different types of operating systems to manage smartphones all over the world. Apple uses iOS as their operating system, while Google collaborates with other phone manufacturing companies and uses Android as the operating system.

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we always here to help

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This is the evaluation
Write a letter / e-mail to a friend, in which you use as many sports-related terms as possible.  Topic: whatever you want (NOT sports as a topic, though)  Length: Min 10 lines, max 15.  Font: Times New Roman 12 (must be on computer)  NOTE: Every sports term used has to be a meaningful part of the sentence and has to make sense in the whole. Don’t just list a lot of terms for no good reason. NOTE: none of the sports terms can be used referring to actual sports!  The more you manage to include in a good way, the better!

**My Submission **

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Dear John,
I hope you are doing well. I really miss you. How’s life? I recently made an important decision about my life. I want to tackle a big problem. It’s about ‘becoming an adult’. I never want to become an adult. I want to stay a kid for my whole life. This thought came out of the left field and I know, it sounds foolish but let me explain. I need to live more in the present moment like a little kid, they squeeze everything out of the present. I don’t want to be worrying about the past and the future. Living in the present is a whole new ball game in terms of thinking and enjoying life. I desire to return back to a simple life. Full of colours and nursery rhymes (without baby shark* ofcourse). I also want to play soft ball and ask a lot of easy questions like a youngster to understand things but these adults aren’t that enthusiastic when I ask them a lot of questions. I have to step up and carry the ball because life is too short. I’m currently 16 years old and I feel that I'm losing my faith in the powers of smiling, hugging and kind words. These are early symptoms of the novel “Adult-Virus”, I’m really stumped but I hope to find answers. I don’t want to knock you for six but everyone should try to stay a kid, even clumsy people like southpaws. I’m talking about you John 🙂 !
I'll take a rain check on adultery. I will be one, in my grave.

Love,
Matin

  • Kids love this song but adults hate it. Most people find it annoying because it repeats the same thing (“Baby Shark, tututututu, Baby Shark TUTUTU!”) .
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Any suggestions or advice? They are all welcome,
Thanks in advance

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remote otter
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Omg you saved me , thanks

proper sapphire
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That would have been an amazing mistake

acoustic portal
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any good tips for Gothic Theme

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i'm not very good at Gothic Writing at all

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Dusk was approaching and so was the grotesque adventure the woman was about to embark on. An eerie sound filled her room and shivers were shot down her spine. She wept. Lying there she procrastinated doing the mysterious task she’d been set. The girl wiped the tears away and begrudgingly climbed out of bed. She climbed up the dark rickety staircase of the turret and stared into the distance. Thinking about what she had to do, the tears started flowing again. Pondering, she contemplated whether this was all necessary or not.

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is this any good

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even if it is mediocre I'm happy

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ok thank you

wanton cliff
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Very good!

west cairn
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Hello hope y'all okay
So in English class we've watched a documentary about game addiction and how it have repercussions on both the individual and the society
It discussed also the different approaches countries take as a tentative to stop this phenomenon

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Particularly south Korea and china

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Now I have to write an argumentative essay telling which of the approaches is better

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Please guys just your opinion will be of a great help so I can get ideas and argument

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Btw china follows a kinda punitive approach by putting limits of hours spending on games like some kind of curfews while korea go more With rehabilitations center

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Wdy think guys which one seems more rigorous ?

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Hmm

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“The art of life is a constant readjustment to our surroundings.” --Kakuzo Okakaura. Adapting to new environments is a basic human instinct, as us humans are inherently social creatures that yearn for acceptance from others within our group. Changing due to surroundings**,** forces individuals to repress aspects of themselves that are seen as unfavorable to the crowd. This causes the person to feel trapped and unfulfilled due to the inability to express individual traits. In the short story**,** The Metaphor by Budge Wilson, Budgen crafts a story to show this primal human nature through the character of Charlie, where throughout the story Charlie’s motivations are warped due to her environment thus causing Charlie to act in favor of the group which in turn**,** changes her actions and decisions.

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The "character of charlie, throughout the story" sounds a bit repetitive, I suggest you rephrase it

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The second paragraph is fine

tender trail
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Sorry, i meant you used "through" then "throughout ". My bad, I didn't include the other part

timid girder
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Hello anyone can help me recreate this sentence? or check my grammar?
Thank you ^^

We did not receive your payment
Your order has expired because we did not receive your payment

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Would someone be so kind to look through my abstract of my precientific work? It's about lucid dreaming (controlling one's dream).

Abstract
This prescientific work is about the subject of controlling one’s dream. To put it into a nutshell, the phenomenon of lucid dreaming describes the action of being conscious during a dream and therefore being able to change its course.
The primary aim of this work is to examine the following: The meaning of the term lucid dream, how the skill can be acquired as well as improved, and lastly, the focus shifts to the application of the competence.
The results are based on information on the Internet and experts, some of whom are active in research into sleep and dreams, whereas others are psychophysiologists that are specialised in the scientific study of lucid dreaming.
To start with, the criteria for a lucid dream and the sleep phase in which they take place are discussed. Furthermore, the next big chapter is dedicated to showing which methods should be integrated into daily life in order to learn lucid dreaming. Finally, the last part copes with the motive for mastering the skill.
In conclusion, reality-checks and different lucid dream techniques are indispensable when it comes to fulfilling the potential. Additionally, consistency is key for progress in every aspect, for instance dream memory, dream focus or awareness. To make a closing remark: Lucid dreams can help you find your true self, use the time in your sleep, gain experiences and manage to change your life forever.

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Hi so I'm working on an essay I have due Friday my professor is extremely strict on how this is done I only have the introduction because I'm scared and my anxiety is actually peaking right now... This is supposed to be a literary analysis and she said we're supposed to interpret the work and not simplify that I've read it. So this is what I have so far. If anyone can give me some advice I'd be grateful 🥲

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..In the story of an hour, Kate Chopin focuses throughout the poem a few themes, one of the clearest ones being freedom. The main character Mrs. Louise Mallard suffers from a heart condition and had recently lost her husband due to a railroad accident. Mrs. Mallard grieves but also discovers that through her husband's death, she has the freedom to do things in her own interest.

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remote otter
# heady nova ..In the story of an hour, Kate Chopin focuses throughout the poem a few themes,...

..In the story of an hour, Kate Chopin focuses throughout the poem on a few themes, one of the clearest ones being freedom. The main character Mrs. Louise Mallard suffers from a heart condition and has recently lost her husband due to a railroad accident. Mrs. Mallard grieves but also discovers that through her husband's death, she has the freedom to do things in her own interest.

on - because "to focus on something", not "to focus something"
has - using present simple for description (suffers, grieves etc.), it only makes sense to use present perfect, not past perfect all of a sudden
due to - I think in would be better, implying that he participated in the accident and the accident was the direct cause of his death; due to makes me feel like he wasn't a part of the accident, though I may be wrong

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@remote otter ty

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Hi, I am applying to study abroad and a requirement is to write a paragraph on why I want to study abroad. I just finished but I would really appreciate a second opinion on my paragraph. Would someone mind reading it ?

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I just finished my essay for my English class and I got to get ready to turn this in in a few hours and I was wondering if someone can proofread this asap it's really important thank you in advance 🙏

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In the story of an hour, Kate Chopin focuses throughout the poem a few themes, one being freedom the other being marriage the role it plays and the reality for women during this time. The main character Mrs. Louise Mallard suffers from a heart condition and had recently lost her husband due to a railroad accident. Mrs. Mallard grieves but also discovers that through her husband's death, she has the freedom to do things in her own interest.
In the story, we are introduced to the character Ms. Mallard who has a heart problem and was just notified of her husband's death. First, we see Ms. Mallard Overcome with grief as described “She wept at once, with sudden, while abandonment, in her sister's arms.” (3) But as the story unfolds this Grieve slowly turns into joy as, slowly she begins to welcome a newfound freedom “there stood, facing the open window...Pressed down by a physical exhaustion that haunted her body and seemed to reach into her soul” (4) The open window represents the spring, but also shows how quickly she mourned her husband and is ready to embrace freedom. From this We can begin to see that Ms. Mallard’s Marriage made her feel confined, “She said it over and over under her breath: Free, free, free!” (11) This helps to show that up until the death of her husband, Ms. Mallard felt suppressed by her own marriage.
Marriage also plays an important theme as well as role in this story. In this story it represents women's roles around the 1800s.Woman around this time didn't have many rights. Even in marriage, men and women weren't seen as equal. The Theme that's reflected here is: In marriage, men, and women one of them will bend over the will of their partner to be more dominant. We see this unraveled throughout poem and how Ms. Mallard was constantly unhappy and had no say in her marriage. But then she says, “there would be no one to live for during those coming years...no powerful will bending her in the blind persistence with which men and women believe they

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they have the right to impose…” (14) Because of her husband's death She no longer needs to live her life for someone else, as well as the freedom to make her own decision.
At the end of the poem, we see the character Mrs. Mallard die of a heart attack after seeing her husband. We know this as the poem goes on to say ... “She had died of heart disease-of joy that kills.” (23) however, it wasn't joy that killed her, it was fear and shock. Throughout the story we see Mrs. Mallard slowly but gradually accept freedom she thought she would never find. But just as she finally finds this freedom it's taken from her. We can tell from the story that Mrs. Mallard felt trapped by her marriage and often unhappy she even mentions “And yet she had loved him-Sometimes.” (15) This further shows she was never happy with her marriage, and that her husband's death allows her feel freedom that was never there.
In short, Mrs. Mallard felt trapped and unhappy with her marriage. The lack of freedom and independent over her own life left her wanting for something she thought she couldn't obtain. When her husband finally dies, only then does freedom become a reality. Unfortunately, seeing her husband alive in fear that she would lose her freedom she has gained is what kills her.

next trout
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Hi everyone! I want to do a new type of video on my YouTube channel where I correct other people's essays. If you want me to correct your essay live on YouTube, feel free to send me a message!

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Hi!

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I'm writing an email to my manager

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anyone mind proof reading a section of it?

heady nova
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Hello, currently finishing up my application for my bachelor's in Psycholgy and I had to write this letter. The questions I had to answer were:

  1. Why did you choose Psychology at Radboud University and what makes you a good candidate for our research-oriented programme?
  2. What courses in our Psychology programme in Nijmegen will you presumably like most? What courses are you going to find the most difficult and why?

I commented on the parts where I was unsure but if someone could have a general look at it that would be cool. You can change it all you want as long as it helps me sound good lol.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/11UIX-_oWK75P4dBawyDRSzTdxiGiZEV34FjcL1Jgg68/edit?usp=sharing

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Hello guys, can someone please check my informal letter? it´s short it has only 159 words

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Hi Paul,

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I haven´t heard from you for a while, I hope you are doing well. Are you ok? I heard that you returned from the exchange programme last week, how did it go?

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As you may know, I like playing chess and I even was a member of our local chess club. I played some tournaments, but unfortunately, I decided to terminate my membership because I need to focus on studying. Frankly, I´m not very good player.

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Last week, I went to mountains for skiing. I really enjoyed it, you won´t believe it, I have broken my leg! Sadly, my injury caused that I need to have a gypsum for whole month! To be honest, I´m angry of myself.

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Please, write me, how are doing in your new school. I hope you are still kayaking, it´s a great sport, maybe we can one time try it together!

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I can't wait to hear from you,

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Jerry

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Sorry for so many texts

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but this is what i think sounds more natural to say

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Thanks, I really appreciate your help

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No problem, glad to help :))

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Hello, can i ask someone who are native english speaker to mark my essay? I really need it since tomorrow is my English exam. If u r interest, i will pm u the essay 💜 💜

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I have free time and I'm bored

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Surely

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Send here

sharp rock
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Hello can someone help on how I should approach this stimulus statement in a short story "The room is shaded and cool, the afternoon sun is bright. The silent scene outside may as well belong
to another world."

south sapphire
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Find another way to say what you are saying but without "the", perhaps with punctuation

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Hii!!. I'm writing a writing IELTS ,anyone mind proofread this. thanks
People have different views about whether to become a kind person in a lifetime. While some parents believe that school is the best way to teach children how to have a good attitude, I would argue that good parenting is key when it comes to raising a child to be a good member of society.

On the one hand, I believe that educating children by their parents is attractive for several reasons. It is undeniable that family education could bring many benefits to children. Moreover, parents who know evidently about their child will have the best method is suitable for them. In this way, children may be easier to follow than go to school. In terms of psychology, when their child is taught by family members that means it will not have much pressure cause they are homie and they feel more comfortable. Furthermore, children usually spend much time with their parents, and naturally, parents are their role models.

On the other hand, the school has an obligation to mold a child to be a good member of society obviously and overwhelmingly. In fact, Children spend most of their time in school so schools could take responsibility for educating them how to be good members of society. In addition, teachers have a significant influence on children thus their manner will depend on the process of lessons at school. Besides, the school also allow children to communicate with other people or have different situations  from which there is a chance that children must deal with this accident to know how be a good person

Overall, I believe that teaching children by parents is the best method to support their children become good members of society.

normal mesa
# verbal sierra Hii!!. I'm writing a writing IELTS ,anyone mind proofread this. thanks ...

Hi, here are some corrections
" method is suitable for them" -> "method that is suitable for them"
Isn't "cause" here a slang for "because"? If you want to be more formal then you should use "because".
Unclear what homie means here, you can use "homely" which is linked with being comfortable. "...will not feel much pressure because they are homely and comfortable"
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"how be a good person" -> "how to be a good person"

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Infinitives

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People have different views about whether to become becoming a kind person in a lifetime successful adult. While some parents believe that school is the best way to teach children how to have a good attitude, I would argue that good parenting is key when it comes to raising a child to be a good member of society.

On the one hand, I believe that educating children by their parents parental involvement is attractive idealistic for several reasons. It is undeniable that family education could bring many benefits to children**;** . M moreover, parents, who know evidently about better understand their children, will have the best methods is suitable for them. In this way, Under this knowledge, children may be easier to follow than go to school It may be easier to monitor a given child's growth. In terms of psychology, when their a child is taught by family members, that means it they will not have much pressure cause they are homie and they feel more comfortable. we can probably expect better encouragement for intellectual and social growth. Furthermore, children usually spend much a lot of time with their parents, and**;** naturally, parents are their role models.

On the other hand, the school has an obligation to mold a child to be a good member of society~~ obviously and overwhelmingly~~. In fact, Children spend most of their time in school, so schools ~~could~~ **should** take responsibility for educating them how to be good members of society.
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In addition to this, teachers have a significant influence on children**;** thus, their manner will depend on the process of lessons at school. Besides, the school also allows children to communicate with other people or; alternatively, to be placed in various realistic situations to gain a better understanding of how to be a functioning member of societyor have different situations from in which there is a chance that children deal with this accident to know how be a good person

Overall, I believe that teaching children by in the presence of parents is the best method to support their children become good members of society.

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I really appreciate your help with my essay . Thank you, without your support:333

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Luv u guys

honest linden
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Is it possible someone can help edit a quick 570 word essay on physical activities.

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honest linden
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hello hello

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When using the toilet, harmful microorganisms can spread around the room and live on bathroom surfaces for up to a week or more. Contaminated school comfort rooms can cause dangerous illnesses and health issues to the users. It can also affect the learning abilities and concentration of the students. Bathroom sanitation is important in both public and private restrooms as it has the same effect. Moreover, the smell of an unclean bathroom can be quite unbearable if dealt with in our everyday life.

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ey tell me if this paragraph about toilets is good enough

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If you only knew what toilets in school I have seen PepeGrabbie

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hllo

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I am reading a convo between students and teacher, but the meanings are so odd, i am confused what's going on there , anyone who can help me to understand this ?

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Are they kind of practicing something, its looking as beginner participants, i am reading book practice english language

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whole nest
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Elderly is the most out of place

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All the others relate to personality/intelligence but elderly is just age

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Idk

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Weirdly worded to say the least

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whole nest
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Yea but it’s not odd in meaning

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It does ask “odd in meaning” and i think stupidly is more typical than some of the others

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Like elderly

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i believe it's stupidly

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the rest are adjectives

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As fantastic literature was emerging in the nineteenth century, in which the Victorian era took place, the rapid development of science and technology which would mark its peak in the late twentieth century began to influence young writers, the names of which are widely recognised by many literary critics. My extended essay concerns the ways by which advanced scientific ideas of the period are conveyed in one of Shirley Jackson’s most popular works, The Haunting of Hill House.

The central proposition of this essay is that various characteristics of Victorian fantasy literature have influenced Jackson’s writing in myriad aspects, and that research focused on the adaptation of psychological concepts in The Haunting of Hill House reveals the relations between the novel and Victorian ghost stories. In addition to offering a fresh perspective on how Jackson’s fascination with Victorian literature affected her novels, this thesis explores how the psychological, social, and cultural complexity of the late twentieth century woven into the fabric of Jackson’s novels is interpreted, restated, and ramified by critics and readers, unravelling both their narrative excellency and successful illustrations of complex psychological theories.

Whilst analysing the influence the Victorian era has on Jackson’s writing, this essay discusses the ways the development of the gothic novel in the twentieth century has affected successive writers of the genre as well as the reasons gothic literature gained its popularity along with the emergence of new technologies.

whole nest
# sharp bramble As fantastic literature was emerging in the nineteenth century, in which the Vic...

As fantastic literature was emerging in the nineteenth century Victorian era, the rapidly developing and novel fields of science and technology would mark its peak in the late twentieth century. This dynamic shift would then begin to influence young writers, the names of whom are widely recognized by many literature lovers and critics alike. My extended essay concerns the ways by which advanced scientific ideas of this period are conveyed in one of Shirley Jackson's most popular worlds: "The Haunting of Hill House".

The central proposition of this essay is that various characteristics of Victorian era fantasy literature had influenced Jackson's writing in a myriad of aspects, and how that researched focused on the adaptation of psychological concepts in the story, which reveals the relations between the novel and classical Victorian ghost stories. In addition to offering a fresh perspective on how Jackson’s fascination with Victorian literature affected her novels, this thesis will explore how the psychological, social, and cultural complexity of the late twentieth century woven into the fabric of Jackson’s novels is interpreted, restated, and ramified by critics and readers, unravelling both their narrative excellency and successful illustrations of complex psychological theories.

Whilst analyzing the influence the Victorian era had on Jackson’s writing, this essay will discuss the ways the development of gothic novels in the twentieth century has affected successful writers of the genre as well as the reasons gothic literature gained its popularity along with the emergence of new technologies.

Overall very good pepe_heart

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Hey, is there anyone who can I send my homework to? It is an A4 of text, I would really appreciate it, if anyone could check it for me 😄

whole nest
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What is an A4 of text?

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it is a full A4 page of text

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What is A4?

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Thats the confusing part

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it is a size of a paper

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in europe

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due midnight (cet time) 😄

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oh so you have a whole day?

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you can send it over if you'd like i can take a look

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Thanks 😄

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it won't be super detailed though sorry i'm kinda busy 😅

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No worries 😄

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The video „The Homeless Man VS Homeless Child!“ is a social experiment conducted by three siblings in order to see whether there are differences between being homeless as a child and as an adult.

The boy Omar who pretended being homeless sat on the street of NY near a homeless man. He had a sign and a mug for collecting some money too and also both of them looked neglected and dirty. Despite the fact that each of them was in the same place at the same time with the same equipment they were treated differently. Omar did not even have to ask for money as the passerby were compassionate towards him in contrast to the homeless man who literally had to beg for some attention. People did not want to talk to him and when he had approached them, they despised or even hit him like a police officer did. Unlike an adult, a homeless child is considered being unguilty and helpless and there for the passersby had more empathy with it.

Partly I personally can understand people who treated the boy nicely and gave him some money as they were prejudiced in that kind of situation. I think that it is an innate instinct to help whose who are weaker than us, especially when it is a small child. For example there are a lot of advertisements which show small babies or kids in order to appeal for donations. If we do not help them we will feel heartless and guilty. Therefore mainly young people can take advantage of our psychology and deceive us easily. The boy in the video could take the money without telling people he was an actor or giving it to the homeless man. In my opinion it is wrong to judge somebody left out their story about how they ended up on the street. Thus it is inappropriate to humiliate them by dropping some trash or food scraps over their heads or by hitting and despising them.

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Could somebody correct my text?

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@heady nova

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The video „The Homeless Man VS Homeless Child!“ is a social experiment conducted by three siblings in order to see whether there are differences between being homeless as a child and as an adult.

The boy Omar who pretended being homeless sat on the street of NY near a homeless man. He had a signboard and a mug for collecting some money , both of them looked neglected and dirty. Despite the fact that each of them was in the same place at the same time with the same equipment but treated differently. Omar did not even have to ask for money as the passerby were compassionate towards him in contrast to the homeless man who literally had to beg for some attention. Peopledon't want to talk to him and when he had approached them, they despised or even some people hit him like a police officer did. Unlike an adult, a homeless child is considered not being guilty and helpless and there for the passersby had more empathy with it.

I personally can understand people who treated the boy nicely and gave him some money as they were prejudiced in that kind of situation. I think that it is an innate instinct to help those who are weaker than us, especially when it is a small child. For example there are a lot of advertisements which show small babies or kids in order to appeal for donations. If we can't help them we will feel heartless and guilty. Therefore majority of young people can take advantage of our psychology and deceive us easily. The boy in the video could have taken the money without telling people he was an actor or playing the role of an homeless man. In my opinion it is wrong to judge somebody left out their story about how they ended up on the street. Thus it is inappropriate to humiliate them by dropping some trash or food scraps over their heads or by hitting and despising them.

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@plush solstice u can see the errors u have made and i think u should use some signs commas also should try (do not ) - don't

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Feel free to dm if have any questions😄

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The boy, Omar, who pretended being to be homeless and sat on the streets of NY near a homeless man. He had a signboard that read "Homeless, need money for food", and a mug for collecting some money. Both of them looked neglected and dirty. Despite the fact that each of them was were in the same place at the same time with the same equipment**,** but they were treated differently. Omar did not even have to ask for money as the people passing were compassionate towards him in contrast to the homeless man who literally had to beg for some attention. People don't want to talk to him, and when he had approached them; they despised him, or even some people even hit him like a police officer did. Unlike an adult, a homeless child is considered not being guilty and helpless and there for therefore these passersby people had more empathy with it.

I personally can understand people who treated the boy nicely and gave him some money as they were prejudiced in that kind of situation. I think that it is an innate instinct to help those who are weaker than us, especially when it is a small child. For example there are a lot of advertisements which show small babies or kids in order to appeal for donations. If we can't help them we will feel heartless and guilty; therefore, majority of young people can take advantage of our psychology and can deceive us easily. The boy in the video could have taken the money without telling people he was an actor or playing the role of an homeless man. In my opinion, it is wrong to judge somebody left out their story about how without knowing the reason for which they ended up on the street. Thus it is inappropriate to humiliate them by dropping some trash or food scraps over their heads or hitting and despising them.

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@plush solstice

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I am written a letter towards my English teacher I would want to know if I am letter right

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Dear Mr.Johnson

I am here to say to I would like to advance into harder level because my class currently I feel very beginner. If you have a harder class for different phrases I would like. Thank you for your time.

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@whole nest

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Don't be afraid to space out your paragraphs. Commas are good to have too but not very necessary in short letters

weak harbor
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Hi! Everyone .
Has someone studied conditionals?

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craggy epoch
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Can you proofread my cv? Also i want to switch my position from Quality assurance officer to regulatory officer so how do i mention it. Please guide me how to write the personal statement

JANE DOE
Address: xxxxxxx
Mobilexxxxxxxxxx
Email: xxxxxxxx

PERSONAL STATEMENT:
Seeking to achieve a role that matches the profile and supports sustainability to drive company’s strategic synergies.
SCHOLASTICS:
• Graduation: Doctor of Pharmacy (Pharm-D) from XXXX of Health and Sciences2020
• Intermediate (High School Certificate): XXXXX 2015
• Matriculation (Science): XXX 2013

WORK EXPERIENCE:
2017 INTERNSHIP AT xxx INSTITUTE (MMI)
● Work as an internee in In-patient and Outpatient pharmacies
● Training in chemotherapeutic dilutions and parenteral nutrition

2018 INTERNSHIP AT DR. XXXX INSTITUTE OF BEHAVIOURAL SCIENCES (IBS)
● Training and working in OPD pharmacy Psychiatric ward dispensing

2021 XXX PHARMACEUTICALS PVT LTD
(Quality Assurance Officer)
KEY DELIVERABLES:
• A key member of in process team responsible for monitoring all the activities performed in manufacturing area.
• Certified line clearance activities and sampling of finished product and hold time as per product Batch production and Control record (BPCR) or protocol.
ACTIVITIES:
• Attended 2nd National Conference on Research in Pharmacy at Dow College of Pharmacy (DUHS) held on 7th September 2017
• Attended Heath Convention at DUHS held on 23rd November 2017

CURRENT PROJECTS FOR CONFERENCES (LIFE SCIENCES):
• Effect of Vitamin C on antipsychotic induced heightening of negative symptoms of Schizophrenic Psychosis.
• Vitamin B and C to treat oxidative stress as the underlying pathophysiological mechanism of Neuralgias.
SKILLS:
• Formerly employed at Mano Animation Studio as Animator
• Adobe Photoshop
• MS Office
• CAPA management
• Records and Data analysis

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Can someone correct my essay in English? I’m training for my exam at school... Please. If anyone can, call me in private

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This extract is one of the most significant parts of The Reader due to the author’s use of symbolic & visual imagery which encapsulates the poignant feelings of anguish and saudade that Michael, the protagonist, experiences while he goes through a phase of deep shame and regret after his encounter with Hanna. Schlink employs symbolism and abstract diction to address the theme of acknowledging the past in order to embrace the present. Through the use of pessimistic diction Michael finds his working environment “gray, sterile, and dreary”, which develops a dull mood as they all harbour negative connotations, thus revealing he isn’t satisfied with his life. Furthermore, the use of the noun “evasion” connotes his fear of the past traumatic memories which lead him to refuse to confront the collective guilt his generation carries, thus establishing that absolution for atrocities can only be achieved by facing the past. Additionally, the allusion to the Odyssey conjures up a scene of Greek mythology and links back to his endeavour to find meaning and purpose in life, accentuated by the oxymoronic description of “purposeful and purposeless” which establishes a disheartening tone. This implies that although Michael desires emotional alleviation, he acknowledges that his very “escape” from the disturbing & haunting memories of the past is what prevents him from achieving psychological freedom.Throughout the extract, Schlink highlights the status quo/predicament in which the main character finds him and suggests that the power to potentially alter the trajectory of the seemingly dismal present comes from understanding and acquiescing in the past.

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could anyone tell ?

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Please proofread this:

Success driven, energetic and focused individual with 6 months experience in the pharmaceutical industry as a Quality Assurance officer. I have a strong understanding of cGMP, excellent skills in CAPA management and Root cause analysis to address problems and identify trends. I can provide an intellectual atmosphere conducive to the stimulation and exchange of ideas.

I accept and enjoy challenges in new situations and will make a positive contribution towards the given position. I am currently looking forward to applying my skills in Regulatory affairs to ensure and monitor that the company's products comply with the current regulations. I strive to maximize and hone my analytical and communicative skills through challenging and fulfilling activities which can drive the company’s strategic collaboration.

Let me know if its any good

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Please proofread this:

Success driven, energetic and focused individual with 6 months experience in the pharmaceutical industry as a Quality Assurance officer. I have a strong understanding of cGMP. I also have excellent skills in CAPA management and Root cause analysis to address with any problems and identify trends. I can provide an intellectual atmosphere conducive to the stimulation and exchange of ideas.

I accept and enjoy challenges in new situations and will make a positive contribution towards the given position. I am currently looking forward to applying my skills in Regulatory affairs to ensure and monitor that the company's products comply with the current regulations. I strive to maximize and hone my analytical and communicative skills through challenging and fulfilling activities which can drive the company’s strategic collaboration.

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That’s what I would change

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With it

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Please proofread my cover letter

Dear Hiring Manager,

The letter is about the position of Regulatory & PV&CC Associate that was advertised on LinkedIn. I would love to bring my experience in Inspection and my skills in Internal Audit and Process Validation to Novo Nordisk.

I believe my experience in Quality Assurance and my education in Pharmacy would allow me to succeed in this position. I am adept at Inspection Procedures and have a strong understanding of Good Manufacturing Practice (GMP). Moreover, while my earlier job experience has afforded me a well-rounded skill set including analytical and organizational abilities, I excel at CAPA Management and Root Cause Analysis.

I also have skills in Writing and Editing, which I gained through writing academic articles that have helped me accomplish writing and editing expertise. If I were to work in your Company as a Regulatory Affairs Officer, I would apply my skills to articulate scientific or legal processes.

Finally, I am eager to apply for this position and would be delighted to have the opportunity to work with Novo Nordisk’s team. Thank you for taking the time to consider my application, I look forward
to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,
Jane Doe

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And make it sincerely

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I prefer using Best Regards instead of yours sincerely. Yours sincerely is more used for love letters.

heady nova
# craggy epoch Please proofread my cover letter Dear Hiring Manager, The letter is about the...

The letter is ~~about ~~ concerning the position of Regulatory & PV&CC Associate that was advertised on LinkedIn. I would love to bring my experience in Inspection and my skills in Internal Audit and Process Validation to Novo Nordisk. I'd love to offer my Inspection expertise, as well as my abilities in Internal Audit and Process Validation, to Novo Nordisk.

**Additionally,I ~~have ~~ possess ** [insert verb ->] proficient skills in [w]riting and [e]diting, which I gained throughout my lengthy experience in writing academic articles[.] (Who are you writing articles for? Add more context.) that have helped me accomplish writing and editing expertise [redundant]. If I were to work to be employed in your [c]ompany as a Regulatory Affairs Officer, I would apply my skills to articulate scientific or legal processes.

Finally Alas, I am eager enthusiastic to apply be considered for this position**,** and I would be delighted to have the opportunity to work learn and apply my abilites with Novo Nordisk’s team. Thank you for taking the time to consider my application, I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely, Best regards,
Jane Doe

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So I have to write a short essay for my h.w and I already did but I wonder if there’s someone who can check it for me 🙏🏻

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My home

The house I consider it a home is my house, to be precise it’s my bedroom.
I consider my bedroom the real home to me, where I belong where I feel safe the most, and that doesn’t mean I don’t like the rest of the house of course but I like my room the most.

When I was a little kid I always dreamed of getting my separate room. As it seemed I was sharing the same room as my younger sister. And I hated it I used to put lines, and furniture to separate us but that wasn’t enough so I tried so hard to convince my father to get me a new room therefore he did but after years.

So here I am, getting my bedroom my favorite space in the world. here I can study, sleep, read, eat and even cry or just chill.

It’s a small room with purple walls which is my favorite color. I decorated it by myself when I was 12 using my mother's hand. I’m pleased to have such a room and I’m always great full for that.

safe rose
# tidal fiber My home The house I consider it a home is my house, to be precise it’s my bedr...

I can see a few punctuation errors and grammatical mistakes so here I’ll just rewrite a few bits:

“The house I consider it a home is my house, to be precise it’s my bedroom.” This sentence doesn’t make sense and is quite long and tedious. I would rewrite it as “I consider my house as home, precisely my bedroom.”

From onwards, the repetition of “I” is used too much so I recommend you to use it less frequently as possible. You also already stated your bedroom is home so rewrite it as “I consider my bedroom as the safest place. It doesn’t mean that I don’t like rest of my house, but my bedroom is my favourite place.”

“When I was a kid I always dreamed of getting my seperate room . As it seemed I was sharing the same room as my younger sister.” This sentence makes sense but however, you should consider linking sentences using the comma. So replace the bolded full-stop with a comma instead as it will sound less awkward.

“And I hated it...” don’t start a sentence with “And.”

“I tried so hard to convince my father to get me a new room therefore he did but after a few years” this sentence has some unnecessary wording. Rewrite it as “I tried so hard to convince my father to get a new room. So after a years, he finally did.”

“...favourite space in the world. here I can study...” I’m being picky but remember to start with a capital letter at every new sentence.

“I decorated it by myself when I was 12 using my mother’s hand” This sentence doesn’t make sense because it’s unclear and it literally means you used your mother’s hand to help you decorate the purple walls. Rewrite it as “I decorated it by myself when I was 12 with the help of my mother” instead.

Hope this helps.

normal mesa
# tidal fiber My home The house I consider it a home is my house, to be precise it’s my bedr...

It is an interesting start, the very beginning ‘The house I consider my home is my house’ seems trivial information at first but the part after that draws me in and I don’t think you need to change it. Some sentences can be connected like “When I was a kid I always dreamed of getting my own room as I shared one with my younger sister. And I hated it, I would draw lines and move furniture to separate us but that wasn’t enough so I tried …. “
Also the part about your favourite colour can be written like this:
“It’s a small room with walls painted purple, my favourite color. …”
edit: there's a misspelled word in your text: grateful*

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It’s just preference really, it’s fine if you don’t agree with some of this

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I mean I agree that some parts are not said using standard phrases thus may at first seem unclear but may also make it more engaging to read.

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I mean if it does make it more interesting then thats fine too

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It wasn’t my intention to fix what was engaging or not engaging

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btw I didn’t mean to say what you said is unclear, but the parts you quoted from the text. But I wanted to say those parts to me were evocative and engaging.

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In my opinion it’s better to learn standard phrases before you start to twist some of them to make it interesting, that’s all

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I’m pretty picky otherwise XDD

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The line illustrates changes in the figure of fish and some kind of meat consumed in a European country over the 25-year period starting from 1979.
As you can see from the graph, the consumption of chicken made up the biggest increase in the first period while another cate.. saw a downward trend.
In 1979, the amount of fish started at the lowest point around 50 grams per person per week but the opposite was true for the figure for beef which reak a peak of more than 200 grams. Besides, both lamb and beef have a similar trend accounted for 150 grams per person.
from that time to 2004, beef consumption reduced significantly to only about 100 grams, but the figure for chicken showed a dramatic rise to peak at about 250 grams each person. The average consumption of lamb declined gradually to just over 50 grams per week, and similarly, less fish was eaten per head in this nation, with its figure falling by about 15 grams a week.

That is my writing task 1 can sb check for me:33

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Here's a descriptive piece of "a memorable concert I attended" It'll be greatly appriciated if anyone can read it and let me know of the ways I can improve it 🙂

After perhaps kilometers of walking, I have finally arrived. Upon rubbing the sweat off my forehead, I snoozzed into the surrounding, lights flickering in complete alliance, where not one light would fall out of what it was ordered to do. Red, white, yellow, blue, black, white, black, white and repeat. This was the complete order of the lights. Friend groups of all sizes laughed histerically; ate junkfood they had sneeked inside and bowed their heads to their phones, not being able to leave the technological world behind and enjoy this magnificient weather. This was like a reverie for me. The wind whistled and morphed it's sound with the ambience where it was almost inaudible. My forehead was now all dried up and I was taking large steps, elbowing my way through the thick crowd until I reached a point where my petite 5"2 body could see the stage, so to mention, the gargantuan stage. It engulfed the entire area, ranging all the way from left to right. The lights fell on the stage, creating a masterpiece of art. BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! The concert was starting and I was now on the edge of my seat to the singer. The adrenaline in all rushed all through their bodies, the cameras were now held high and people were pushing trying to get a view of the stage. On either side of the stage, stood large monitors, displaying a close up of every moment on stage. The music was now pleasing my ears, making me dance, unconsciously. A lady, mid 30's with blond hair started singing cacophonously but nonetheless I kept my eyes on the stage, not once glancing in another direction. She was absolutely phenomenal! I pulled out my phone taking dozens of videos and pictures to keep in mind this memorable day

normal mesa
# timber heron Here's a descriptive piece of "a memorable concert I attended" It'll be greatly ...

The ambiguity in the very first clase seems to make it redundant( does not add much to the description of the scene ). Might be better to replace it with how the journey felt e.g. " After a short journey..." or "After a tiresome journey ..." to give a definite description of how to person felt about the travel or you can just remove it.
"The wind whistled and morphed its* sound" it's is a contraction of it is
A better description about the monitors can be given by replacing stood in "stood large monitors". Some words to describe their vertical placement and size might be a good idea.

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thank you

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normal mesa
# timber heron hmm yeah definitely, I like what better and will make sure to in coorperate it i...

I think the writing does well to convey the intensity and high energy of an event and the pacing at which the main event is brought into focus is good. I don't have much experience giving feedback so I don't think I can give a score. But I can give a few more tips which might be helpful:

  • There was a repeated word (all) in a sentence which can reduce comprehension speed.
  • Subjective words or phrases might be better suited for dialogue than for setting a scene, like "masterpiece of art". Words like dazzling or amazing and such are easier to comprehend and form a quick image. But unnecessarily long descriptions can become difficult to comprehend and make the text tedious to read.
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Please proofread this:

In my pursuit of endeavours related to my field of study (Pharmacy), I was thrilled to find this opportunity to participate in the research internship program at xxxx. For the past couple of months, I've been studying various research articles on Brain-Computer Interface — an astonishing technology merging mind and machine — which has built in me a need to do thorough research on how to curb depression and other mood disorders using this technology.

I'm fascinated with learning about what happens if we use BCI to induce long-term potentiation in areas of the brain where serotonin levels are low. As depression is a growing concern nowadays so, research like this will at least be a positive step in treating some traits of it. Furthermore, the research units I chose are specifically related to neuro and computational neuroscience, which I believe will further help me understand the complexities of this automated system and give me an excellent chance to use my developed research competencies while expanding them to contribute to your institute substantially. I strongly feel that this internship program will undoubtedly give me the best possible understanding and training in neuroscience, brain implant, and artificial intelligence, as this program has a strong commitment to basic biological research and its applications. As a pharmacist, I want to answer biological questions that can assist in alleviating issues facing human health. Xxx will help me achieve this goal, specifically with the presence of such incredible teachers and the biomedically focused research environment. The program's interdisciplinary nature also fits someone like me who has diverse interests and broad biological background.

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My undergraduate pharmacy education and the experience I gained from the company where I worked previously as a quality assurance officer have taught me vital critical thinking skills, how to deal with complexity, diversity, and change, and given me a broad, interdisciplinary understanding of biology, science, and the world. I owe so much to science and biology, and I want to see the field continue to grow while I continue to grow with it.

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Everything else is good! 👍

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Hi, someone could correct my work please ?

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Hello, can someone could correct my work please ? 1: More and more people ask for a quick action to become independent energetically especially from Russian fossil fuels, even it means putting the fight against climate change aside.

2: seek: to look for, to attempt, to try
A policy: a decision or measure concerning.
To be able to quickly, self-sufficient energy, Germany and Italy are ready to reopen coal power plants and to ship unnaturalgas from overseas.
The faster the chapter.

3: Although the COP26 promise to phase out coal power, the current crisis forces us to increase our cool consumption/consume more coal than expected.

4: As a result of the invasion of Ukraine, most countries must reschedule/reorganize their agenda to reduce their Carbone consumption to face the lack of Russian oil/energy crisis.

5: The pro-fossil fuel lobby is happy to be able to carry on their business as the change now suggests.

6: The pro-fossil fuel lobby risk disruption to their economic system due to crises and disasters as lobbies don’t make this transition quickly.

7: According to Lefebvre, we must very quickly read the EU towards renewable energy because to separate from the Russian fossil energy we must first not use this energy anymore.

8: The return to fossil fuels enriches the companies that are responsible for the climate crisis.

9: Silvia Pastorelli, Greenpeace EU climate and energy campaigner, asserts that they are responsible for transfer Putin’s money.

10: G member of extinction rebellion Ukraine, accuses the EU of financing Russia, after beginning of the war.

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11: EU must set up taxes to use this money to stop using fossil fuels.

12: Russian troops are financed by the EU which is dependent on Putin forges, cool and oil, as Sergiy, a Kyiv-based XR Ukraine member suggest.

13: EU must set up case to use this money to stop using fossil fuels, as Pastorelli says.

14: According to Greenpeace we must tax the companies that have values advantage of the crisis and then use this money for the transition that we need to slowdown Russia.

15: Environmentalists fear that the EU REPowerEU commission’s plan to develop their natural gas reserves will… a lot of greenhouse gas emission.

16: Building new terminals to import fossil fuel is against the EU’s plans as Tora Conolly suggest, senior gas campaigner at Global Witness.

17: We must take measure including improving our renewable energy, heat pumps and isolation reserve as Conolly suggest.

18: Conolly says this could be the beginning of a radical change that Europe needs.

19: Pastorelli agrees with this idea und add that we need slow Europe’s energy systems.

20: Developing renewable systems would keep us away from climate crisis.

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Hi! I have a passage here that I am not sure it is well written or not . I will really appreciated it if anyone can take some of his/her precious time to read it and point out if any sentence/words feels strange or out of place. Thank you !

Supply chains for commodities
We take serving the national strategies and regional economic development as our responsibility and hold fast to the purpose of "maintaining our foothold in supply chains, serving industry chains, and creating value chains.” We has built a four-in-one integrated supply chain service platform that combines “logistics, business flow, capital flow, and information flow” through integration and innovation, providing customers with full value chain circulation services from the procurement and supply of raw and auxiliary materials and semi-finished products to the allocation and distribution of finished products, and offers all-round supply chain solutions under the “full industry-chain service model” with high standards for the manufacturing industry.

south sapphire
# raven narwhal Hi! I have a passage here that I am not sure it is well written or not . I will ...

"We take serving the national strategies and regional economic development as part of our responsibility"

Or, "... economic development as one of our responsibilities"

"We have built a four-in-one..."

From the "We have built sentence" phrase, everything after is one sentence, which is extremely long. Perhaps consider making it shorter with more fullstops or semi colons.

Everything is is beautifully written and grammatically correct

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Aw that's alright, feel free to ask anything else

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Sam : Hello Kat! It’s been a while since we saw each other.

Kat : Sam! It has been a long time. How are you? Have you been well? I remember you were talking about wanting to exercise more the last time we met. How has that been going?

Sam : Oh, not as well as I hoped. I forgot how much I disliked waking up early. It’s very difficult to get up early for a run. Improving my fitness is not as easy as I imagined.

Kat : Maybe you need to remind yourself what do you like about exercising in the morning. Don’t you enjoy breathing in the morning air when exercising? I remember hiking up the hill together in the morning when we were in college.

Sam : Oh, that was long ago, Kat! Those hiking trips wouldn’t have happened if you didn’t remember to wake me up.

Kat : I think you need to stop sleeping so late. You can also choose to run in the evenings instead.

Sam : Well, I need to be able to stop to take a break. I’ve been having to work long hours.

Kat : I’m sure you’ll be able to find a way, Sam. Shall we go get some coffee and talk about this more?

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hello everyone...I have to write a short script for a roleplay for class...if it is possible, could someone please help to see if there are issues?

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Looks great! only issue I can see is that in Kat's second line, you can say "remind yourself what you like about" rather than "remind yourself what you do like about", but that's quite subtle I think - even then, I would say that even if you kept the do in, it's unlikely that it would raise any flags

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If you're looking for improvement, I would say that you can afford to use some more contractions; this feels quite long and formal (Eg: Kat's first line, "It has been a long time" -> "It's been a long time". With that being said, this is really good, and that kind of tone manipulation is stuff you can typically leave to the actors without worry

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In the third paragraph, I think it should be dislike, since Sam currently still doesn’t like waking up early

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If you’re looking to elevate it even more, and have the script sound more natural, you can think about word choice. Words like dislike, difficult, imagine, shall we, etc are all technically correct. But using them in the context you have here sounds a bit formal and not so much like a convo between old friends

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For example, want to go grab some coffee? Want to go get some coffee? Would you like to go get some coffee? You could drop “go” and it would still be correct grammatically…English is weird. Overall amazing job!

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Thank you everyone for your help

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I've responded the below answer in the #english-questions channel for a question which is related to the meaning of the word "deficit". I would appreciate if anyone help to correct my grammatical or any other mistakes in the below sentences.

"It means "money shortage"
For Example:
Trade deficit of country X has increased to 20pc due to Russia - Ukraine war.
Due to lack of governance, Y country's budget deficit surge over 30pc this year."

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This is my School homework and I hope you guys give comments on it 🙇🏻‍♀️It about Review TV program.

Inventing Anna was a big hit series on Netflix. This drama is unsuitable for children under 17, however, I still watched it. Inventing Anna is based on a real story and the perspective of reporter Vivian Kent defies her editor to pursue the story of Anna Delvey. The main character of this drama is obviously Anna Delvey or her real name Anna Sorokin.

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I like this series because it gave me a new perspective to enjoy the drama. The perspective of this drama is the reporter Vivian Kent. She investigated Anna's whole crime process in NYC. As is depicted in the series, Vivian was pregnant through the investigation and exposed partly because she wanted to redeem herself after the mistake that ruined her career. In the middle of the process, she went to visit Anna in the prison, and I appreciate her perseverance in visiting Anna, even Anna always refused to have a talk with her. I also appreciate that Vivian knew that Anna couldn’t tell the whole story but she still figured it out by using the conversation that Anna talked about and contacting people that had met Anna before. Even went to Germany to meet Anna Delvey's parents to find out what made Anna that special. things that she had been throw reflect Vivian is an indomitable professional reporter.

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I also appreciate how the director presented the shallowness of the upper class. Everyone in the upper class seems to wear expensive, what is your background, what is your occupation, and your achievement. No one cares about the real you. Therefore Anna knew this was the weakness of the upper class, so she could lie about everything that was made, and surprisingly the rich did trust her ridiculous plan.

Now I'm going to talk about the things that I don’t like about it. I think the cast Julia Garner's accent was weird and a bit obnoxious, while the real Anna does not have that accent at all. This will make a label Anna Sorokin(the real Anna) actually sounds like that. Also, I don't like the scene when Vivian was giving birth to her child because it was too overwhelming, plus the scene was unnecessary, it didn't make any plot twists or plot progression.

Overall, I do recommend this drama to people that are interested in crime, reality shows, or scam movies and shows. If I need to rate this movie I will rate it 6.7/10.

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'Inventing Anna' was a big hit series on Netflix. This drama is unsuitable for children under 17, however, I still watched it. Inventing Anna is based on a real story and the perspective of reporter Vivian Kent**, who defies** her editor to pursue the story of Anna Delvey. The main character of this drama is obviously (not necessary) Anna Delvey or her real name**, Anna Sorokin**

I like this series because it gave me a new perspective to enjoy the drama. The perspective of this drama is the reporter Vivian Kent. She investigated Anna's whole crime process in NYC. As is depicted in the series, Vivian was pregnant throughout the investigation and <exposed partly> (? unclear to me) because she wanted to redeem herself after the mistake that ruined her career. In the middle of the process, she went to visit Anna in the prison, and I appreciate her perseverance in visiting Anna, even though Anna **would always refuse ** to talk with her. I also appreciate that Vivian knew that Anna couldn’t tell the whole story, but she still figured it out by using the conversation they had previously and contacting people that had met Anna before. **She even **went to Germany to meet Anna Delvey's parents to find out what made Anna so special. things that she had been throw reflect Vivian is an indomitable professional reporter. (? unclear sentence)

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I also appreciate how the director presented the shallowness of the upper class. Everyone in the upper class seems to wear expensive, <what is your background, what is your occupation, and your achievement.> (? unclear) No one cares about the real you. Therefore, Anna knew this was the weakness of the upper class, so she could lie about everything that was made, and surprisingly the rich did trust her ridiculous plan.

Now I'm going to talk about the things that I **didn't **like about the show. I think the cast Julia Garner's accent was weird and a bit obnoxious, while the real Anna does not have that accent at all. <This will make a label Anna Sorokin(the real Anna) actually sounds like that.> (? unclear) Also, I don't like the scene when Vivian was giving birth to her child because it was too overwhelming, plus the scene was unnecessary, it didn't make any plot twists or plot progression.

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@remote mesa I put <> around sentences which I couldn't quite figure out what you meant

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welcome :))

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I'm not here for proof reading, actually I've been doing this course on coursera on the science of well being. Some parts of it has been hard to understand for me since I'm an intermediate english speaker. I do not understand some points they mention in lectures and some parts of reference articles that's been linked. I would appreciate it if someone would like to help me figure out what they are actually trying to say and the type of language that's used in these lectures and reference links. I've put it here cuz the messages stay longer and people reading this channel are seriously helping out. Thank you.

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Please ping me if you seriously wanna help out thanks

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Independence

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Hello. Really glad that i discovers this server. I went through older post and i like the fact that people are opened and responsive. I am reading a book now and try to summarise every chapter in order to learn and improve my english. If you have time, can you please take a look to see there are any mistake in it? Thank you.

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The first chapter tells the story of Mat, a pilot who operated a propeller flight. He had an issue with one of his engines while he was travelling to Louisiana carrying freights for a factory.
While he was at 3300 m altitude, he observed that he was loosing oil for one of his engines. He didn’t panic, his experience helped him remain tranquil. He played with piston engines since he was old enough to hold a wrench in his hand.
Matt went mentally through his checklist. He knew he has to stop the engine with the problems, otherwise it would seize up.
Finally he got to Louisiana with only one engine, but his landing was a special one. He had to make a left-hand turn in order to compensate the missing engine.

There are some immutable principles of learning:

  1. Learning requires memory so we can recall what we have learned
  2. Learning is an ongoing process, we learn all our live to be able to navigate through new situations that occur.
  3. The learning principles are acquired, and sometimes can be contra intuitively.
south sapphire
# crimson badge The first chapter tells the story of Mat, a pilot who operated a propeller fligh...

The first chapter tells the story of Mat, a pilot who operated a propeller flight. He had an issue with one of his engines while he travelled to Louisiana, carrying freights for a factory.
While he was at **a **3300m altitude, he observed that he was loosing oil for one of his engines. He didn’t panic - his experience helped him remain~~ tranquil~~ calm and collected (or just calm, 'tranquil' isn't really common and doesn't sound the best in this context). He played with piston engines since he was old enough to hold a wrench in his hand.
Matt went through his checklist mentally. He knew he had to stop the engine with the problem, otherwise it would seize up.
Finally, he got to Louisiana with only one engine, but his landing was a special one. He had to make a left-hand turn in order to compensate the missing engine.

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Means of financial support
The program is fully funded by the Ministry of Higher Education and Scientific Research. However, as a mean of additional financial support, I am planning to open a new bank account before I come to Canada, so I can withdraw money at any point in time, in case of any unplanned event. Moreover, in case of emergency, my father will be supporting me.

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tender trail
# tulip wolf Means of financial support The program is fully funded by the Ministry of Higher...

"so I can withdraw money at any point in time" . "In time" is unnecessary here, but it still sounds good with it.
"in case of an emergency". I would suggest also replacing "moreover" with "in addition".

"Moreover" is only used more when you are trying to persuade someone and give reasons ("in addition" does the same thing, but can be also used just to list additional things)

Everything else is good

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@muted notch Post your text here for grammar check.

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How does it sound this sentence for you?

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The judges’ verdicts are skewed by the time of the day when they give it.

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Hi, is there anyone who would check my short essay please?☺️

bitter geode
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The Best Doctor? - Sport!
The Importance of Physical Activities.

"All you do is just play computer games and watch TV; back when I was younger, we spent our time outside!" This is a sentence which young people often hear from their parents or grandparents. And even though it might be unpleasant to admit, there is some truth to this favourite phrase of adults. As a result of the modern world offering endless sources of entertainment, a lot of young people forget how vital sport is. It improves our physical health, but it is also very beneficial for our mental health. It is scientifically proven that our body releases endorphin hormones during physical exercise. Endorphins are also known as "the body's natural painkillers" and create a feeling of well-being. However, the sport has much more positive effects on our body than just its health. It usually connects people who share the same passion for a particular activity. It gives the opportunity to meet new friends and share their favourite pastime, in which they can move forward and get better together.

To sum it up, physical activities improve our mental and physical health as well as our social skills. However, it does not have to be the most demanding exercise. Doing sport simply because you believe you have to is worthless. The most important thing is finding an activity you enjoy and want to do. Even a simple walk counts.

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@sturdy moth Just a small note, normally "sport" is referred to in the plural, as "sports" when you're talking generally about all sports. For example, instead of ”However, the sport has much more..." it would be "However, sports have much more..."

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Hello, I've written a poem and I was wondering if anyone could give me your thoguhts on it? It would be 20% of my final assesement grade, please dm me! (Ps: It's required to be in the style of female poet-Emily Dickinson)

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Hello guys can you please check my opinion essay? It's quite short

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My school is deciding charity which we will support. We have two options, UNICEF, and Friends of the Earth. I think that we should support UNICEF, because if focuses on helping children.

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My first reason for choosing UNICEF is that many children all around the world do not have access to proper medical support, education and even do not have enough food and water.

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I am convinced that supporting this organization will increase living standards which will eliminate poor regions on our planet.

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My final point is that people might say that our money in organization as big UNICEF would disappear because it is not transparent, and we cannot see their results. But the truth is although it is a big organization, it has significant results. In my opinion the fact that they achieved the Nobel prize and Indira Gandhi prize is a clear proof that their work has results.

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In conclusion, I believe that helping children will have positive impact on whole world, because it will reduce poverty.

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heady nova
# sturdy moth The Best Doctor? - Sport! The Importance of Physical Activities. "All you do is...

I would change "how vital sport is" to "how vital sports are" because you're referring to the plural, but also it sounds as though you're using "sport" at the end of this sentence to refer to the act of being a good sport instead of the noun encompassing many different sports. Also "However, the sport has much more" should be "However, sports have many more" since you're referring to the number of benefits sports can have on our health and not the size of the benefits to our health. I hope that makes sense.

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"When I was nine years old, I had a dream. I thought I was close to home, in a very large courtyard, where a great number of boys were having fun. Some were laughing, others were playing, and quite a few were swearing. When I heard the swearing, I jumped into their midst. I tried to silence them using my fists and words.

At that moment a majestic man appeared, nobly dressed. A white mantle covered his entire person. His face was so bright that I could not look at it. He called me by name and ordered me to lead the boys. He added: "You will have to make friends of them, not by beatings, but by gentleness and charity. Go on, speak, explain to them that sin is an evil thing and that friendship with the Lord is a precious good. Confused and frightened, I replied that I was a poor and ignorant boy, that I was not capable of speaking about religion to those brats.
At that moment, the boys stopped their brawling, shouting, and swearing and all gathered around the speaker. Almost without knowing what I was doing, I asked him: "Who are you, who command me impossible things?" Precisely because these things seem impossible to you," he answered, "you must make them possible by obedience and by acquiring knowledge. "How shall I acquire knowledge?" "I will give you the teacher. Under her guidance one becomes wise, but without her even he who is wise becomes a poor ignoramus." "But who are you?" "I am the son of her whom your mother taught you to greet three times a day." "Mother always tells me not to be with those I don't know, without her permission. So, tell me your name." "Ask my mother my name."

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At that moment I saw near him a majestic woman, clothed in a mantle that shone on all sides, as if at every point there was a very bright star. Seeing me more and more confused, he beckoned me to go near her, took me gently by the hand and said: "Look". I looked and realised that the boys had all disappeared. In their place was a multitude of kids, dogs, cats, bears, and several other animals. The majestic woman said to me: "Here is your field, here is where you must work. Grow up humble, strong, and robust, and what you see happening to these animals now, you must do for my children. I looked again, and behold, instead of fierce animals, there appeared as many tame lambs jumping, running, bleating, and celebrating around that man and that lady. At that point in the dream, I began to cry. I said that lady that I did not understand all those things. Then she put her hand on my head and said: "In due time, you will understand everything".

She had just said these words when a noise woke me up. Everything had disappeared. I was stunned. My hands seemed to ache from the punches I had thrown, and my face burned from the slaps I had received. In the morning I immediately told my brothers and sisters about the dream, who laughed, then my mother and grandmother. Everyone gave their own interpretation. Joseph said: "You are going to be a shepherd. My mother: "Who knows, maybe I'll become a priest". Antonio maligned: "You will be a leader of brigands". The last word came from my grandmother, who could neither read nor write: "One should not believe in dreams". I was of the grandmother's opinion. But I have never been able to get that dream out of my mind."

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This is the translation for a document of a memory from D. Bosco.
Do you guys notice anything wrong or incorrect?

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Hello I need QUICK HELP guys! Could someone (preferably C1/native) please correct this essay I wrote?
The topic:
Parents give their children pocket money for reward when doing household chores. Give 3 advantages and disadvantages of this idea.

Please correct me even if there are the smallest mistakes, thank you!
(I will send you a photo in private message cause I can't here)

gleaming zinc
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Ok, no need now, thanks to the people who wrote to me 💝

lime bison
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this sentence is correct ? or i have to write differently

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@brisk inlet @main spear @sullen minnow@bronze ridge @heady nova @rugged prairie sorry i tag u all but i just need help

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incorrect

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sentences beginning with infinitives are almost never questions

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okk

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Thanku @fiery bridge

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please can some review my essay

drowsy creek
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Sure post it here

heady nova
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hiii

dense gulch
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<@&909100555157262347> well i was writing an introduction for my project and i just wanted someone to review what i have wrote is grammatically correct or not
t's just 3/4th of a page

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anyone?

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Sure thing, you can drop it here

dense gulch
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well i am not abe to

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it's not alowing me to upload here

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gotta be level 5 i guess?

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done

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here

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The partition of Bengal was an event carried out by the British authorities to reorganize the large province of Bengal by dividing it into smaller provinces based on language and the two major religions within the population of the province that were Hindus and Muslims. Initially, this move was intended to ease out the difficulties within the administration of the very large state of Bengal which consisted of present-day West Bengal, Bihar, Odisha, Bangladesh and Assam. Such a large size with a huge population led to the negligence of eastern part of Bengal, especially the rural areas because much of the industry was centred within Calcutta, being the capital of British India in the early 20th century and situated in the western side of Bengal, the rest of the eastern region was ignored and was lacking in industry, education and employment. Soon, the idea of using the Bengal partition as an advantage to supress the growing nationalism in Bengal occurred to the realisation of the British. This whole event later led to many unforeseen consequences, some of which we continue to suffer from, even today.

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The partition of Bengal was an event carried out by the British authorities to reorganize the large province of Bengal by dividing it into smaller provinces. This was based on language and the two major religions within the population of the province that were Hindus and Muslims. Initially, this move was intended to ease out the difficulties within the administration of the very large province of Bengal which consisted of present-day West Bengal, Bihar, Odisha, Bangladesh, and Assam. Such a large size with a huge population led to the negligence of eastern part of Bengal, especially the rural areas because much of the industrial capacity was centred within the city of Calcutta, being the capital of British India in the early 20th century. Calcutta was situated in the western side of Bengal, this resulted in the eastern regions being ignored and lacking in industry, education and employment. **Soon, the idea of using the Bengal partition as an advantage to supress the growing nationalism in Bengal occurred to the realisation of the British. ** This whole event later led to many unforeseen consequences, some of which we continue to suffer from, even today.

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All bolded parts I would re word

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i re-wrote the whole thing again

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hello, this is my extremely detailed recap of 1984, i unravelled the deeper meaning of the book and worked hours on it.

WINSTON go to bar and like gin. He say: ahh I like gin so many. He enjoy gin very many. And then he go away to not bar and walk to house. He dance. Julia come and dance also. Then big brother not happy and he say: no this not cool, why you dancing???. Julia say: why I love dancing. Then Winston cry and he go to prison. Winston now have pain. He cry. Now he love big brother because he killed rat. Winston good, thought criminal not good. Thank you for coming to my ted talk.

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hello. im a international student. im not great at english grammar. i just graduated and trying to write a post for my facebook status. i hope you guys can help.

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Last Saturday, I earned my bachelor degree in architecture from the Illinois Institute of Technology at Chicago. It has been 6 long years since I started my journey of architecture. The journey has a rocky start, but two great things I learned in architecture school is to adapt and iterate. I can't make it this far without the support of my family, professors, colleagues and friends. I am grateful to God for the guidance which led me to this moment.

south lance
# dense gulch

The era between the end of the 19th century and the early 20th century was a time when nationalism in India was
growing rapidly. Especially with the large province of Bengal being the center. The British authorities saw this as a rising
threat to their rule in India and this fear of losing control over India gave birth to the idea of partitioning of the province of Bengal. It was a move by the British to suppress the growing patriotism among the masses by dividing the eastern and
western parts of Bengal as the east had majority of Muslim and the west had majority of Hindus. This would create a
divide between the Hindus and the Muslims that would help in suppress the growing nationalist movement. The idea of the
partitioning of Bengal was first proposed in 1903 and to clear the air about this proposal they said that the
province had grown too large with a population of almost 78.5 million. It was adding difficulties in the
administration of the province. Later this idea of the British backfired badly. It led to the famous Swadeshi movement to form and grow. Furthermore it caused many other events against the British.(give examples)

tight sandal
# leaden garnet Last Saturday, I earned my bachelor degree in architecture from the Illinois Ins...

Last Saturday, I had earned my bachelor degree in architecture from the Illinois Institute of Technology at Chicago. I started my journey in architecture 6 years ago, the journey had a rocky start, nevertheless it taught me how to adapt and iterate. This journey would not have been possible without the support of my family, professors, colleagues and friends. I am forever grateful to God for his guidance which led me to this very moment.

Writers notes: I'm not an English professor, however, English was my preferred subject at school and I excelled in it, this is the best I can come up with, do note, this is formal writing and not informal, If you want your facebook status to look 'informal' I would advise using serious or low-tone words and you can be less serious on grammar, but either way it works. Hope this helps! I try my best.

dense gulch
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I'll help you

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Last Saturday, I graduated my bachelor’s degree in architecture from the Illinois Institute of Technology in Chicago. I started my journey in architecture 6 years ago, although it initially had a rocky start, progressively it taught me how to adapt and iterate. This journey would not have been possible without the support of my family, professors, colleagues and friends. I am forever grateful to God for his guidance which led me to this very moment.
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And my Mum did architecture at Oxford :)

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heres a speech I wrote can someone please assess it

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Thank you for coming and listening to me today. I’m delighted to be presenting myself this fine morning to talk about a matter discussed quite often. Which is whether students should be in a student council or not.

How many of you think that students should be in a student council?

Often, students are in the student councils in their schools, but does that really help them? The short answer is no. When people claim that putting students in a council helps them develop skills, or improve their attendance and academics, they are simply lying. When a student is drained of their energy by participating in unnecessary meetings, they cannot focus on studies and thus their results because they are too busy writing reports that are often not looked at by the heads.

Life’s full of problems, isn’t it? However, they can just be reported to the responsible head and dealt with from there instead of wasting students time in meetings when most of the things go off as unrewarded because at the end of the day it is the heads that need to make those ideas come to life. Many students claim that despite giving their opinions, nothing ever happens. That basically means time is wasted, and time is precious. Don’t you agree?

In addition, students cannot spend much time for the student council because later the parents will hold the school accountable for their child’s low performance despite being very active in the student council. Some even mentioned that their teachers were angered because their assignments were turned in late because of how much planning is involved.

At the end of the day don’t you think that it’s a waste of time when opinions are treated as though nothing? Students and teachers, I encourage you to think logically instead of blindly following unsupported claims on this topic and look at this from a realistic point of view

Thank you for your time and have a great day ahead.

ionic tartan
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Hello can somone help me, I got 2 short essays of the same topic and i want anyone to help me find each essay's mistakes and tell me which essay is better and why

heady nova
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Hello, how are you ?

drowsy creek
knotty hatch
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Hey, if anyone is a good poet or writer?
I need help as I have a poetry exam where everyone has to read a poem of his own written, I wrote poetry by myself, if it's needed improvement or error omitting then plz guide me, I am nervous

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Am I writing this correct?

Opens the door to see Kim training in a poorly dimmed room.

supple osprey
lilac maple
# knotty hatch

"shyer" is correct in American english, "shier" in British. (or vise versa; usual context is "more shy than" but because it's in poetic context it is acceptable)

the following part "as i could see less him in cold" isn't grammatically correct, "less of him" could fix it, but i would recommend if looking for different versions "as i see lesser of him" or "the sun is as shy as i could see him, less in the cold". the first alternate version is poetic but old English, "lesser" isn't used very often in non-poetry forms, the second sounds more correct but not as poetic.

the poem is in present/future-ish tense, but the line "the butterflies travel to the flower for growth" is just present. (future-present would be "the butterflies are traveling"). slight inconsistency but fine either way.

but a very beautiful poem at its core

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In my opinion computers made life easier and convenient due to several reasons listed bellow

First, not only did it make it life easier but it made it much cheaper for example,
Before computers were invented people had to pay to send mails to a friend or a company but with computers you can now send mails via Gmail which is a free email service provider that allows anyone to send and receive emails
And also you no longer have to pay for transportation just to search for a market or a mall but with computers you can now find the exact location of anything you want to find.
Secondly, computers can save a lot of time for example, you no longer need to travel to attend a business meeting to or to communicate with a friend because computers provide apps that you can download to have online meetings and calls and you can also work from home using a computer which saves soo much time rather then going to the place you work in.
Thirdly, computers made learning easier because it has a wide range of resources you can use in order to learn and understand several things like a new language, school related subjects and cooking lessons and many more

Conclusion
Computers made life easier because they are cheaper, time saving and an easy place to learn

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please help me find my mistakes im new to writing essays ⬆️

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I would help you but I struggle to answer long questions like this 😔

unique raven
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u can say "letter" instead of mails

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i personally used that and its helpful

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lilac maple
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it makes sense, I'd just add a coma after queen.

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I´d say... You´ll still be "my queen" but only in my dreams

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I'd write it as "You're still my Queen, but now only in my dreams." --capitalizing the Q makes it a proper noun, like a name.

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Sample Paper: Writing
Which facilities should the local authorities support?
There is always a discussion about the investments the State is making with our money. But what
about local improvements of the environment? What should the local authorities spend our money
on? There are several options but for now we are going to focus on Public Gardens, and gymnasiums.
Gyms are a great way to improve your health. You don’t have to buy any equipment, because it is
subscription based and even if you’re new to fitness, the employees will be very helpful with learning
the basics. But just building a gym and supporting, doesn’t necessarily cause everyone to be
healthier. At the end of the day it is still the decision of the individual whether they want to live a
healthy life or if they fall into the trap of instant gratification.
Another great way to support a cities image, is having a great flora. A city might have great
skyscrapers, tons of jobs and an interesting nightlife. But being surrounded with only traffic and dull
concrete gets boring really fast. And this is where a Park would come into play. A park offers the
opportunity to relief from all the stress that’s being put on the citizens. Whether it’s from work or for
new citizens that moved there from more rural areas.
Parks have higher importance when it comes to support, they improve the cities image and them
more enjoyable to be a citizen of. To be healthy, one does not need a gym. It all comes down to daily
habits whether one is healthy or not.

Hello, this text is my answer to a writing exercise from a C1 exam sampler paper.I would highly appreciate If someone could raise my attention to all the mistakes I've done and give me some advice on how i could improve my register and style according to that level. Trash on me, it helps learning.
thank you :D

stark moth
stark moth
# stark moth Personally, I might have missed a bit but other then a few grammar errors, its v...

The main grammar errors I see is with capital letters. Remember that if you want to be formal, only use capital/uppercase letters for names, (ex. I think Amelia is kind.) and the first letter of the first word in a sentence. (It's amazing to think that all this was done in such little time!) This also applies to languages and specific locations. (ex. She speaks fluent Japanese, the White House was very fancy, lets go to California!).

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It sometimes depends, but personally I feel that you would say "public gardens" and not "Public Gardens"-just like how you didn't use uppercase letters for "gymnasiums". Its not a specific locations, but a group of locations, so I feel you wouldn't use capital letters.

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And it also isn't a big problem, but instead of "investments the State is making with our money" you wouldn't use a capital letter for "State"- it doesn't fit.

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But if you don't just want to worry about capital letters, then think about the way your paper will sound.

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What is bold and has parentheses around it means I recommend to add it there, it would look like this: (fun). And what is crossed out is what I would recommend deleting, like this: enjoyable. And if something is crossed out and them something in parentheses would say "Replace with: ___"-that means I recommend you replace what is crossed out with what I said to replace it with. Here is an example: "enjoyable (Replace with: wonderful)"-that means I recommend to replace "enjoyable" with "wonderful". And something that is just bold means I corrected the original word-fixed its grammar. But remember: these are just recommendations- feel free to edit and create your paper as you desire. I'm just saying what personally sounds better. So here are my recommendations:

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Which (public) facilities should the local authorities support?
There is always a discussion about the investments the state is making~~ with our money~~. But what
about local improvements of the environment? What should the local authorities spend our money
on? There are several options but for now we are going to focus on public gardens, and gymnasiums.
Gyms are a great way to improve your health. You don’t have to buy any equipment, because it is
subscription based**(-)** and even if you’re new to fitness, the employees will be very helpful with learning
the basics. But just building a gym and supporting (your new business), doesn’t necessarily cause everyone to be
healthier. At the end of the day it is still the decision of the individual whether they want to live a
healthy life or if they fall into the trap of instant gratification.
Another great way to support a cities image, is having a great flora. A city might have great
skyscrapers, tons of jobs and an interesting nightlife. But being surrounded with only traffic and dull
concrete gets boring really fast. And this is where a park would come into play. A park offers the
opportunity to (replace with: for) relief from all the stress that’s being put on the citizens. Whether it’s from work or for
new citizens that moved there from more rural areas.
Parks have higher importance when it comes to support, they improve the cities image and them (replace with: make life)
more enjoyable to be a citizen~~ of~~. To be healthy, one does not need a gym. It all comes down to daily
habits **(that determine)**whether one is healthy or not.

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These are just recommendations- feel free to edit and create your paper as you desire. I'm just saying what personally sounds better.

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A Quiet Night

Oh, I can remember that night like it was yesterday…

Not only did I arrive at my home exhausted but I also starving, at no time had I been working so hard. When I was finally in my home I went directly to make myself a cup of tea and to cut a piece of cake, after doing this I took everything and went to watch a movie while I ate.

Everything was fine until I saw a shadow or something like that looking at me through the window. The thing has a white, shiny and piercing eyes… I was frozen for a while… I could feel his gaze… A spectral but quiet gaze… I was totally petrified but as soon as I blinked the shadow missed in the darkness of the night. Hardly could my mind process it when a loud sound coming from my kitchen broke the night's silence. However, how I had been working so hard, I thought it was a creation of my mind… Finally when I was able to move myself, I took the knife with which I cut the cake and mustering the necessary courage I decided to go and check the origin of the sound out. I walked carefully and slowly, at no time have I been as scared as I was then. Once in the kitchen I looked around and found only my cat Jimmy, that was a rest for me and my poor heart.

The rest of the night was quiet, a quiet night… The thing just missed, or was there never really anything there? I don´t know and I won't know…

lilac maple
# ebon lynx **A Quiet Night** > Oh, I can remember that night like it was yesterday… > > ...

The can before remember is unnecessary but not incorrect, mostly because you're actively telling the story, therefore you're actively remembering. You can still use "can", though.

"but i also starving" is incomplete, you can either add:
a) was after "i" (but i was also starving)
or
b) remove "i" because it's the second point/after a comma. (..arrive at my home exhausted, but also starving.)

"at no time" is a little redundant, "at no point" is freer or replace with "never before" given the context.

after cake should be a period (.) or change to "then" (or "afterwards" but be cautious with afterwards.)

there's no location (where did you take it?) and the next part doesn't explain where, just an activity and a verb. Easy fix, add "go" after to, because then it doubles as a location. where? wherever you're watching the movie.

You went from past tense to present tense, change "has" to "had"" unless there is clear reason to keep it there until present with 99% of the time there is not.

"could feel" would roll better as "felt", especially using past tense

"the shadow missed in the darkness of the night" doesn't make sense. did you mean mist?

change next part to "My mind could hardly process it". there's a word for why but i can't remember now I'll edit when i remember lol sorry.

"however, how i had been.." how should be changed to since.

"the knife of which i cut the cake" sounds awkward "the knife i used to cut the cake" or just "the knife i cut the cake with"

comma after courage

again with the at no time I'd recommend that you change it to "I've never been as scared as i was then." It's currently correct English, but the writer in me needed to point that out.

"that was a rest for me and my poor heart" is awkward phrasing. no exact phrase correction, just be careful not to use active phrases when passive are needed.

"a quiet night" is poetic, not matching the toning of the story. instead, repeat it by saying "very quiet..." same ominence, but more fitting.

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add "did" ("did the thing...") to the beginning, same less slang-like.

"i won't know" is almost future tense, or in other words, too confident for the future. instead, i suggest, especially being the last sentence, "i don't know and may never know."

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stark moth
dense gulch
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how to i ping english helpers?

ebon lynx
dense gulch
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@dense gulch now i know why you're not getting help

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Dude copy paste text here

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No one gunna open that

dense gulch
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aight

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REASONS BEHIND THE PARTITION OF BENGAL
On January 6th 1899, Lord Curzon of Kedleston Derbyshire became the viceroy of India and with him, came a momentous event that was THE PARTITONING OF BENGAL, an action against the Indian masses and,

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ironically enough, claimed to be for their betterment. Despite what the case was, it was not appreciated by the people. However, he was not the first person to propose such an idea. In fact, earlier in 1874 and 1897, there were some discussions within the British officials about reducing the size of Bengal. By the early 1900s, the province of Bengal was a massive state encompassing the current lands of West Bengal, Bangladesh, Bihar, parts of Chhattisgarh, Orissa, and Assam with an area of 232,752 km2 and a population of 78.5 million which almost equated to 1/4th of the total population of India. The enormous size proved to be challenging to govern, and since most of the industry was based around Kolkata situated in the west, this caused the negligence of the poorer eastern regions of Bengal. Many historians believe that the initial idea of partitioning up Bengal had been brought up by the British solely due to administrative difficulties which may entail valid reasoning, but soon, the British saw this as an opportunity to segregate the Hindus and the Muslims since the east of Bengal were mostly Muslims, with the west being a Hindu majority. We can see this strategy in Lord Curzon’s map of partitioning {INSERT THE MAP I STOLEN FROM LIBRARY}, from which he had decided to split Orissa and Bihar and join fifteen eastern districts of Bengal with Assam. The eastern province held a population of 31 million, with its centre at Dhaka. The western districts formed the other province with Orissa and Bihar. The union of western Bengal, Orissa and Bihar reduced the Bengali speakers to a minority status. This barrier between the Hindus and the Muslims would help the British to repress the rising patriotism in Bengal, which ultimately lead to the suppression of opposing sentiments towards the British in the whole country.

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i just want someone to correct my grammar and add some facy words to it

fiery bridge
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maybe some semicolons, for example

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The enormous size proved to be challenging to govern; since most of the industry was based around Kolkata situated in the west, this caused the negligence of the poorer eastern regions of Bengal.

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(don't know if that's better. could not)

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Are there enthusiastic guys help correct mistakes?
Thanks a lot
Or just give me a score
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