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neat orbit
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Dear dinning hall leader:
Iā€™m sorry to disturb you, but I want to say this thing itā€™s many colleague what they want to advice.
The tables in the dinning hall maybe use for long times and now have some problem on them. Could you fix the unstable tables please?
I sincerely hope our dinning hall leader can pay attention in it.

Wish you all the best!

From:Kiki

robust cloud
# neat orbit Dear dinning hall leader: Iā€™m sorry to disturb you, but I want to say this thing...

Hi! You did a good job getting the message across but there are some errors. The first paragraph is kind of hard to understand, if you changed "Iā€™m sorry to disturb you, but I want to say this thing itā€™s many colleague what they want to advice." to "I'm sorry to disturb you, but there is a problem I would like to bring up, and many of my colleagues agree that we should take steps to resolve it" than the paragraph would be much easier to read and get your message across in a much clearer manner. In the second paragraph the sentence, "The tables in the dinning hall maybe use for long times and now have some problem on them." should be, "The tables in the dining hall have been in use for a long time now and have some issues I think we should try to resolve.", The rest of the writing is perfect! (Hope this helped!)

brittle kindle
neat orbit
neat orbit
slim scroll
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Hi guys, do you think it's more correct to say: relax by playing some game or playing some game? I don't know when use by

heady nova
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you wouldn't say either of those you would say "relax by playing a game" or "play a game to relax"

main compass
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anyone available to check my writing

lofty cobalt
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Maybe if you post it here @main compass , someone might check it. I scrolled up and see @lilac maple helped checking some. Cmiiw.

hidden flint
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dull horizon
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can u guys read through my essay and give me some feedback pls

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Are you for or against zoos? (minimum 350 words) (30 minutes).

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Recently, with rapid technological development and globalisation, there have been many controversies regarding zoos. Some people consider stripping animals of their freedom as an immoral action, while others debunk this argument saying that the nature of zoos is keeping animals away from extinction. Both these arguments sound quite reasonable, but as for me, I stand in the middle. Yes, capturing animals and taking away another being's freedom is unarguably an inhuman action indeed, from our point of view. But what if we look at it from the animal's point of view? They're not intelligent beings like us - they don't understand what freedom and dignity truly mean. All that matters to them is present happiness. That brings us to discuss about animal abuse. There have been many reported cases of animal torture across the globe, and I find it truly despicable. Keeping animals in captivity is one thing, but I firmly believe all kinds of animal mistreatment should be strictly proihibited and heavily punished, especially in zoos. To conclude, I just wanted to say that I'm perfectly fine with keeping animals in zoos and profitting off of them, as zoos also need funds to cover all the costs regarding manteinance, staff, ... and keep it running. However, I think all personnel's activities should be strictly managed and any type of abuse should be reported and punished, in order to keep the animals as happy and healthy as possible.

drowsy creek
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@lilac maple aye mate

lilac maple
lilac maple
# dull horizon Recently, with rapid technological development and globalisation, there have bee...

its pretty good, but i would probably change "many controversies" to something like "a lot of controversy" or "controversy in abundance" if your teacher is like super old-fashioned haha (or trying to sound really smart)

Also, be careful not start a statement with "But" or "And". Some people very picky about that.

last note, replace the "..." with "etc" (etcetera).

you did really well ā˜ŗļø

dull horizon
round heart
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Hi! Could anyone suggest a better/more polite way to say this or is this already fine:

Gabe mentioned that there will be guests arriving the same day so a late checkout could not be accommodated šŸ˜ž but if you'd like, you could leave your bags at their place for a while until your next check-in. The good news is an early check-in is possible at Tony's place at 1 pm šŸ˜„ Does that work for you?

sterile phoenix
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thats good

silk hornet
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Ä° cant undarstand anyting in here now i am lil sad kekk

heady nova
silk hornet
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Hell no

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Just my English like that my friend

heady nova
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aahh practice makes perfect pepepray peepo_detective

silk hornet
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Yes need sooo much practice tired

heady nova
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Do you struggle with one specific part or just in general ?

silk hornet
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The make a sentence so much hard for me

silk hornet
heady nova
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oohh like make a sentence using a word ?

silk hornet
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Ä°dk

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But more location for words i think

silk hornet
heady nova
silk hornet
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ThanksSCWblushHEART

latent hill
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Is this sentence correct: "Feel free to order pizza for me"

heady nova
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Hello everyone,
Can someone correct my sentences please ? Thank you.

  1. I tend to visit my grandmother on Sunday.
  2. I tend to play video games every evening.
  3. My friends and I often hang out on the weekend.
  4. My friends and I often cope with hard work at school.
  5. When Iā€™m feeling happy, I usually paint.
  6. When Iā€™m feeling depressed, I always go to see my friends.
  7. Iā€™m always impressed by my father.
  8. Iā€™m always happy to have a good mark.
  9. When Iā€™m tired, I will eat an apple.
  10. When Iā€™m tired, I will go to bed early.
grizzled prism
# heady nova Hello everyone, Can someone correct my sentences please ? Thank you. 1. I ten...
  1. I tend to visit my Grandmother's on Sundays.
  2. I tend to play games every evening.
  3. My friends and I often hang out on weekends.
    4.My friends and I often have to cope with hard work at school.
  4. When I'm feeling happy, I usually do painting. / I usually like to paint.
  5. I see my friends whenever I'm depressed.
  6. My father always impresses me.
  7. I always become happy when I get good grades.
  8. When I'm tired, I eat an apple.
  9. When I'm tired, i go to bed early.
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I tried my best, even paraphrased some of the sentences. But I'm no advanced genie so expect mistakes even in this 'corrected' one.

long olive
long olive
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All this is correct grammar but everyone uses slang now

daring swallow
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Yea ig

red ridge
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hello people, can you please check my sentence:
"I was buying things in a grocery store today and the sum was 365"
"the cashier girl told me to pay 365 days"

covert mesa
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main spear
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done

silk hornet
heady nova
heady nova
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Hello there ! Can you correct my answer please ? Thanks šŸ™‚

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silk hornet
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Like you can see

covert mesa
heady nova
covert mesa
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"before the invention of public transport, driving in my car was time consuming"

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??

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that makes no sense

silk hornet
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Ä° cant send voice sent my acent place why you know?

heady nova
covert mesa
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that still makes no sense

silk hornet
covert mesa
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furthermore, that's not what the task was about anyway

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he was to write a sentence about what people used to do before the invention of cars

heady nova
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Wait are you on a mobile phone?

silk hornet
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heady nova
silk hornet
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Okey thanks for help. SCWblushHEART

uncut basalt
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So, I have to write an essay to bring my grade one point up. I already have 12 points, but since I wanna do it on a "LK" level I'd be really happy to have 13 points (that would be like an A- if that makes sense). I'm gonna write it tomorrow and I just wanted to ask if anyone could look over my writing. Not the information in it just the writing and language haha. pepe_love_you

oak tartan
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I could

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@uncut basalt

covert mesa
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you can just post it here and let everyone contribute

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finally this room will be used for its actual purpose of proofreading texts

uncut basalt
uncut basalt
heady nova
covert mesa
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Sorry

red ridge
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Hello people please check my sentecne:
"There was a nice wind outside blowing when I was taking a walk"

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how would you say that in English?

covert mesa
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you'd probably say "there was a nice wind blowing when i was taking a walk"

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when and while are interchangeable here

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i don't think it sounds good to say "blowing outside when i was taking a walk" because you taking a walk already implies that you're outside yourself, so saying that the wind blew outside is redundant

desert ledge
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while youā€™re here, it might be a good idea to replace ā€œniceā€ with another word like refreshing, cool etc.

oak tartan
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/As I took a walk, a nice wind started blowing (idk depends on time of wind)

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/A nice wind blew outside while I took a walk

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Experiment, see what fits your overall style

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I'd write- 'A nice wind blew outside as I took a walk'

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Tbh I dont even know why you wanna write that (the context)

long olive
high flax
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I felt Challenged when i got My ACL Torn Apart

plush solstice
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Hey guys

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could someone correct my blog entry?

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We are too lazy to live an environmently-friendly life

Itā€™s so convenient to go somewhere by car instead of riding a bicycle or to go shopping without taking a look at the fair traid seals. In fact, we all do love comfort which has psychological roots. Thuss, it is true to some extent that we are too lazy to implent a sustainable lifestyle but there is more to it.

Industrialized countries like Germany are known for their wealth and high life standard. Therefore people got used to it and indulge the given freedoms and opportunities such as going on vacation by plane or having a wide selection of products in the shopping mall. But it can't go on like this and most of the Germans know it. After climate change and ist consequences became palpable, we all are forced to change our entrenched habits and sacrifice our comfort in an effort to mantain our planet. At first it might seem intimidating or even impossible because we have taken our freedoms for granted and we just donā€™t any restrictions. This is the reason for the contradictory behaviour of Germans. At the one hand they are worried about their planetā€™s future and on the other hand still buy fast fashion.

This introduces a new hurdle for living an environmently-friendly life: the affordability. Often the poor strata canā€™t afford sustainable products while people with higher incomes consume more or even lavish ressources. This is why the politics should establish guidelines to address global warming and make climate protection fair for everyone.

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It is undeniably true that without solidarity we canā€™t avert the catastrophe our planet is likely to face if we donā€™t embrace change and continue pursuing profit at the expense of environment. So I think that it is of paramout importance to undertake responsibility instead of shriking it. Admittedly, changes are hard but we have to puncture the fallacy that it is something bad as it is the only thing that it constant in our lifes. Therefore I suggest to gear ourselves up for the challenging future and finally start doing something.

Comment down below your ideas of how we could overcome the psychological hurdles and align our behaviour to an environmently-friendly lifestyle.

Thanks for reading!

red ridge
red ridge
plush solstice
covert mesa
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There are so many mistakes there I don't even wanna start listing them

desert ledge
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We are too lazy to live an environmentally-friendly life

Itā€™s so convenient to go somewhere by car instead of riding a bicycle, or to go shopping without taking a look at the fair trade seals. In fact, we all love comfort and this tendency has psychological roots. Thus, it is true to some extent that we are too lazy to implement a sustainable lifestyle, (added a comma) but there is more to it.

Industrialized countries like Germany are known for their wealth and high living standards. Therefore, (add a comma) people got used to it and indulge in freedoms and opportunities such as going on vacation by plane, (comma) or having a wide selection of products in the shopping mall. But it can't go on like this, (comma) and most Germans know it. After climate change and its consequences became palpable, we are all forced to change our entrenched habits and sacrifice our comfort in an effort to maintain our planet. At first, it might seem intimidating or even impossible because we have taken our freedoms for granted and we donā€™t have any restrictions. This is the reason for the contradictory behaviour of Germans. On one hand, they are worried about their planetā€™s future and on the other, they still buy fast fashion.

This introduces a new hurdle for living an environmentally-friendly life: affordability. Often, (comma) the poor strata (wdym strata?) canā€™t afford sustainable products, while people with higher incomes consume even more lavish resources. This is why (got rid of "the") politics should establish guidelines to address global warming and make climate protection fair for everyone.

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It is undeniably true that without solidarity we canā€™t avert the catastrophe our planet is likely to face if we donā€™t embrace change and continue pursuing profit at the expense of the environment. (removed so) I think that it is of paramount importance to undertake responsibility instead of shirking it. Admittedly, change is (changed to singular) hard but we have to puncture the fallacy that it is something bad, (comma) as it is the only thing that is constant in our lives. Therefore, (comma) I suggest to gear ourselves up for the challenging future and finally start doing something.

Comment down below your ideas of how we could overcome these psychological hurdles and align our behaviour to achieve an environmentally-friendly lifestyle.

Thank you (Thanks is too casual here) for reading!

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if I made any mistakes please lmk

red ridge
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I don't have a car because I'm saving up money for a bicycle

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I'm already living a fecking envirenment-friendly life you can't imagine

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but I'm a Libertarian and I don't believe in government

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every government works for the rich and not for me

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so, I think they are planning something

red ridge
covert mesa
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I still have issues with that text but at least you've fixed most of the problems

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this sentence: After climate change and its consequences became palpable, we are all forced to change our entrenched habits and sacrifice our comfort in an effort to maintain our planet.

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i don't like the tense usage here

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should either be "Now that climate change has become palpable, we are all forced..." or "After climate change had become palpable, we were all forced..."

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I was a bit confused about the "fair trade seals" thing because from all info i've found online, that's a concept only present in the USA and i'm not sure the text is US-targeted

heady nova
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I thought it meant something different nvm

covert mesa
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i initially thought it was a misspelling or fair trade sales

heady nova
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yeah, when I read your comment it seemed to be talking about the "fur" trade of seals but then i read the original and that doesn't make sense for it to be there but i can't think of what else it could mean

covert mesa
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it's apparently a type of seal they put on products that are certified by the FairTrade organisation in the US that supposedly means the product was produced in an environmentally friendly fashion

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"the poor strata" is an actual thing though, i don't see a problem with it apart from the saying being rare

heady nova
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but then it says "we all love comfort and this tendency has psychological roots" so it could be a shop that sells them which provides comfort for the wearer

heady nova
covert mesa
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well yea the comfort here doesn't mean comfortable clothes

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rather a comfortable lifestyle

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Also i don't like saying "Politics should establish guidelines....", i think "The government should establish guidelines" or "Politicians should establish guidelines" works better

heady nova
covert mesa
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strata is a plural form of stratum which just means a group of people

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so the poor strata means poor people

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it is rare though, you wouldn't hear that word often

heady nova
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Yeah, i re-read it and that definitely is a rare word

heady nova
heady nova
covert mesa
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can we talk about this: opportunities such as going on vacation by plane, (comma) or having a wide selection of products in the shopping mall

heady nova
covert mesa
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why is a comma needed there

covert mesa
covert mesa
heady nova
covert mesa
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i don't think you should correct people just because you want to if they don't either ask for it explicitly or at least have the tag enabled

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that's like the entire reason the tag exists at all

heady nova
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I know that but if there is a problem or word that doesn't need to be there then I will say. If they then say that was intentional then i will leave it.

oak tartan
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Tell me how this sounds lol:
(its a diary entry for homework)

I shall try to properly write this. I donā€™t usually write diaries. Indeed, I highly doubt Iā€™d have ever taken the trouble to do so. Keeping a written record of my life to remind me how awful it can be, I believe, would be rather sad. However, now I simply am, er, obliged to do so. So attempts shall be made in order to. . interest me into doing so. Removing the task from the list of chores might help not remove its literary value; ah, writing something that has some value is a rather valuable usage of time, I should think. That being said, if my overall style of writing appears weird, or if it seems somehow off, just remember- I donā€™t do diaries.
God, that was long for a justification. But itā€™s rather typical, I do go to unjustified lengths to justify myself, then proceed to justify aforementioned unjustified lengths. So maybe maā€™am was right. So sue me.
Now that we are all done with the intros, we may start the diary. From tomorrow. Je suis trop flemmard. Read: I am leaving for my hometown, so thereā€™ll be lots to write about.

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theres more weird entries lol

desert ledge
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oak tartan
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i am aware

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the short sentence thing is something I was trying for fun

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it reads differently

desert ledge
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Oh I see

chilly robin
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Hello, guys!
I'm preparing for essay scholarship. Could anyone help me?

chilly robin
ionic rose
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If anyone needs anything to be proofread & edited, I'll do it happily for free.

drowsy creek
chilly robin
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Perhaps someone could I'll dm to make sure, if not burdens.

desert ledge
verbal sierra
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Could someone correct my essay entry?? People have different views about whether studying oversea may give opportunity for students to open their mind.While some people claimed that spending time for that is extremely expensive and having other problems. In my opinion, I believe that upsides of living and studying in other countries outstrip its drawbacks.

On the one hand (On of the greaest advantages of studying aboard) is that it will be allowed to learn how to live independently as family and relatives are far away and will not available to aid and cater for them if problems arise. Moreover, students who be educated in foreign countries may be receive some benefits like have experience a brand-new country with incredible new mindset,traditions and activities. Thus they can open a range of knowledge not only lectures at school but also figure out many opportunity of career path and a chance to try new stuff in foreign countries. As a result, studying aboard grants the occasion to completely immerse in a new language,and there is no better way to learn than to dive right in
On the other hand,there a number of reasons why students are not interested in study abroad. First and foremost, it is often the case that in overseas tuition fees are higher for international students rather than for local students. It is undeniable that finace become the biggest trouble about study abroad as they also pay for their school fee and cost of living. Other reason is that it can bring for them that they can not gain takecare from family and friend and too hard to make a real friendship when problems is language barrier.

In conclusion, although there are a number of benifits of study abroad,I personally believe that disvantages of this overweight advantages.

hard locust
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I feel like you're contradicting yourself a bit. it's probably not a good idea to talk about the pros and cons in the same paragraph maybe I'm the stupid one, but I have the impression

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that you are less convincing because the evidence is mixed

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I don't know if you understand what I mean

drowsy creek
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@ionic rose here someone need help with proofreading

ionic rose
granite elm
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Hi

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I'm rasha from iraq

wispy basalt
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hi

drowsy creek
ionic rose
drowsy creek
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Awesome

cosmic fossil
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This is an informal letter for C1. Can someone check it for mistakes of any kind, please?

drowsy creek
sturdy gust
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Can I ask what "C1" means? is that some sort of test?

fiery bridge
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A-C

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on how well you know a language

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A is new people, B fir intermediate, C for basically fluent

sturdy gust
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Are they asking us to rank it, or are they saying they're submitting it to someone else?

fiery bridge
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they're saying they're gonna submit it for a test

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or something

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they're saying they're testing or practicing for the C1 level

sturdy gust
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So one of the english countries has a testing system like japan's i guess.

fiery bridge
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I guess.

sturdy gust
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i'm learning japanese and they have these N5 through N1 test. I only know a handful of words so i'm not touching that with a 10foot pole for now, but the above post made me curious what country that was in because I wondered if america or some place had some similar system and i just happen to not know about it.

drowsy creek
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C2 is fluent

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B1 intermediate

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B2 upper intermediate

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A1-A2 beginner

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There are many tests for English like TOEFL, IELTS

cosmic fossil
soft blade
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How are my articles?

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sturdy gust
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ah konnichiwa @soft blade. I can understand what you're writing, so overall it gets the job done - but small errors here and there give away that you still have a few things to learn.

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I guess for a start, they're not called articles but rather look like answers to a homework assignment.

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but maybe you meant to ask how are my sentences?

soft blade
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Ok

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Thank

sturdy gust
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on #4 you misspelled calors, but spelled it correctly on 3.

soft blade
sturdy gust
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i don't really want to do your homework for you but i'll show you one correction.

"meanings of each colors" should be changed to "meanings of each color"

soft blade
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Thank you so much

umbral harbor
wooden void
halcyon glade
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would someone be willing to proofread and correct a page of writing for me? it's nothing important or time sensitive, just a little backstory thing that i wrote for a roleplay character some time ago. some parts sound kinda wonky to me but i'm not sure how to fix it. it would be one whole page in microsoft word though.

barren light
drowsy creek
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Why not just send it here

halcyon glade
livid grail
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Any suggestions for the text below? (To make it read better if you know what I mean) (Lore for a tank I made in a game)
The Type 73 Armoured vehicle was developed to counter russiaā€™s new T-1 tank, featuring a revolutionary hull design thatā€™s nearly frontally immune to any theoretical 45mm. It also sports great mobility with a 24L V6 engine, it even has the power to climb 20 degree slopes which would make short work of any manchurian hill. Armed with a 65mm it has the power to penetrate up to 41 milimeters of armour. The turret is welded which, from testing, was found to be better than riveted armour but the hull was made with the latter style for financial reasons.

Four iterations of the model were created, the first one featured a 37mm British pom pom gun which, while useful for infantry support did not have desirable penetration, it also had reliability problems as the gun would jam frequently. The second had the Canon de 65 mm ModĆØle 1891 which achieved everything we desired out of a tank canno, chiefly, a potent HE, great penetration, and high fire rate. The third iteration featured an improved turret armour layout. The last improved the angling of the lower front plate to make it more resistant to a worst case scenario 45mm shell (45*1200mm). 

 While this tank has many strong points, it also has weak ones, the turret and the lower front plate are not immune to a worst case scenario 45mm, the sides are penetrable by anti-tank rifles, and the turretā€™s aft, the place where most ammunition is stored, is protected by only 20mm of armour which might prove dangerous, the deck and bottom armour are also quite thin with them being a mere 10mms which might make it vulnerable to mines and anti-tank grenades.
heady nova
desert ledge
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