dex-entries-discussion

[midnight siren]

i'm excited to find out which of my guys are getting entries

[hollow tapir]

Gotta figure out smth for this now
Dexdoku
POKENAME loves head-butting things, but that tends to only hurt it. The more it rams into things, the more its sandy body crumbles.

[vivid spire]

What is dexdoku?

[hollow tapir]

An extra excuse to write dex entries

It just has a bit more to it formatting wise, and usually some sort of theme to go with it

Aka dex entries with ✨extra flair✨

It’s in recurring events if you want more specifics tho

[vivid spire]

Sounds good, I’ll have to check it out

[hollow tapir]

Ye! It can be really fun

[midnight siren]

I just realised how badly bro needs a sprite update

[hollow tapir]

Okay my idea is down

Probs not great but. A start

Like worded weirdly I know but I can’t figure out better words rn focused on the fact that soon we’re going to the movies to watch my neighbor Totoro

[narrow cosmos]

186.434.png Politoed/Trubbish for Trubbish/Endeavor part of DexDoku.

POKENAME opens its mouth to let the stinky aroma of its insides attract flies and other insects. Once enough gather, it lashes out its tongue--made of garbage--and snatches up a meal of bugs.

[vivid spire]

Before I start on that one more entry I was working on I wanna check… Mewtic:

#150.335: One of the original attempts to create Mewtwo, POKENAME attempted to fill Mew’s genetic structure with Water Type DNA. It treats the night sky as an ocean, swimming above the clouds.

[hollow tapir]

NOOO HES BECOME A FROG TRASH CAN

[midnight siren]

I have just realised I have no idea what Pokémon/artists I’ve written for

[hollow tapir]

I have a love hate relationship with one of yours dragon

[narrow cosmos]

https://www.fusiondex.org/authors/

You could probably use this to help make referencing easier. It should help give an idea even if it's not updated as fast as the doc. (But it would be hard to be so considering how many dexes get made/approved daily. )

[hollow tapir]

LOOK AT HIM HES SO SAD

DRAGON HOW COULD YOU

[midnight siren]

haha, ye

I’m just that cool

it’s azuril, it be like that

[hollow tapir]

Dexdoku

Due to POKENAME's putrid scent, other Pokémon tend to avoid it, leaving it lonely and sad. POKENAME balances on its tail, waiting for someone to come play.

[midnight siren]

you think that guys sad, I made a sadder concept for a different azuril

[hollow tapir]

WHAT HAPPENED

[midnight siren]

[midnight siren]

it’s a sad dino, idk what else to say

[midnight siren]

my second ever sprite lessss gooooooooo

[hollow tapir]

Dexdoku
POKENAME is a known trickster, often playing pranks on its friends and other Pokémon. With the help of its dense gas clouds, it also juggles balls when bored.

I need a second sentence for this but

Brain not braining

Wanted to do these first before I forgot

[midnight siren]

lean into the mime, maybe smth like it has dense gas which allows for it to juggle with the clouds?

[hollow tapir]

WAIT I FOUND AN AMAZING SPRITE I CANT

NOOOO

ITS NOT SHOWING UP WHEN I CLICK

it’s rat holding a trash bag with a pizza slice

[midnight siren]

[hollow tapir]

Wait okay why is it like this

It’s showing the auto gen first

Then the real one is alt

[midnight siren]

is this on infinite dex?

[hollow tapir]

It is

[narrow cosmos]

460.104.png Palossand/Cubone for Palossand/Endeavor DexDoku.

POKENAME uses its shovel to help dig and form intricate sand sculptures on beaches it calls home. The sculptures most commonly depict happy Pokemon playing together with their young. It gazes at its creation longingly when finished.

[hollow tapir]

It’s not showing up in sprite gallery when Iook

[midnight siren]

raticate/trubbish?

[hollow tapir]

Yis

Oh my god same person made one that looks like kuromi???

Ah yes. Two of these are just. gun

FUCKING DITTO GARBADOR

HE HAS THE DITTO SMILE

the ditto smile is so stupid

[midnight siren]

I think it’s not showing up before the autogen cause it’s an alt maybe

[hollow tapir]

It’s not in sprite gallery either from the looks of it

[midnight siren]

not sure how infinitedex runs it, but it’s def not a main fusion, so maybe ifdex hides alts

[hollow tapir]

How sad

It’s so cute

[midnight siren]

I found it, let me grab the link for ya

[midnight siren]

#sprite-gallery message

[hollow tapir]

Am I stupid??

I just tried looking up the numbers and it gave me nothing

[midnight siren]

you may have just searched for the wrong thing

[narrow cosmos]

435.201.png Garbodor/Unown for Garbodor/Artist DexDoku. ('tis an Izik sprite)

POKENAME plucks garbage from containers and uses it to draw symbols upon the ground. It's believed this habit is an attempt at communication, but none have yet discovered meaning in the trash's shapes.

[hollow tapir]

What did they do to his neck

[midnight siren]

so it’s 20.434a, if you missed the A discord can sometimes be weird about showing it

[hollow tapir]

Well thank you for finding it. Now I can write about stupid trash rat /aff

And nice entry SK

[narrow cosmos]

Thanks. Just trying to see if I can blitz through the entries, plus it's nice to see what others think once in a while. Normally I just churn out entries without sharing them. Probably why I lose track of which ones I've done until sites started collecting them.

[hollow tapir]

Dexdoku (endeavor/trubbish)
POKENAME often digs through the trash to find treats to eat. If someone tries to steal its food, it will bite them in retaliation. Pizza is its favorite, and it is known to be even more aggressive in order to keep it.

[hollow tapir]

Tried that now, might still sound weird but ty

Omg ivysaur garbodor is actually so cute??

Some of these are terrifying, some are dumb, and some are making me chuckle. Like krokorok with him? The smug face-

[narrow cosmos]

Thinking about it, as many as I smacked out, the middle column gives me a lot of leeway, I made way too many entries so plenty of Pokemon are feasible.

[midnight siren]

Peak

[hollow tapir]

I would do Mimi for the next entry but like. Idk what to write that isn’t just about it made a costume out of trash

The reuniclus looks like it’s covered in sprinkles

WAIT SPAMTON REF

Dexdoku (garbodor/recycle)
POKENAME hides in the trash, waiting to bombard people with garbage. It is incessant and will not stop until the person takes the garbage with them, almost as a gift.

[narrow cosmos]

110.249.png Weezing/Lugia for Weezing/Pokemon repeat DexDoku (Have done at least one Lugia related Dex)

Referred to as "The Scion of Toxic Storms" in old nautical legends, POKENAME releases noxious air from the many pores along its body. When it flies, it creates a putrid maelstrom at sea that none can sail through unscathed.

[hollow tapir]

That’s a beautiful yet terrifying sprite

[timid sky]

@jagged ledge dexdoku Endavor/Trubbish

Despite its appearance, POKENAME can move remarkably fast. It leaves behind larges clumps of trash that smell so putrid they can render people unconscious.

[hollow tapir]

Okay wait that’s such a fren

No braincells but a fren

[summer saffron]

that sprite has so much dithering

[timid sky]

This scared me for a second cause I'm planning on doing Cubone/Sandygast for that spot

[narrow cosmos]

Amusingly I was doing Cubone before I switched it last second because Palossand is the more intricate sandcastle in design. You lucked out.

[hollow tapir]

Dexdoku (weezing/endeavor)
POKENAME lays in its gases like a pillow, feeling supported by it. If anyone tries to disrupt its tranquility, it releases toxic fumes at those who tried bothering it.

This def needs another sentence. Hmm

[narrow cosmos]

"It likes to stink up farms that house Mareep and Miltank, knowing the Pokemon are repulsed by its stench."

[vivid spire]

Maybe something about the smell, like, “if spotted it lets out the smell of fresh cut grass”

[timid sky]

Which spot is this for?

[hollow tapir]

Dexdoku (weezing/recycle)
POKENAME is so hungry it constantly creates smog that looks like berries. It can be found biting at the air, desperately trying to eat the berries in front of it.

[hollow tapir]

That sounds so xute

I can’t type holy moly

[narrow cosmos]

No context, I present to you this

[vivid spire]

For some reason I think that Pokemon should be nemesis with a blue Sandslash

[narrow cosmos]

459.250 Sandygast/Ho-oh for repeat Pokemon DexDoku (Have done Ho-oh entries in the past)

POKENAME is very elusive, hiding beneath the sands of remote beaches and rarely interacting with others. However, if something threatens its home, it whips up searing sandstorms that flicker all the colors of the rainbow.

[timid sky]

Like this you mean

[hollow tapir]

This one looks terrifying with the sand dripping off it

[hexed fog]

Again guys- If you don't input your username properly the entry is going to be automatically denied

[hollow tapir]

My brain didn’t process nemesis as a normal word, instead I thought you meant some obscure pokemon lol

[vivid spire]

I also realized my brain is mush from all the entries today…. I should have said enemy 😂

[hollow tapir]

Happens

[timid sky]

Why do you people keep doing this

[midnight siren]

na, they’re talking about the Greek god

[midnight siren]

who knows

Probably new people who don’t read the submission guide properly

[hexed fog]

some of them are people I have denied multiple times

[midnight siren]

bruh

[sharp dagger]

https://discord.com/channels/302153478556352513/1396978230849962004
POKENAME generates electricity through volcanic eruptions. The volcanic ash it explosively ejects musters an electrostatic charge causing lightning to strike it.
does this work?

[midnight siren]

feels like people who don’t look here, just submit and don’t think about it again

[hexed fog]

sounds like I'll keep denying them then lol

[midnight siren]

electrostatic doesn’t feel like the right word imo, maybe just try “electrical”?

[vivid spire]

Some might be doing their work from a phone. I've noticed I can't see the list of apporvals besides on a PC

[sharp dagger]

is the second it too ambiguous?

[midnight siren]

maybe a bit, you could try “its back”?

or “its hump” (not sure if camerupts volcanoes count as humps tho )

[sharp dagger]

POKENAME generates electricity through volcanic eruptions. The volcanic ash it explosively ejects musters an electrical charge causing lightning to strike its back.

[midnight siren]

looks a lot better to me

[sharp dagger]

does it need the first bit?

[midnight siren]

the first sentence you mean?

[sharp dagger]

yeah

[hexed fog]

Got a few denials today. Please be sure to read the FAQs guys. We didn't make them for fun. They can be located in the sheets tab.

[midnight siren]

imo it feels a little redundant, the first sentence says “it’s back erupts and generates electricity” then the second sentence explains the same thing. I don’t think it’s an issue per se, but a slightly different idea for the first sentence would help I think

[hexed fog]

also like... minor grammar issues are fine but when yall cant even bother to use uppercase letters or punctuation it's just going to get autodenied. I'm not wasting my time rewording it if yall dont care

[sharp dagger]

POKENAME is powered by volcanic eruptions. The volcanic ash it explosively ejects musters an electrical charge causing lightning to strike its back.

[hexed fog]

obviously this is just a general statement lol

most people are fune

[midnight siren]

I think the end of this sentence should be smth like “living there to struggle to breathe”

[midnight siren]

oh for crying out loud, that’s just annoying

[hexed fog]

I'd approve that

[midnight siren]

looks good to me

[sharp dagger]

ty for the help

[midnight siren]

np

[hexed fog]

I'd probably add a comma after 'charge' but like honestly thats fine

dont stress too much on that

quick enter it so i can put it in the update

[midnight siren]

think it’s a swork entry

[hexed fog]

o ok

[sharp dagger]

its not gone through sprite gallery yet

[hexed fog]

sounds good then

[vivid spire]

Revisiting Lapnite;

When pods of Lapras form, a POKENAME joins their group. Acting as a scout, with its acute vision, POKENAME reacts to threats in milliseconds, covering seas to take care of perceived threats.

[midnight siren]

(this is just personal preference) I think changing “scout, with” to “scout using” sounds better imo

i think it’s fine either way tho

[vivid spire]

I agree, that does sound better to me as well

[hexed fog]

ok everything prior to right now is being updated. should be visible in game in a day or so

sometimes it takes a bit so like

yeahhhh

[midnight siren]

basically cutting down on clauses/commas

it does help sometimes

[vivid spire]

Does the second sentence sound like a run on to you?

Acting as a scout using its acute vision, POKENAME reacts to threats in milliseconds, covering seas to take care of perceived threats.

Is how I’ve updated it

[narrow cosmos]

329.435.png Aegislash/Garbodor entry for Garbodor/Recycle DexDoku

Despite being comprised of refuse and adhering to dirty tactics in combat, POKENAME prides itself in the beauty of its equipment. It keeps its weapon, armor and shield as pristine as possible, cleaning and shining them often.

[midnight siren]

hmm, it does, maybe change it to “POKENAME acts as a scout” and change the second POKENAME to “it”

[vivid spire]

POKENAME acts as a scout using its acute vision. It reacts to threats in milliseconds, covering entire seas against them.

[midnight siren]

could ya quickly write the full entry so I could see it with the first sentence pls

[vivid spire]

When pods of Lapras form, a POKENAME joins their group. POKENAME acts as a scout using its acute vision. It reacts to threats in milliseconds, covering entire seas against them.

[narrow cosmos]

371.109.png Klefki/Koffing for Koffing/Recycle DexDoku.

POKENAME gathers up keys until it has attached one to each of its rings. When fully equipped, it lets out fumes from its face in joy. This smoke smells of rust, copper and other metals.

[midnight siren]

hmmm, could you elaborate on what you mean by “cover entire seas against them” please, I’m not quite getting what you’re trying to say

[vivid spire]

From the original Dragonite entry it mentions how quickly they can circle the Earth. But I see your point, maybe instead I should use “spraying Ice Beams to freeze them in place”

[midnight siren]

couple quick things: change “The smoke” to “This smoke” (makes it clear what you’re referring to and reads better imo) and in the first sentence, you can remove the second instance of “key” and replace it with “one” (just helps remove unneeded repetition)

[midnight siren]

I think that second options is definitely a lot clearer, and the original idea is just a harder one to convey tbh

[vivid spire]

Indeed! I will resubmit this entry. Thank you for your help! I have one other I need to brainstorm.

[midnight siren]

np

[narrow cosmos]

459.260.png Sandygast/Munchlax for Sandygast/Recycle DexDoku.

POKENAME creates a facsimile of Munchlax in order to approach others and ask for food, beguiling them with its cute appearance. Donated food gets stored in the decoy's stomach, which returns the meals back to the main body.

[midnight siren]

I just remembered I have dex requests I was meant to write oops
a problem for tomorrow me

[narrow cosmos]

And with that last one just gotta wait for overall approval and I can go back and submit them all proper.

[vivid spire]

Revisiting Mewtic:

#150.335: Strange sightings by Sailors of figures swimming in the night sky were originally thought to be Dewgong from another world. POKENAME treat the skies as an ocean, using their psychic power to stay hidden from Trainers.

[midnight siren]

hmmm, I’d switch the two sentences around for one

[vivid spire]

Maybe a however as a transition

However, strange sightings by Sailors of figures swimming in the night sky were widely reported.

[midnight siren]

change however to “despite this”

[vivid spire]

POKENAME treat the skies as an ocean, using their psychic power to stay hidden from Trainers. Despite this, strange sightings by Sailors of figures swimming in the night sky were widely reported.

[vivid spire]

Using the current DexDoku grid as a starting point, I present Duseon:

#311.135: When POKENAME is haunting a house, it causes electronics go haywire. Pulling electricity directly from the building, it supercharges its attacks.

[hollow tapir]

I don’t have braincells, ty

[hollow tapir]

Why’d you do it now I haven’t submitted my dexdoku ones from last time

[hollow tapir]

MY HEALTH

Oh god um izik im sorry in advance

I just did entries and I might’ve accidentally included dexdoku in them I’m so sorry-

[narrow cosmos]

Little over 30 entries and I break 2K Dexes approved.

Which is still less than 1% of the fusions in-game.

[hollow tapir]

Wowie

I might have 30 entries soonish

[hollow tapir]

Fuckin insanity

[cedar heart]

oh right

[hollow tapir]

lol your pfp

[narrow cosmos]

POKENAME can create projectile orbs that burst into intensely raging sandstorms. Research has shown that despite appearing like normal sand, the material of the storms is a mineral not of this planet.

[vapid marsh]

My first attempt at a dex entry (I'd love some feedback, it seems short):
POKENAME burns bright with fire power! It burns foes with fiery cries.

[violet ermine]

The tone is fun, but like you said it is pretty short. The minimum character count is 100 and this sits at around 70

The entry also won't be applied until the sprite is added to the game, just as a heads up

But as your first attempt, it's a good start! Just keep in mind the character count, maybe by incorporating more about this fusion's habitat, personality, or other things unique to it

[frigid oriole]

First time doing this, how should I do a group of dex entries?

[ebon warren]

It's the same process regardless, you're welcome to post any entries here but please follow the formatting, and once you have gotten enough feedback that you are satisfied you'd submit them using the links in the pins

[vivid spire]

If you plan to do an evolutionary line remember that each entry has to stand on its own. The player should not need to read another entry in the fusion dex to understand any of your entries individually.

Other than that, have fun with it and the people in this group are more than willing to help.

[stable nimbus]

I had this pop up in my game and thought it would be a cool Pokemon to make a Dex entry for the Dex could say
In a detention where the forbidden Pokemon spiritom was trapped some people have been able to visit this realm and said the trees look creepy turns out this Pokemon discusses it's self as a tree waiting for prey to come along gabbing then drafting them into the dark forest to never be seen again

[vivid spire]

I love the passion in this entry, there are a couple of word choice and grammatical issues I’ll try to help you resolve:

“In the land where the forbidden Spiritomb was trapped, it is said the trees are creepy. Some Trainers were able to visit this realm, and discovered POKENAME. It disguises itself as a tree, waiting for prey before dragging it into the dark woods, never to return”

[stable nimbus]

That is amazing thanks I made the fusion out of curiosity as well that's how I found it

[hexed fog]

Id say this may violate faq9

Keep in mind entries should describe the entire species

[vivid spire]

If it was changed to this, would it better suit the species as a whole?

POKENAME disguise themselves as trees, waiting for their favorite prey. When seen, they strike, dragging them off into the dark woods. Rumors say any prey dragged off is sent to the dimension where Spiritomb lives.”

[hexed fog]

Lol tbf it lives in this dimension

[vivid spire]

I was trying to keep the spirit of the entry Gmax wrote, maybe the second sentence would be better as:

Rumors say any prey dragged off is taken to Spiritomb to endure a curse.

[hexed fog]

to a

But thats fine

[hollow tapir]

I found a thing but I can’t think of good things to write
Dexdoku
POKENAME likes to relax by having its young cover it in sand. It then lays there, basking in the sunlight until it is time to help its baby sleep.

[vivid spire]

Okay Gmax, if you’d like you can submit the entry for #220.234:

POKENAME disguise themselves as trees, waiting for their favorite prey. When seen, they strike, dragging them off into the dark woods. Rumors say any prey dragged off is taken to Spiritomb to endure a curse.

[hollow tapir]

Dexdoku
POKENAME is very passionate about keeping beaches clean, as it has acquired all the litter that people have dropped on the sands. If it sees someone litter, it will follow them until the person picks it up.

[hollow tapir]

I think Izik said it needs to be taken to a spiritomb

[vivid spire]

Thank you, missed the needs to

#220.234:

POKENAME disguise themselves as trees, waiting for their favorite prey. When seen, they strike, dragging them off into the dark woods. Rumors say any prey dragged off needs to be taken to Spiritomb to endure a curse.

[hollow tapir]

It’s what I’m here for

[midnight siren]

woah, you leveled up from a no1 fan to the fan club president

[vivid spire]

First attempt for Mistop:

#255.141: POKENAME is always hunting at night, seeking out Lycanroc wherever they may be. Each of its movements is filled with bloodlust, and some say its scythe is made from Lycanroc bones.

Also one for Misvoir:

#255.287: Highly sought after for Contests for its docile nature, POKENAME hovers slightly above the ground by its psychic powers. Before each attack, they sing incantations lulling its foes into inaction.

Thoughts, or changes anyone can see for these?

[hollow tapir]

Listen it felt fitting

Dragon can you help me with an entry

[midnight siren]

I’m on board to be clear, congrats on the promotion

[midnight siren]

probably, what sprite’s it for?

[hollow tapir]

This one

I wanna do smth about it’s child helping cover it in sand but that’s it

[midnight siren]

hmm, aight let me see if I can think of a draft idea

[midnight siren]

how ‘bout smth like “The young of POKENAME are taught how to cover themselves in sand through burying their mother. This is because POKENAME uses sand as a natural suntan lotion.”

it’s messy, but just a kinda quick concept :p

[hollow tapir]

Oooh

That’s fun

[midnight siren]

feel free to mess without however, I think some rewording is very much needed here lol

[hollow tapir]

You should be mime jr club president

[midnight siren]

genuinely i'm not that big of a fan of mime jr

it's like 75% stockholm syndrome from spriting over 100 mime jr's

[hollow tapir]

Damn

[hollow tapir]

What’s your fav then?

[midnight siren]

Hippopotas

i just love hippos

[silent wadi]

I feel like the description needs to be changed because what tusks is it talking about?

[thorn ingot]

That’s an auto-splice Dex entry, not one we made

Someone needs to actually make one for that Pokémon

[midnight siren]

yeah, it ain't a custom. if you want to make it sound more accurate you can always write a dex entry for it, or wait to see if anyone else will make one

[thorn ingot]

I submitted a Dex entry for that sprite now

[hollow tapir]

lol fair

[vivid spire]

Another Dex idea for Hypunny. Thoughts?

#97.354 Hypunny: POKENAME’s head bobs to the rhythm it swing its pendulum turning its ears into two more. When its target is hypnotized, it kicks hard enough to shatter bone.

[hollow tapir]

I would change it to
POKENAME’s head bobs to the rhythmic swing of its pendulum. When its target is hypnotized, it kicks hard enough to shatter bone.

[vivid spire]

That does sound better

[hollow tapir]

The wording of the first sentence just. Felt very strange to read

[vivid spire]

Agreed! Was a bit clunky and almost a run on. Any suggestions for the other two I posted earlier?

[hollow tapir]

Lemme look at em :3

I’m not always the best at this but I can try to help!

[hollow tapir]

Would change it to:
POKENAME always hunts at night, seeking out packs of Lycanroc. Its movements are filled with bloodlust, and some say its scythe is made from Lycanroc bones.

[hollow tapir]

Tbh, I like it, but I’m confused because the contest part doesn’t fit in with everything else

[vivid spire]

Fair feedback, and tbh, probably should be cut from the entry. Gonna think if I want to replace it with anything

[hollow tapir]

Probably should be replaced with something, you could talk about its psychic powers, maybe how it uses it in battle along with the lulling into inaction

Maybe add in a psychic attack it can learn (like POKENAME uses insert move here after making the opponent unable to act)

[vivid spire]

My crazy idea:

#255.287 Misvoir: When gathered together as a group, POKENAME hovers slightly above the ground by its psychic powers, and the drone of Confuse Rays can be heard for miles. Before each attack, they sing incantations lulling its foes into inaction.

[hollow tapir]

Ooooh

I like it

[vivid spire]

Thank you for you help! You are good at this

[hollow tapir]

Although, is there a reason they only hover slightly when in a group? That feels a bit strange. But idk what you’d replace it with

Ofc! Happy to help

I often don’t feel like I know what I’m doing but I try my best

[vivid spire]

Maybe go all out on the witch theme…. Have them take flight!

When gathered together as a group, POKENAME takes flight using their psychic powers, and the drone of Confuse Rays can be heard for miles.

[hollow tapir]

ooh yeah i like that better

[vivid spire]

Thank you again!

[jagged ledge]

No s in "takes" because you're describing a plural subject.

If you want to have the second clause describe the sound, you could say something like "group, emitting Confuse Rays that can be heard for miles." Or something similar to help it flow as one continuous thought.

[vivid spire]

More like this?

When gathered together as a group, POKENAME take flight using their psychic powers, emitting Confuse Rays that can be heard for miles. Before each attack, they sing incantations lulling its foes into inaction.

Maybe without the Oxford Comma…

[jagged ledge]

"They sing incantations to lull their foes" purpose and subject agreement adjustment

[vivid spire]

When gathered together as a group, POKENAME take flight using their psychic powers emitting Confuse Rays that can be heard for miles. Before each attack, they sing incantations to lull their foes into inaction.

[jagged ledge]

Oxford Commas are used in reference to commas as part of the structure/section of a list. The Commas as you have them now help transition between clauses or prepositional phrases, so they can stay. If you would prefer, you could change "group, emitting" to "group and emit". The issue before was taking two halves or subjects and combining them without clarifying the connection between them.

[vivid spire]

Understood, thank you for the grammatical guidance!

[jagged ledge]

No worries, this position has actually done a lot to help me reactivate my grammar knowledge, so I'm glad to put it to good use

If you ever have any questions, feel free to ask!

[vivid spire]

Trust me, I will! My grammar is far from perfect, and definitely like having a second and third set of eyes double check my writing.

[jagged ledge]

Well luckily for you, that's the purpose of the Unowns here.

[narrow cosmos]

As well as fine-combing your DexDoku entries for any errors possible. Mwahahaha.

Speaking of, got the full set for you to gleam over if you wanna, Wild.

[frigid oriole]

#129.479: POKENAME live in tribes near lakes, where they train to become protectors to others. They have little to no skills in combat, but they fight as hard as they can to protect their peers

#129.480: Their bodies have become numb to pain after training their defensive prowess. POKENAME are seen trying to swim up waterfalls, aiming to evolve when they reach the top.

#130.480: POKENAME want to protect their friends, but are often overcome with violent fits of rage. They isolate themselves from their peers, letting out anger by tackling whatever object lies in front of them.

#130.481: Acting as the leaders of their tribes, POKENAME train tirelessly under waterfalls to protect their allies. They become berserk when their friends are hurt, attacking with thorned fists that can destroy 50 tons

there we go

[jagged ledge]

Awesome, thanks! I'll be sure to have them reviewed by tomorrow the latest! 👍

[hollow tapir]

I try to help but lol wild to the rescue like always

I have 8 of mine done, or at least in some sort of state but one entry I can’t quite use my braincells for rn

[jagged ledge]

No worries, you still got a week and a half. 👍

[hollow tapir]

I feel like I wanna ask you if I did a good job earlier attempting to help it’s like trying to impress a teacher lol sorry for being strange

[jagged ledge]

Oh? By all means, I'm happy to help share my strategies and work.

[hollow tapir]

Please-

I just feel weird even saying that cause I think I sound like a kid

[jagged ledge]

This is a really good revision!

[jagged ledge]

No worries, we all get excited over things

[vivid spire]

Here is another Sprite I couldn’t get out of my head. Abxen:

#310.483a: Before famines ravage farmlands, POKENAME appear. While they are hated by humans, they wield a flaming scythe to cut and burn fields into rich and healthy soil.

[midnight siren]

this might just be me, but While they are hated by humans doesn't really flow into the second half of sentence 2

trying to think of a way to reword it tho, and i'm struggling a bit

[vivid spire]

Idea!

They wield a flaming scythe to cut and burn fields into rich and healthy soil before being chased off by spiteful humans.

[midnight siren]

maybe: Despite being hated by humans, they use their flaming scythe

[vivid spire]

Or perhaps: They use their flaming scythes to cut and burn fields

[midnight siren]

i think it would need to be their flaming not a flaming

[midnight siren]

i think you can still use wield if you like as long as you have their after it

but either way it looks good

[vivid spire]

One more time to verify it flows well:

Before famines ravage farmlands, POKENAME appear. They wield their flaming scythe to cut and burn fields into rich and healthy soil before being chased off by spiteful humans.

And also, thank you for your help!

And of course a spelling error

[midnight siren]

looks good to me

[hollow tapir]

Such a cool idea

[jagged ledge]

Also welcome Dragon Hunter yo the Unown staff

[midnight siren]

I finally applied after like 2-3 months

[hollow tapir]

Wowie

I would say fancy man but not sure if you’re okay with that terminology rn

[midnight siren]

I am atm

I have received the role and now must work in the izik pile mines for all time

[hollow tapir]

Oh no

I knew you were cool when I saw you existed dragon /silly

[vivid spire]

One more for the night: Ninewile!

#38.300 Ninewile: Contrary to popular belief, POKENAME’s nine ponytails can each act independently. When threatened, two will shield its small body, while the rest will wrap the foes before incinerating them.

[midnight siren]

I think adding “around” after “wrap” would help

[vivid spire]

Maybe should be “wrap around their foes”

[midnight siren]

also I’d say change “the foes” to “its foes”

[vivid spire]

Ahh yes, same voice for using its earlier

[midnight siren]

yup, 100%

don’t see anything specific other than that, love this dex entry

[vivid spire]

Thank you, this was a fun entry when I was thinking about it. One of the only Mawile fusion sprites without a second mouth!

Here’s the corrected entry

Contrary to popular belief, POKENAME’s nine ponytails can each act independently. When threatened, two will shield its small body, while the rest will wrap around its foes before incinerating them.

[frigid oriole]

were mine alright?

[vapid marsh]

POKENAME burns bright with fire power! Trainers must be wary when it leaps into the air, although it easily floats, it can come down just as easily in a ball of fire. While on the ground, it burns foes with fiery cries.

[hollow tapir]

Legit tho, you helped me with dexdoku (I think I dmed you cause you seemed cool from event discussion?) and now I’m like ooooh cool guy

[hollow tapir]

He’s so stupid I love him

I just read your entries, sound good to me! (But then again I’m not an unown)

[pastel depot]

The random button hath spoken:

• It performs ceremonial dances outside ancient tombs to honor the dead. It is said that if a graverobber attempts to rob the tomb, POKENAME will collapse the entrance, sealing the thief in with the dead for all eternity.

[vivid spire]

Oh my goodness that fits so well with the Egyptian aesthetic!

Also, I couldn’t see the sprite AND NOT write an entry, Blastcario:

#9.296: With scales hardened like armor, POKENAME stalks challenges under the waves. The ambush starts with Water Gun misdirection followed by POKENAME breaking the surface.

[hollow nimbus]

Rather than focusing the second sentence on the ambush as the subject, I would switch it so the fusion is the subject

I would also change 'Water Gun misdirection' to 'misdirection [from/with/using its] Water Gun'

[vivid spire]

Fair points, does this sound better?

With scales hardened like armor, POKENAME stalks challenges under the waves. It ambushes by using its arm cannon submerged, followed by breaking the surface in a deadly Mach Punch!

[hollow nimbus]

I assume you mean 'stalks challengers' instead of 'stalks challenges'

[hollow tapir]

I was about to say the same thing

[hollow nimbus]

I'm not really sure what 'using its arm cannon submerged means'

[hollow tapir]

Using it underwater?

[hollow nimbus]

You shouldn't really end the sentence in an exclamation mark if you're going for a neutral, academic tone

[hollow nimbus]

I mean, if the 'mon is under the waves, where else would the arm cannon be?

[hollow tapir]

Who knows

[vivid spire]

Lol fair enough, edit two in 5

With scales hardened like armor, POKENAME stalk challenges under the waves. It ambushes by using its arm cannon, followed by breaking the surface in a deadly Mach Punch.

Meant to say they started the attack while still submerged, but see where the confusion lies

[hollow nimbus]

You spelled challengers as challenges again

Also, you put two spaces after the first sentence instead of one

The comma in the second sentence shouldn't be there

Change 'stalk' to 'stalks' for plurality agreement, change 'in a deadly' to 'with a deadly', and then you should be good to go

[vivid spire]

That explains why all my entries get flagged for grammar! I thought two spaces was necessary for formatting at the start of a sentence.

With scales hardened like armor, POKENAME stalks challengers under the waves. It ambushes by using its arm cannon, followed by breaking the surface with a deadly Mach Punch.

Also thank you for your help!

[hollow nimbus]

They tell you to use two spaces in grade school for readability, but outside of that setting, it's not really used

[hollow nimbus]

Get rid of the comma in the second sentence, and then you've fixed everything

[vivid spire]

Final Draft:

With scales hardened like armor, POKENAME stalks challengers under the waves. It ambushes by using its arm cannon followed by breaking the surface with a deadly Mach Punch.

[viscid light]

https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1322264824826298420/1375394694342901831/9uxuq6.gif

I have returned

@fluid saffron

Detached, Forever Burdened, Persistent. These are all apt descriptions of POKENAME's music. As if shackled to a reality not its' own, people and Pokémon alike hear the very Distortion World itself whenever POKENAME plays its tune.

@real aurora

Always within a perfect looping unison, POKENAME constantly rotates around in unison with itself. This creates a infinite feedback loop of positive and negative energy, widely believed thanks to Eevee's unstable genetics being kept stable by Magneton's metallic body.

@potent atlas

As of recent, chessboards of Bisharp have been fusing both Eevees and Pawniards under the orders of Kingambit, as means to rapidly improve their ranks. To see a lone POKENAME out in the wild is a horrific sight, often considered as lone survivors.

@sterile axle

Often called "Queengambit" by Pokemon fans, POKENAME relentlessly impedes and ends the life of whatever prey it has chosen for her herds. Strangely, the moment POKENAME is fused between a male Lurantis and a Bisharp, they will actively try to defuse.

@pearl fulcrum

Called by Pokemon fans as "Bishopgambit" due to their aggressive tactics, POKENAME often seek victory through unordinary means. A duel between two POKENAME can last for months, often using whatever resource that both combatants have in their arsenals.

@tender zephyr

Deemed as "Rookgambit" by Pokemon fans, POKENAME serves as the Rook of the bountiful amount of fusions called "The Chessboard", using defensive tactics to mitigate any potential losses, and often risking its' own life to protect their Kings.

@potent atlas

"Knightgambit", as called by Pokemon fans, serve as the brave knights of "The Chessboard" - unyielding in their foreward march. Even after being caught by trainers, POKENAME still remembers month long battles with their rivals, and will ignore orders till their battle has concluded.

[upper oasis]

Add timburr to the game I need him

[vivid spire]

Early morning idea for Ratcario:

#19.296: Known as both a Rattata of great size and the dread pirate of city trash cans, POKENAME has a sixth sense to avoid Trainers. When cornered, it lets loose a blood curdling Howl before fighting tooth and fist.

[vivid spire]

Alternate wording as well:

Known as both a Rattata of great size and the scourge of the seven city landfills, POKENAME has a sixth sense to avoid Trainers. When cornered, it lets loose a blood curdling Howl before fighting tooth and fist.

[vivid spire]

One more for Abphox:

#310.484a Abphox: When a forest fire rages, POKENAME is always blamed. It is unknown how these Pokémon sense when the undergrowth is at dangerous levels, but photos before the blaze glimpse their scythe wielding figure. The fires never spiral out of control.

[pearl vigil]

funny play on words i really like it

but both are incredible

[vivid spire]

Thank you!

[regal cedar]

So they'll show up in photos before a forest fire, right?
I'd probably change 'always' to something else, just from other entries about forest fires.

Also, it should be 'scythe-wielding', I believe.

[vivid spire]

I could replace with sometimes instead if needed, but how’s this?

When a forest fire rages, POKENAME is usually blamed. It is unknown how these Pokémon sense when the undergrowth is at dangerous levels, but photos taken before the blaze glimpse their scythe-wielding figure. The fires never spiral out of control.

[regal cedar]

Better!

[vivid spire]

Any fixes you’d suggest for either Ratcario entry?

[regal cedar]

"dread pirate" and "scourge of the seven city" sound more like titles to me, which would mean they would be capitalized. If you want to use "seven city" I'll have to check with other Unowns.
I would personally just use "scourge of city landfills", but I don't believe that's required.

I would uncapitalize howl for a simple reason: it can't actually learn the move Howl.

In addition, it should be "blood-curdling" or "bloodcurdling", but never "blood curdling".

"tooth and nail" is an expression, so changing it to "tooth and fist" I would typically frown upon, but I personally think the meaning is clear.

[vivid spire]

Perfect, thank you for the grammatical and FAQ 9 help, I definitely don’t want to change lore. Here is the corrected, and I think I’ll stick with the second:

Known as both a Rattata of great size and the scourge of city landfills, POKENAME has a sixth sense to avoid Trainers. When cornered, it lets loose a blood-curdling howl before fighting tooth and fist.

[frozen onyx]

I'm trying to come up with something for Beeking. does this sound alright?
"It's wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of their size, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly."
It definitely needs work but any feedback is appreciated. :)
(The sprite is not mine. it just needs a description and the game says to come here to add a description.)

[regal cedar]

Yes, you can write Dex Entries even if the sprite isn't yours! It's just that the spriter's entry would get priority if it exists.

I did want to note to remember to input your Discord username on the sheet, not your server nickname or anything else.

This means it should not be capitalized.

[frozen onyx]

sheet?

[craggy beacon]

when submitting you have to enter your discord user

thats what theyre talking about

[frozen onyx]

am i supposed to do that right now?

[craggy beacon]

you can submit whenever. people just typically want to get feedback first

[craggy beacon]

that being said

it's should be its

its is the posssessive word. it's is "it is"

so that should read "Its wings are purely [...]"

[frozen onyx]

Its wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of their size, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly.
is this better?

[craggy beacon]

i also think the wording could be better

[frozen onyx]

how so?

[craggy beacon]

"cannot" is a literal inability, and then its explained later that it can, it just doesnt

[frozen onyx]

what word should i use instead?

Its wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME never flies. This is not because of their size, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly.

like this?

[craggy beacon]

thats a bit better, yeah
somethings still a little off i think but i cant put my finger on it. maybe someone else can figure it out

i'm a nitpicky writer

[frozen onyx]

thank you again by the way

[craggy beacon]

🫡

[frozen onyx]

you are very kind

[regal cedar]

You can find the form to submit in the pins! It will then show up on the sheet.

Please review the "FAQ" tab if you have questions, or ask here!

[frozen onyx]

of course! i appreciate this. do you think anything is still off about this piece?

[last ice]

https://discordapp.com/channels/302153478556352513/1397618915810611251 How does this sound for it? "POKENAME wears a large gear on its back as a shell, heating the inside of the shell at high temperatures making it hollow. It's body is made from past molten gears."

[midnight siren]

I think that saying “their size” is what is throwing people off tbh

[frozen onyx]

how do you mean?

[midnight siren]

as it isn’t clear if you mean the wing size or the Pokémon’s size

if it’s about wing size, then “their” is ok, but if it’s the size of the pokemon it should be “its”

[frozen onyx]

Its wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of the size of their wings, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly.

is this better would you say?

[craggy beacon]

in that case, change their to its

[midnight siren]

[craggy beacon]

you want consistent pronouns

[midnight siren]

much clearer of what you are referring to

[craggy beacon]

(basically meaning: use either "its" or "their" to refer to the fusion, dont use both)

[frozen onyx]

should i also change the 'it's' at the beggining to their? to indicate all of them? or no.

[craggy beacon]

either is fine

[frozen onyx]

Their wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of the size of their wings, but instead because they are too lazy to learn how to fly.

like so?

[midnight siren]

I would just change “their” to “its”

[frozen onyx]

alright hold on a moment, will do

[regal cedar]

I will @main void @thorn ingot @urban drum
@buoyant depot @pastel depot @clever loom

(although it's not big deal for everyone here (as its just capitalization) except Bottomus (as they are not inputting their discord username) but I've been told we're aiming for consistentcy :p)

[frozen onyx]

Its wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of the size of it's wings, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly.

is this better

sorry to ask so many questions

[craggy beacon]

it's
anotha 's vs. s

its

[regal cedar]

This is correct. "Its" would imply singular, and it is using "they". Sorry Dragon :p

[frozen onyx]

Its wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of the size of itswings, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly.

[pastel depot]

Oof, sorry

[frozen onyx]

Its wings are purely decorative, as POKENAME cannot fly. This is not because of the size of its wings, but instead because it is too lazy to learn how to fly.

[craggy beacon]

dex entry writing can be a little hard to grasp at first, so its all good

[regal cedar]

Well, you changed to "it is" so its fine

but I did want to note that

[frozen onyx]

would you say this one is alright at the moment?

[regal cedar]

I think so

[craggy beacon]

Me 2️⃣

[frozen onyx]

thank you so much! i will submit now. what is the ETA on these, do you know?

[craggy beacon]

as far as i know, reviews happen pretty quickly (unowns are on top of their shit)

but if an unown sees an issue, itll be marked in the sheets, so be sure to check it fairly regularly

[frozen onyx]

i take it the unowns are the people who review these?

[craggy beacon]

yes

p.s this is how i get to the sheets :p

[frozen onyx]

is this the correct link? https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/0/d/1JOqitOP72D-s_es1-F7OzVPUkKJ3tytjfvhptx1KAK8/htmlview

what was the control f at the end?

[craggy beacon]

that was just me showing that you can search the sheets for your user

i went to type my user but then realized my one and only dex is in the approved list not responses 😩

[frozen onyx]

i dont know how to submit tjhough the sheet is view only

[craggy beacon]

#dex-entries-submissions

[regal cedar]

It mostly just varies! They are currently imported around every 2 weeks, but they also need to be accepted. This can take anywhere from a day to ~2 weeks, depending on the backlog

[craggy beacon]

it takes you to a google form

[frozen onyx]

i am actually a moron

[craggy beacon]

thats how you submit

[regal cedar]

If you have an error, you can say it here, but we have a more proper form at #custom-dex-errors

[frozen onyx]

submitted!

now i will wait.

thank you guys so much for the assistance! i appreciate it. i will be back later.

[thorn ingot]

But I have been only inputting my Discord username?

Oh you meant the capitalizing the s

My bad

[frozen onyx]

what does it mean if my name is green on the spreadsheet

[regal cedar]

Just that the username was capitalized, it shouldn't be. But it seems you're OK.

[frozen onyx]

my name is no longer green

they really do go fast huh

[craggy beacon]

Success

[frozen onyx]

oh CRAP i didnt even realize you were an editor! that is really cool.

[regal cedar]

hihi

[frozen onyx]

sometimes i wonder if i am actually blind or illiterate because like

duh

why are they called unown btw? do you just really like that pokemon

thats fair it is a cool one

[thorn ingot]

Unown is used because its the Pokémon with all the letters

[regal cedar]

Unown are based on letters!

[frozen onyx]

fr?

lemme google this hold on

genuinely what is wrong with me lmao

[hollow nimbus]

It is unclear whether Unown or human writing came first...

But in at least the anime canon, it seems that Arceus made the world by creating and arranging Unown to basically code the world into existence.

This is mostly unsupported in the games, though

https://tenor.com/view/monotart-pokemon-unown-gif-24981516

[frozen onyx]

damn arceus was using unnown assembly, nobody tell him about the 6502

every low level bro ever was just arceus

this whole time

someone did duplicate entries

[main void]

I thought I did- “BottomusMaximus3”

Might’ve had typo soz, do I have to resubmit?

Ohhh I got u- that’s not my username

[regal cedar]

Yes, that's right.

[main void]

Have to resubmit?

[regal cedar]

Let me see...

Yes, please resubmit.

[vivid spire]

Perhaps use instead “Refuses to fly”

[frozen onyx]

i already submitted but i appreciate the advice :)

you are a nice person

[vivid spire]

Apologies, my work is a dead zone, was 25 messages back

[frozen onyx]

no worries

[hollow tapir]

Happens to all of us at some point

And we’re all here to help each other :3

Okay I either am very dense and just noticed this or you changed your name from scythe to with an l

[vivid spire]

Took a while but had to do something raccoon related for Lycanrok:

#464.410: Commonly referred to as a Masked Bandit in desert regions, POKENAME spends the daytime camouflaged under burning sands. At night its stripes allow it to pass by Trainers stealthily, to steal from their backpacks.

[vivid spire]

This has indeed been my username, and yes I did base it off a scythe but changed the c for an l.

[hollow tapir]

You’re gonna kill me keeping it like that /hj

I think I’d remove the comma after stealthily

[hollow tapir]

And by this I mean I am often the worst when it comes to grammar/spelling when I actually remember how to spell

[pearl vigil]

to me it sounds better as "to pass by trainers stealthily, stealing from their backpacks

[hollow tapir]

Oooh true

[pearl vigil]

either way works though

[vivid spire]

Yeah, I could see it both ways, but agree the comma helps break the two thoughts apart

[vivid spire]

Opinions on if I should change it to “The Masked Bandit?”

[pearl vigil]

?

[frozen onyx]

i would say no, because that implies there only being one

[hollow tapir]

Well maybe not the, given it’s meant to be able to be the whole species and not just an individual

[hollow tapir]

Same brain

[frozen onyx]

[pearl vigil]

what is that

[pearl vigil]

whats a brain

[frozen onyx]

the family guy dog

[pearl vigil]

https://tenor.com/view/griffin-funny-family-guy-brian-gif-14437987

i knew it

[pearl vigil]

i just found the best sprite

leafeon/cleffa

but it doesnt have a dex entry

[frozen onyx]

how's this?

"POKENAME is always in a bad mood, as the result of constant headaches. This issue is sourced from the lightbulb on it's head, which only dims in old age."

it needs workshopping but i would appreciate assistance

[pearl vigil]

is that electbro

[frozen onyx]

electrking

[vivid spire]

Drop “sourced from” and put caused by

Other than that it is a solid entry

[pearl vigil]

dang cause i am in cerulean right now looking at the elctbro

[frozen onyx]

POKENAME is always in a bad mood, as the result of constant headaches. This issue is caused by the lightbulb on it's head, which only dims in old age.

[pearl vigil]

that is an excellent entry

[frozen onyx]

i didnt wanna kidnap that one so i evolved both pokemon and fused them lmao

thank you!

[pearl vigil]

lol first runthru i didnt know what joining team rocket mean

meant*

[frozen onyx]

anything you think i should add?

[pearl vigil]

but 2nd runthrough i became a horrible person

[frozen onyx]

have you played the kanto games or seen the shows? theyre all over the place there

lol

[pearl vigil]

i have played them yeah but joining them has never been an option before

[hollow tapir]

No apostrophe needed

[frozen onyx]

right thanks

POKENAME is always in a bad mood, as the result of constant headaches. This issue is caused by the lightbulb on its head, which only dims in old age.

like so?

[pearl vigil]

in the first sentence replace the with a

[frozen onyx]

POKENAME is always in a bad mood, as a result of constant headaches. This issue is caused by the lightbulb on it's head, which only dims in old age.

are you sure that's better?

[pearl vigil]

in my mind it is but you might want another set of eyes

[frozen onyx]

may i please have a second opinion (no offense im just on the fence here)

[hollow tapir]

Nah I meant the it’s not needing an apostrophe

[frozen onyx]

im saying do you think 'the' or 'a' is better

[hollow tapir]

As a result might sound better than the result

[frozen onyx]

alright

[hollow tapir]

Love your pfp btw lol

[frozen onyx]

POKENAME is always in a bad mood, as a result of constant headaches. This issue is caused by the lightbulb on it's head, which only dims in old age.
final draft?

thank you!

[pearl vigil]

i just got a shiny eevee for a starter after 27 hours of reloading

amazing draft

[frozen onyx]

thanks!

[pearl vigil]

2 questions #1 what should i evolve the eevee into then #2 what should i fuse it with

[frozen onyx]

I MISTYPED AND PUT A BAD APOSTROPHE NOOOOOO

do i resubmit

[pearl vigil]

they should fix it but just in case i would say yeah resubmit

[frozen onyx]

is that allowed

[pearl vigil]

yeah but to be sure double check #dex-entries-submissions

[hexed fog]

A bit off topic in this chat 🙂 please use #playthrough-talk

[vivid spire]

Discord is glitching on me, you can also visit #custom-dex-errors and follow the pinned comment to report the issue

[pearl vigil]

ok my fault i'll start using that

for stuff like that

[frozen onyx]

i sent it to errors

[frozen onyx]

do you know the ETA on errors

[vivid spire]

As Unowns have time. It can take a bit, or as mentioned, they may just fix it on the approvals. You can check #dex-entries-submissions on the “Check Approvals here” link, and can even go directly to the responses to see if it was approved/fixed

[hollow tapir]

Can confirm. Sometimes Izik will fix lil errors

[hollow tapir]

Although beware, going on the docs not on pc or smth will likely just. Not function. I tried doing it on my phone and it never loaded right and was just a mess

[regal cedar]

yeah too many rows. itll crash

[vivid spire]

Another Sprite I couldn’t resist writing, Lopvoir:

POKENAME hovers above the ground in serene grace. With poise, this cautious Pokémon reads the intentions of Trainers and other species alike. It is highly sought after for contests due to its calm demeanor under pressure.

[vivid spire]

One more for the Gardevoir line, Aegivoir:

It is said POKENAME’s shield is unbreakable. Those Trainers who bond with these Pokémon are protected from every injury, and if a threat proves too great, it psychically wields its sword in a flurry of blows.

[hollow tapir]

I’m confused at the last sentence, mainly cause it sounds like you could off in the third sentence about its potential helping find those who will do bad or things like that

[hollow tapir]

If you say it’s unbreakable I’d continue on in the next sentence, although it does feel fitting for the pokemon to be ultra protective of trainers they bond with

[vivid spire]

Perhaps this would be better for Lopvoir:

The Police often utilize their skills to weed out guilty parties.

[hollow tapir]

Yes, that’s def an option

[vivid spire]

Reworked Aegivoir completely:

It is said POKENAME’s shield is unbreakable, and only their chosen Trainers can enter close proximity. When their Trainer is in trouble, POKENAME’s stance changes completely, drawing its blade psychically and drowning the threat in a deluge of attacks.

[hollow tapir]

You spelled physically wrong but I like it!

I’d change it to enter close proximity to it just for clarity sake

[jagged ledge]

I would say either non-insectoid Pokémon or non-Bug-Type Pokémon just for consistent language usage. The rest of the entry looks good.

[vivid spire]

It is said POKENAME’s shield is unbreakable, and only their chosen Trainers can enter into close proximity. When their Trainer is in trouble, POKENAME’s stance changes completely, drawing its blade telekinetically and drowning the threat in a deluge of attacks.

[jagged ledge]

I would shift this slightly to a more linear approach. "POKENAME opens its mouth to let out a stinky aroma that (etc)." For example. Feel free to edit or add as needed, but I think shifting the approach slightly can help focus the intention.

I think adding more pronouns/direct subjects can help the second sentence. Maybe say "It lashes out its tongue made of garbage" as a potential solution.

[jagged ledge]

I would just shift the wording slightly from "home beaches" to "beaches it calls home" but otherwise looks good. Also poor thing.

[jagged ledge]

I think a quick review could help the second sentence, but it would just be a slight adjustment along the lines of "It is believed that this habit is an attempt at communication." But overall looks good.

[jagged ledge]

I would just recommend adding quotation marks around the title and instead of "The Toxic Storm", I would say "a Toxic Storm" as I don't know what "The Toxic Storm" is referring to for it to be the Scion of.

I would just move the preposition "When it flies" to the beginning as an introduction. "When it flies, it creates" or maybe at the end. Just cuz of the sorting of prepositional phrases. We can talk it out more if you have any questions.

[narrow cosmos]

I could just make it "Scion of Toxic Storms" to make it easier. 🤔 Putting "when it flies" at the beginning does flow better too.

[jagged ledge]

Yeah no problem

[thorn ingot]

275.162

Computers that this Pokémon has infected will repeatedly show pictures of escalators. People who try to find this Pokémon will always find one on or near an escalator.

[jagged ledge]

I'm just confused about "far-off". Far-off from where?

Also I would put However at the front same as the previous edit, but overall looks good.

[narrow cosmos]

Probably a holdover from originally wanting to name-drop a region but changing my mind. How about "remote" beaches?

[jagged ledge]

I would remove "one thing" and instead add a descriptor along the lines of "prides itself in the (blank) of its equipment." Second sentence looks good.

[jagged ledge]

I would adjust this slightly to something like "Until it has attached one to each of its rings" or something like that but overall looks good

[jagged ledge]

Looks good, no notes. And

[narrow cosmos]

Awesome, then with that, I've done the fixes and submitted them all.

Thanks for the look-over.

[jagged ledge]

Awesome! Great work! Welcome back to Dexdoku!

[jagged ledge]

I would just try to collect the thoughts in a more focused fashion. "POKENAME loves to headbutt things, but unfortunately, (etc). The more it rams into things, (etc)." Just adjusting some more direct clauses can help build sentence structure.

[jagged ledge]

A great and tragic concept, but could be adjusted slightly for a more immediate focus. "Due to POKENAME's putrid scent, other Pokémon tend to avoid it, leaving it lonely and sad. POKENAME balances on its tail, (etc)" or something.

[jagged ledge]

The first sentence is really solid, but I agree the second sentence could use some work. Could say something about it twirling, cartwheeling, or juggling with the smog or something?

[jagged ledge]

First sentence is solid, second sentence needs work. Something about where it gets pizza from or how it fights or adjusting the wording to "Its favorite food, pizza." Could help a lot.

[jagged ledge]

Sadly I think this is too direct of a reference. Do you mean spam as in the meat product? Does it speak English when people hear about "being a big shot"?

[jagged ledge]

Looks good, no notes

[jagged ledge]

I would recommend adjusting the verbs/imagery of the first sentence to have a stronger contrast. "Despite (etc), POKENAME rests within the smog for comfort." Or something, but that also implies it might poison himself. The second sentence I'm a little confused about because you seemed to establish it makes its own pillow.

(Also if you could use Copy/Paste Message Link or Share Screenshots from the gallery with your entries to help pair the entry with the sprite in instances like this where your entries are next to other references, that would be appreciated.)

[jagged ledge]

I like the concept a decent amount, but then the question becomes why the player can see the hallucinations. Maybe something about it spraying smog that forms mirages of berries?

Also just a couple tense shifts: "If POKENAME gets hungry, it (verb)s (description, etc)"

[terse pawn]

419.334

The silk of POKENAME was prized by ancient royalty as "dragon silk" which was used to make expensive royal fabric. These Pokémon have been depicted beside kings in ancient hieroglyphs.

[hollow tapir]

Nah I meant spam as in ads and such

I’ll have to redo stuff when I’m more awake

[vivid spire]

Early morning entry, Garkyu:

#299.373: Protective by nature, POKENAME has the heart of a dragon. Modifications on their costume make them more aerodynamic, and faster to get into the fray. It is common for Sinnoh children to ask for the Cynthia ace lookalike.

[vivid spire]

One more for the morning, Luxpunny:

#332.354: Each movement of POKENAME absorbs ambient static electricity from the air. The stored power gives it the ability to see its targets through objects. Anything that touches it in this state receives a crippling shock.

[vivid spire]

Now for one of my favorite pre evolutions with my favorite Eeveelution, Areon:

#390.197 Areon: Bathed in Lunar radiation, POKENAME’s fur hardens until it is tough as steel. It becomes more energetic at night, making it especially popular with Security Guards.

[jagged ledge]

Yes, but that's used to refer to digital media and you are encountering a physical being in person.

[hollow tapir]

Probably too much of a stretch, yeah. I just saw it and wanted to somehow do a reference

[jagged ledge]

I understand that, no worries. It's just that you gotta remember to be cautious with reference entries.

[frozen onyx]

kinda confusing. what's the correlation here with escalators?

[frozen onyx]

not all security guards are night guards / working the night shift. this could be adjusted as such in my opinion.

[vivid spire]

Updated as such:

Bathed in Lunar radiation, POKENAME’s fur hardens until it is tough as steel. It becomes more energetic at night, making it especially popular with Security Guards working night shifts.

[thorn ingot]

Furret Walk

[jagged ledge]

That is a very specific reference to base the entire entry around. When making a reference in your entry, it should be structured in a way that gives a sensible description within the game or behaviors of the fusion.

You could say something like "This Pokémon enjoys the repetitive feeling of continously walking along escalators." As a compromise. The other sentence could mention something about it enjoying technology or human infrastructure.

[vivid spire]

@jagged ledge any suggestions for the Garkyu or Luxpunny entries I’ve written?

[jagged ledge]

Sure let me go look

[jagged ledge]

That last sentence is probably a stretch. You could say something like "Children are fond of it for its resemblance towards a powerful fighter." If you really want to take that angle?

[jagged ledge]

I'm a little confused by how the static gives them x-ray vision.

[vivid spire]

Maybe instead:

When still it poses menacingly, but people find it adorable.

[vivid spire]

You know, it doesn’t, but you saying that might have given me a better idea

[vivid spire]

How about, instead:

Each movement of POKENAME absorbs ambient static electricity from the air. The stored power gives it the ability to see electircal currents given off by Trainers and Pokémon. Anything that touches it in this state receives a crippling shock.

[jagged ledge]

"It attempts to pose menacingly to intimidate Trainers, but most will instead find it to be adorable"?

[jagged ledge]

Well again I then question how the power in its fur effects its eyes. Luxray doesn't have good vision because it uses electricity, it has good vision AND it uses electricity.

[vivid spire]

Draft two, for Garkyu:

Protective by nature, POKENAME has the heart of a dragon. Modifications on their costume make them more aerodynamic, and faster to get into the fray. It attempts to pose menacingly to intimidate Trainers but most will find it adorable.

[vivid spire]

Okay attempt 3 for Luxpunny, did a pretty major overhaul:

Each movement of POKENAME absorbs ambient static electricity from the air powering up its attacks. When it hunts, it uses its ability to see electrical currents to track down prey, before delivering a crippling shock.

[jagged ledge]

Add a comma between "Trainers but". Also could shift to "but most find it adorable instead."

Also looking back at the previous sentence, you describe "Make them more aerodynamic" as a plural despite the rest of the entry being singular. I think the ending of that sentence needs more work too, but I need to go for a little, so I'll hold off on that lol

[vivid spire]

Thank you for your help so far.

[hollow tapir]

Editing my entries now based on the feedback wild

[vivid spire]

Okay, I think I found a better solution for Garkyu

Protective by nature, POKENAME has the heart of a dragon. It hoards costume materials to make itself more aerodynamic. It attempts to pose menacingly to intimidate Trainers, but most find it adorable instead.

[jagged ledge]

Looks much better!

[vivid spire]

Thank you again for your help!

[jagged ledge]

Happy to help!

[vivid spire]

I couldn’t resist this fusion for Scyther, my favorite Pokemon…. Luxther:

#332.123 Luxther: Contrary to popular belief, POKENAME’s wings and blades are not made of pure electricity. The filament thin material ensures it can achieve lightning fast speeds while maintaining an unpredictable attack pattern.

Thoughts?

[terse pawn]

I fixed up the grammar and resubmitted.

[vivid spire]

One for Beerantis as well:

#15.477: Each POKENAME stakes out a claim to a section of jungle. Within its territory, it lies dormant, waiting patiently for other Bug-Types to enter, then strikes faster than the eye can see. Attacked Pokémon are left paralyzed by venom, ready to be consumed.

[hollow nimbus]

If you're using it as a noun, you use no hyphen: Bug types
You hyphen it when used as an adjective to show that they are the same adjective: Bug-type Pokémon
Either way, type should not be capitalized.

Otherwise, looks good

[vivid spire]

Thank you for the note, I will remove the hyphen and lower case “type”

[vivid spire]

Couple more Lurantis fusions that really jumped out at me:

Lueon; #477.134: POKENAME conserves its energy floating on the surface of rivers, while fishing with its tail. After a successful catch, it makes its way energetically to its school and shares a meal.

[midnight siren]

@vivid spire when submitting entries please remember to use ' instead of ’ :p

its a small thing, but ’ can't be displayed within game

[vivid spire]

Luzor: #477.212: With a diet consisting of Geodudes, POKENAME has adapted to underground living. It uses its bright coloration to reel in unwary prey, then breaks through their hide with claws that can split diamonds.

[vivid spire]

Understood, my bad on that

[midnight siren]

no worries, it's a non-intuitive thing lol

[midnight siren]

couple suggestions: add by after energy -> flows better imo. shares a meal should be shares its meal to more specifically refer back to its catch

[vivid spire]

POKENAME conserves its energy by floating on the surface of rivers, while fishing with its tail. After a successful catch, it makes its way energetically to its school and shares its meal.

Absolutely correct, does make a lot of difference with those two changes

[hollow tapir]

All my entries hsve been edited now and should be good? Still need to figure smth out for kang (I can’t spell the full name at all)

[midnight siren]

kangaskhan

[hollow tapir]

Yes that

[midnight siren]

i just go kanga (the winnie the pooh character) then khan (as in gengis ) and fudge the middle

[hollow nimbus]

Kang
ask
han

Kang needs to ask Han

[hollow tapir]

The only one entry that might not be fixed other than sand, is the mime jr one

I thought it was fine with the juggling gases but I might need to change it

[vivid spire]

Want some advice for what else to write for this entry… feels incomplete: Gargia:

POKENAME is often referred to as the Bringer of Fog. When flying overhead, the fog descends, the winds howl and when the storm passes blue feathers litter the ground.

[cedar heart]

something about it definitely feels incomplete, but I can't say what

[vivid spire]

It needs… something, but my brain is not braining atm

I think I got it:

POKENAME is often referred to as the Bringer of Fog. When flying overhead, the fog descends, and the winds howl. In the eye of the storm it awaits its destined trainer, and after it passes all that remains are blue feathers.

[hexed fog]

Remember it should have to do with both halves of a fusion

Just having an entry 'sound cool' doesnt work

[frozen onyx]

GUYS IM NUMBER THIRTY THOUSAND ON THE DOT (i think this is pretty cool)

[frank axle]

Is anyone awake who could help me with a dex entry?

[vivid spire]

Understood, will work on the overhaul throughout the day

Actually early morning creativity gave me an idea, that I think will work:

POKENAME is often referred to as Bringer of Storms, and its passing wake is filled with fog, thunderstorms and even tornadoes. Its body is aerodynamically covered in rough scales, allowing it to pass unharmed into the eye of storms.

[vivid spire]

Can’t let the early morning creativity go to waste, been struggling with this entry for day, and think I finally found what Luwak needs:

#477.105: Where fields of flowers bloom, POKENAME is a caretaker. Its bright colors allow it to blend in with the blooms, attracting pollinators like Butterfree. If pests attack the plants, it quickly drives them away using its scythe like a boomerang.

[regal cedar]

Hmm, what entries to write today...

[vivid spire]

What do you all think of Zutops?

#41.141: Thought extinct, POKENAMEs were only rediscovered recently deep underground. Completely blind, they use their acute hearing to navigate the darkness. Their wings are not used for flight, instead acting as flippers for swimming.

[vivid spire]

Another entry, for Garpunny:

#299.354 Garpunny: POKENAME's antennae are sensitive enough to detect changes in peoples' moods, yet durable enough to be used as extra scything claws. Cautious by nature, they prove difficult to befriend.

[frozen onyx]

would 'difficult to befriend' not be better here? also, yet here implies juxtaposition. how are durable and sensitive opposed? sentitive is not the same as fragile.

[vivid spire]

Agreed on the difficult to befriend.

On sensitivity you are correct it’s not necessarily synonymous with “fragile”, however generally sensitive parts are vulnerable parts. Would “hardened” be better in your opinion?

Or should I drop yet?

[clever belfry]

@vivid spire I'm new here. Are you the only one that can share your Pokedex ideas, or is it ok if I share one?

[vivid spire]

Anyone can share, I just wake up for work early, and my ideas run together

[clever belfry]

ok, thanks!

[hexed fog]

Check the pins for submission guidelines

[clever belfry]

oh, i did. i submitted a few already.

[fair edge]

Ah, man... I think it's time I get the rust off my fingers and lock in for dex entries

I missed writing them qwq

[real prawn]

hi i’m bad with putting together words but i have a lot of ideas so feel free to use these as prompts for pokedex entries

minior/togekiss: races across the night sky, speeds can be compared to the likes of a shooting star/mistaken for a shooting star? bring in togekiss stuff like maybe you can wish upon it or it’s a good luck charm

togekiss/golisopod: intimating exterior, actually acts as a sort of vigilante of the seas? protects the weak, won’t stop at anything until all evil is gone and peace is restored or whatever

whimsicott/volcarona: flies relatively close to the ground because of its fat wings great snuggle buddy thanks to its warm body temperature and fluffy cotton?? maybe it’s actually highly flammable idk i have a lot of scattered ideas but can’t put them together

slurpuff/cresselia: constantly has the smell of delicious baked goods wafting off of it, despite what it seems like it’s croissants are very light and airy letting it fly across the night sky? also it scatters powdered sugar everywhere lol

[frozen onyx]

i am not sure. i think instead of saying 'yet' you could say 'and'

[vivid spire]

How does this sound?

POKENAME's antennae are sensitive enough to detect changes in peoples' moods, and durable enough to be used as extra scything claws. They are difficult to befriend due to their cautious nature.

[frozen onyx]

personally, i think that sounds great :)

[vivid spire]

Thank you for your feedback and help!

[regal cedar]

Don't forget to enter your actual Discord username on the sheet!

[clever belfry]

i did! thanks for checking though! 😃

[regal cedar]

No, you put "recalledcorgi86", make sure you put

[regal cedar]

<@&306953740651462656> Can I get a pin 🙏

[sinful patrol]

no problem

[nimble sage]

Thank you Oak, where would we be without you

[hexed fog]

@hollow tapir if your entry gets denied please do not resubmit it a month later. we noted the reason in the first denial of 412.297.png

[timid sky]

He's always on duty

[hollow tapir]

I thought I only submitted ones I hadn’t before

[hexed fog]

all entries are viewable in the responses tab

[hollow tapir]

I forgot I submitted the gible ones

[hollow tapir]

Yeah I should look at it more, just annoying to have to go on pc to have it function

[hexed fog]

Imagine how annoying it is to have to double check that someone didn't resubmit their entries after being denied once

[hollow tapir]

Okay yeah also fair

I just didn’t remember submitting that line before, but that’s a me problem lmao

[timid sky]

Here's where I would resubmit my denied entry to be a troll

https://tenor.com/view/if-i-had-one-angry-yelling-fairly-odd-parents-mr-turner-gif-16322274

[hexed fog]

@hollow tapir

POKENAME is often a target for bullying, given its small legs. When it flies, its small legs tend to be front and center, as it is the first thing seen from below.

You wrote this one.

Please remember that entries have to be for the entire species, not just one

[hollow tapir]

I wasn’t trying to make it for only one? It was more about the species overall, and in general them being made fun of for their legs

[hexed fog]

Ok so who is the group of pokemon following around every one of these ho-oh fusions

so it can bully them

[hollow tapir]

I mean I wouldn’t say they’re always being followed per se but presumably there’s tons of times where they’re on the ground and then about to start flying and pokemon are around

I didn’t think it sounded that far fetched

I didn’t get any feedback either when I initially posted it here so I didn’t realize there were any issues

[hexed fog]

np

[vivid spire]

Challenge accepted for Whimsirona, hopefully this is what you were hoping for:

#360.374d: Due to its cottony wings, POKENAME only takes to the air on great gusts of wind. Many Trainers are found cuddling them on the ground due to the pleasant heat they give off.

[jagged ledge]

I understand the logic of characterized storytelling trying to reflect the world or lore around a sprite, but the issue with describing social situations or assumptions is that it doesn't always come across as a tone fitting an encyclopedia entry or species-wide trait.

[vivid spire]

Any chance since I’m at work you could verify if I submitted my entry for #299.354? My phone can’t load the responses

[jagged ledge]

No worries, I'll check in just a moment.

[jagged ledge]

You did and it was approved with slight fixes 👍

[hexed fog]

@thorn ingot try to remember to include POKENAME in your entry 😉 lots of 'its'

[sharp dagger]

https://discord.com/channels/302153478556352513/1397561577057554533 another camerupt one , is this ok?

POKENAME erupts massive amounts of volcanic ash. When flying at high speeds, the ash impacting it's wings creates a glowing plasma.

its based on this phenomenon https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/St._Elmo's_fire

specifically this bit

[vivid spire]

Thank you for checking! Did not want to resubmit it!

[jagged ledge]

Understandable, no worries.

[hexed fog]

25JUL2025 Dex Update has been submitted. As usual, this may take a couple days to officially update

[halcyon yacht]

143.329
Its once effortless attacks have become precise and deadly. POKENAME realized that dealing with threats quickly would let it return to sleep sooner.

Referencing the previous evo's pokedex entry of how it was once sloppy but as it evolved it became more efficient. First time making one of these be kind ^-^

I didn't count characters is that 100

[frozen onyx]

i think saying 'the' once effortless attacks and saying that specifically it realized implies it's only one

[halcyon yacht]

"Its once" then? Or what do you suggest?

Oh that's someone hacked

Rip

[hollow tapir]

<@&306953740651462656>

I feel like saying it’s once and saying it’s effortless when it was sloppy before is a bit confusing? Maybe say how it needed to train itself and its attacks are now more precise and deadly as a result

[halcyon yacht]

Well hmm the pokedex is meant to be observations right?

This feels more like an overall knowledge of how the mon works rather than something a professor or trainer would observe

[hollow tapir]

Earlier it was said it’s meant to be like an encyclopedia entry

[junior osprey]

What

Was it a bot

[hollow tapir]

There was a spam thing, nitro

[junior osprey]

Ah ic thanks

[halcyon yacht]

Its attacks, if it bothers to fight at all, are careless and sloppy. One successful hit is all it needs, though, as its zigzagging blade delivers a nasty blow.

This is the pre-evo's dex entry. Feels more like field studies imo

[vivid spire]

That is fair, though one of the rules is the entry has to stand alone.

[halcyon yacht]

Standalone yet stay in universe

[vivid spire]

Correct, people should not need to read a previous entry to understand a current one

[jagged ledge]

If I'm being fully honest, I might need to take a second look for edits to that entry as well

[vivid spire]

Though with your wording, I think it should be fine

[halcyon yacht]

Not have to perse but a neat callback to how it used to be. I'm going to rewrite it to fit better though

[jagged ledge]

Hi, I'd be happy to answer any questions about Dex Entry Rulings

[halcyon yacht]

If we were going off of observations purely I would say something about how it is so chill until it gets hit and then it comes out of shield form to giga impact something into next poke-year

[jagged ledge]

When you say effortless, do you mean as in it never put any effort or power into attacks before? Effortless is more commonly used to refer to something that can be done easily without much strain or focus.

[halcyon yacht]

Effortless as it never really cared to fight to begin with

[jagged ledge]

Then that is not the word you are looking for, sorry.

[vivid spire]

Perhaps it has a “Distracted” fighting style?

Not paying attention to the fight at hand

[jagged ledge]

I also don't think that's quite right, but closer

[midnight siren]

languid?

like slow and kinda tired?

[halcyon yacht]

As it is a snorlax it really just wants to sleep and eat and in the case of Snorslash would be behind it's shield as protection. Only going into sword form when it is provoked

[jagged ledge]

Yeah

[midnight siren]

not entirely convinced languid works, but i think it's closer at least

[jagged ledge]

But like that needs to be contextualized and written in the proper format to be accepted.

[halcyon yacht]

Right

[vivid spire]

Maybe what your trying to say is it has become more efficient at attacking so it can go back to sleep

One strike, then back to bed

[halcyon yacht]

It prefers to stay behind its defensive pillow, dozing between meals. When disturbed POKENAME reluctantly takes up its sword, delivering devastating strikes, before retreating to rest once more.

Idk how to put "switches to sword form" without directly saying it

[jagged ledge]

So I also tend to enjoy creating entries based around the logic of existing ones, but you need to be cautious to ensure that the new entry can make sense and stand on its own.

You could say something like "Upon evolution, POKENAME developed a strategy (etc)" or "Despite its laziness, POKENAME (etc)" there are solutions, but you can't rely on external information for your summary in case someone fuses the Pokémon on their own or encounters the fusion in a Randomizer without the previous evolution.

[jagged ledge]

Definitely much closer! 👍

I do need to get going for right now, but thanks for your cooperation, I'll be happy to help more later.

[halcyon yacht]

Thank you!

[midnight siren]

i can also give some help with wording and any other questions you have

[halcyon yacht]

Well this is what I currently have so any suggestions from there I'm all ears

I want to eventually make a dex entry for my first team in my first playthrough of the game

I believe moletta already had one but the others didn't iirc

Finally back to my PC typing on my phone sucks.

[midnight siren]

aight, a little flavour suggestion here: i think you can change shield. looking at the sprite, the fusion doesn't have a shield per se, it has a defensive pillow. so something you could alter is the first sentence's first clause to It prefers to stay behind its defensive pillow

[halcyon yacht]

👍

[midnight siren]

other than that, i personally cant see any issues

[halcyon yacht]

Sounds good gonna work on Paralee now because the boi pulled his weight

[vivid spire]

Thoughts/feedback needed for Ninepunny:

#38.354: When enraged POKENAME's tails heat, causing them to billow as though they’re in the wind. If continually pestered, not only will the person become cursed, they will receive a burning kick.

[frank axle]

Hello, I am a first time maker of dex entries and I'd like to get some pointers. If someone would be so kind as to help me I would greatly appreciate it please and thank you

[vivid spire]

What are your questions? I only started a couple of weeks ago, but will answer what I can

[halcyon yacht]

433.131 - Oriras
It loved to ferry people on its back across the sea during its life. Some say POKENAME now carries spirits across the afterlife, its song sometimes being heard in the wind.

[halcyon yacht]

I just started today, there's nothing wrong with just posting something and taking critique any and everywhere

It's a discussion afterall

[vivid spire]

I like the passion in this entry, the second sentence may needs to start with a “Some say” or “It is said” because an encyclopedia generally wouldn’t include afterlife information

[frank axle]

First, I want to make sure I'm getting the sprite entry right. All i need are the numbers with a dot in between them and put .png next to the name? (EG; 476.463.png)

[halcyon yacht]

You're right

[vivid spire]

Correct, there may be a letter as well, e.g 123.123a, because some entries have multiple sprites

[halcyon yacht]

How's that change

[vivid spire]

I personally love it. May need to have a Unown (staff) check it before posting, but sounds good to me

Or you can submit it directly

[halcyon yacht]

I guess I'll submit i

[frank axle]

Unkown are staff, good to know 🙂

[frank axle]

Right, so my next question has to do with the entry itself. I've made 3 rough drafts all with minor changes and I'd like to get opinons on which one is good or what should be fixed to make it perfect.

POKENAME has an innate sense of detecting emotion in both people and Pokémon. When it senses a negative emotion in someone, it uses the leaves around it's collar to emit a pleasing aroma to cheer them up.

POKENAME has an innate sense of detecting emotion in both people and Pokémon, and is commonly seen near spa's. When it senses a negative emotion in someone, it uses the leaves around it's collar to emit a pleasing aroma to cheer them up.

POKENAME has an innate sense of detecting emotion in both people and Pokémon, and is commonly seen working in spa's. When it senses a negative emotion in someone, it uses the leaves around it's collar to emit a pleasing aroma to cheer them up.

[vivid spire]

The first or second sound better to me. For grammar you would use, “Are commonly seen near spas”.

One question for the sprite, does it have an author besides Japeal? Japeal is the placeholder automatic sprite artist, and as such any submissions for it are held until an official spriter creates one for the fusion

[frank axle]

As far as I know, it doesn't have an official sprite made by anyone. Sadly I don't exactly have the skills, tools or knowhow to make one for it myself.

[vivid spire]

Nor do I, but I thought I would let you know so you can hold the entry in reserve until one of the sprinters create it

[frank axle]

On the subject of making a sprite, do you happen to know where I could go to give it the old college try?

[vivid spire]

#1050404143807873157 , #spriter-general #spriting-resources , would be places with those answers. I unfortunately haven’t looked up information on it.

[frank axle]

Awesome, thank you so much

[vivid spire]

You’re welcome

[halcyon yacht]

Dragon hunter is typing

:menacing:

[midnight siren]

here are my Top Tips™ for starting writing entries.

1. Read the FAQ!!!!!!! it sounds obvious, but loads of entries have to be adjusted or rejected cause people haven't read them. the FAQ can be found in the google sheet linked in #dex-entries-submissions (the link is in the middle of the text and is labelled HERE).

2. There is also a list of common errors/questions in the pinned messages, i would also advise reading them to help improve your writing.

3. When submitting, remember to use your discord name (all lowercase) not your display name. If it isn't a real discord name, auto rejection no matter how good the entry is.

4. Make sure you are making a dex for a sprite that is in game. Best way to check this is looking at https://infinitefusiondex.com/ or https://www.fusiondex.org/. if it's not a japeal sprite, you are free to write

5. Dex tone. It's a difficult thing to get right, and there are some cases when it can feel like you've achieved it when you haven't.

6. Be creative with your entry, but don't be afraid of needing reworks . I've had several instances of entries i have an idea for, I write it and it doesn't work. there are loads of people here who are happy to give help and advice, if you need help just post it here!

7. I would recommend when you are just starting out to seek feedback here before submitting to the sheet. other people will notice things you don't, like misspelt words or grammatical issues, that's just the nature of proof reading.

8. Personal tip, don't just say a fusion can do something. It's just less fun and interesting about saying a fusion can do something, instead of does do something. I can eat handfuls of flour, it doesn't mean all humans do, or even i do regularly.

9. Have fun

[halcyon yacht]

THE WALL

😱

[midnight siren]

and those are my top tips™ on how to start writing entries

~~also to make it less painful for us unown ~~

[halcyon yacht]

While you're here do you mind checking mines for Oriras

[halcyon yacht]

Bump

[midnight siren]

yurp, give me 1 mo and i'll give it a looksy

[halcyon yacht]

Heard

2 down 3 to go lol

[vivid spire]

Since @midnight siren is on the line… mind looking at my Ninepunny entry?

[halcyon yacht]

Oh the job of an unown

[midnight siren]

don't see any issues personally

[midnight siren]

on it

[halcyon yacht]

[timid sky]

?tag fun

[upper loom]

Please contact a server physician if you're experiencing any of the symptoms.

[midnight siren]

my goal is to infect all writers with this unown illness called fun

[halcyon yacht]

[midnight siren]

i would rephrase not only will the person become cursed. this doesn't really imply that the fusion itself is cursing them, just that they happen to be cursed around the same time imo. i think changing it to POKENAME will curse the annoyance with a burning kick could be fun . just make sure you change it to be more clearly the 'mon cursing them

[midnight siren]

i've only had it for like 3 days

[halcyon yacht]

Doing it great

[midnight siren]

I’ll be around for help for the next hour or so, so if any of yous wants some help, just ping me

I will be needing to sleep soon tho

[halcyon yacht]

Sleep? What's a sleep?

[midnight siren]

[halcyon yacht]

Is that like a food? Or drink

[midnight siren]

it’s a noun

or can be at least

[sharp dagger]

does this seem fine? @midnight siren

[vivid spire]

How about this correction:

When enraged POKENAME's tails heat, causing them to billow as though they’re in the wind. If continually pestered it will curse the Trainer or Pokémon with a sudden burning kick.

[halcyon yacht]

146.466a - Moletta

It is said that POKENAME's aria is so intense that those that hear it are overcome with anger and hostility. It lives in seclusion to prevent any harm to people or Pokémon.

[midnight siren]

aight, couple things.

1. “its wings” not “it’s wings” (theres a pinned message about “it” I’d recommend looking at)
2. I wouldn’t say “erupts” personally, I’d go “spews”. As far as the dex entry says, there is never a full volcanic eruption, so I wouldn’t use that wording
3. I would change “impacting its wings” to “impacting against its wings”

[midnight siren]

I like the rework . thing I’ve noticed is that you’re referring to the fusion plurally with “enraged POKENAME” but then singularly later - “pestered it”. Add “an” infront of “enraged”, and that’s fixed

[sharp dagger]

i messed up it's

[vivid spire]

Fixed and gonna submit it! Thank you for your help! Get some rest

[frozen onyx]

my first desc is in the game :)

also are the arms just nubs or are they folded behind its back im confused by the sprite a little

[midnight siren]

it’s all good, it happens lol

[midnight siren]

folded, a lot of slowking bases look like that

[vivid spire]

Now I need advice… an entry I made for Gargia yesterday was all story, no substance. This is my overhaul:

#299.249: POKENAME is often referred to as Bringer of Storms, and its passing wake is filled with fog, thunderstorms and even tornadoes. Its body is aerodynamically covered in rough scales, allowing it to pass through the storm wall unharmed into the eye of storms.

[halcyon yacht]

Bump

[vivid spire]

Make sure Pokémon is capitalized and with the accent. I personally love this entry

[frozen onyx]

what does aria mean?

[vivid spire]

It is a song, usually operatic in nature

[hollow tapir]

I need my entries for dexdoku looked at if you’re still awake dragon

[halcyon yacht]

And aria meloetta is what's used for the fusion

[frozen onyx]

that is really cool

i like the desc a lot personally i would say go for it

[halcyon yacht]

I'm trying to treat them as kinda separate pokemon that take from parts of the fusees

[midnight siren]

you have 5 minutes to show me them before I sleep

[hollow tapir]

Oh shit

[midnight siren]

na, you have a bit longer than that, but I will be sleeping soon lol

just bump ‘em, I’ll look at these other two and then give yours a looksy

[hollow tapir]

Just basically all the dexdoku ones… wild gave a once over already but I still needed to edit

[hollow tapir]

Starts with this one… your sprites

[midnight siren]

don’t see any issues her personally

[midnight siren]

can’t look at those, bias for my sprites

[halcyon yacht]

[midnight siren]

would be nice if I could spell here properly tho

[halcyon yacht]

Her

[midnight siren]

think head butting should be hyphenated, otherwise looks good

[midnight siren]

no notes here

[sharp dagger]

POKENAME spews out massive amounts of volcanic ash. When flying at high speeds, the ash impacting against its wings creates a glowing plasma.
i put spews out cause spews seems incomplete

[midnight siren]

no notes here

[hollow tapir]

For sake of ease, you should always show the sprite with the entry

[midnight siren]

ye, I think that was me being dumb

looks good tho

[hollow tapir]

Oh nvm you already posted it- didn’t realize you were rewriting it my bad

I’m not used to using many messages to fix an entry

[dull folio]

Finally back from a hiatus from dexing for end of school stuff and wanting to enjoy the first part of my holdiday . Anyway I'll get a few entries done to get back in the swing of things then I'll take a stab at the dex doku.

POKENAME is extremely territorial, protecting its fields against any intruders. It starts its charge from miles away, building up momentum to strike with a devastating headbutt.

[midnight siren]

hmm, goodies feels a bit too informal imo, change it to treats maybe? other than that looks good

[midnight siren]

wrong its

[dull folio]

I hate it's and its

[midnight siren]

perma banned from dex entries now

[dull folio]

I've just come back

[hollow tapir]

Also finally came up with smth for the kang

[midnight siren]

u still have wrong its

both needed altering

[midnight siren]

same

[halcyon yacht]

47.106 - Paralee

POKENAME uses its sharp pinsirs along with lightning fast kicks to overwhelm most targets. Due to its reckless nature the parasite often takes over, influencing its actions to avoid threats.

[dull folio]

The worst part is I completely know how it works but its a terrible force of habit and sometimes my phone keyboard corrects it to the wrong thing

[vivid spire]

Bump

[hollow tapir]

That seems better than just having focused on the lugia aspect

[midnight siren]

(I assume this is a ref entry, so I’m just gonna comment on the grammar since I’m not too familiar with ref entries yet ) look good grammatically

[dull folio]

Don't reference 1 part of the Pokemon, just say POKENAME's reckless nature

[hollow tapir]

Tis, Spamton from deltarune

[midnight siren]

yupppppppppppppppppp

[halcyon yacht]

Oh that's sad, even a callback to hitmon's ability ;-;

[hollow tapir]

https://tenor.com/view/spamton-deltarune-dumpster-dumpster-diving-hiding-gif-3296301936301033689

[midnight siren]

it happens so much

[halcyon yacht]

And other dex entries talk about other pokemon as well

[dull folio]

Ik but it just gets a bit muddled as to which pokemon your talking about

It still makes reference to it because it's a fusion of hitmonchan, you just can't really talk about an individual part

[hollow tapir]

See he even comes out of the trash in game it’s perfect

[dull folio]

I've not seen one but I could be wrong

[vivid spire]

I like it, but might suggest “Parasitic” instead of poisonous

[hollow tapir]

Oh that’s true

[halcyon yacht]

Parasect's does lmao talking about how it fights for territory with Shiinotic

[midnight siren]

perfect opportunity to remind people of the poke page for paras/parasect

[dull folio]

That's an actual dex entry for a game, infinite fusion does things a little differently

[hollow tapir]

I’m sorry. People mentioned China with that creature? Huh

[halcyon yacht]

Yeah lmao specifically china

[hollow tapir]

I feel like if it was a bat kinda pokemon I’d expect it more but paras and parasect??

[halcyon yacht]

Must be a real type of animal/spore parasiticism

[midnight siren]

It’s an official entry

[dull folio]

It's hard making parasect entries, can't just talk about POKEMON + MUSHROOM lmao

[midnight siren]

Theres one saying that the mushrooms are used in Chinese medicine iirc

[hollow tapir]

Is there an entry which is just Mario eating mushrooms? I feel like someone ought to have done that

[hollow tapir]

Ahhh okay I was like tf

[vivid spire]

True, you can’t say it’s being “Controlled by the mushroom”…. BUT IT CAN SPREAD THEM!

[dull folio]

Can't reference other games sadly

[halcyon yacht]

Well ultimately the goal of the parasite is to spread it's spores far

[hollow tapir]

Oh no I didn’t mean entry wise more sprite wise

Although ig other Nintendo games could be tricky

[dull folio]

There's definitely some Mario entries I've seen them

[vivid spire]

Think of it more like what does a parasite in RL do to an animal. Instead of complete control, it affects aspects of that animal

[dull folio]

But the issue is you have to talk about the pokemon not the mushroom lol

[vivid spire]

So the paras aspect could very well be slicing claws to add to its kicks

And the parasite could add armor or affect power

[halcyon yacht]

It is said that parasect is the mushroom as the bug is already dead and the mushroom has complete control over the host

[midnight siren]

and this is why I share the poke page, cause parasect is tricky to write for

[dull folio]

You can talk about the mushroom, just gotta be secondary

[dull folio]

I still find it better than porygon though

[halcyon yacht]

Ultra Sun: The bug is mostly dead, with the mushroom on its back having become the main body. If the mushroom comes off, the bug stops moving.

[midnight siren]

based take

[vivid spire]

No one is denying what Pokemon company has officially said, but if we only go off that for Parasect entries, they will all be Zombies

[midnight siren]

we don’t always follow official dex precedent

[dull folio]

That talks about that crab and the mushroom, some people just talk about the mushroom and forget the crab

[midnight siren]

in the same way that for IF purposes not all Cubone have been orphaned

[halcyon yacht]

Except when fused with kanga

[dull folio]

With crab + mushroom + other pokemon there's way too much to talk about without combinging 2 subjects together, which will most likely be mushroom and crab

[dull folio]

I just don't know what to talk about apart from "This Pokemon is corrupted data/ a computer program"

[vivid spire]

As mentioned before, maybe a fusion actually kicks out the parasite, or becomes symbiotic with it. Otherwise they’re all shambling Parasect

[midnight siren]

that’s why I avoid them

[dull folio]

And don't even get me starter on the game references I have to make up new lore for

[midnight siren]

I only wrote 1 entry which was a “do androids dream of electric sheep” ref

[halcyon yacht]

I could see that with some like celebi or shiinotic who either cure the bug or fight so often they mutually assure each others' destruction

But in the case of hitmon who is just a mon who kicks really well and fast there's not enough connected to plant life or nature that would suggest the parasite gets kicked off during fusion

[dull folio]

I remember doing one for porygon + pidgey where I made it a flappy bird game mascot loved by children

[vivid spire]

But what if… it fights against it through meditation?

[halcyon yacht]

Maybe if it was hitmonchan with inner focus being able to resist or fight the control of the mushroom

[dull folio]

That's probably best porygon entry I'll get

[halcyon yacht]

But not hitmonlee

[midnight siren]

genius

[halcyon yacht]

Imo

[dull folio]

POKENAME's inner focus allows it to fight control of it's husk of a body against the mushroom.

[halcyon yacht]

Great for hitmonchan who actually has inner focus. Not hitmonlee

In fact lee has reckless

[vivid spire]

Or maybe it found a cool hat that happens to make it lose control every once in a while

[halcyon yacht]

Which would make it more susceptible to being controlled I would think

[dull folio]

I mean just change the kicks to punches in the second sentence lmao

[halcyon yacht]

I'm not doing hitmonchan lmao

[halcyon yacht]

Doing an entry for my team I won with for my first playthrough

[dull folio]

Ahhh I thought you were just picking a random mb

[halcyon yacht]

Npnp

When I finish I'll revist others that seem cool like this one

[vivid spire]

Again I like the creativity on display…. But what could we change so the mushroom is minimized?

[dull folio]

POKENAME's reckless nature often allows the parasite occupying it's body to take control, influencing it's attacks.

You can do the second sentence on something like it's spore spreading punches or it's crab Pinscers