dex-entries-discussion

[noble schooner]

huh... yeah i have no knowledge about this... should i know about it or is that something only for those who actually work on the game to know about...?

sorry if dumb questions... like i said i only just started

[night plank]

check the channel above this, it shows a document at the bottom

it is accesible to everyone mainly

#dex-entries-submissions this channel, forgot I could do that linkchannel thing

anyone got an idea for this pokemon, this is the last one I have to do for the phanteeveelutions (phantump/eevee line), but I'm kind of lost on ideas for this pokemon

[noble schooner]

OH ok thank you! geez i am not in the know... i was doing something else to see which had entries 😅

[noble schooner]

yo i like that sprite

[craggy beacon]

• lost child that died in the woods, phantump
• Feeling Ribbons, sylveon

something about it seeking out lost children in the woods to help them home?

[night plank]

yeah, that could work, thanks Sino!

[craggy beacon]

🫡

[night plank]

I love the evolution line, I especially love the trevenant/vaperon one

[noble schooner]

maybe... a sylveon that grew detached from emotion and now drifts in a forest aimlessly in melancholy?

a bit abstract but i just threw that together on a whim @night plank

[night plank]

POKENAME are formed by the remnants of the trapped children that want to go home. When they find children in their melancholic walk, they guide them home.

How does this look?

[noble schooner]

wait... so the ones listed are ones that HAVE been approved or most likely?

[night plank]

yeah, they are looked over by unowns and then if good, are approved

[ebon warren]

There are multiple tabs on the document, you’ll need to specify which tab you are asking about

[noble schooner]

not too shabby, i'm not the best at critics so i'm not sure what feedback i can give

[night plank]

that's fine

[noble schooner]

i think i understand what you mean. I just check one of the ones i did one for and i saw my name next to it. if i actually got one approved... holy shit that's awesome

[ebon warren]

I don’t entirely follow the first sentence at all, and it makes the second sentence seem disconnected. Why is the walk melancholic?

[night plank]

mostly idea from Merc so wanted to add something in there but actually I have an idea for why it could be melancholic so give me a moment to fix the stuff to make it also more connected

[noble schooner]

huh... one of the sprites i did one for isn't there... did i type the number in wrong at the time?

[night plank]

POKENAME are formed by the remnants of the trapped children that want to go home. They try to find these lost children, once they find a child, they guide them home. POKENAME are melancholic as they hold the emotions of the dead wanting to go home.

[night plank]

might be at the very bottom

[ebon warren]

The spreadsheet of submitted entries shouldn’t miss any, as they are automatically added once they’re submitted. If the submission page has an error it won’t allow you to submit, however, so it may not have actually gone through. It’s hard to know though, without any other details

[noble schooner]

maybe i did put the number wrong... or maybe it hasn't been seen yet... it was for a newer fusion that was added so i understand if so.

[night plank]

wait, is it this one?

335.59a.png

[noble schooner]

no it was for 339.483.png

[night plank]

found it

mainly, if you're looking for one, ctrl+f is good to find stuff

[noble schooner]

i was doing that. however i must only be seeing the approved ones.

[ebon warren]

I’m unable to find any entries under the Discord name merclipse, so apparently you are using the nickname for this server @noble schooner?

[noble schooner]

yeah i am

[night plank]

also Trevenant and Vaperon

[noble schooner]

oh yeah that is awesome, love ghost type fusions

[ebon warren]

You would need to use your Discord username, not a server nickname. If you were to change your nickname in the PIF server in the future, you wouldn’t then change the name you are using to submit, as they would show as separate people

[noble schooner]

yeah i realised the error... don't worry Merc is fine

"Psychic ability for Sylveon?" huh... i can actually explain why i decided that

i actually wasn't refering to the Sylveon half, but the Braixen half. Braixen evolves into Delphox which is Fire/Psychic. Braixen does learn Psychic type moves before it evolves. So i had the idea of the Braixen deciding not to use magic from the mind (Psychic) but from the heart (Fairy) which leads it to becoming a Sylxen. that was what i was going for

It is a little bit... subtle yes, and i could absolutely re-write it a bit more clearly... but that was what i was aiming for.

if i could show this to whoever reviewed my submission maybe that will help clear it up?

[night plank]

unown is the one you should ask, don't know if any is on at the moment

[ebon warren]

[night plank]

oh, hello

[noble schooner]

🤣

[ebon warren]

been here for a bit

[night plank]

I did not realise that was the unown tag lmao-

[ebon warren]

it's simply an icon

tied to a role

[night plank]

I know, I am blind, I might need to go bed soon-

[ebon warren]

it is literally an Unown though

[noble schooner]

were you by chance the reviewer in question @ebon warren ?

[night plank]

From where I am looking, I had thought it was poppilo with an orange outline that looked like it was about to hyperbeam

[ebon warren]

I was not, but it usually wouldn't matter, theoretically if one Unown doesn't understand, none of us would, but I can look at it. What is the Dex number?

[noble schooner]

the Dex number or Image number?

the image number is 339.483.png
the dex number is #242322

in game at least...

[night plank]

sorry Ziggaway for the misconception, sorry about that, anyway gonna go listen to music and make more dexes, have fun, also enjoy a pic of my cat

[ebon warren]

not game Dex numbers, only the Discord numbers, which are the head DOT body from the numbering system. It is whatever shows on Daena

[ebon warren]

you're fine, I already gave the Luvdisc stare HAHA

[night plank]

lmao, yeah, but good luck with all the dexes and hope you have a good night btw you and Merc!

[noble schooner]

Daena is FusionDex.org yes?

[night plank]

https://www.fusiondex.org/439.134/ this site

[ebon warren]

for newly added mons, you'd need to check Announcements for their number, since Daena isn't quite yet up to date

[noble schooner]

i shall go find it

somehow...

[ebon warren]

for the entry in question @noble schooner, often with grammatical errors an Unown can simply fix them, but for this entry, it needs some corrections, but the intention isn't really clear.
Based on earlier posts you sent, I'd need to entirely rework it and restructure it for it to be viable, so if you'd rather redo it yourself feel free

it's for the Sylveon/Braixen right?

(I'm taking my dogs out, be back in a bit, I will respond then so send whatever)

[noble schooner]

that's right

[noble schooner]

sure i can try to re-word it no worries

i will keep the old one though in my notes... kind of like that one a bit

@ebon warren I believe i have come up with a new concept, let me know when you return and i'll show you to see if you think it's better.

[night plank]

While typical Flareon can heat their body up to 1,650 degrees F, POKENAME are unable to handle that temperature. POKENAME tend to catch themselves on fire in their own anger by unintentionally rising their body temperature too high.

how does this look?

[noble schooner]

hmm... why not make that weakness into a strength? Like maybe it does it on purpose to scare away trespassers? i mean if you saw a literal burning hellhound being in the dead of night... wouldn't you run?

haha, but anyway not bad at all

[night plank]

well, mainly them be literal trees in a way and with flareon being able to rise their temperature, I feel like that they could unintentionally set themselves on fire due to that

[noble schooner]

perhaps... is it Fire/Grass or Fire/Ghost?

[night plank]

It is grass fire

[noble schooner]

ahh ok then i see where youre coing from... though it be neutral to Fire so maybe setting itself on fire isn't such a bad idea? XD

ALSO 1650F? hang on a moment...

OH GOOD LORD THAT THING BURNS

[night plank]

well, it would stll be taking fire damage, kind of that paradox so might keep with this, plus I'm honestly excited to get off of the phantump/eevee evoline, I have been working on them for quite a bit

[night plank]

exactly

they burn themselves alive

[noble schooner]

900c... fuck

either way that's just a suggestion

[night plank]

not as bad as slugma

[noble schooner]

id definitely roll with the scare tactic idea if it was Fire/Ghost though, but like i said it was meerly a suggestion

[night plank]

I can do that with one of the others mainly like the espeon or umbreon as I don't have no clue what to do for those two

Umbreon one looks awesome

[noble schooner]

i'll definetly use that idea if i come across a fusion that works with it

[noble schooner]

i'm not sure myself at this current time sorry

[night plank]

I have not much of an idea what to do for this one? Anyone got an idea

[terse pawn]

alright guys lets get back to the grind 😼

[noble schooner]

Banette/Lopunny (by icyshrooms)
"This fusion is completely silent, never uttering a sound, paired with its emotionless movements makes anyone in POKENAME’s presence unnerved. Eyewitness reports swear they have seen the eyes on its hood blink... research can’t confirm this as of yet."

[night plank]

@noble schooner heya wanna work on a dex together mainly like choose a fusion that might intereact with each other?

[noble schooner]

maybe, im not really sure at this very moment. i'm just fixing up my document that i keep my notes in atm, it's a bit cluttered

[night plank]

alrightly!

[ebon warren]

you can always post it here for feedback even if I'm AFK, but my partner ended up waking up right after we got back from our walk so I got distracted. I'm back now (until bed)

[noble schooner]

@ebon warren no worries. i've got a screen shot of both the old and new entry ideas. top is old, bottom is new. if you think the new is better i'll go ahead and submit it

[hollow nimbus]

You need a which, after the second comma in the first sentence so that it's not a run-on sentence. Use of an ellipsis doesn't quite match the academic tone we're aiming for, so I suggest replacing ... with , but , which by combining the last sentence with the second sentence, also solves the problem of your last sentence beginning without a capitalized letter.

[noble schooner]

fair enough with the elipses thing, i just thought it added to the creepy vibe i was trying to go for

[ebon warren]

wait these are for the same mon? They are completely different. I'm not against it, I just thought the original would be reworked to make more sense, not changed completely

[hollow nimbus]

Ellipses are good for showing a change in the tone of the speaker, but nobody is really speaking in a dex entry

Because it's only informational text, it's best to leave the ellipses out

[noble schooner]

yep that's right. it's not completely changed. i just swaped out the point that was originally not clear with the new one

it still pulls aspects of both halfs of the fusion though. i try to incorperate a unique concept that still works with the originals

[ebon warren]

it reads very differently, but it isn't a bad change. There are still a few tweaks I would make for clarity but there are only two things aren't accurate linguistically

can you paste the text here for copying?

[noble schooner]

sure, the new one i presume?

[ebon warren]

yes

[noble schooner]

"POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being by feeling their body heat. When its stick is lit, it burns pink and is now harmless, also it gives off a pleasant aroma that differs from each individual who smells it."

i'll admit... grammar isn't a strength of mine... i like writing but i'm no expert XD

as an english speaker too i feel a little ashamed at that fact that i can do grammar too greatly... 😅

BUT THAT'S WHY PROOFREADERS ARE A THING XD

[night plank]

heya, quick question, how are submissions approved? I'm quite curious as I have seen there is some skipping about? Is it like going in dex number or kind of just depends on the person?

[ebon warren]

true, and also (at least where I am) USAmericans aren't known for being good at English anyway. Apparently, as of last month, it is now a thing that over half of ALL American adults cannot read above a 5th grade education. So yeah, grammar definitely cannot be expected to be stellar, but the effort is what matters

[red patio]

that's... sad, honestly

[ebon warren]

Unowns read them and compare to the sprite itself and determine at that point how they rate it

there's no other pattern haha

[hollow nimbus]

There's no rules on what order they're processed in, so I can't speak for others, but I try to go from oldest submission in the direction of newest.
Keep in mind that if an entry has an alternative designation, such as Unsure or No sprite yet, it can take a while longer for that enty

[night plank]

ahhh got it!

[red patio]

decided i might as well try my hand at writing entries for a few of my favorite fusions, or ones i'm actively using

[night plank]

damn-

[ebon warren]

the Unsure one and the No sprite yet one both do absolutely put an entry into purgatory, if you see your entry in either and believe it is in error you would need to post here about it

[night plank]

then again the american education system sucks, also I"ll keep that in mind I know some of the older entries I've done do not some sprities, which I guess will be in purtergtory until then I guess

[noble schooner]

yeah my one for Sylxen was labled Unsure, there were notes about it which i commented on and that's why i want to try and adjust it to be a potential better candidate

[red patio]

yeahhhh the american education system is... it sure is something, alright

[noble schooner]

as a non american, i cannot judge

[night plank]

yeah, I'm on my last year of it and if I had the option to go back to being a little kid, won't do it as I remember being yelled at by teachers and the public system is crap.

I only get a 20 minute lunch break (you got to be quick to get any food as those lunch lines take forever to get through) in a 7 hour day, we have no study hall at all

[noble schooner]

kind of what i'm doing too

[red patio]

yeahhhhhh that tracks. i'm just glad i wasn't in the public education system for most of my childhood

[red patio]

gotta say, it's actually kinda fun :3

moreso than i expected, at least

[noble schooner]

it get me back into writing about a franchise i love AND for this amazing comunity fan game.

[night plank]

you know, that reminds me, anyone know any fusion that kind of be having like some archangel or one of those things with many wings, I wanted to see any fusions like that as I think they looked awesome?

[noble schooner]

@ebon warren any luck with the tweaks?

[noble schooner]

i did an entry (that got approved by the look of it too :D) that's sort of like that description... not quite the exact thing but close

[hollow nimbus]

"those things with many wings" are seraphim, angels known for being six-winged and many eyed
There are lots of fusions modeled after seraphim, so maybe the people at #fusions can help you find some

[noble schooner]

more like a reaper with wings

[night plank]

ooo what is it?

[ebon warren]

POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being through only their body heat. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields will glow pink, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma whose scent differs for each individual that smells it.
This is my first draft of edits. I corrected the missing comma at the start of the second sentence and also the incorrect preposition in from each individual, but I also tried to make it more concise and descriptive as well. Let me know what you think

[night plank]

that's what their called got it, I forgot what they were called but thank you!

[ebon warren]

recent one is #1322984423221891162 but you'd be better off posting in a sprite thread for this type of request

[noble schooner]

@ebon warren yeah that's good man, i'm happy with that

shall i go submit?

[ebon warren]

you don't have to use exactly what I wrote if you want to add more, or make any changes, that's entirely fine

[ebon warren]

just confirm what you want it to be and I can update the existing one and Approve it now

[night plank]

thank you!

[noble schooner]

wait... why the word "only"?

[ebon warren]

so I put that word in to emphasize that this fusion only needs body heat to sense emotional state.

[red patio]

that's a good way to put it. it's also just good exercise in creative writing

[noble schooner]

makes is sound less unique and more... restrictive

[ebon warren]

we can switch that word to alone and put it at the end of the sentence if you'd prefer

[red patio]

that sounds better

in my head, at least

[ebon warren]

POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being through their body heat, alone. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields will glow pink, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma whose scent differs for each individual that smells it.

[red patio]

remove the comma though

POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being through body heat alone. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields will glow pink, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma whose scent differs for each individual that smells it.

[noble schooner]

oh you mean it like an impressive feat? i saw it as a restriction... like "it can sense the emotion... but only though body heat"

[red patio]

like that, i imagine

[red patio]

no yeah that's definitely how it's meant, english is just complicated like that sometimes

[ebon warren]

hmmm... I may reword that to make it more clear

[red patio]

i think what's already been done makes it sound a lot more clear

[noble schooner]

sorry for the missinterpretation...

what i ment was i read it like that ability of the pokemon is 'still weak' rather than 'impressive'

[red patio]

understandable

that's just english being english

because the initial wording can absolutely be interpreted as such

[ebon warren]

POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from others' body heat alone. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields will glow pink, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it.

ok this should be MUCH more clear and fix any odd phrasing from my first draft

[red patio]

the word others' would probably still be best omitted, i think?

but otherwise the wording is much more clear

[ebon warren]

were the description written about the Pokémon's body heat, yes, but since it is the body heat of others, that wouldn't make any sense since it is a characteristic of the Pokémon itself

[ebon warren]

that's to clarify what the body heat is coming from

[noble schooner]

im aware that i like my little and hidden details... and since i'm limited to a character count... i unfortunately have to simplify it or leave it out... which may lead to weird and vague paragraphs like my first attempt.

[ebon warren]

otherwise the prepositional phrase from body heat alone is describing emotions, technically

[night plank]

POKENAME are often guiding stray Pokémon that have gotten themselves lost in the forest. Though, it is be taken cautioned if the Pokémon are from humans, they will never be seen by their trainers again.

How does this look?

[red patio]

yeah fair

[noble schooner]

like i bring up the stick at all because regular Braixen keeps the stick in their tail, and when they pull it out the friction from their fur ignites the stick. putting it back in extinguishes it, and it uses it like a wand. so my idea to fit with its new fairy typing is that the flame is no longer harmful to the touch and smells nice like incense. i can't really fit that into 100 letters though...

its in the pokedex entries in official games

@ebon warren i'm happy with your latest edit of it btw so feel free to use it

[ebon warren]

which one? I had so many

[ebon warren]

I'm sure we could fit it if you wanted. There's almost always a way

[noble schooner]

wait "the stick glows pink"? like the whole stick? like a glow stick?

[ebon warren]

bunch of issues here, do you want me to detail them?

[night plank]

yeah

[ebon warren]

I kept that phrasing from yours I think, is it supposed to only be the tip (like a cigarette I guess)?

[noble schooner]

just the flame is pink... not the whole thing... sorry again with my detail sticklerness 😅

[ebon warren]

is this guiding stray Pokémon bit, is that canon for either of the base forms? (I didn't look yet, sorry)

[ebon warren]

so it's like a match then, it isn't embers?

[night plank]

trevebabt helps pokemon and that is where I kind of got the idea from let me get the dex for it

[ebon warren]

oh no it's ok

as long as it's based on canon, haha

[noble schooner]

this is just fanart but it's basically like this

[ebon warren]

that's very Little Witch Academia vibes haha

[noble schooner]

like a literal flame on the tip of the stick

[night plank]

Trevenant is very kind to Pokémon living in the forest.

This is one, trevenant is said to be very friendly with pokemon and I thought that it might guide and I know that Trevenant doesn't like humans much that are loggers so I took that kind and mainly I kind of was thinking that pokemon wouldn't be seen as they be taken to perhaps a place where the pokemon could live and not much return back to the human to kind of explain my thinking

[noble schooner]

but again just details...

[ebon warren]

let's rework it, this is one of the reasons why things can be labeled Unsure, because I didn't get a lot this from the original entry you posted. I'd honestly recommend cramming as much in as you can if you plan to post it here, because omitting something can lead to any changes not being adequate for your original intentions haha.

[noble schooner]

i know but character limits really stunt my brain... 😅

[ebon warren]

it's still more logical to post here even if it is too long, it can always be trimmed, but missing info won't be added by others if they don't know it

[noble schooner]

"POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from others' body heat alone. When lit, the tip of the stick this Pokémon wields will glow a pink flame, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it." 3 letters too long...

this would be perfect... BUT THREE LETTERS DX

"POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from others' body heat alone. When lit, the tip of the stick POKENAME wields will glow a pink flame, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it." THIS WORKS

i just switched "this Pokemon" to "POKENAME"

if you're happy with this, i'm happy with this @ebon warren

[ebon warren]

I'm trying my hand at it too, one sec

[ebon warren]

ok here's a completely novel one, I tried to fit is all

When POKENAME draws the stick from its tail, the tip ignites due to friction. The resulting pink flame is harmless, and emits a pleasant aroma unique to each person smelling it. This empathetic Pokémon can sense emotions from the body heat of others.

250 exactly haha

[noble schooner]

damn... i'd take both if i could

[ebon warren]

I could use a semicolon for the first period, actually, but I refrained haha

[noble schooner]

i really like what you did, but if it's ok... i would like to go with the edit i did. but don't get me wrong i really like yours too

[narrow cosmos]

My wordiness strikes again. But I do appreciate it, even I thought the first sentence was awkwardly worded to me, but I couldn't figure out a fitting alternative. Resubmitted, thanks as always!

Thanks for weighing in! Thanks to Ozydamians, a better alternative's been found, I think. Happy you liked the concept!

[ebon warren]

that's fine, the only bit I don't entirely think is required is the glows portion since glowing is more typical of embers, not a flame

[noble schooner]

that was actually something you added, but just change it from 'glows' to 'burns' and i think we're golden

[red patio]

alright

[ebon warren]

yes, I didn't get that it was a flame prior, so glows was intended to depict a burning tip of embers, it would work were that the correct interpretation

[red patio]

that was a fun creative writing exercise

i should try doing more of these later, but for now i need to sleep. have a good night, folks

[noble schooner]

no worries, it doesn't exactly help that the sprite for the fusion doesn't have it lit... but that's ok

[ebon warren]

I'd also change it from future tense to present: instead of will glow just burns

[night plank]

would y'all say this looks more stump like or like it could possibly be like like a snakish body?

[night plank]

night!

[noble schooner]

goodnight! potential... fellow aussie? it's late for me too but i'm just guessing 😅

[red patio]

nah my sleep schedule is just ruined. i'm american and it's 6:30am

[noble schooner]

oh ok XD i am so sorry

[red patio]

[noble schooner]

btw @ebon warren i didn't mean to take up so much of your time... i'm sorry

[ebon warren]

the phrase are often guiding is indirect, you could simply put often guide and its less words and syllables. Same with have gotten themselves lost which could just be lost in the forest. So you would have POKENAME often guide stray Pokémon lost in the forest. which is far shorter and reads much better
The second sentence doesn't really make sense, everything between the two periods is jumbled and unclear, and the final bit of the sentence seems tacked since the portion just prior is not entirely obvious. Trainers take caution, however: lost Trainer Pokémon will be taken away forever, never to be seen again. or something like that perhaps? It removes a lot of characters so you can also add a third sentence in the middle about them not liking Trainers, since that isn't really clear at this point

[ebon warren]

what, why? I signed up for this, I don't mind. If I did I wouldn't be here

[ebon warren]

ok so what's the final version for me to overwrite it on the sheet?

[noble schooner]

sorry sorry, just felt like it was appropriate

[ebon warren]

this is my role here, and I signed up for it

[craggy beacon]

never apologize to someone for them doing their job

[ebon warren]

don't worry so much

[noble schooner]

"POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from others' body heat alone. When lit, the tip of the stick POKENAME wields will burn a pink flame, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it."

[craggy beacon]

all the helpers are here to help

[noble schooner]

bad habit of mine

[ebon warren]

||Unpaid indentured servitude BUT WHO'S KEEPING TRACK||
No but seriously, this is accurate

[craggy beacon]

LMAO

[ebon warren]

ugh I still don't love that bit about the flame but if you're ok with it I can leave it haha

it's not incorrect, just clunky

[noble schooner]

i changed it from glow to burn... what do you mean?

[ebon warren]

I would encourage using this Pokémon instead of POKENAME twice, I don't usually care for repetition in such a small string of words

but that's not what I was referencing

[noble schooner]

it was the only way it would fit

[ebon warren]

The stick this Pokémon wields burns a soft, pink flame at the tip, or something

[night plank]

POKENAME often guide stray Pokémon that have gotten themselves lost in the forest. It is cautioned to trainers in letting Pokémon out: Pokémon that are lost will be taken away forever and never seen again if helped by this Pokémon.

How does that look? (if good, could it be edited on the thing as mainly earlier in my dumbess of being too tired, kind of submitted it a bit to earlier as I though it was good)

[red patio]

i know i just said i was going to sleep, but i just realized something i might need changed on the spreadsheet

[ebon warren]

there's a question mark in your entry?
There are still some phrasing issues there

||DARN you fixed it haha||

[night plank]

lmao, yeah I didn't mean to put the question mark lmao

POKENAME often guide stray Pokémon that have gotten themselves lost in the forest. Trainers are cautioned to keep an eye on their Pokémon when letting them out: Pokémon that are lost will be led away and forever lost if helped by this Pokémon.

[noble schooner]

"POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from others' body heat alone. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields burns a pink flame at the tip, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it." so something like that?

had to remove "soft"

[ebon warren]

yes! And it's 249 too

[ebon warren]

I liked the imagery of that word there, but if it had to go, that's fine

I didn't actually ask you if it was ok or not, my bad

[noble schooner]

i would of kept it if it wernt for the character limit

once again...

[ebon warren]

https://tenor.com/view/sam-i-can-fix-that-gif-5289253

[noble schooner]

no we've been at this for long enough XD

[red patio]

POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from others' body heat alone. When lit, the stick it wields burns a soft pink flame at the tip, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it.

[ebon warren]

this is what I do, it's actually fairly easy and I enjoy it haha
(I did a thing, I'm bad)
A POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from body heat alone. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields burns a soft pink flame at the tip, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it.
I removed the confusion of the reference in the first sentence by adding the article adjective, and that allowed a few words to come away at the end. It fits now

[red patio]

ooh, smart

[ebon warren]

two characters to trim like, 8, it was a good change

[red patio]

agreed

[noble schooner]

i agree, let's stick with that

i should just say really quick... Braixen and Sylveon are basically my top two favorites and the fusion the artist did... absolutely adorable. and i feel honoured to be able to write the dex entry for it

with your guys help of course, i seriously appreciate it

[ebon warren]

did you contact the spriter by chance?

[noble schooner]

no...?

[red patio]

this is how i feel about the Muk/Gardevoir alt i wrote one for earlier, but specifically the fusion's reference

[ebon warren]

so if you want to try, if they submit the entry themselves, it will always be prioritized. Just something to consider. You can make the entry and submit it, but if they ever make one, it will override this one. (This isn't a required step, I've done this before for fusion sprites I love)

[red patio]

that's good to know, actually

[noble schooner]

yeah of course i'm perfectly ok with that

[ebon warren]

ah, ok, cool

just making sure

[noble schooner]

even just being apart of the process in some way is already amazing enough

[red patio]

↑

[ebon warren]

some spriters don't want to make Dex entries, so they'd prefer others make them, and if I get conscripted for that, I always get their approval for any entry I make, and then request they submit it so it's always priority

[red patio]

you know, that's smart honestly

[noble schooner]

if the artist does see this submission though... i at least hope they like it

[ebon warren]

I don't care about the credit nearly as much as doing the work justice

[red patio]

i also hope the artists whose sprites i wrote for like what i wrote

[ebon warren]

you can always ask them, just shoot a ping here

[noble schooner]

the artist in question, assuming my source is correct... is nymphiaribbon._.

doesn't seem to have been updated on the doc yet but that's ok.

[ebon warren]

doing it currently, please hold

done

[noble schooner]

@modest python I was hoping to here your thoughts on this potential dex entry for you fusion art for Sylxen
"A POKENAME can sense the emotions of any living being from body heat alone. When lit, the stick this Pokémon wields burns a soft pink flame at the tip, giving off a harmless, pleasant aroma with a scent that differs for each individual smelling it."

i... believe that's the person, the name is slightly different but also the same? 😅

[ebon warren]

yes, that's them, and now you know why I said earlier that we want Discord names, not server nicknames

[noble schooner]

look i understand i slipped up on that front... but i really do go by Merc more than Merclipse these days

[ebon warren]

yes but it's more for clarity and transparency

since Discord requires unique names now

a dozen people could choose to be Merc on here but only one is Merclipse

[noble schooner]

i would of been too tired to get the exact comprehension at the time of my first submission... my sleep is also wacked

[red patio]

i was thinking the same thing honestly... i almost put Cinnamoone rather than Cinnamoone_Redfield when submitting

[ebon warren]

(I'm usually just Zigg honestly, but I don't change it because I don't want to confuse people haha)

[ebon warren]

would have been, of is not a verb and without have the word been doesn't make sense in that phrase

[noble schooner]

but either way Merc is me. I apologize for the slip up still...

[red patio]

(as much as i would prefer being referred to just by my display name, i get the purpose)

[noble schooner]

https://tenor.com/view/angry-pingu-mad-upset-stare-gif-17372840

[noble schooner]

😂

[ebon warren]

proper grammar and prose starts with correcting common linguistic blunders, would of been has really exploded with people on the internet and it irks me so very, very much

also how people mispronounce nuclear and mischievous

[red patio]

yeah that's a big one

[noble schooner]

mIsChEeViOuS

[red patio]

it's would have or would've, end of story

[noble schooner]

https://tenor.com/view/simpsons-homer-bart-why-you-little-gif-17376912

i am bart in this situation

[ebon warren]

ah but see, that contraction is actually the culprit. People are saying would've in their minds but typing would of because they sound almost the same, not grasping that it's a contraction of would HAVE

[red patio]

yep, that's the kicker

[ebon warren]

https://tenor.com/view/well-thats-absolutely-not-true-david-david-rose-dan-levy-schitts-creek-gif-20104974

[red patio]

also don't mind me cataloging the artists behind the sprites i've written for

[noble schooner]

aight, i better go eat something now... again i seriously appreciate all the help

[ebon warren]

it's what I'm here to do, I'm happy to help with any entries, just ping me or I won't see it at ALL

I may not reply right away but you can also DM if you prefer

[noble schooner]

if i need to yeah, thanks

[red patio]

at this point i'm moreso curious as to what you think of the entries i've already submitted

[noble schooner]

@red patio that includes you too, btw. thank you

and i hope the artist does see this dex idea. very curious about their thoughts

[red patio]

hey, i'm happy to help (and also do a bit of healthy grammar policing)

[ebon warren]

I will have to look at them tomorrow, it's 3a for me and I will be in trouble when hubby gets home

[red patio]

oof, fair enough

it's 7am for me at this point, i totally get it

(does mean i get to spend more time with my future wifey by staying awake, since she's 7 hours ahead of me)

[noble schooner]

i'm curious too if you don't mind sharing? dm if you prefer but if here i'll definitely make sure to read them

[red patio]

i'm very proud of the little nod i put into the entry for the Amity reference sprite

(big thank you to @timid zephyr for making that sprite way back over a year and a half ago btw, she's wonderful)

[red patio]

This Pokémon is commonly known to manipulate large amounts of sludge using its remnant psychic power. Unlike other variants of Muk, this Pokémon smells faintly of cotton candy; researchers have been unable to determine the reason for this.

[chilly horizon]

how does that even happen

genuinely

i know language evolves but 💀

[red patio]

this is why, really

it's because would've SOUNDS like would OF, when in reality we know it's short for would HAVE

[chilly horizon]

i guess i can see why but damn, they did not pay attention in school!!!

[red patio]

no, clearly

[chilly horizon]

i think this is largely good, though the phrase "using its remnant psychic power" irks me? this is definitely a nitpick on my part and i go largely based off of vibes

[modest python]

thanks for writing an entry for my sprite
i like this entry

[noble schooner]

thanks so much! i absolutely love what you did for Sylxen! braixen and sylveon are my favourites

i have one on my team named Opal.

[red patio]

i worded it that way because it loses the psychic type when fused like this

but i see what you mean

the wording is a bit clumsy

[chilly horizon]

i think it may feel this way because either

1. it sounds powerful but then you mention it only has little power

or

2. you dont even explain where most of the power went

[red patio]

the easy solution is to just remove the word remnant, really

[chilly horizon]

honestly, yeah lol

[gentle frost]

Awesome work so far, guys! I’m just popping in to say people here can feel free to make dex entries to any of my sprites they want, I’m busy with college and work so can’t write them myself lol

I’ve only contributed 35 or so sprites yet but I hope they’re interesting enough to write something fun! ^^*

[vast iron]

Thank you for your sprite contributions!

[gentle frost]

Tyy! I wasn’t sure how much artist permission factors in to things so just wanted to make sure everyone knows I’m okay with it, maybe if my work schedule eases I can make some entries for other sprites I admire :0

[red patio]

alright, time for me to actually go to sleep and stop worrying so much about the five entries i wrote earlier

peace out, y'all

[chilly horizon]

good advice, ive been checking the 30 or so i submitted and worried that they are bad and that i could do better. this will be the death of me

[red patio]

also @ebon warren or one of the other various helpers: if you could remove the word remnant from my entry on sprite 89.287a, that would be lovely. thanks in advance for your help!

[timid zephyr]

Its really good entry! Thanks for doing it, glad you like the Sprite.

[night plank]

also just wanna ask if this looks good, could it be edited for 439.271 on the page

[red patio]

i'm so glad you like the entry! :D

[timid zephyr]

Does other toh referencje have custom entries? Is there a way for me to check?

[terse pawn]

was wondering if pokemons can mate

like irl animals

i was trying to write like an entry where it goes like

During mating seasons, male POKENAMEs swim back and forth through oceans, secreting liquid pheromones to attract other females

[sturdy void]

You should remove the "other" part

Because it's males attracting females

Not females attracting other females

[tepid portal]

it also doesnt really look like an ocean Dweller.

But that could just be me haha

[sturdy void]

Yeah

Both Poliwag lines and Goldeen lines are river dwellers last I checked.

Meaning saltwater would probably kill them. Just in general. Don't put them through that!

[timid sky]

Although POKENAME's stingers contain large amounts of venom, it is so friendly that it will rarely harm humans. Some POKENAME will even try and come onto land to play with people, even though it gets dried out when it comes ashore.

[sturdy void]

You'd probably want to use the word "venom" here rather than "poison"

[boreal prairie]

Its stingers contain large amounts of venom, but it is so friendly that it rarely harms humans. Some POKENAME will [come] ashore to play with people, even though it quickly dries out on land.

coherence/concision suggestions. I also think there is potential for a more fun verb than [come] that describes how it moves which could add just a touch more flavor.

[timid sky]

I want to keep the "try" part because of how it dries out, so how about:

Although POKENAME's stingers contain large amounts of venom, it is so friendly that it will rarely harm humans. Some POKENAME will even try and come ashore to play with people, even though it quickly dries out on land.

[terse pawn]

fair fair

ill change it to be like freshwater

and stop those pokemons from being lesbians

[timid sky]

Well, they could still be lesbians, they just couldn't create offspring

[toxic oxide]

How do people get these images of the fusions?

[timid sky]

https://www.fusiondex.org/find/

[toxic oxide]

Thanks.

Well, it hasn't been updated for the new fusions yet, so I guess I'll just have to screenshot the game.

[sturdy void]

Well I wasn't stopping them from being lesbian, that's what you did when writing it

[toxic oxide]

POKENAME subsist on pure sunlight and are known for being weak, fragile, but also are very quick and can escape predators with ease. Yanma are one of the main threats to this Pokemon.

[sturdy void]

Oh you know what would be fun

If they had a reflective underside to reflect or trap light

[lean flame]

Goldeen is not river dwelling but ocean dwelling, as confirmed with the movies. Poliwag is river dwelling though yes

[sturdy void]

I thought previous dex entries nullified this

[lean flame]

Goldeen and seaking

SEAking

[sturdy void]

They live in rivers.

Says so in the dex

Lol

The movies just put whatever Pokémon in the ocean that they feel like, the dex is often disregarded.

[toxic oxide]

That would be a cool thing to add, but I'm not sure where I'd add it since I have to keep it under 2 sentences and under 250 characters.

[sturdy void]

Yeah no it not only mentions ponds and streams multiple times in the dex entries, but during spawning season it explicitly says that Seaking mates in rivers.

Gonna have to hit you with a {x} for that one

[sturdy void]

Mhm, was just an idea I had

[lean flame]

I'm reading differently here. Says they swim up river for spawning season. They are salmons

so they live out at sea for most of their life then swim up and into rivers/ponds for their mating seasons

[sturdy void]

Head in hands

I don't know how else to explain this to you other than telling you to read the dex entries

Goldfish, the species that they are very clearly based off of are freshwater fish

[charred shadow]

how does one make a custom entry?

[lean flame]

in fact, the only mentions of river is about spawning season aside from 1 entry about goldeen liking rivers and ponds

[sturdy void]

Freshwater fish do not live in the ocean .....

[lean flame]

do you know what a salmon is?

[sturdy void]

Just write on up for a fusion you pick and pop it in here for review.

[sturdy void]

Not this Pokémon

This is not an argument I thought I'd be having today.

Also wait this is Ledyba

Chat am I stuiid

Is it

Hold please

[charred shadow]

i see

[sturdy void]

I got like 2 hours of sleep

[sturdy void]

What fusion is this I'm way too tired rn

[terse pawn]

poliwrath ledyba

[sturdy void]

Ugh

This was all completely unnecessary

But it should still be rivers because this is a frog

[chilly horizon]

you can fish it on kanto route 6 which doesnt have an ocean though

literally a pond

[sturdy void]

Kanto has bad distribution tbf

[chilly horizon]

hoenn route 111, another pond/river

hoenn route 117

[sturdy void]

This too though

[chilly horizon]

sinnoh route 203

[sturdy void]

Like, you get it in ponds

[chilly horizon]

unova route 11

actual river (:

it is also in the hg/ss swamp safari zone area buuuut

i can, off the top of my head, not recall which ocean areas specifically have goldeen actually

four island i guess

[sturdy void]

Anyways

It's Ledyba

So it doesn't matter

But it's a frog so it shouldn't probably live in the ocean

👍

[chilly horizon]

a fusion might allow them to live the best of both worlds (or neither, lol) so its not unreasonable to yeet that thing in the ocean

[sturdy void]

Toss that bug into the deep sea

[lean flame]

stares at dex entries that are all indicative of salt water fish that swim inward for spawning. Stares at locations, none being ocean and in fact as far away from oceans as possible in most cases.
Pokemon. Why!? And it's not some translational issue either (checked the japanese translations too). They just keep using wording/phrasing that implies coming from the sea and into rivers (River fish don't need to "swim up river" cause they traverse the whole river/pond for food on the regular to begin with!)

apologies Magikarp, you were right, but hell is this one of those "pokemon is dumb" moments

[timid sky]

TBF, this is also the franchise that lets any land Pokémon fight in the water and any aquatic Pokémon fight on land

[sacred patio]

Kyogre

Groudon

lol

[hexed fog]

currently aiming for nov/oct entries

guys please dont msg me to expedite yours 😐 no names but cmaaaaaaan we can only go so fast on the backlog

[lean flame]

O_O

[jagged ledge]

I have done it

I have written entries for all remaining Bulbasaur head Kanto body fusions.

[chilly horizon]

niiiiiiiiiiice

did you sleep, though?

[jagged ledge]

With a day to spare too

[jagged ledge]

Yes actually

Not the best last night but that's for unrelated reasons

[chilly horizon]

augh

[jagged ledge]

Unfortunately, that's not a custom sprite, so they won't accept any entries for it.

[past cypress]

Sounds like a ton of work, would it be possible to bring in more people with approval powers to spread out the workload?

[hexed fog]

people are always welcome to apply to be an unown 🙂

[past cypress]

Wheres the app? I wouldn't mind looking through the backlog with y'all

New to dex writing tho

I think I've written 24 in total

[hexed fog]

#become-a-staff-helper message

[regal cedar]

Keep in mind you need to have a certain nunmber of accepted entries

[past cypress]

Yeah I don't have any accepted atm, it's 24 written so guess it's a catch 22

[hexed fog]

we will get there 🙂

[past cypress]

It's fine if I get rejected, I'll just try to contribute where I can

[hexed fog]

no you're fine, for now please keep getting those entries in 🙂

we are very appreciative

[past cypress]

Yeah I'll just not apply then till later, and then maybe in a month or two maybe I'll get accepted

RIP your backlog

[jagged ledge]

I'll be busy this week but I might look to apply next week depending on how things go. I'll also need to see how much of a commitment it would be to my schedule before I sign on to work full time. I don't want to apply if I won't be able to actually help.

[chilly horizon]

im sure youd be a great addition if you find the time

[jagged ledge]

Thank you!

It's just that I need to set up a DnD session, learn a new crafting machine, and send out resumes... on top of visiting friends for New Year's. So uh, yeah. I hesitate to say I can hop right on the project just yet.

[chilly horizon]

yeah, i have my retail job, freelancing, volunteering for a con,... also wanting to learn pathfinder, still

[jagged ledge]

My advice with learning any form of DnD: Start with homebrew, only worry about technicalities once you get into a routine and level up a bit.

[chilly horizon]

i always homebrew by default, but thats because i first started in 5e and actually lowkey dislike it

[jagged ledge]

I DM homebrew for a bunch of my friends who were all new so they played basic classes to start... they're Level 4 now and two of my friends who are DnD experts joined so now I need to learn how to organize spell lists on Roll 20 by Saturday

It shouldn't actually be that hard but it is an adjustment lol

[chilly horizon]

pfffffff

[jagged ledge]

Yeah, it doesn't help that because it's an anime-based homebrew, we're making up a looooot of multiclass options lol

One of my players is like a monk... but she has a gun.

Bullets instead of Ki

[past cypress]

Very valid concern tbh

I think people may have overlooked dex entries till the drama so now that we have a ton of new people it's just overloading what the team was used to without the help of carving away at that backlog to begin with

I work from home and have a very free schedule so I get to do random things whenever we're not busy at work

[jagged ledge]

Oh definitely, I fully understand. If I had time and knew I could juggle everything, I would sign up in a heartbeat. I'm just already spread a bit thin, I don't want to add more to the pile just yet, especially if time would need to be taken to train me or if I could risk messing up a screening.

For now I'm happy to contribute by writing entries and helping give feedback here as best I can.

[hexed fog]

92.93b.png POKENAME originate from ancient curses. They are said to turn humans into their kind.

@scenic badge

Can we change this to

There are ancient tomes stating POKENAME originate from ancient curses. They are said to turn humans into their kind.

So that we can hit the word minimum and push this through?

[jagged ledge]

@viscid light #1201260356182483134 message

How's this?

POKENAME are able to change the density of their body between being as sturdy as steel or as light as helium. They will collide into steel beams and phase into any cracks they create to eat them away from inside.

[chrome forum]

I feel this, I've been really tied up with DnD the last few days(running sessions is part of my job), so I've able been too busy to help out over the weekend.

[scenic badge]

Sure

[jagged ledge]

Yeah, but the best part (aside from the actual sessions of course) of running DnD the way I do is it led to me figuring out designs for stickers I can sell, hence the new crafting machine.

Also I might try making some concept art here if I have spare time while I'm designing lol

[chrome forum]

That's sick AF, I love when something like, PHYSICAL comes from DnD, ya know? Always such a good vibe.

[jagged ledge]

Oh definitely!

[chilly horizon]

okay i peaked with this entry, ill never write another one, ever'

also i gotta stop avoiding doing my work by writing entries lol

[viscid light]

https://tenor.com/view/jack-hanma-baki-beautiful-gif-14799094269737107064

Not a bad take

[jagged ledge]

[jagged ledge]

I mean valid but surely a few here or there as time goes on couldn't hurt lol

[jagged ledge]

Thanks!

Although I think I'm going to change the word "beams" into "structures"

[prime goblet]

POKENAME are surprisingly dexterous, and will use the arms protruding from the top of their shell to help trainers find items they have lost at the beach.

[chilly horizon]

yeah but i need the money from commissions lmao, so i SHOULD prioritize those

[jagged ledge]

Yeah, I'm about to maybe kinda sorta get into the commission world myself soon enough so I feel that

[chilly horizon]

ive been at it for about 2 years now, its definitely scary

depending on where you live, please 10000% look into it well

taxes are cruel for freelancing

[jagged ledge]

Yeaaaah, just one step at a time for now. Especially because I'm just having some fun with writing entries for now.

[jagged ledge]

@viscid light #1201260356182483134 message

Constantly filled with youthful energy, POKENAME can superheat their blades to help them slice through things. Many young trainers enjoy sharing videos of POKENAME cutting through various objects.

[past cypress]

Local legends say that POKENAME's rings corresponded with lunar phases, pulsing brighter during a full moon. Village elders would keep this Pokémon as a way of tracking good fortune for their kin.

Thoughts?

[jagged ledge]

#1201260356182483134 message

POKENAME's attempts to disguise as trees only works in colder climates or seasons. When cornered after getting caught, POKENAME will heat up their bodies to release the mercury stored within them.

[jagged ledge]

I think individually they're interesting concepts, but I'm having trouble understanding how they relate to each other.

[past cypress]

They're basically like living calendars for the village elders, and able to accurately predict the lunar phases accurately, which in turn would tell them when good/bad luck would hit the village

Idk how to word it ngl

I.e if they glowed even more brightly than normal on a full moon it would mean prosperity for the next lunar cycle

[nocturne shadow]

187.249.png
Though having wings, it does not fly by flapping. Instead, POKENAME control the air around them as propulsion, allowing it to glide to its destination. POKENAME are often found leading flocks of Hoppip.

188.249.png
You can tell how old a POKENAME is by the amount of brown spots on its leaf-like wings. When POKENAME’s wings get fully brown, they crumple and flake off until it can no longer fly.

Thoughts on these two?

[jagged ledge]

Took me a bit, but maybe something along the lines of

POKENAME are well renowned for their ability to track the lunar cycle with their glowing rings. An old legend states that if their rings shine brightly, fortune will come to those around them, so village elders make a habit of looking after them.

[past cypress]

Hmm the end sentence isn't my favorite atm but the rest of it is a very good idea ty

[jagged ledge]

Yeah, it's an odd thing to try and phrase within the character limit, especially when it kinda relies on the extra information from the first sentence lol

[jagged ledge]

I think you're missing a few commas, and I'm not quite sure if that's the correct use of migrant. Perhaps saying flocks would be better instead? I do think manipulating wind for the leaves is a good idea though.

[jagged ledge]

This one I think is pretty solid, it just sounds kinda sad lol. Does it lead into the Jumpluff/Lugia entry?

[nocturne shadow]

I can work on one

[jagged ledge]

You don't have to, it was just a question

[nocturne shadow]

I mostly did these two because I am doing a randomized nuzlocke and any mons that die I have to make an entry for them

[jagged ledge]

Could be a neat bit of lore if they regain their ability to fly with the fluffy seeds they gain upon evolution

[jagged ledge]

Oh well RIP to these two

[nocturne shadow]

I have an idea for a Kecleon/Teddiursa fusion (another mon that died) and then I'll do Jumpluff

[jagged ledge]

Sounds good. Also RIP to that mon as well

[nocturne shadow]

Mostly pursuit, counter, or fire spin shananigans

[jagged ledge]

Makes sense

I have two or three more entries I want to do ASAP then I'll slow down for at least the rest of the day

[dense shard]

hey two questions about the custom entries

[jagged ledge]

All ears

[dense shard]

One (stupid question) but do all approved entries get in each time the game updates?

the ones that get in the excel

[jagged ledge]

One second, I know an Unown spoke on this earlier today and they know better than I do

[dense shard]

And two, I see sometimes the excel has two alternate entries for one same species/fusion. How do I switch between them ingame?

[nocturne shadow]

290.216
Instead of changing color, POKENAME will go limp when it senses danger, acting like a teddy bear. They play the role so well that often children mistake them as actual teddy bears and take them home.

[jagged ledge]

@dense shard

[nocturne shadow]

Most likely you'll be able to do it in a similar fashion as the alternate sprites

[jagged ledge]

Right now it's random every time you open the dex I believe

[nocturne shadow]

I see. Haven't seen one yet so I was just guestimating

[jagged ledge]

I'm sure if it becomes a more common occurrence and enough people make note of it, there will be a specific option to select or cycle eventually

[nocturne shadow]

Jumpluff done

189.249.png
POKENAME disperse its seeds with every flap. These seeds not only spread its kin, but also perform miracles to any Grass-Type Pokemon the seeds hit like regrowing lost limbs or even resurrection.

[jagged ledge]

POKENAME fashion scythes out of gems from trusted Sableye, allowing them to channel their strength more directly. They seem to grow stronger after defeating Ghost-Type Pokémon, as if their scythes are powered by death itself.

[nocturne shadow]

Last one for now lol

[nocturne shadow]

Minor nitpick. Is the scythe made out of Sableye that trust this Mon, or is it made out of the gems that Sableye give it?

I do like the "powered by death itself" line tho

[jagged ledge]

Well technically the scythe is the Sableye part of the fusion lol

But I'm trying to make it make sense in universe

But also probably overthinking it lol

[nocturne shadow]

I get that

[jagged ledge]

Thank you!

[nocturne shadow]

I feel like it would make sense to say something like "fashioned by the corpses of Sableye" or "once trusted Saybleye" or something since we can't really change the sprite lol

[jagged ledge]

With their trusted Sableye having taken the form of their scythe, POKENAME wander in search of corrupted souls. It is said they grow stronger after defeating Ghost-Types, as if the scythe is powered by death itself.

[nocturne shadow]

THERE WE GO!

It's so edgy I love it

[jagged ledge]

https://tenor.com/view/soul-reaper-gif-20949612

It's Soul Eater lol

[nocturne shadow]

Thought is was Blue Lock but then I saw it was good animation and realized it wasn't

[jagged ledge]

https://tenor.com/view/soul-eater-anime-anime-op-power-gif-16540891

[nocturne shadow]

Fav anime?

[jagged ledge]

Indeed lol

[nocturne shadow]

That's fair, it's great

[crude karma]

a classic !

[jagged ledge]

Good idea, but formatting is a bit off. How about

POKENAME scatters seeds with every flap of its wings. These seeds help grow new Grass-Types and heal those that have been wounded. These seeds are celebrated as symbols of rebirth.

[jagged ledge]

My first anime and literally the reason I decided to be an artist/got into creative writing, the least I can do is write a Dex Entry for the reference sprite

[nocturne shadow]

I like it

[jagged ledge]

POKENAME are able to condense the gems along their body into scythe-like blades. While they are capable of fully transforming into a scythe, they only do so when there is a trusted Mawile nearby to wield them.

Let's go, I found a way to make the lore fit from the opposite side!

With their madness kept in check thanks to their bond with a trusted Mawile, POKENAME take the form of a scythe in battle. It is said that they eat the souls of evil Pokémon, each battle increasing their strength until they rival the Grim Reaper.

This one's a bit nerdier though

I'll probably end up fixing up the second sentence a bit lol

With their madness kept in check thanks to their bond with a trusted Mawile, POKENAME take the form of a scythe in battle. They eat the souls of evil Pokémon, gaining strength after every battle until they can rival the Grim Reaper.

oh no

I'm an idiot

[hexed fog]

1.136.png Living in tropical climates, POKENAME use their leafy tails and manes to absorb energy from sunlight and store it in their bulbs. The excess energy from their photosynthesis runs hot, allowing them to produce flame from their bulbs. Wildheartrazorfangs

1.136.png Said to have been programmed to help create digital landscapes, POKENAME float through fields to plant seeds. While the seeds are completely organic, POKENAME always seem to buzz in an odd chorus of five notes whenever they start their work. Wildheartrazorfangs

looks like you made 2 of these @jagged ledge , which do you want to keep

[regal cedar]

Or did you mean for one to be something else?

[jagged ledge]

The former is the intended entry for Vaporeon. The latter is supposed to be 1.137 for Porygon. I resubmitted it under the right number, so the first one please.

[hexed fog]

LMAO ok

[jagged ledge]

Meanwhile I got so excited making anime references, I missed the fact I put in Mawile as 412 not 421... TWICE

Uuuugh why does my brain do this to me lol

[hexed fog]

we need a ticketing system for fixes

[jagged ledge]

Yeah, I just hope it won't delay the process of approvals too much

[hexed fog]

bro it's gonna be rough regardless

[jagged ledge]

Well at least I can submit my third Soul Eater entry as the right numbers the first time lol

I can't believe I specifically cross referenced, scrolled through alts, saw both sides of the fusion... and it took me my second edit of my third entry to realize the number was wrong.

This is a sign it's time for me to take a break from writing and draw for a bit lol

Other anime reference sprites I make entries for will have to wait

[regal cedar]

Contact us if you see an error!

[jagged ledge]

Real quick for the official log, two of my recent entries are supposed to be 421.300k.png and 300.421b.png respectively, not 412 on either.

[jagged ledge]

Ok one more reference entry real quick for the lols

This Chimchar's made of rubber! How did that happen? Yo-ho-ho, he took a bite of Gum-Gum!

Please note I'm not actually submitting that, I just wanted to be silly before I left for now

[timid sky]

Funny, considering what I’m watching right now

[jagged ledge]

Are you watching Bleach?

[regal cedar]

one piece'

[hexed fog]

93.125.png POKENAME like to swing between streetlights under cover of darkness. They can keep this up as long as they please, stealing electricity to keep up their energy and causing the lights to flicker.

Can we rephrase this to

93.125.png POKENAME like to swing between streetlights at night. They can keep this up as long as they please, stealing electricity to keep up their energy and causing the lights to flicker.

@fleet oracle to elliminate confusion?

[red patio]

i'm going to take a look as well, actually. i had a thought for the harpy Eda sprite

[regal cedar]

For clarity on why this is being asked, the problem is that being near streetlights would, well, not be under the cover of darkness.

[jagged ledge]

Checking in real quick to clarify because I have discovered I was dumb even when trying to clarify before. Flareon. 136 is Flareon. I just saw Tropical before and my brain said Vaporeon for some reason as the quick answer lmao

[regal cedar]

So you meant 1.Vaporeon or 1.Flareon?

[jagged ledge]

1.134 is Vaporeon, 1.135 is Jolteon, 1.136 is Flareon

[hexed fog]

73.235.png Coastal regions have created a sport where teams of POKENAME compete in a unique painting game due to their territorial nature. This niche sport is quite popular among some trainers, who train their POKENAME to compete in these games.

Can we rephrase this to

Coastal regions have noted that POKENAME are territorial and have developed paint-based games mimicking their behavior. Some trainers capitalize on this trait to train their POKENAME for friendly competitions.

@runic perch to be a bit more clear?

[regal cedar]

I meant for your entries, which did you want for each

[jagged ledge]

"Living in forest rivers" (1.134.png) is Vaporeon

"Living deep within rainforests" (1.135.png) is Jolteon

"Living in tropical climates" (The first 1.136.png) is Flareon.

I just had a brain fart when I said Vaporeon was 1.136 earlier. I just saw tropical and my brain said water without reading the rest because I wanted to clear it up quickly.

[hexed fog]

122.3.png The flower on its back isn't actually real. It likes to playfully squirt a fluid from the flower at others, but unbeknownst to POKENAME, this fluid rather stings.

can we rephrase this to

122.3.png The flower on its back is synthetic. It likes to playfully squirt a fluid from the flower at others, but unbeknownst to POKENAME, this fluid rather stings.

@elder gyro to make it a bit more clear?

[nocturne shadow]

This submission got flagged and I don't know why.
"You can tell how old a POKENAME is by the amount of brown spots on its leaf-like wings. When POKENAME’s wings get fully brown, they crumble and flake off until it can no longer fly."

I think it's Pale-yellow, but I don't think I used any pronouns other that "it" and "they"

[nocturne shadow]

Might not want to just say "a fluid" as it can lead to some...thoughts.

[nocturne shadow]

Water might be the safest choice

Or maybe something like "an acidic fluid" or something of the sort

[regal cedar]

pale yellow has to do with apostrophes, some keyboards type a different apostrophe than others for some reason

' vs ’

only ' is used by the game, so we have to correct it

[nocturne shadow]

oh, ok

[regal cedar]

well, it has to do with any character the game can't use, but it's 99% the apostrophe

[hexed fog]

these are more for the author since only they can update their own stuff

[nocturne shadow]

Yeah, I get that

[hexed fog]

if they dont respond we probably just deny

[regal cedar]

Let's make sure to give them some time. Like, even a week.

[hexed fog]

453.52.png The ghosts of Meowths that spend their nine lives across the seven seas, POKENAME carry the souls of pirates in search of conquest. The cursed coin on their heads gleam when they detect treasure nearby.

can we change this to

POKENAME is said to carry the souls of pirates seeking eternal conquest across the seven seas. Tales from old captains claim its cursed coin gleams when it detects nearby treasure.

@jagged ledge keeps the same vibe

[calm storm]

⛈️

hi

[jagged ledge]

Sure thing!

[hexed fog]

470.362.png POKENAME emits an unstable amount of light, incinerating anyone nearby. Legends say it captures wanderers, feeding on their adrenaline.

470.362.png After POKENAME has finally found the light it desires, it transforms. POKENAME is now moderately peaceful and can be approached by trainers. It enjoys exploring the universe in search of treasures to collect. Its golden coffin emits an infinite glow.

Were these both supposed to be for the same sprite @hearty kite

[hearty kite]

Yup. The upper one is the old one.

I had written the lower one before realizing I had ever written that old one. But you can replace it

[hearty kite]

Now that I think about it, another reason is to put the extended character limit to good use

[hexed fog]

Someone grab a poison poke off the wild list and make it's toxin an active ingredient in pester balls please

Quick I want it

If i wait till I'm home I'll forget

[timid sky]

POKENAME can often be seen gnawing on rocks mid-flight to whittle down its fangs. It is not uncommon for it to drop these rocks, and there have been many occasions where the falling rocks have hit people in the head.

[timid sky]

aight bet

[elder gyro]

Sure

[timid sky]

The gases emitted by POKENAME are so fowl that it can chase off almost any Pokémon. A certain Pokémon professor has begun storing its watered down gas into a ball, known as a pester ball, to chase off unwanted Pokémon.

[arctic nacelle]

"are so foul that they repel almost any Pokémon."?

[arctic nacelle]

"A renowned Pokémon professor has used this gas to develop the Pester Ball, a device that chases off unwanted pokemon"

Suggested changes

The only thing that is wrong is that "fowl" means bird.

[timid sky]

Version 2:

The gases emitted by POKENAME are so foul that it can repel almost any Pokémon. A renowned Pokémon professor has used a watered down version of this gas to develop the Pester Ball, a device used to chase off unwanted Pokémon.

[hexed fog]

lol we can fix that if it's submitted

minor spelling errors arent a big issue

[timid sky]

I haven't submitted yet

Also, I remembered foul and fowl being spelled the same way for some reason

[arctic nacelle]

Changed "used a watered down" to "condensed a watered down", maybe? Bit gramatically bumpy right now

[hexed fog]

dude last year I spelled "of" incorrectly. Let that sink in.

[arctic nacelle]

How

[hexed fog]

we all have moments

I have no idea I was probably blazed

'Uhv"

[arctic nacelle]

Haha

[timid sky]

Stupid English language having the same word spelled different ways

[arctic nacelle]

I mean, these are different words. They just sound exactly the same, which is probably more confusing

The problem with fowl and foul is that neither one is used often, so it's harder for people to remember which is which

[timid sky]

Potato Potato (imagine these being pronounced differently like the saying) the point is English is dumb

Anyway, I'm gonna go submit the entry now

[craggy beacon]

imagine these being pronounced differently like the saying
yeah doesnt work very well in text 😭

[timid sky]

No it does not XD. But I commited, so...

[craggy beacon]

i just say potato potahto

[red patio]

update: i wrote a pair for the Clawthorne sisters just now

[errant kestrel]

We still use the google docs form to submit entries, right?

[regal cedar]

yes

[errant kestrel]

Awesome

Now to wait and see if it gets approved xD

[arctic nacelle]

So, I have both of these guys. I have one entry so far, but I'm not sure which one it should be for, or what features I should focus on to differentiate the two

[brazen flicker]

Most do! Just be aware there is a HUGE influx of entries sooo it'll take a bit lol

[arctic nacelle]

Here's the entry I already have:

NAME is a very popular Pokémon with aquarium hobbyists. It does what it can to keep its inhabitants healthy under any circumstances.

I guess for the seaking one, I could say something about how the metal ornamentation imitates the shape of seaking's fail fins, maybe.

[brazen flicker]

I like the idea! Could expand on how it keeps the fish inside safe, if you wanted to go that route

[arctic nacelle]

I should check seaking's entries to see what it says. I'd guess it's mostly about stabbing things with its horn

Hm, could probably go for something like "Pokename's metal ornamentation appears to imitate SEAKING's delicate tail fins. It seems that its aggressive demeanor was also inherited through fusion.". Something like that. Too tired to make it sound right.

Aggressive -> overprotective, maybe

[narrow cosmos]

Got curious and checked the approved list for me name, saw a big influx of approved entries!

Here's hoping I get to see them in-game in the coming weeks/months.

[errant kestrel]

where do you check them?

[narrow cosmos]

You can see tehm on the google doc in one of the tabs, just check the pinned message to find the link to it.

[errant kestrel]

danke

[narrow cosmos]

The three masks it holds each depict an aspect of its former life as a human. One depicts the face the body, another the face of the mind, and the last the face of the soul.

A bit metaphorical, but conceptually I think it's cool flavor as an idea.

[verbal needle]

I think the funniest part is that all the masks are exactly the same

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah, I'm going a little bit against the sprite with the idea technically. That or this particular example was a very basic, blase person in life.

[verbal needle]

That makes it so much better! "We've just so happened to snap a picture of THE single most dull dead person who's probably ever existed"

I will add as well that I believe there's a word missing from the entry you shared here "one depicts the face the body"

[narrow cosmos]

Happy you see the humor in that particular example.

And you're right, fixing it now, how did I miss that? And after I just sent it, too, I always feel bad sending a new, fixed version to the doc so soon, when it's already so plugged up with submissions.

[half rune]

I just came up with one for Mimikyu.

"While Mimikyu primarily copies Pikachu, it has been known to copy from other Pokémon such as Eevee and Charmander."

[narrow cosmos]

It practices music endlessly, trying to create the perfect melody. Its haggard appearance is due to using a Pokéflute to practice, ensuring it will not sleep until it finds that special song.

It gets the point across, but it feels a little awkward, methinks. 🤔

[half rune]

I actually think it's kinda dark. Which fits perfectly in a Pokedex context.

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah, Pokedex entries, custom or canon, run the gamut between simple, dark or funny or the like so hopefully it fits. A bit of dark humor of a sort, poor thing needs a nap already. 😅

Just not sure if the wording feels off or not.

[past cypress]

I like the concept personally

It really fits the sprite

[half rune]

"This Pokémon is the result of a fatal union between Porygon-Z and Rotom. When Rotom possesses Porygon-Z, it eradicates its soul and body. In the end, only the head and an ominous silhouette remain."

[narrow cosmos]

Thanks a bunch!

[half rune]

"This is an attempt by Porygon-Z to infect a trainer's PC with malware. Although not scientifically probable, many swear the Gardevoir in the ad is alive and staring at them, as if pleading for help."

[half rune]

The wording is perfect.

[narrow cosmos]

It perfected its song in the form of a beautiful lullaby. It continues to play this music even as it rests, perpetuating its sleep endlessly and drawing those near to join it in slumber.

Since it has an alt, I gave it a sequel/alt of sorts as well.

[nocturne shadow]

133.464.png
The stones on POKENAME’s mane represent what evolution the Pokemon wants to become. They are usually indecisive, so finding one with one type of stone is infrequent.

339.464.png
Being warm-hearted and energetic, POKENAME brings a sense of joyfulness to wherever it goes. Companies frequently use this Pokemon to raise the morale of its employees.

[past cypress]

This is such a cute sprite I love the colors

[nocturne shadow]

38.332.png
If you see nine brightly glowing stars not in the sky, it is this Pokemon guiding you out of harm's way. When people thought Absol brought disaster, they used POKENAME as protection from them. Some even prayed to it, hoping for its blessing.

Made these three when I was bored. Any thoughts on any of them?

[past cypress]

Also can someone help me shorten this one pls

POKENAME suffers from intense headaches that persist throughout the day. The only cure for its pain is the rare herbs growing on its back, but POKENAME is unable to reach them on its own. As a result, it often follows trainers, hoping they will help it alleviate its suffering by retrieving the herbs.

[silver yarrow]

How do y'all get the text like that

[silver yarrow]

This one is really good

[nocturne shadow]

test

[regal cedar]

three `

iirc

[past cypress]

Its two ``

[silver yarrow]

'' fr?

[regal cedar]

rip me

[nocturne shadow]

It's the <> button

[past cypress]

Around the words that you want to turn into blocks

[silver yarrow]

`` fr?

[candid gust]

behold

[regal cedar]

both sides

[silver yarrow]

Block

Ahhh

I seee

[candid gust]

``test``

[silver yarrow]

I have acquired unimaginable power

[nocturne shadow]

Join us

[narrow cosmos]

I like this one overall, but I'm not sure of a fan-nickname term like "eeveelution" flies for dex entries, so you might wanna change that one to something like "represent which evolution it wishes to become."

[candid gust]

[REDACTED BY THE INTERNATIONAL POKE-COUNCIL]

[nocturne shadow]

Worth a shot

[narrow cosmos]

Hmm....How about something like "The only cure for POKENAME's persistent headaches is the rare herb that grows on its back. Unable to reach them on its own, it follows trainers hoping they will help ease its pain." ?

[nocturne shadow]

I really like the Ninetales/Luxray one, especially since it offers a "counter" to Absol

[narrow cosmos]

Could also swap out "back" for "bulb" in my version, to help it a little more.

[nocturne shadow]

That actually works

[past cypress]

I like it

[nocturne shadow]

me like duck boi

[past cypress]

I wanted to think of something cruel for this pokemon so yep, the only medicine it can take is the one growing on its back that it can't reach

I was thinking either that, or dunking its head in water but also needed to keep its bulb exposed in order to grow

[nocturne shadow]

Giving trauma to your characters. A true writer

[narrow cosmos]

Though they all share the same body, each of its many mouths have their own appetites. As such, it is always hungry, and always searching for the next meal to shove into its starving maws.

I have many mouths and I must feast

[past cypress]

POKENAME uses its antennae to sense the emotions of other Pokémon, becoming highly sensitive to even the slightest negative feelings. When overwhelmed, it lets out a loud screech, often startling other baby Pokémon in nearby nurseries.

[brazen flicker]

"Highly sensitive" reads sorta, idk the word, blandly, esp since you used sense before. Maybe something like extremely emotional
Also, don't need the often in the second semtence :) If it screams, its gonna scare the hell out of other pokemon.

Its an awesome idea tho! V v cool

[past cypress]

After the tragic loss of a mother Kangaskhan, a kind-hearted scientist created POKENAME for the surviving orphan. POKENAME is programmed to be fiercely protective of its baby.

[past cypress]

Oh rip already posted :( ty for the feedback didn't notice the "often" till you brought it up, bad habit

[brazen flicker]

Nah ur good! Although I assume if someone posts here, they're looking for advice

[past cypress]

Yeah usually they are, at least I do

Trying to figure out a way to illustrate this concept better of a man-made pokemon tho, since I feel like it'd be really interesting lore wise to have basically a mother robot watching over the orphaned baby kangaskan

[devout kestrel]

if the online dex has a pokedex entry for a fusion, but the game doesn't...does the pokemon need an entry written or no?

[ebon warren]

I'm not sure what you are referencing with "online dex" but the definitive list of sprites with a custom Dex entry would be the document in the pins here, so if it shows there, the sprite already has an entry. You can always make another one, you just cannot make more than one for the same sprite yourself.

[ebon warren]

Doing this now (unless it was already done, but I didn’t see it mentioned here?)

ok that one is done and Approved

[ebon warren]

I would still make a few minor tweaks for concision, since this is a lot of words and a good chunk could be removed.
The first sentence could change that have gotten themselves lost in the forest (which is 8 words and 46 characters) to simply that wind up lost in the forest (7 words and only 31 characters) or that become lost in the forest (6 words and only 30 characters), since they paint the same picture.
The second sentence needs to be more concise as well after the colon, and you have the word lost twice in a span of 8 words, so changing that up a little to be less repetitive is a good idea while you shorten it

once we iron out a good revision for 439.271, I can change it on the spreadsheet as well

[red patio]

awesome, thank you so much!

[terse pawn]

one must imagine psysaur happy

[night plank]

POKENAME often guide stray Pokémon that that wind up lost in the forest. Trainers are cautioned to keep an eye on their Pokémon when letting them out: Missing Pokémon will be led away into the wilderness if helped by this Pokémon.

how about this?

[terse pawn]

When an unsuspecting plane flies through a cloud, a POKENAME might hijack the vehicle's system, causing great turbulence thanks to their mischief.

POKENAME is capable of creating clouds through their fans, which serves as their natural habitat. It is said that a single POKENAME can create enough cloud to cover an entire village.

or

Condensing the water vapours for the skies, POKENAME can create clouds through their fans which can serve as nests for the young

which one's better

[onyx socket]

The colon here should probably be a semi-colon or a comma, and it shouldn't be followed by a capital. Something like ...when letting them out; missing Pokémon....
You also have "Pokémon" four times in two sentences - maybe replace the end with ...if helped by a POKENAME.?

[night plank]

POKENAME often guide stray Pokémon that that wind up lost in the forest. Trainers are cautioned to keep an eye on their Pokémon when letting them out; missing Pokémon will be led away into the wilderness if helped by a POKENAME.

This look better?

[onyx socket]

Yeah that looks a lot better!

[night plank]

alrightly, thank you!

[fossil root]

Is that Rotom/Swablu or Rotom/Altaria?

[terse pawn]

the latter

[fossil root]

Are a lot of the Rotom primary fusions based on its appliance forms?

[timid sky]

Not only can POKENAME see well with minimal light, but it also flies both fast and silently, making it the perfect nighttime hunter. Anyone who approaches POKENAME's territory will be quickly swarmed and jabbed with poison needles.

[weak osprey]

I'm seeing the bee and the owl parts! Neat :D

[jagged ledge]

I don't think you need the word both after flies. Also changing fast to quickly might work better because it's an adverb like silently. "It flies quickly and silently" or maybe even "It flies quickly yet silently"

[hexed fog]

421.334.png It conceals itself in dazzling light by flapping up all of the excess gems and minerals it collected into the air. The sparkling sounds like music.

Can we change this to

It conceals itself in dazzling light by flapping up all of the excess gems and minerals it collected into the air. Some say they can hear music from an unknown source when viewing it.

Just for clarity? @hasty kernel

122.9a.png Friends and foes are kept guessing if they'll be showered with water or confetti. Even its confetti can be shot at high pressure and explode.

Can we change this to

Friends and foes are kept guessing if they'll be showered with water or confetti. Its confetti is imbued with psychic energy that allows it to explode.

for clarity? @ember urchin

137.395.png Coded to be harder than iron, POKENAME utilizes its crest mainly to headbutt. Despite the crest's aerodynamics, its flying abilities remain to be seen.

Can we change this to

Coded to be harder than iron, POKENAME utilizes its crest mainly to headbutt. The crest on its head is heavy and renders it unable to fly.

for clarity? @honest sun

[fair thicket]

sure, why not
the gist is Cassandra's not futzing around anymore. 🤔 Does it really matter whether it speaks human language or not?

[narrow cosmos]

Unscrupulous sorts once thought POKENAME would be the key to profit by tripling Slowpoke Tail production. However, POKENAME tails were far too bitter to be edible, ruining the plans.

[honest sun]

Yeah you can change it

[hexed fog]

I figured you wouldnt care

[narrow cosmos]

Both heads have the same size brain, and the same urges to charge at intruders. It's not unheard of to see a POKENAME rapidly charging forward and backward as both heads try to take control.

[hexed fog]

74.461.png This fusion is believed to show a sauropod that lived with Amaura in the same time period. It loves cuddles because its rocky body is always cold.

can we change this to

This fusion is believed to have lived with Amaura in the same time period. It loves cuddles because its rocky body is always cold.

Just for avoiding naming real animals and clarity? @livid valley

[fair thicket]

🤔 i would default to "same urge" rather than pluralize it
i would also go with "as both heads fight for control" rather than "as both heads try to take control"
however, these are initial thoughts on rephrasing, so they could merely be cliches that got lodged in my brain

[fair thicket]

(psst! you say "shave lived" instead of "have lived")

[livid valley]

I mean a Sauropod isnt a animal its a group
Same as bird pokemon are birds

[fair thicket]

this was my thought. 🤔 are words like "dinosaur" or "sauropod" absent from canon dex entries or other canon dialogue in the pokemon universe?

[livid valley]

I would understand if I said Brachiosaurus or so

[hexed fog]

how about 'sauropod Pokemon'

[livid valley]

We could do that
I mean my dex was created when the dexes had to be shorter

[hexed fog]

fair 🙂

[hexed fog]

This sauropod Pokémon is believed to have lived with Amaura in the same time period. It loves cuddles because its rocky body is always cold.

is ok I assume?

[livid valley]

yeah

[hexed fog]

435.373.png Even after fusion, POKENAME attempts to look like a Pikachu. However since its body constitution is different, it had to improvise.

can we change this to

Even after fusion, POKENAME tries to look like a Pikachu. However, since its body constitution is different, it had to improvise by mimicking Pikachu's ears and tail with mismatched and crudely altered parts.

for clarity? @scenic badge

[scenic badge]

No problem

[narrow cosmos]

With every swing of its bladed arms, POKENAME leaves a rainbow trail behind. The aftermath of especially intense battles is said to be a truly breathtaking marvel of color.

[narrow cosmos]

A terrifying amalgamation borne of incomplete fusion between Hypno and Scyther. POKENAME hypnotizes unfortunate victims into a stupor, before putting its scythe to grisly work.

[sacred patio]

Fancy words

[narrow cosmos]

The fanciest

[chilly horizon]

do you mean born ?

[narrow cosmos]

Yeah, seems I got too flowery and added the e.

[chilly horizon]

you CAN use it, especially in formal situation but i dont like the vibe of it in that entry tbh ghfsdghljk

[nocturne shadow]

129.318.png
The glass bulb on POKENAME’s back usually has baby Magikarp living in it. Legends say the water can grant eternal life as no one has ever seen a Magikarp die in the bulb.

[fair thicket]

number agreement in the first sentence - "POKENAME's", but then "them"

[nocturne shadow]

I was confused whether to refer to it as a "them" or "it" so thanks for the clarification

[fair thicket]

i feel like there's a stronger phrasing than "has baby magikarp swimming in them" 🤔
also why "usually"? Are there bowls without inhabitants?

[vapid marsh]

“into a stupor” could be removed and the content is easily understandable. Is it still acceptable to have half-sentences in dex entries? (Borne is a real word, it’s past participle of “bear”)

[nocturne shadow]

I mean, the alt is shown without fish so

But I get your point tho

[fair thicket]

it's not a half-sentence; just a misused comma (if i'm understanding your critique correctly)

oh wait no i see your point

[nocturne shadow]

Would "living in it" be better?

[fair thicket]

so the first full stop should be a comma

[vapid marsh]

Nah, I was asking because the first sentence could be even shorter

[fair thicket]

no, no 🤔 I'm thinking you could have even sharper words. Something like "is usually brimming with ebullient baby magikarp" or something

[vapid marsh]

Incomplete sentences are a mainstay of og pokedex entries

[fair thicket]

Heh

[nocturne shadow]

Seems a bit too wordy for tbh lol

Never even heard of ebullient

[fair thicket]

"ebullient magikarp fry"? 🤔 "fry" is the term for baby fish iirc

[fair thicket]

yeah, it was the first word that came to mind

[nocturne shadow]

Maybe I kinda just have a reference of it being like a "fun facts" section in a childrens book, since it's supposed to be for 10 yr olds and up.

[fair thicket]

🤔 guess i'm thinking that "living" can be replaced with a word that also contains how they're living - living well. "thriving", for one

[nocturne shadow]

Thriving could be a good replacement

[fair thicket]

yeah 😅 as much information in as few words as possible, without being wordy

a big ask!

[boreal prairie]

Baby MAGIKARP live in the glass bulb on its back. According to legend, the water in its bowl must grant eternal life, as no one has ever seen a MAGIKARP in the bulb die.

concision edit. I do have a thought that the first sentence is sort of not that exciting because it is just "describing what can be seen"

[hexed fog]

94.100.png Some say this Pokémon resides in the shadows inside every Poké Ball. Whenever a Pokémon is released, there is a small chance POKENAME appears instead.

can we alter this to

Some say this Pokémon resides in the shadows inside every Poké Ball. The fable says that whenever a Pokémon is released, there is a small chance POKENAME appears instead. There is no scientific backing to this claim.

to make it less of a truth and more of a theory? @celest zealot

[jagged ledge]

My word of advice when it comes to alts is remembering that each entry describes a specific sprite, so it's usually better to be specific to each one's details.

[nocturne shadow]

Ok, thx

[boreal prairie]

Is that not already covered by "some say"

[jagged ledge]

Like if there's one alt that's red and another that's blue, you shouldn't have to say "It can be red" to describe the red one. That's just the red one.

[hexed fog]

seperate sentence

[boreal prairie]

But especially with your addition of "the fable" it seems unnecessary to add that last sentence, especially considering the crazy stuff that gets said in any old entry

[hexed fog]

I'm just trying to get it pushed through since it's been in limbo for 9 months :/

[boreal prairie]

Doesn't the FAQ say we can say things that are not mechanically true? (im not criticizing you btw, just giving concision feedback like i would on anybody else)

[fair thicket]

is this about mechanics? i thought it was making it clear the second sentence was also describing the legend

[hexed fog]

Yeah that

the second sentence isn't clear that it's part of the legend and the third further clarifies it

[boreal prairie]

With the added sentence I assumed the hold up was that there was concerns it was not true to the game. Since "some say" and "the fable" seem to cover that well on its own

[hexed fog]

ok I can remove the third sentence

would that be ok?

[fair thicket]

Some say this Pokémon resides in the shadows inside every Poké Ball and that whenever a Pokémon is released, there is a small chance POKENAME appears instead. There is no scientific backing to this claim.

excluding "this fable"

[boreal prairie]

I mean its not my entry lol

[hexed fog]

oh for the love of...

ozy y

D:

[boreal prairie]

I sort of thought it was just an entry that got shared i just pop in in between breaks haha

[hexed fog]

lmao we want the original author to ok the change

if they dont I'm not changing and just denying

[boreal prairie]

Like you were asking for feedback, I saw after a little bit thats not what was happening lol

[hexed fog]

yeah I'm trying to get through the unsures that have been sitting there for a millenia

not sure why the folks marking it unsure didn't reach out at that time but not my problem

if it has the chance of totally changing the meaning I want to reach out. if the author is adamant that it can happen we will just deny

FAQ 18

Is it acceptable for entries to describe a fusion as having abilities that aren't mechanically backed up? For instance, describing a fusion that can't learn Fly as being able to fly, or a fusion that doesn't learn any Fire-type moves as having control over fire.

doesn't mean 'make up things that can never happen ever' lol just things that would naturally make sense. (like Butterfree being able to fly)

[regal cedar]

We do not use the ALL CAPS naming convention of Gens 1-5.

[hexed fog]

428.396.png When POKENAME detects signs of life, it triggers an explosion, freezing all its surroundings. It won't stop until it's iced its target.

can we change this to

When POKENAME detects signs of life, it triggers an icy explosion that freezes everything nearby. It relentlessly pursues its target until the area is completely frozen.

just to have it contain less slang and more of an actual dex tone @vernal saddle

[jagged ledge]

Like how my Bulbasaur/Dragonair entry says it can produce mystical flames. Even though it doesn't visually have fire, it can learn Flamethrower and Dragon Breath and has dragony powers. Saying it can freeze a city would be kinda random lol

[fair thicket]

yeye, it was a misconception over what was being critiqued

[jagged ledge]

Ah ok

I just got here and I'm not going to be here for long, I just wanted to give an example to try and help

[fair thicket]

You and Ozydamians 😌

[fair thicket]

Now I just got an idea for a delphox/aurorus where what appears to be mystical fire is the rainbows of auroral ice powers

[chilly horizon]

-# happy pride

[jagged ledge]

Oooh that's fun

[jagged ledge]

Happy Pride!

[narrow cosmos]

POKENAME is dormant, yet pulses with near-infinite rage and strength. It is said that should it be truly unleashed, a single punch would have the power to shatter the planet.

[boreal prairie]

While POKENAME lies dormant it pulses with near-infinite rage and strength. [It's said] that should it awaken and unleash its power, a single punch could shatter the planet.

Coherence suggestion (some ambiguity with the its). I also just marked [its said] in case you have an idea about who could be saying, i just think thats a fun place to put flavor.

[fair thicket]

should be a comma after dormant if you do phrase it like that, though

🤔 this is while as in though, right?

[vernal saddle]

That looks good to me ngl

[narrow cosmos]

Appreciate it, I was thinking as I wrote it that things could sound less awkward, so I was hoping some coherence assistance would be found. Perhaps, "Mythologists say" as part of the bracketed area?

[boreal prairie]

While like a duration of time, which i felt was more appropriate for a legendary slumbering monster than though

[boreal prairie]

Thats a cool idea!

Or maybe more pokemon-y way might say "Mythological researchers"

[fair thicket]

i see... It does change the meaning of the entry, though, so as long as the original writer okays it

[boreal prairie]

Yeah I'm always just making suggestions for the authors to pick and choose from before they submit!

[narrow cosmos]

And I very much appreciate it! You've always done solid help for mine.

I enjoy sharing my ideas just as much to show off and create discussion as well as get input like that.

Less outwardly aggressive than normal Primeape, POKENAME is incredibly protective of the egg it carries. If the egg is blemished even slightly, it will lay waste to all its surroundings in a rage.

[dense shard]

124.410.png POKENAME's agressive demanor leads it to pick fights against stronger opponents. After the physically and emotionally painful defeat, it seeks to relive its ego by kissing and defeating weaker pokemon.

375.444.png POKENAME lacks eyes, bones, sense of taste and has an abnormal pain tolerance. It can fall from incredibly high heights without suffering any long-term damage. That's why its intelligence almost doesn't develop during this stage.

375.445.png It's stomach can digest almost anything, and when it doesn't, POKENAME simply spits it out. The trace of hair it leaves behind feels to the touch like metal swarf, though it's not magnetic.

[hexed fog]

Reminds me of everyone i met visiting LA

[fair thicket]

*demeanor (or demeanour if you're british)

[dense shard]

367.389.png Sometimes, around POKENAME, several lightbulbs get suddenly set on fire like candles, but nobody knows why or when this happens. The POKENAME of a famous psychic once had a nightmare about a class C fire extinguisher.

(Class C fire extinguishers are those designed to put out fires involving electrical short-circuits and all of that stuff)

376.455.png Though they seem undistinguishible, one of the heads is the intelligent and dominant that controlls the body, while the other is the dumber one that serves only for eating. They always fight each other, except when they know they're being watched by someone.

Any thoughts? Corrections?

[fair thicket]

several lightbulbs suddenly ignite like candles
more concise

[fair thicket]

*indistinguishable

[dense shard]

Thanks

[fair thicket]

🤔 could use some revision beyond the typo, too... lemme see

Though the heads seem indistinguishable, the intelligent dominant one controls the body, while the dumber one is only concerned with eating. The heads always fight each other, except when they know they're being watched.

not sure if the second "the heads" should be "they", or if reducing ambiguity is best 🤔

[dense shard]

Typos?

I got inspired

lemme see

57.122.png POKEMANE gets specially excited when it sees a keyboard, which will try to angrily smash until breaking it. Doing this, strangely enough, it usually ends up writing coherent sentences, but they ALWAYS present horrid spelling mistakes.

like the shakespeare monkeys

[fair thicket]

"pokemane" XD

[dense shard]

Yup, literally me

[fair thicket]

mr ape wrote that 😌
no wait, it'd be primemime

[red quail]

Has anyone else had trouble submitting dex entries for triple fusions? I get an error saying the file name part isn’t valid, not sure if I’m doing it wrong! Specifically I’m trying to do 150.348.380c.png

[fair thicket]

or is it manmine

[dense shard]

Primemime is it

[fair thicket]

the primest mime

[dense shard]

like the batery acid

[fair thicket]

there are shenanigans with triple fusions that you'll probably want to ask an unown directly about.

[red quail]

Heard that! Thank you!! Some of the triples are my favorite critters, I’d like to write for them

[dense shard]

I've found (ceated) my new animal spirit

created

[ebon warren]

Currently the Dex entries don’t include Triple Fusions at all, and it’s unlikely to change in the near future mostly due to all of the recent issues and backlog piling up.
For now, custom Dex entries will only be for standard fusions

[red quail]

TRAGEDY okay, not a problem! My headcanons shall remain headcanons

[fair thicket]

🤔 so no reason you can't write them out and workshop them; they'll just be on the back burner indefinitely

[ebon warren]

Yes, and I know at least a long while back Triple Fusions were this bizarre and specific addition to the game that had to have every detaile decided before they were even added, so at that point (obviously) the Dex entry would also already be decided in advance, with no room for change.
Triple Fusions have grown a lot since then though so I’m unsure, but I’d say “Not yet indefinitely” is the best answer

[red quail]

Genuinely cannot imagine how complicated that type of programming is, given that they follow really weird rules. I appreciate you letting me know!!

[ebon warren]

They’re super weird rules in everything and have a specific post-game method to obtain and very restrictive “requirements” to even make.
I also know that any suggestions for new Triple Fusions basically have to already have an acceptable sprite made and ready before adding it is even an option, and that’s also not even verifying that the suggested Triple meets the “requirements” or not, Triple Fusions simply cannot and will not have an autogen sprite or a placeholder.
So yeah, they’re super complicated

[fair thicket]

i think when Firesword was messing around in debug mode, they found that Big Bird's other two heads are tied to Invisible Balls.
so yes. very weird critters!

[celest zealot]

yeah, that sounds perfect! thanks :)

[hexed fog]

done! ty for your entry

[dense shard]

Why not make an exclusive pokedex for triple fusions? like a key object you can open from the bag, then look on and see every entry in a card-like format?

at least until the actual pokedex can hold the triple fusions

[dense shard]

151.397a.png When this fusion tenses its jaws and muscles in a very specific way, its usually soft skin becomes harder than a tungsten carbide. Lots of kids have fun imitating its particular expression.

[ebon warren]

I’m not really sure what you mean, but the current Dex works the same for Triple Fusions as all the rest. And making a brand new item with new mechanics would be a massive amount of coding I’d expect, anything that isn’t already in the base code for insertion has the potential to have huge technical debt and glitch potential

[dense shard]

ah 😮

[dense shard]

Correction: When this fusion tenses its jaws and muscles in a very specific way, its usually soft skin becomes harder than tungsten carbide. Lots of kids have fun imitating its particular expression.

[regal cedar]

Seems good to me! although I need to double chdck what a tubgsten carbide is

[dense shard]

It's like a very hard metal

(generally used for the inserts of milling and drilling machines)

[dense shard]

335.309.png POKENAME feels just too perfect as a living creature to even need to do anything on its own. For POKENAME, if you don't agree, then YOU are the problem.

[idle yarrow]

shes right

[dense shard]

309.335.png There's no better excuse to be lazy as having no arms. POKENAME will randomly go swiching between surface and underwater, just to try different and exotic ways of lazing around.

289.268.png POKENAME can revert entropy to zero, for it invokes lost Joules/Kelvin for its attacks. This power means the potential of an infinite energy source, but no POKENAME has ever cooperated to this purpose.

312.267.png Its electrical attacks are rather unique, for it draws electrical current from its opponents towards him, making electrons sink inside its indecipherable void. Although they work differently, every electric type attack from it has the same effect.

[ebon warren]

Immediately, switching (and I can look more thoroughly once I’m not traveling)

[nocturne shadow]

154.8.png
Seen as a symbol of prosperity, POKENAME will revive any deceased coral it stumbles upon. This Pokemon is the sole reason as to why Corsola are plentiful in the seas.

154.9a.png
When retracted into its shell to sleep, this Pokemon looks like a bulbous flower. However heed this warning, POKENAME's petals contain microscopic needles, making collecting them a tedious and sometimes painful task

[languid estuary]

shouldn't it be heed warning? Even then, I'm not sure its 100% gramatically accurate

I think heed is used more like "heed a warning" or "heed this warning"

[nocturne shadow]

Ok, thank you. Didn't know how to format it

[turbid sundial]

"be warned" has the same meaning with less letters

[boreal prairie]

A symbol of prosperity, POKENAME revives any deceased coral it stumbles upon. Its thought to be a major reason why Corsola are plentiful in some seas.

Some concision edits + some coherence suggestions because many Cordola entries make special notes to say that they are nearly extinct. I also think "Seen as a symbol of prosperity" doesnt exactly work as a clause attached to the next sentence since they are different ideas.

[nocturne shadow]

What if I say that POKENAME is the sole reason Corsola have not gotten fully extinct

[boreal prairie]

I would generally avoid declaring something the sole reason for anything because it either stifles the creativity of other people's ideas or it is ignored/unknown by other people and contradicted

Which is to say specifically, it either means anybody who cares can't give another reason Corsola aren't extinct, or people ignore it or simply don't know about it, and come up with a contradictory reason.

[formal rivet]

I guess I'll give this a shot since I can't sprite, clicked random and got klinklang/zubat so I'll do dex entries for the full klink line with zubat for this attempt

[steel star]

General advice I follow is you avoid specifying Pokémon when possible

[boreal prairie]

When retracted into its shell to sleep, this Pokémon looks like a bulbous flower. Be warned, its petals contain microscopic needles, making collecting them a tedious and painful task.

Very minor concision edits. Though in truth, I didnt find this entry as imaginitive as most of yours. I'm not sure that it is as unique or specific as something like a 3rd stage starter combo deserves.

[sacred patio]

Zubat/klink is already done

Make sure to check #dex-entries-submissions doc for what needs done

[formal rivet]

is the whole line done or just the klink/zubat on its own

[regal cedar]

Really, it's fine to do so, but avoid pokemon outside the dex if possible (if you stick to, say, hgss johto pokedex, you'd be fine)

[formal rivet]

the doc isn't loading rn

It's not done, I don't see 397.41 anywhere

klink head zubat body

397.41.png
POKENAME often shelters within abandoned factories, where the remaining machinery acts as its primary food source. Old industrial plants swarm with this Pokémon.

[regal cedar]

There we go, dex grid is back online.

[boreal prairie]

POKENAME shelters in abandoned factories, where its primary food source is the remaining machinery.

concision suggestions. you have plenty of room for another idea with this

[regal cedar]

Looks great!

I prefer the original, personally.

[formal rivet]

so do I lol

oversimplicity is a plague

[boreal prairie]

It gives room to add more complexity

[formal rivet]

I'm about to do its evolutions of klink to build on the factory part within a species line, then I'll come back and add if necessary

[boreal prairie]

"often found sheltering within" is just padding, it is not oversimplifying to say "shelters in" which means exactly the same thing, but gives you more space to use the limited characters

sorry i didn't mean to be defensive but you did call my suggestion a plague lol

[formal rivet]

Not your suggestion in particular, the problem of oversimplifying information

Pokedex entries usually have a bit of fluff

[regal cedar]

I'll repeat that I think Daemon's initial post is just fine.

But you are right, I've seen entries that do sort of fluff stuff around and repeat stuff.

But this is fine.

[boreal prairie]

for example (not good writing from me necessarily but is the difference between padding and using space)

Often found sheltering within
Shelters timidly in the shadows

Sameish character count, much more detail.

[formal rivet]

"Often found sheltering within" sounds more like scientific observation, as a pokedex would have

"shelters timidly in the shadows" sounds like writing a novel, which isn't what I'm going for