cool beat i think

[oak spire]

tell me what u think about the intro, outro, mix, arrengement, what i could improve etc. thanks

[wicked tinsel]

you really need to work on everything. it just feels empty. add some background to fill up the atmosphere

[oak spire]

wdym everything

[wicked tinsel]

like the intro , outro arrangement

and mix

[oak spire]

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[stuck night]

i think you should quantize the intro a bit. or, if youre probably making a humanized feel, dont make them too far offbeat, make the note velocities vary instead

[oak spire]

better?

[harsh holly]

Half of it still sounds off beat to me like for example 6seconds in it sounds off but I see the vision if you could make it more on beat and less like randomly placed it would be really good

[zinc osprey]

yeah, intro pianos definitely sound a little bit off beat. the more soft synthy sound around 25 seconds in is good. The melodies past the intro are pretty good

The initial bass that comes in feels a little off. Is it on root notes? It maybe is a little too distorted for the feel of the song.

The effects like eqing or reversing stuff are a cool addition

I feel like it is a little too repetitive with no real change to the melody through the song. Maybe another melody at some point like halfway through would be beneficial.

Also maybe the drums slightly quieter/the melodies slightly louder

The outro effect was pretty cool tho

[granite steeple]

I really like the reversed parts. You have very good ideas! I'd work on mixing the drums, especially making the snares quieter and side chaining the kicks to the 808s. Also dont hesitate to add texture to your melodies by just copying the chords and making slight variations with different instruments, you got this !

[oak spire]

@granite steeple @harsh holly @zinc osprey
Okay. Snare is quieter. I sidechained the kick and 808.
Melo is biz louder and the drums are quieter
Removed distortion on bass and yes its on root notes.
Im confused about the intro tho to me it sounds good.
Are the chords off beat or the top melody

i'll add one more layer to the melody later

[oak spire]

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[zinc osprey]

sounds like its the chords to me

Also i think the song mostly sounds a little better now

I could more realistically hear someone on this now

[oak spire]

thank you guys so much for all the feedback

i think its way better now

[trail nest]

Really cool beat, i think it would help if you pan the hats, also there is something mixed wrong there is some distortion.

[quaint torrent]

i was gonna say you need to add more to it then i saw your latest one

i like your idea with the reversed parts and i think you've executed them well; im new but i do think there is a bit of distortion in the mixing

[oak spire]

ayyy appreciate u guys. I think its the 808 i was trying other ones and i think 2 are playing at the same time lmao