Feedback on a loFi Track

[red plank]

I am currently working on a LoFi track and I want to get regular feedback so I know what I could change, here is what I got so far:

[urban falcon]

sounds like a minecraft soundtrack, good work

[red plank]

You are the second person today to point out it sounds like Minecraft, which honestly fits the vibe but is not necessarily what I am going for. It is meant to be the ambience for a café at sunset, or specifically the character being introduced at this place while reading a book about Kintsugi.

[urban falcon]

can see that too, it just sounds like minecraft but the vibe is spot on to what you said

[red plank]

Minecraft would probably be one of his favorite games tho, and I think he'd make that sort of music himself, so it's fitting he might have gotten inspired

Is the "tsh" not a little to harsh though?

[glad whale]

sounds very chill but i’d switch to a different drum kit with a more prominent snare and a less agressive hihat. also adding a riser and faller when the drums join would make that transition more satisfying

[hallow cedar]

I think you should make the kick less aggressive/less loud as in some parts it seems it doesn’t fit in my opinion

[red plank]

added a subtle heartbeat (symbolism) and lowered the kick in volume. the snare has also been changed to a different one bcs I felt like it was too overpowering

and Dani is the nickname of the character in quation

still got no melody. Working on the "easy" parts first lmao

[red plank]

Is anyone willing to help me come up with a melody? Entirely new to music producing and I would love to get some help

[red plank]

had an idea, but still stuck? dpes this sound okay? not scared to change the instrument