My first full song, opinions?

[alpine owl]

Never really actually made a bridge or an ending before or used an amen break so, how'd I do?

[pastel plinth]

I like it, the only thing I would change is the last piano part at 2:19, remove the the three quick notes and try to let it end on the root note of your scale, something along the lines of my example, you could also keep the kick going for the 3 notes and only let the last note ring out without a kick

[lime pine]

Your drop part feels really chaotic, mainly because of the mixing i think. Try to make some room for your more bassy elements to shine through by cutting all the unwanted frequencies of your other instruments/samples.

A good example is to cut everything below 150hz

And your drums are also sitting kinda low in the mix, if you want them to be a bit more prominent you could do with some sidechaining on your bass

And if you dont like ducking sidechain sound you could multi band sidechain by only sidechaining the bass, i use shaperbox 3 for this

[alpine owl]

Well I took the criticisms to the best of my knowledge and what tutorials could show me so hopefully this is a bit better?

[ocean moss]

i dsay noticebly better considering the before and after, keep it up!

[lime pine]

Mix does feel a bit cleaner indeed, well done 🙂

Keep at it

One final tip i'll give is work on your chord progressions, watch some videos how chords work and what different chords you have (major, minor, diminished etc.). Once you'll improve on that i think you'll see a big gap in your progression 🙂

[pastel plinth]

I actually like the unconventional chord progression and melody :)