#Compass - Wolfmeister

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obsidian gull
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The patient, the cool, the calculated
teetering down, pouring into me
an excruciating molten rum
of intoxicating criticism.

Steamy spirals fume
a million eyes
cyclonic and confused
clustered up and focused down
swirl and sear through my minds-eye.

Disconnected, distant
the coherence separates
skewered in the chaotic flame
of who I aim to be.

Strolling upon an evening
amidst a murdered backdrop of stars
these steely eyed arachnids
splash and warp
into abyssal ecstasy
of who I aim to be.

Now all 8 limbs climb K2
encumbered by the grapple, slip and fumble
through the meaning,
the reason, pressing through
insurmountable expectations
of who I aim to be.

There's a wild eyed
wonder and bemusement
in the hallucinated image of those
who would cast the burden
of opposition before me.

Now this reinvented experimentation,
this double slit freakshow
broken upon the back
of these elephants
I'm now forced to devour.

Stuck in the prismatic intersection,
a lightshow that cuts through
the cavernous whimsy, a raucous rave
of the sullen and bemused.

Cast like glass refracted
through this void of light,
unmade, undone...
bereft of sanity,
spinning through a faltering ember
upon the twilight gleaming.

Lost inside these spaces of who I was
falling apart and into place
piece by piece,
of who I aim to be.

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obsidian gull
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Compass - Wolfmeister

fierce pike
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dont worry im still finna be here tho lemme read

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the triple "of who I aim to be" is wonderful sonically Big fan
with another ending on it is great

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@obsidian gull
Ah a poem about the act of receiving critique in itself

ars poetica as it were.

it almost acts against the poem that as you speak to the difficulty of receiving and comprehending a mass of critique, you still seem to so beautifuly put it into effect here.

I love this work and it articulates the feeling of insurmountable struggle very well.

I like how close it is to how one might verbalise those same ideas. It speaks very much of a single cohesive speaker voice.

I would question why you call the criticism intoxicating. It it a drug that we seek despite knowing it isn't always good for us?

obsidian gull
copper hemlock
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found it

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