Poop.
Poop from a butt
Why did God invent pooping?
God could've made a world without poop
But he invented poop and made it gross
Who invents poop?
Whatever be the case
Poop stinks and poop is here to stay
Poop.
#Poop
barren wagon
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Poop.
Poop from a butt
Why did God invent pooping?
God could've made a world wit...
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barren wagon
I made this on a 75 second time constraint I'm quite proud of it I hope you all enjoy it
Maybe this shuld have the satire tag idk
velvet fox
Maybe this shuld have the satire tag idk
I think it should, lol 😭
Apologies but I prefer material with substance, respectfully, your piece is entirely satirical, and I don't have much to work with 🥲🥲
Or we could get relational and talk about how poop is a signifier for other things, and the poem isn't about poop, but said thing which is similar to poop.
velvet fox
Maybe this shuld have the satire tag idk
But as you've mentioned this, maybe it's not so serious¿
barren wagon
But as you've mentioned this, maybe it's not so serious¿
Satire can be serious
inner girderBOT
Satire can be serious
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barren wagon
Or we could get relational and talk about how poop is a signifier for other thin...
We culd do that
velvet fox
Satire can be serious
True! Half satirical/yet also political is hot in modern poetry, yes yes
velvet fox
We culd do that
We could but what poop could signify here is incredibly vague and could almost be anything @-@
barren wagon
We could but what poop could signify here is incredibly vague and could almost b...
You could say perhaps it plays on the question "If God is all loving all powerful why did he make evil"
velvet fox
You could say perhaps it plays on the question "If God is all loving all powerfu...
We could! And from your "Why did god invent pooping" line, we could get to that next logic point
But you need to expand more on the critical of god part,
Like maybe start the next stanza with another thing you don't like but question why it exists?
velvet fox
Poop.
Poop from a butt
Why did God invent pooping?
God could've made a world wit...
Like, if it were me writing this/adding onto the poem
Capitalism.
Money for nobody but those who don't need it.
We could've made a world without it. But it exists today.
Why? Why create someone for everyone if the people who need it aren't allowed enough of it, and the people with too much gets to keep it, for what reasons, to decorate their already satisfactory living?
Capitalism stinks, but just like poop, it's here to stay.
Capitalism.
Idk, that'd be my take on how to really improve the vibe of being satirical yet political
velvet fox
If you wanna keep it entirely satirical, as is, is perfectly fine
But if you want to do the satirical + political vibe, you could do something along the lines of my suggestions
Idk, I probably take poetry pretty seriously haha
I leave my heart + other things! :)
barren wagon
Idk, I probably take poetry pretty seriously haha
Understandable!
Key constraint in writing this piece is that I had 75 seconds to both think and type it up so that's why it's so short and doesn't get into anything else
velvet fox
Key constraint in writing this piece is that I had 75 seconds to both think and ...
Which makes sense, it's a great base!
What you do with it from here on out is totally up to you now
barren wagon
yassss 🙏