#I got famous

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mossy laurel
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hey I got famous,
yeah could you believe?
started my own brand,
called it failures eve.

it got popular quick,
regret was delivered everyday,
and shame made friends,
while truth decided to betray.

kindness bailed on me quick,
he didn't even say a goodbye,
and I think hope hates me,
but I'm too tired to even try.

oh and love sent a package,
said I have something for you,
it was wrapped around a lie,
with a note that didn't get through.

I've been doing this job
for many years,
ever since I was a kid
I've studied all fears.

we became friends,
and only he kept his promise to stay,
at least he doesn't pretend,
he visits every night without a delay.

he calls me his toy,
and it used to be a fun game,
but I think it stole my joy,
now nothing is the same.

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@autumn mural

autumn mural
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This has that exhausted, half-joking tone people use when they’ve suffered with something for so long that irony becomes a coping mechanism. The opening almost sounds playful:
“hey I got famous”
but the “brand” being called Failures Eve immediately twists the humor into self-destruction. That contrast carries the whole poem really well. It reads like someone casually introducing their own collapse as if it were a business success story.
What makes the poem effective is the personification of emotions and concepts. Shame, kindness, hope, love, fear they all behave like unreliable people drifting in and out of the speaker’s life. It creates this strange emotional economy where abstract feelings become relationships. And honestly, the line:
“kindness bailed on me quick,
he didn't even say a goodbye”
hits harder because it’s simple. It sounds almost conversational, which makes the abandonment feel real instead of theatrical.
I also think this section is the emotional core:
“we became friends,
and only he kept his promise to stay”
because it reframes fear as the only consistent companion in the speaker’s life. That’s bleak, but it’s written with this quiet resignation rather than dramatic despair, which makes it land more naturally.
And the ending:
“he calls me his toy”
changes the relationship entirely. Earlier fear sounded almost dependable, but now it becomes controlling and parasitic. The line:
“now nothing is the same.”
being so plain after all the personification actually works in the poem’s favor. It feels emotionally drained, like the speaker no longer has energy left for elaborate metaphors.
If I had one suggestion, it’d maybe be to tighten one or two explanatory lines in the middle, because your strongest moments are when the concepts speak through implication rather than direct statement. But overall, the poem’s biggest strength is its tone tired, self-aware, ironic, lonely without ever sounding forced.

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@mossy laurel i am in love with your writing style, u are the second poet who's style has made me fall in love like 🤌🤌🤌🤌

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manic raven
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“You have studied all fear?” Interesting, tell me the types of fear that exists @mossy laurel

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