It is a raw look at love’s evolution. I like how you contrast the "pearlescent" ease of summer with the "ravines" of winter, proving that true connection remains even when the beauty fades. The final plea to "sever me from me" is a haunting ending.
#Loving who is love
ornate zephyr
bitter viper
ohh, i love this- the images are really nice and the descriptions coherent, i can imagine myself in it
wide rover
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junior compass
love this poem!!!! but one thing:
in the start of the poem, there's vivid imagery and lots of depictions going around, however in the middle of the poem the change of emotions is abrupt, not trying to saying it's not bland but we can add some transition between the emotions, we can probably create a smoother tonal bridge or gradually darken imagery.
Essentially, I LOVE THIS POEM!!!! probably one of my faves
wise gazelleBOT
love this poem!!!! but one thing:
in the start of the poem, there's vivid image...
Wonderful! @junior compass has just progressed to level 12!
wide rover
love this poem!!!! but one thing:
in the start of the poem, there's vivid image...
I see your point, the abrupt shift is definitely jarring, but I think that’s the point with this poem, and describing intense love. (How I experience it atleast) it’s something that has you so immersed your sense of self vanishes. Then like a rug pulled from beneath you, you are feeling a burning longing.
Desiring nothing but the beloved
junior compass
ohh i think i get it now