Icarus - Hydrae

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Thankyou Dina

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I feel like I remember this being referenced when I first joined the server lol

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Huh interesting.... I think cat wrote a poem inspired by this

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*Huh interesting....

I think cat wrote a poem

inspired by this*

- Hydrae

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Maybe that's how you know this one

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I love how you only use the first line to set the rest of the poem into this very poetic parallel, the way it kinda sets that the rest of it will be the old tale of Icarus, but I wonder

The story of Icarus is one of hubris, of pride, of a certain freedom he quite literally died to obtain

Do you equate that as a layer to the love you seem to idealise here?

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That this love of yours was burning, but you pushed yourself to be closer in a toxically attracted way

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In a way yes if you look at the second para and see how it's a damned if I do damned if I don't situation so yes there is a layer of hubris here for sure as the speaker chooses a certain option as they believe it to be better

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Yes yes yes

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Beautiful

I enjoyed seeing it through that perspective

This almost feels like something I'd have written with my experiences lmaooo

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At the end of the day the poem is what the reader feels like it is

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And I loved the flow and the lack of forced rhymes, v inspiring how well you still kept a pace to it??? Crazy

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So if you feel like you relate I'm glad

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Haha twin

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Aww thanks purple 🫂

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Like there was only a rhyme of sorts with the way you went
one
By
One
"Don't get close to the sun" like

That just

Wow

Sets the pace so welll

Kinda draws you in to this being something starting to get serious

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If you notice the next lines for is also supposed to rhyme... atleast in my head it does

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And as a big greek head, that's also just a big love

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Does it?

I would say more than rhyming, you've used very librarly similar phonetics

Which is there alot in your style ngl

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Ahh so that's what it's called

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Even in uncontained

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But yeah

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That's how I'd describe it

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Never said I hate rhyming lol

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I'll take your word on it genius

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Similar syllables with some sounds or stress points being similar

I see it alot in this poem, kinda really draws you into this rhythm

I love

Okay next one.

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Hehe thanks purple

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Oh yes I can see

But your alot more free w it for suree