#Sin and cause of Trigonometry

20 messages · Page 1 of 1 (latest)

toxic panther
#

Transient ataraxia follows
The axioms in the sky,
Stars beautifully aligned,
Planets perfectly round.

No more heights
And distances,
The altitude puckers up,
Into a leaf blade ready
To smash the flies,
It has amazing aim,
It's distressing, it's disgusting.
But it works.

A widow x
And a husband y,
They receive the Nobel prize,
In (love) and [logical reasoning.]

A brick x
And a furnace y,
They win elections,
For (social justice) and [education].

Heat causes cracks in both.
Intuition breaks both of them.
Heat attracts fugitive action for both.
Music selects the
Waves at which it wishes to revolve round'

At the end,
They.are all .sinners
And, ,the cause is trigonometry.

frank crown
#

I am way too dumb to understand it

fiery junco
#

i love this

toxic panther
# frank crown I am way too dumb to understand it

It's basically about how maths fails in real time.
How love is required for healthy marriage, but mathematically we should be logically every time.
But love isn't logical.
How education cannot be fair.

toxic panther
frank crown
#

I UNDERSTAND IT NOW

#

Its wonderful

toxic panther
real lotus
# toxic panther Transient ataraxia follows The axioms in the sky, Stars beautifully aligned, Pla...

This is a really intriguing experimental piece, the way you mix abstract logic, symbolism, and emotional disruption creates a strong sense of controlled chaos. It feels like you’re deliberately blurring poetry, mathematics, and philosophy, and that fusion gives it a unique identity.

What stands out most is the contrast between order and breakdown: “axioms in the sky,” “planets perfectly round,” and then the sudden shifts into disturbing, grounded imagery. The “widow x / husband y” and “brick x / furnace y” sections are especially interesting, they read like equations turned into human systems, which makes the commentary on logic, society, and meaning feel layered.

The ending lands with a sharp, almost ironic twist, reducing everything to “trigonometry” gives it a nihilistic or satirical edge that lingers after reading.

With a bit of tightening in punctuation and line spacing for clarity, this could become even more powerful, but the concept and voice are already very distinctive and thought-provoking.

toxic panther
real lotus
#

I really appreciate your kind words 😊
I’m happy the feedback helped! Just so you know, this was a brief review, but I also offer more detailed, professional beta reading as a paid service if you ever need deeper notes.

toxic panther
real lotus
#

Alright

toxic panther
#

@rancid sigil

rancid sigil
#

Mann i jus gave this a read

#

WOOOOOOOOWWWWWWW(Yeah im shouting)

#

Its such a deep, reflective theme amd youve captured the essence perfectly

#

Such a masterpiece