I am | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

scarlet yoke Apr 11, 2026, 8:37 PM

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I am a poet,
I am a angel,
I am a fish,
I am a tree,
I am me,

I write day and night in hopes that these paper,
Will carry my heart and body through time,
They may be weak,
They may not make sense,
I will hold them far after the collapse,
Cause I am a poet with no mask,

I touch the clouds and the ground,
Be a distants or not,
I soar among all life,
I have no gods to instruct what's good,
I lay kisses among the unknowns heads,
And when I Lay to rest,
I am a godless angel,

I swim through streams,
Torn fins and no direction set,
I swim from the pacific and Atlantic,
Be my life carry me along these paths,
I am a mere fish,

I reach below the ground and to the heavens,
I will work around the rocks and grow to the sun,
I am a tree,
Burns cover my leaves but I still grow,
Even in winter I stand bold,

And through every life,
Be it a tree fish angel and poet,
I am me

amber narwhal Apr 11, 2026, 8:52 PM

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Your tenses fluctuate throughout the poem.
"These paper" should be either This Paper or These Papers.
In the same stanza, you could add the word BUT before "I will hold them....."
Then remove the comma after Collapse and replace with a full stop / period .

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the next stanza has really strong imagery. but the punctuation is overused .

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the 3rd stanza add "with" before torn fins

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the last 2 lines in the 3rd stanza lack rythm

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the last stanza / add commas when listing

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have the last line as a stand-alone stanza

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@scarlet yoke

scarlet yoke Apr 11, 2026, 9:41 PM

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amber narwhal Your tenses fluctuate throughout the poem. "These paper" should be either This ...

THANK YOU SO MUCH, I wrote this poem yesterday while at the store and I didn't know how to improve it so thank you for telling me my mistakes and how to fix them, thank you

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