Correction

[spice plank]

They marked me as wrong
when I spelled a word backward.
My letters were odd and shapeless
as if a giant inscribed them with a sharp stone.
I thought my fingers were cursed…

I bend and crack my knuckles,
biting my nails under a sky of rain
as I facepalm and grind my teeth.
Eyeballs struggle to spot thin strings of fate.
I twist my wrists in distress.
Moonless nights seeking
for a dangling thread in dreams,
but it seemed to be a cobweb I couldn’t sew.

I glared at my hands like snakes,
hissing at my faulty shadows,
but was it the flaw, that temporary closet
I knelt and prayed until thunder struck
and burned it to ashes?

Or was it a mirror of weakness
I didn’t know how to reflect or point at?
It could’ve been both in a different age surely.
Maybe my spirit that houses my name
was turning the table of insight,
so I can sit upright.

And position myself in a way
that my hands can extend without sweat,
but in doing so I would have to confront
the mirror and wipe with it a gray cloth.
The cloth will act as a lawyer
and smudge it with precise queries.
I’ll tease and tap on its glassy features—
inverting my bright images.

4/9/26

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[acoustic peak]

Damn, the expression feels quite unique to me. The imagery and emotions in this one are awesome.
Goodwork!...

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[gray ridge]

jewzez

im so darn impressed by how you choose your words istg

i'll never know how your head works when you form those sentences but im so so impressed

hell yeah vinny, way to go

[vagrant grail]

You really good at making poems that a lot of people resonate with. Your definitely one of the more talented people in the server

[soft ridge]

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[plain widget]

Not short false advertising I want a refund

Hmmm

[soft ridge]

im typing it down here

ahem

[woven condor]

bless you

[soft ridge]

The poem has a strong emotional core, especially the opening. The image of being marked wrong for writing a word backward immediately creates sympathy and curiosity.
the middle gets a little crowded with physical gestures (cracking knuckles, biting nails, facepalming, grinding teeth, twisting wrists). After a while, they start blending together instead of building on one another.

I like the uncertainty in:

"Or was it a mirror of weakness..."

that's where the poem becomes more reflective and interesting than just describing frustration.

the poem occasionally reaches for abstract ideas before fully developing the image. For example, "spirit that houses my name" and "table of insight" sound intriguing but feel less tangible than the earlier imagery.
the mirror metaphor in the final section has potential, but the lawyer comparison feels a bit sudden. I wasn't entirely sure how the lawyer, cloth, and mirror fit together.
The strongest parts are when the poem stays close to a concrete experience. The further it moves into symbolic language, the more it risks losing clarity.

Overall, it feels like a thoughtful poem about struggling with a perceived flaw and gradually re-examining it, but it could be stronger if it trusted a few key images and let them carry more of the weight.

yeah ts long asf but HEY WHO DOES NOT LIKE A LONG AND HONEST FEEDBACK

[woven condor]

how did you type this much so fast 🥀

young fingers making me feel old

[soft ridge]

LMAO

im pretty fast

im da real chatgpt

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I said that but the server deleted my message cause I said W T F