Me and My Words

[karmic carbon]

The paper listens,
A pen is my voice.
So I cry by writing and
Play with rhymes like toys,

I bleed into words,
It lets my scars heal,
So I write a lot of
Poetry on how I feel.

A book doesn't judge,
Nor does a sheet,
Pages understand ,
They make me complete.

People are cruel,
Except a few,
But poetry is kind ,
Old or new.

So I write my feelings out,
By sentences and poetry,
But if people ask,
No, there is nothing wrong with me.

[rigid sandal]

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[karmic carbon]

@topaz coral , @wary creek , @west thorn , @zenith tree

[wary creek]

wow

I like this

now what you can do is multiply the amount of poems that you read.
and that's it.

[karmic carbon]

On my to do list

Can I get a star?

Trying to get 16

But give me a star only if it's good

My best poems , https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1489527396947333263 , https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1489290814264709140

[lunar perch]

I like how this poem kinda personifies poetry as this reassuring comfort person

This poem kinda has like a blunt feel but I feel like there is an undercurrent of like pain or sadness going into the writing, as evidenced by the last line

[karmic carbon]

Spot on

Remember to give a star pls

[lunar perch]

Sure

Can I tag you on one of my poems?

[west thorn]

Just had to do it.

CAUSE I JUST LOVE IT A LOT

-# Ignore it if it's bad- or my voice is bad

[stray heart]

Ts good, cuh I feel the same way. If I tell ppl, I got rejected by the princess, I AM GONNA GET FLAMED😭 only the paper does not judge, and it is the only place I can bleed into without judgement

[karmic carbon]

Wukong can I get a star pls

I am getting all emojis except star

[karmic carbon]

No your voice is great

[west thorn]

Actually the flow and rhyme and the pauses. God dsmn, everything seemed perfect and good.

Very well penned.

[topaz coral]

AYYY THIS IS GREAT!!!

-# thank me later

[karmic carbon]

Yay

[karmic carbon]

Thanks for the prompt btw

Guys pls star instead of heart I would like to get 16 stars , if it's good , @west thorn , @lunar perch , @wary creek

@stray heart is that a peach

Yes pls ssssssw

[zenith tree]

I’ll notify my followers

[rigid sandal]

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[karmic carbon]

No way

[north cedar]

Wonderful! @karmic carbon has just progressed to level 13!

[karmic carbon]

Thanks

[zenith tree]

Your welcome you only got 2 but now 3 so I thought maybe you would want more support

It won’t let me follow you 🙁

[topaz coral]

lmao npnp

[rigid sandal]

@zenith tree is now following @karmic carbon.

[zenith tree]

there we go

[stray heart]

Yes, become an immortal👍

[west thorn]

Done already!

[stray heart]

Alr

[karmic carbon]

@young marsh

@dim oasis

@undone tapir

[young marsh]

thats me

[karmic carbon]

yes

hola

@young marsh i would like your review

[young marsh]

Idk if ima very good reviewer in terms of poetry techinques but i can give it a shot

The rhyme is tough I love how it helps with the flow

one thing though

So I write a lot of
Poetry on how I feel.

you forgot a hyphen after a lot of -

itd help break it up a bit better

[dim oasis]

This has good form and rhyme but less on the imagery

Still a good poem

[young marsh]

Hey comedy!

[dim oasis]

Henlo cloud

[young marsh]

how are you doing ont hsi fine day

[dim oasis]

Doing very well :3 and you?

[young marsh]

Quite down but lovelyto hear your doing well

[dim oasis]

And why so? It's okay man, if anything let's write those sadness down. Or better yet, let's talk it out if you're feeling a bit chatty, yeah?

[young marsh]

only if ur up for it ;v;

[dim oasis]

My chats are open!

[storm flume]

I'll only say that this is perfect and perfectly relatable!..

[undone tapir]

yoyo gimme a sec

[undone tapir]

quite similar to a WIP of mine, very relatable!

great work

[rigid sandal]

@undone tapir is now following @karmic carbon.

[charred basalt]

I bleed into words,
It lets my scars heal,
So I write a lot of
Poetry on how I feel.

this is a great stanza and all poets can relate and this poem is like an anthem for all poets

[karmic carbon]

No way 11 stars

[karmic carbon]

That is a great review, thanks , and I just forgot about imagery

[karmic carbon]

My favourite too

[karmic carbon]

@ me at It after you finish

[karmic carbon]

Love the review thanks

@calm dirge

[calm dirge]

I’ve seen this mare

Mate

It’s an amazing pie

Poem

GOD DAMMIT

[karmic carbon]

Thanks!!!

Bro did you see my experiment

[calm dirge]

I did I follow you lol

[karmic carbon]

Duck give me a star if it good

[calm dirge]

I did on both

[karmic carbon]

Oh yeahhhh

Kk

[undone tapir]

ofc

[karmic carbon]

Yay

[karmic carbon]

@toxic loom

[karmic carbon]

five more stars

[karmic carbon]

@frozen hemlock

@viral oxide @icy steeple

[upper timber]

Ooow thats so beautiful

Well writen

Loved the feelings

[karmic carbon]

yay yay yay

[ruby dragon]

The final couplet really really works here. I love that sense of a hidden life that writers so often build. If I had to give some feedback it would be maybe try some metaphors for lines like "people are cruel", like what does their cruelty evoke. But that's only if you feel the need to. All in all, great poem!

[karmic carbon]

loved that reply gonna work on that

[dim oasis]

only one more, I gave you one :3

[karmic carbon]

thanks!!!!!

[untold cradle]

I LOVE THIS

[karmic carbon]

yay

[untold cradle]

This is the essence of what a poet truly perceives

Wonderful!

[karmic carbon]

thanks!!!!

leave a star if you like it

[karmic carbon]

@burnt robin

[burnt robin]

3rd line , "cry 'by' writing"
Would it make more sense to be 'from or through.'

2nd stanza get rid of the dash after of and leave it to flow on to the next line.

Overall really nice poem and i love the , almost , gratitude letter , to poetry and to writing. Love the flow. Well done 👏

@karmic carbon

[karmic carbon]

thanks!!