The Unapologetic Miracle

[marsh gale]

The more I ponder a snowflake's fragile uniqueness,
the more I marvel at how
miraculously boundless
this world truly is.

Yet, I envy the snow;
it answers to no one-
as fickle as a summer storm,
it vanishes
without an apology,
nor a trace.

@fickle harness

[fickle harness]

gimme a moment

[marsh gale]

k

[fickle harness]

my discord was crashing lol

i like the imagery

but i feel like it should be a bit more developed

it feels kinda incomplete

[marsh gale]

I feel like it’s over simplified tho

yeah same

I just don’t know what I could add to it

[fickle harness]

im not really good at feedback so

[fresh chasm]

@fickle harness has sent a notification! - @covert creek @shadow path @fervent steppe @lone shale @ruby dew @fervent rose @normal grove @thorny kayak @desert rock

[fickle harness]

these amazing ppl are gonna help you

[marsh gale]

Oo ok I’m new to this sever lol

[fickle harness]

its cool

[fresh chasm]

@fickle harness is now following @marsh gale.

[fickle harness]

now everytime you post i'll be notified

[marsh gale]

oh

wow thanks

[fickle harness]

but you're gonna have to do the / then notify

[marsh gale]

Ohh

I’ve made longer poems but I like this one the most

[fickle harness]

maybe because of the imagery

it's flows well too

[marsh gale]

True

[thorny kayak]

short and crushing, tho it definitely lacks substance because there could be more that you could add. i'm not the best with advice but i think you should hold on to the 'snow' related phrases and build on those ykwim?

but this is a good regardless

[marsh gale]

Thanks and yeah I understand