#A Poem That Refuses to Sit Still

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gaunt raptor
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perfect timing king

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i love this box thing youve done

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ok i love this so much

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its so intresting and captivating

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the structure and the flow is sooo natural

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deff one of your best

late ruin
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Woahahha, using the structure of the poem to convey it! I LOVE IT!

gaunt raptor
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lemme just

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keen kite
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I read this whole thing like i was on gunpoint

gaunt raptor
keen kite
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The last line is not below this.
It’s wherever you stop believing
the poem is still continuing.

At this point I'm gonna dream about this

thorn mural
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this one right?

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halfway through it and thanks for making me realize that i have a hard time reading 'predictable'

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I'll be honest with you

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until meaning isn’t held,
it’s chased.

I saw these two lines and really liked them and thought i could say something on them so i copied them just to be hit with this

And now the poem notices you noticing it.

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so meticulously crafted

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Will read a few times before forming thoughts cause i really like this

plain snow
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Ooo

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This one stands out from your other poems 👀

tight trench
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It's a complicated format for the writer but makes so much sense to the reader
A simple geometric shape turned into a poem. Absolutely spectacular 💕

thorn mural
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This line
knows it's a line flows better (unless the 'it is' not being written together as one was intentional and carries a meaning)

Past becomes present becomes almost. I like this whole sequence and the metaphor of almost where continuous periods are used to further solidify that 'lingers' line, but it feels somewhat empty. The obvious sequence would be future instead of almost but i can guess why you did that (throwback to Did you feel that? That small shift?). However, it still feels a bit jarred and, if im to be rude, pretentious. Okay, it's further expanded on by "predictable poems die quietly on shelves" , but it still does feel weird. It feels as if you're trying to prove a point and make it appear "pretty"(the same thing you criticize) instead of it actually having some meaning.

Somewhere in the middle of this poem
there’s a version of you
reading faster than you should,
stepping over meanings like cracks in a sidewalk,
trying not to fall into—

Honestly, read this quite some times just to find that word that was the whole point and that I supposedly "skipped". I do understand you didn't mean it literally but it feels weird(?), if i may say so. Would've preferred if it actually had a word or a phrase that people usually do skip over as it'd have a bigger "hit" so to speak.

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*until meaning isn’t held,it’s chased.*This is definitely my favorite part of the poem. I know i'll have a different interpretation than the desired one but isn't that what makes it all the more beautiful? For me, and for Rick Riordan whom I've quoted multiple times, meaning (in art) is only found when it's chased. This whole poem, to an eye merely here to skim over it, is useless, and even pretentious. But for those who are actually here to chase the "meaning" and "get lost in the words", this has an infinite universe of interpretations that they can chase before finally finding or in terms of the poem, "holding" the meaning. Really love this line as it aligns with my own ideology and makes me feel smart.

This is collapse.
This is construction at the same time. A sylvia plath ref!?

But notice how it keeps echoinga few seconds longerthan it should. damn beautiful stuff. also loved the word you created lol

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I think i got the gist of it

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good work 🖤

agile light
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is this your way of coming out as gay

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IM CRINE

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THE 100 REACTION

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LOL

thorn mural
agile light
tight trench
late ruin
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/j

young vault
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Bro what I'm confused but still great poem , considering the poem never ends in continuing the poem

thorn mural