#A Matter of Time - Rico

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Maybe we met too late,
or maybe too early…

There’s also the unfortunate possibility
that it was never meant to be —

not before,
not after.

But what if today were the day I find you?
What if the rest of my life
were just a single step away from here?

I wish I could tell you I love you one more time.
I wish I could say your eyes
are the kind I’ll never forget.
I wish I could tell you how much your way of being enchants me…
how completely I got lost in your labyrinth.

I wish you knew
how much I always wanted to be your favorite boy —
the one you would choose to live in,
without fear,
without return.

I don’t know if there’s still time
to run to you
and fall to my knees.

As if time were kind,
as if it waited
for us to get it right.

But I know —
in your own vocabulary,
my actions would always feel like too much.

Maybe, in some second lost in the past,
you would have killed my poetry
for being too intense.

I arrived a second
before you were ready,
and I grew tired in the middle of a whole day
that made me give up waiting.

Now the echo of silence
is almost whole.

At least
it hurts completely.

Loving you was never our fault…
it wasn’t a mistake
nor a lack of feeling —

it was excess.

And the problem is
feeling is a drug…

and excess
never fits
into a single moment.

Sometimes I’m foolish enough
to think
about the versions of us
that arrived at the right time,
that said the right things,

that were where we never were —
in other days,
other clocks,
other lives,

where time
stops being a question.

I don’t know if I could handle
waiting one more second
for your indecision.

I don’t know if my poems would survive
your eyes meeting mine —
mine so belonging,
yours so distant.

I can stay one more day or two,
until tomorrow,
or next week.

Maybe I could die being yours…
without ever knowing.

We can say it’s too late —
or we can try
and hurt ourselves a little more.

Is the one who runs away a coward,
or is the one who abandons dreams
the truly brave one?

I don’t know…

Maybe it was never
a matter of time.

Sometimes…
it’s about to be or not to be,
to die
or to live,
to try
or not to try.

And for you,
I would try again,
and again,
and again —

forever,
beyond that,
beyond myself.

But I think…

it’s already

too little, too late.

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delicate relic
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Thats def one of my best

tender cliff
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i shall then read it

barren gust
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i need to start writing longer pieces like this

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its one of my best poems i want to know

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@cyan sequoia

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More despair for you black cat

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im speechless
this reminds me of the time when i realised i was putting in too much efforts, but it was too late to change it.
and "As if time were kind, as if it waited for us to get it right." is so true.
only if i had enough time to make it all right. sigh.

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pseudo topaz
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This is really really good Rico, wow!

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cyan sequoia
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This one feels more uniform from start, I like the straight forward tone.
Then it takes a contemplative tone, I like that aswell. It's different from your previous narrative poems.
This has a rhythm, I really like this.
This gives more of a, 'Wrong time, right person.'

Overall conclusion, I really like this. I would say, this is one of your best poems, for me. ♡

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tender cliff
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The story aspect is very nice and heart touching, but I think you would benefit from making the lines more dense

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its a try

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oak imp
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This is soo beautiful

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i love the part maybe in some second lost in the past

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you would have killed my poetry for being too intense

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it hits the spot

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i also love the ironic ending part like yk too little too late

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because in earlier stanzas it's about yoy being too much

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so i really love it

delicate relic
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It's just an excuse to feed fear.

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# delicate relic Maybe we met too late, or maybe too early… There’s also the unfortunate possibi...

The rhyming scheme, metaphors and imagery are all on the spot.

I love how it feels like a ballad while being a monologue is awesome! It's tough to capture that essence while following the limitations.

You've given appropriate space for readers to breath through and I feel that it's the most important thing while writing long ones as readers usually skim through it if they don't time to breath and understand the intensity.

As in critiques, I don't have much as the poem is amazing, both emotions wise and grammar wise.

Keep up the good work!...

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midnight sapphire
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⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

sage lotus
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“Loving you was never our fault… it was excess.”