A wound for leverage

[limpid epoch]

@drifting surge I hope you don't mind getting tagged but how about this one? I know that it's long but is there anything else

[drifting surge]

No worries. Is it one poem (both the comments)?

[limpid epoch]

yes

[drifting surge]

" I'll be alone myself facing you,
The whole world would see,"

• You could realistically get rid of the word "myself" as its just clogging up the line , remember to limit use of fluffy words as poems tend to sound better with shorter lines.

"And I don't have a safe space
Not a family that supports,
Sure they're there but confidence they couldn't export"

• something about this sounds a bit (off?)
  Its mainly the use of the "they're there."

Consider rewording it to

"And I don't have a safe space,
Not a family that supports,
But failing to export confidence in me,
Once and for all.

Overall this is a very good, long narrative poem with great emotional depth. Well done for this masterpiece.

[limpid epoch]

thank you very much would appreciate a star and about that safe space part ima try fix it up

[jagged lynx]

Wonderful! @limpid epoch has just progressed to level 1!

[drifting surge]

Dropped a star 😃

[limpid epoch]

how's it now

i wanted to change it a bit

[drifting surge]

That's loads better

Flows nicer

[limpid epoch]

thanks a lot

[azure kindle]

This is beautiful, i love it

[limpid epoch]

thank you would you like to see some of my other poems

[tired edge]

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

[limpid epoch]

thank you so much please leave a star

[jagged lynx]

Wonderful! @limpid epoch has just progressed to level 2!

[tired edge]

You deserve it dear

[limpid epoch]

@opal gorge

[limpid epoch]

@tiny spear

[limpid epoch]

@little sleet

[little sleet]

What more do you need to hear? You already did your part. The flow was clean, the rhythm was nice, reading it was emotionally good!

[limpid epoch]

thank you but do you agree that it should be in sensitive due to the indirect mentions of ||sa||

[little sleet]

If it's an indirect mention then I don't think you'll have to worry about it. Not unless your poem revolves around SA then it's best to move it at the sensitive

[limpid epoch]

alr thanks I'm still unsure is there a way to tag mods or smth

cuz I'd rather stay safe

[little sleet]

There are mods lingering here, you can personally talk to them yourself.

[limpid epoch]

do you know any? I joined recently