The Place You Live

[plush wagon]

The Place You Live
You do not live in a house
dwelling instead in the quiet part of my chest
where my heart slows down
just to listen for you

Even in your absence
you leave warmth behind
like sunlight sitting on skin
long after the sun has set

If anyone ever asks where home is
I will not give them an address
I will give your name

1/14

Part 2: https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1484117625725517975

[fallow herald]

You want comments, and holy crap 14 parts

[plush wagon]

Yeah it was part of a series I wrote for someone for valentines.

[fallow herald]

Keyword was

[plush wagon]

I did one for every day

[fallow herald]

Oh that’s so sweet are you guys together?

Or is it unreturned 🚶‍♂️

[plush wagon]

Yeah, was is a crucial part.
No.
Not anymore.

[fallow herald]

https://tenor.com/view/ouch-not-good-gif-24090231

[plush wagon]

We had our time, now it’s just a memory

[fallow herald]

Honestly I think you should try just more synonyms

Heavier impactful words

Because you have your poem, well written, concise

Now we add FLAVOR

make it pop out - experiment with different meanings

Excited to see the other parts though

[crisp sentinel]

@fallow herald is now following @plush wagon.

[plush wagon]

The Place You Live
You do not live in a house
you dwell in the quiet part of my chest
where my heart slows down
just to listen for you

Even in your absence
you leave warmth behind
like sunlight sitting on skin
long after the sun has set

If anyone ever asks where home is
I will not give them an address
I will give them your name

1/14

[plush wagon]

Tweaked a couple words, I’d have to restructure it if I wanted to change anything else

[fallow herald]

Take your time with it if anything

Sunlight sitting on skin rolls of well btw

Fun line

[plush wagon]

The Place You Live
You do not live in a house
dwelling in the quiet part of my chest
where my heart slows down
just to listen for you

Even in your absence
you leave warmth behind
like sunlight sitting on skin
long after the sun has set

If anyone ever asks where home is
I will not give them an address
I will give your name

1/14

Okay a little less repetitive

[fallow herald]

Change more and add more if need be ((: but it’s ultimately up to you when to stop

[plush wagon]

Okay, I like how it is now. I will keep it like that

[fallow herald]

Helll yeahhh

[plush wagon]

Imma post another one, but I’m not sure if it’s supposed to go in sensitive poems or not. It doesn’t directly reference death or anything, but it is influenced by Icarus

[cobalt vortex]

Wonderful! @plush wagon has just progressed to level 1!

[fallow herald]

If you feel like it’s sensitive then sensitive poetry would be your fit

Doesn’t hurt to play it safe before it gets taken down

[plush wagon]

Okay, I’ll play it safe. Good idea

[fallow herald]

• you can link it for others to see

[plush wagon]

@digital panther

[digital panther]

THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL OMG

[plush wagon]

@proud dune
This is the first one. ☝️

[proud dune]

I like it! It reminds me of that song 'home' I think it's called.
Home is where ever I find you..or something close.
It's cute, hits where it needs. Nice poem! 🌻

Can I ping you in one or two?

[plush wagon]

"home is wherever i'm with you"

[plush wagon]

yeah go for it

[proud dune]

Yes! Ty!

[plush wagon]

I pinged you in another 😂

[edgy geyser]

14 parts too? this is very good work here my friend

[plush wagon]

i was passionate
i thought the person i was writing them for was worth it at the time. we have since then broken up and ive moved on for the most part. as well as one can after being in love

[cobalt vortex]

Wonderful! @plush wagon has just progressed to level 4!

[edgy geyser]

I admire you my friend

[crisp sentinel]

@edgy geyser is now following @plush wagon.

[edgy geyser]

ima follow

[plush wagon]

i appreciate it, i can @ you in my most recent if you would like to see what ive been doing lately

[edgy geyser]

sure

[edgy geyser]

can i ping u in a piece too?