I Can’t Hold

[icy pulsar]

I feel it in my fingertips,
It creeps in the dark,
What was meant to be
hidden in the shadows,
But no can do,
Is what I try to tell myself,
Leave it behind,
But it creeps in my chest.
So tight, so fragile,
Lashing out isn’t meant to happen.
It’s harder to breathe out,
All I’ve learned was to breathe in.

Why, why, why
Have I done this again?
It’s cold and heavy.

How do I fix it, how do I control it?
I can’t.

It’s meant to be fixed,
It’s meant to be controlled.

Why is it so hard,
Why is it a failure,
Falling through my own thoughts
As it slips away.

Nyxa/Misa

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Niceeeeeeeee

[icy pulsar]

@obtuse dome @dull wraith
@fleet shore

[icy pulsar]

REALLY??! thank you ><

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YESSSSS KEEEP IT UP✨

[icy pulsar]

AWWWEEE THANK YOU THANK YOU ILL DO MY BEST !!!

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I will wait for your next poetry

[icy pulsar]

wait wait really?!

AWWW

that’s so sweet

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Yesssssssssssssssssssssss

We can even make poetry together after two months cuz i am having exams rn

[icy pulsar]

OMG YESSS

we def should and good luck w your exams, I also have em😔

[brave aurora]

*we def should and good

luck w your exams,

I also have em😔*

- Nyxa

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BEST OF LUCKKKKK FRIEND

[icy pulsar]

BEST OF LUCK TO U TOO FRIENDO

[dull wraith]

"Falling through my own thoughts
as it slips away"

Best line

[icy pulsar]

AWWW THANK YOU I RANDOMLY GOT THE IDEA

@undone pecan

[undone pecan]

"I feel it in my fingertips
it creeps in the dark
what was meant to be
hidden in the shadows" - very tactile, very eerie introduction here which I very much loved.

"But no can do,
is what I try to tell myself
Leave it behind
But it creeps in my chest." - the eerieness continue and escalates by the alliteration of try to tell. and also it creeps in my chest very eerie imagery. i love it.

"So tight, so fragile
Lashing out isn't mean to happen" - this set of lines are so fire bro.

"it's harder to breath out,
All I've learned was to breath in" - this was the best line bro ong. it's like saying, it's harder to express, you only learned to bottle in.

"why why why
have i done this again?
it's cold and heavy" - repetition is alright. cold and heavy nice addition.

"How do i fix it, how do I control it?
i can't" - great line. i like the straightforwardness of it.

"it's meant to be fixed
it's meant to be controlled" - I like the repetition

"Why is it so hard,
why is it a failure
falling through my own thoughts
as it slips away" - damn. that ending fits the whole poem's theme. so relatable ong

[icy pulsar]

AWWWEE thank you very much I appreciate your feedback very much <3

[unreal charm]

@icy pulsar, you can't follow yourself!

[icy pulsar]

Wrong thingy