the child in me

[lyric rain]

a bed made of clouds
is a heart made of joy
is a mind made of rides
is a cot made of toys

a box made of melodies
is a soul made of land
is a body made of remedies
is a pane made of sand

a gift made of glitter
is a spirit made of pie
is a self made of flickers
is a roof made of sky

[tawdry garnet]

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[plucky obsidian]

That third bit has some elite whimsy to it I'd love to see another... whaaaat are they called stanzas or something... whatever 1 or 2 more after the pie bit to tie in something personal to you. Something someone else couldn't include ya know. A grandmothers kiss, an uncles laugh, a goofy childhood pet, etc etc you get it.

Note: I never want a comment to come off as a harsh critique. The fact any of us put anything into words is silly and important in all the best ways. You're a beast keep going!

[lyric rain]

yeah i can see that :3 i’m always open to critique

[errant bear]

I very much love the child-like tone you were reaching here.
I will keep this simple, too!

The stanza that made me smile the most was the second one. :D

is a soul made of land 
is a body made of remedies 
is a pane made of sand```

Lovely poem!