The Noise in My Mind

[quasi mesa]

The Noise in My Mind

Some people are dead,
Some are killed,
Some are alive —
But some don’t want to live.

Some are happy with their lives,
Some are sad,
Some are angry —
But there are people like me who don’t want to feel.

Who just want to go far,
Far from others,
Even from their own mother,
Where no one dares to bother.

They say, “Think before you do anything,”
But my thinking kills me when I try to do something.
Everyone wants to be the king —
But I just want silence within.

@Gau_Rab

[radiant sleet]

i think some parts are a little long and throw off balance,the fourth sentance from the second set of lines could be for example shortened a little, taking out the like me and maybe replacing people with some, as people already assume your likely talking from expierence and its about you. Stuff liek that if it makes sense, alot of free verse poems tend to rely on emotional depth and rythem in the syllables