Everlasting

[fair bronze]

Shall the tide run low.
May your heart grow cold.
But admits the past, one thing shall remain.
Flowers blossom and the sun blooms.
As the moon, wild and free, picks and wilts.
One after another, days on end.
Comforting, yet cold…
Then shall the tide return, stronger then before…

[deft sedge]

I really really loved it it's pretty
You chose a pretty theme

And your questioned answered-

Chose more precise verbs
Poetry lives or dies on verbs that's what I usually tell myself yk?

Anddd I'd say end the poem on your strongest line! People usually reread it then

I do have to say I LOVE UR POETRY

Like gen it's really mwah mwah

[summer sun]

rly pretty!! I would also say using more specific words to create a certain mood/feeling for the overall poem. I also think you don’t need to use that much punctuation, you can just use more meaningful line breaks but that’s js a personal preference. Sooo pretty and lush tho! ^^

[naive citrus]

Ive never thought of the sun "blooming" and I really like that illustration because it reminds me of a sunrise. It comes and go's or "picks and wilts" . Really my favorite part!