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lethal sluice
You write so beautifully
lofty junco
I like this a lot 
It feels very personal and intimate, but I can’t quite make out what it’s about. That’s not a bad thing necessarily, many poems aim to convey only an emotion and not a story. I’m just curious about the line—
What would this fellow have caused,
Had I not surfaced around him?
Would it have not killed —
The innocence inside him
—I’m not entirely sure what it means.
Regardless, the poem to me is about the comfort of apathy or staying stationary in life and the and need to move forward, out of your comfort zone, and into a better place. Using the day and night to represent light and darkness is interesting. It implies a kind of consistent pattern in the speaker’s mood, which I do not strongly relate to but I know a few people who seemingly would. Your meter is smooth and your rhymes are pretty good 
I did get momentarily tripped by the word motif towards the end, but I’m not the quickest reader and it’s common for me to get stuck on things. All in all, you did a good job! Yay 
teal karma
You write so beautifully
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