Chapter One of an epic poem I'm writing. Currently unnamed.
#The Journey, Part One
jade comet
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thorny pond
Chapter One of an epic poem I'm writing. Currently unnamed.
Is this going to be something epic in scale?
jade comet
I'm only a fifth of the way done, so I suppose so.
thorny pond
I'm only a fifth of the way done, so I suppose so.
What's it about?
jade comet
An old war automaton that wakes up and wants to go home.
thorny pond
An old war automaton that wakes up and wants to go home.
That a good concept. And genuinely, this is very good, at least to the mordern poems I read. I'm glad that you didn't take the free verse route for a poem this large, it gives the verse a definite structure. I've seen people give prose with line breaks as poems. But this is not that. This is fantastic.
Anything that inspired you?
jade comet
I don't like war, and I think war machines deserve a story just like their human counterparts. A kind of story that outlives itself.
thorny pond
I don't like war, and I think war machines deserve a story just like their human...
Cool, your prose are also quite good. It's already a fair and beautiful poem, but if you feel upon learning more of it then perhaps you can read other poems like Lamia by John Keats. It's also in the same AA, BB, rhyming verse.