#SKELETØN

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blazing basalt
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I wanna be a skeleton, I could get rid of that brain.
If I had no skin, I would never feel pain.
I would rot alone, sitting in the rain,
rotting to the point, I would never be the same.

All I ever wanted was to be a skeleton,
Starving myself til I'm finally thin,
At least I would not remember her every min,
I would feel lighter without the weight of that skin.

Loneliness without awareness would not feel sad,
Responsibilities won't matter when I'm dead.
I would not have anxiety without that stupid head,
I wouldn't exist so I would never be mad.

Ooh, I'm tired of existence,
When I won't feel, I would never lack resistance.
And I won't need to rush, I'd never be late,
I would never have to walk, outside that gate.

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If you read this please rate it out of 10!!!

verbal spoke
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A 9 for me, I really like this line "loneliness without awareness would not feel sad" so, so true.

blazing basalt
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Thankss!!!

fiery sapphire
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Great poem, it also has a great rhyme scheme. I would also like to applaud you for having such great opening sentence, it truly is. The first sentence plays such pivotal role as this will either catch the readers attention or not, I'd rate this a solid 8 out of 10, keep going !! this

lament timber
fresh plank
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The rhyme scheme has me on the edge of my seat absolute masterclass its even better if you read 1st stanza in a rhyme and 2nd as a rap. NAILED IT 👏

blazing basalt
blazing basalt
fresh plank
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Imagine singing this and in the 2nd stanza bg is rain pouring

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Followed by a simple strumming pattern not too loud just soft as the wind

blazing basalt
fresh plank
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I definitely feel like making a cover (idk if the band will let me tho 🤣) but man 10/10 i haven't read such a masterpiece in a while absolutely made my day kudos

blazing basalt
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TYSM, this made my dayy!!!🥹

grand flare
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Its a very good poem. Personally it is very touching to me 10/10 keep it up🥹🔥

blazing basalt
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💗🥹

lament timber
# blazing basalt I wanna be a skeleton, I could get rid of that brain. If I had no skin, I would ...

Being a skeleton sounds good
No worries, no doubts and no need for food!
But have you thought of this:
A skeleton is meant to fade
No purpose but to feed the ants and the termites.
Sure! You can rot in the rain
And not feel pain...
Man i wanna tell you that life is all about pain.
Pain is not bad
Theres nothing to feel sad
Pain is an anchor,
It keeps you human
Remember, a man with no pain only get weaker.

Sure, loneliness without awareness would not feel sad
But being a skeleton with no purpose is just mad.

And i understand you wanna shed your skin and feel lighter,
But ill tell you
your skin aint a burdern
Its your identity

This aint a poem
Not meant for battle
Its just a friend's reply
To that child in you that want to cry
Sure, life is unfair and it is frickin sad
But remember, life can be bad
It can be worse
But life can never be worst
Lets stop worring and live our lives so good
That death dreads and to take it from the world

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Hehe i just gave it a try. Seeing things from the better side

wraith mapleBOT
blazing basalt
lament timber
blazing basalt
wraith mapleBOT
gentle badger
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Damn bro. It's so so amazing. I can't get rid of it.

blazing basalt
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TYSM!!

lament timber
young parrotBOT
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