#One must imagine Sisyphus happy

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crude kayak
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They said the work was all in vain,
the same hill, stone, the same old strain.
The mountain listened, said no word.
The world stayed quiet, unconcerned.

He knew the end before the start,
no prize awaited, no restart.
Still every day, with steady hands,
he pushed the weight he understands.

The stone fell down.
The rules stayed true.
The task reset.
The meaning too.

But walking back, without a lie,
he smiled beneath the empty sky.
Not hope. Not faith.
Just this clear view:
Nothing matters,
so I choose to.

gleaming mountain
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Omggg absolutely great, I love this imagining of Sisyphus and his punishment, very creative

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Rhyming gives a great rhythm, and the poet gives a great message, great job gal, keep slaying ✨ ✨ 🔥 🔥

crude kayak
gleaming mountain
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polar sandal
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Very well put together piece. It's somewhat relatable as well

placid ivy
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But I would say it has a bit more potential.
First, I'm a bit confused about the line "the meaning too".
Since there really is none.
Maybe you couldve written "The same anew" or something like that.

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Furthermore, there are many more aspects, which I meant with "more potential"

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Or I guess you could put them in a different poem

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For example more as to why he is happy

crude kayak