Wrong Song (Sestina)

[upbeat hare]

Sestina, I had to repost because last time the image order was messed badly

[flint crow]

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[upbeat hare]

Had to delete it

But its back on

[pearl stream]

This is too good to be deleted bro😭
Great poem

[upbeat hare]

Thanks, I just had to put up again because of images were in wrong order in last post

[pearl stream]

I know that pain😔

[upbeat hare]

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[coral oak]

Thats amazing!

[flint crow]

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[upbeat hare]

Thanks

[coral oak]

ofcc

[opal orchid]

Really leads to a great meaning and is really relatable 😊

[upbeat hare]

Thanks 🌹

[hearty mesa]

Show not tell

[upbeat hare]

Ita a sestina

[upbeat hare]

Its a narrative, and it shows through POV

Its for a reason choosen this form

I change styles on which I think may suit best to

[hearty mesa]

Yeah, but in any form of poetry imagery is still a big part, especially in a narrative one, even especially in poetry

You have potential but yeah, its more prosaic, which is fine contemporary poets tend to do that. But Every line has to either work more than itself and serve others, or serve others that feels more than just itself

Keep it up!

I've noticed this is also a confessional poem? From the label… I suggest you read plath, or Robert Lowell and Anne Sexton, their one of the pioneers of confessional modern poetry.

You would enjoy them!

Ironic since the poems are disturbing lol