Wrong Song (Sestina)

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[lusty blade]

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[lone lance]

I really enjoyed the metaphor and imagery but you’re missing a stanza. It’s six stanzas and the envoi, this has five and the envoi.

[lusty blade]

No there are six

And one evoi

[lusty blade]

Wait I forgot to add it

In pic

[lone lance]

That’s what I assumed

Your other sestina was good in all aspects

[lusty blade]

Yeah I have it

The thrid original stanza is missing

[lusty blade]

Third stanza forgot to add this one

[lusty blade]

I will say truth its too easy to write sestina

[lusty blade]

I was originally gonna write a sestina on ants but I heard a song and my memories came back(bad one)

[novel lava]

I wish I could comment but I know nothing about sestina.

Nor vinelle.

[lusty blade]

Search online

[lusty blade]

@jagged steeple

Its the second image

Before going to third one

[lusty blade]

But at least enjoy the poem, its quite good

[stuck creek]

wait yami im confused, 1st & 2nd image are the exact same stanzas

[lusty blade]

How?

Man what has happened

These images are messed up

Let me share in comments

[stuck creek]

oh noo ;-; its ok man 🫂

[lusty blade]

Wait i am sharing

[lusty blade]

Try now

[lusty blade]

Hey listen

[stuck creek]

ok yay it's great!!

[lusty blade]

@steel briar

[lusty blade]

Thanks, I actually wrote the real story

[steel briar]

Yes?

[lusty blade]

Are you a Pakistani or urdu speaker?

[steel briar]

Lowk yea

[lusty blade]

Wanna join a urdu poetry server?

I got some good urdu poetry

Want to read

[steel briar]

I mean I can talk in urdu

But I can't recognise Urdu letter

[lusty blade]

Can you read urdu?

[steel briar]

I born in Pakistan and later moved in US

[lusty blade]

Oh if written in English urdu

[steel briar]

Ofc

[lusty blade]

Right

[lusty blade]

Ok come in server

[steel briar]

Inv in dm

[lusty blade]

We have specific urdu server

[steel briar]

Cool

[lusty blade]

Yeah

We startes it just

You wanna recite it Phillip @naive vine

[naive vine]

@lusty blade you have some impressively sharp-eyed critics, with @stuck creek catching the unwanted repetition of stanzas 1 and 2, and @lone lance catching the stanza missing.

[lusty blade]

I really forgot to add them but thank God they helped me to know

[lusty blade]

Yeah they are good

[lusty blade]

Do share your thoughts, On how you find the sestina, it's a real event

[icy lichen]

*Do share your thoughts, On

how you find the sestina,

it's a real event*

- yami4876

[lusty blade]

@violet pike

This piece is close to reaching in the star board, I wonder who would other guys to put this on star board

[naive vine]

@lusty blade , does one of these messages contain the whole sestina, title, all of the stanzas, no duplicated stanza, and the envoi?

[lusty blade]

@tawdry hill

[lusty blade]

First image contain the first two stanzas and other whole then is in message

[lusty blade]

There is message limit to how much I can write in a single message

[naive vine]

Yes, that is one drawback of the server, though I understand the benefit of limiting each individual message.

[lusty blade]

No its not server, its discord whole policy

[naive vine]

Do you ever post poems outside the server? Some folks use Google doc links.

[lusty blade]

No message more than 2000 words, or use nitro

[lusty blade]

No, I am still honing my skills, I want to be this work to get recognized by others but social media algorithm is too harsh

If I can get my server followers to follow my insta or other social media maybe I can

@deep zenith