To Echo.

[white cedar]

The writer of the sonnet loves Echo, yet Echo loves Narcissus whom she will never be loved by because he loves himself.

[harsh pulsar]

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[white cedar]

@tall solar

[spare chasm]

Hey man. Sadly, my exams are too close, so I won't be able to read this.

But let me try and make this up for you.

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[spare chasm]

Hi guys. This fellow is one of the few people I follow. I'm sure you'll like the pieces he produces 🙂

[white cedar]

I have woken up from eternal slumber

[white cedar]

It's alright! I have to go and write an essay now actually, so I sympathise. 💀

[white cedar]

Thank you very much 🙏

[white cedar]

A painting by John William Waterhouse which aided me

[median wyvern]

woah

This is amazing

I love sonnets and this one does not disappoint

[harsh pulsar]

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[white cedar]

Thank you; I appreciate it very much 🙏

I seldom reference mythology—I usually make most of my references to Shakespeare—but I am trying to read more mythology and write more poetry based on it

This particular sonnet was quite inspired by Keats

[tall solar]

almost thought u departed from meter in the "ere.. cursed thee" line, then noticed the accent on e 😂

this one's an interesting piece. I don't rly see a volta here, since the mention of narcissus seems to follow the same line of thought as line 8. the narrator mentions being distressed, then explores cause of aforementioned distress. The exclamatory marks in the first couple of lines could be substituted with commas or periods without compromising meaning, coz rn they're pushing the piece towards being a bit melodramatic.

line 2 feels grammatically off ("eyes.. looks?"), but i could be mistaken there.

apart from these few minor gripes, this one's a great piece, fam. good job.

[white cedar]

😂

Yeah, it is Shakespearean so no obvious volta

More of a resolution that it will be for eternity in the couplet

[tall solar]

shakespearean typically does have a volta on line 9, no?

[white cedar]

The heavy use of exclamation marks are as it is quite an explosive little burst of simultaneous love and stress (the speaker loving Echo; Echo loving Narcissus; Narcissus loving himself)

[white cedar]

Either there or before the couplet

Mine is at the couplet—a more tamed volta

Eyes...looks is wrong mb

I revised it; sorry about that I should've read it over

I had to make a little revision to line iv too (tender became soft; in brooks became like a brook)

Revision: