#Falter

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kindred lichen
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I look in the mirror and see the verdict already passed.
Everywhere I go, I’m outmatched, faces better built, lives easier lived.
I don’t even compete anymore
I just exist in comparison,
a background character in a world that never notices me.

I tried. I struggled. I reached anyway.
Effort didn’t close the gap, it just pointed out where I stand.
The prettier, stronger ones rise effortlessly,
while I rot inside a body that was never chosen.

This is the truth I swallow.
Cold. Bitter. Permanent.
Not tragedy, not injustice, just reality.
I am invisible, and the world is not sorry for it.

(I am very happy about my life btw, I just took inspiration from those who opened up to me, hearing them talk about their lives inspired me to write a poem about how they feel)

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plain zinc
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I really liked this poem!
It's quite direct and very nice to read

knotty jayBOT
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*I really liked this

poem! It's quite direct and

very nice to read*

- kvkokay
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nocturne iris
kindred lichen
# nocturne iris do you worry that it trivializes the experiences of people with depression to fl...

I understand the concern, my poem expresses a feeling, not a universal truth. It’s meant to capture the intense frustration, bitterness, and hopelessness that can come from constantly being overlooked or outmatched, not to say that anyone’s worth is fixed or that depression is reducible to inferiority. The “Faltering” tone is a way of venting emotion and exploring that darkness, not prescribing it as reality for anyone. Or am I not understanding the question correctly?

nocturne iris
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a harmful, incorrect thought pattern

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of course, it’s totally fine to depict that—it depends on what your goal is for the poem

kindred lichen
# nocturne iris of course, it’s totally fine to depict that—it depends on what your goal is for ...

Yeah, exactly. My goal wasn’t to promote it or say it’s true, it’s just me trying to put into words the raw feelings people shared with me, the frustration and despair they go through. It’s like holding up a mirror to a storm, the poem isn’t telling anyone they have to live in it, it’s just showing how violent and all consuming it can feel. I wanted to capture that intensity, not claim it as reality

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nocturne iris
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i’d be interested in seeing a poem more about how you (impersonally of course) feel about these things ppl have shared with you and what that has to do with the world

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actually as uncomfortable as these sentiments are, expressing them through poetry is rather cliche at this point

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I do think the progression through the three stanzas is strong

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have you ever written verse?

kindred lichen
kindred lichen
nocturne iris
nocturne iris
kindred lichen
nocturne iris
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so you might write with a certain meter (number of syllables in a line) or a certain “foot” (it’s just what the term is called lol), like trochaic

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trochaic for example means your metric foot is a trochee which is stressed-unstressed. two parts

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MO-tion OF the O-cean

kindred lichen
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it's

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long

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like

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long

nocturne iris
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this one? I read it

kindred lichen
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it's about my

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life

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wim

nocturne iris
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link me

kindred lichen
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