#Gliding In Hazel Mazes

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open mauve
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the hazel maze prowled a drawl
the bushes sway enthralled
kaleidoscopic mania behind me
In atmospheric dreams you'll find me.

it moulds new visions, crafts new paths
makes me glide and makes eyes bath.
fingers thread the paper as it flips
and in flight I find acidic trips.

portals that i thought were empty,
gave me light, and made me float gently.
and in this dimension, I found peace,
a realm of hope, a realm in ease.

vague monolithBOT
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open mauve
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@candid copper @marble light @waxen wagon @warped talon @quiet elbow @dull rampart

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tough condor
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Hello

open mauve
dull rampart
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Hail Unto thee

open mauve
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oh wait i double pinged you sorry

tough condor
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Ooo this is good
However you used the most difficult word for me to pronounce lol

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Can not pronounce kaleidoscope to save my life

open mauve
dull rampart
tough condor
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The only thing I'll say about this, is 2nd stanza , 3rd line, I feel like the comma disrupts the flow
Maybe consider putting the "as it flips" on the following line

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@open mauve aaaaaa

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THANK YOU

open mauve
tough condor
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No worries Dave !
I love your poetry but im dyslexic, less of the kaleidoscope 🤣

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I'm only joking by the way

dull rampart
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This realm thou liked,
Oh my, me too,
So now we'll write,
In Eternity's hue.
Shalt we,
Aye we shall....

open mauve
tough condor
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Tahabro and he's comments really make me smile, the way he rhymes all his comments 😄

dull rampart
open mauve
dull rampart
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And Aye,
Lend me some of thine enchanted time,
For I shalt

subtle shadow
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This is so good, great work!

open mauve
dull pine
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It’s a good poem,truly but can you explain it to me please,there are some words I don’t understand

open mauve
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so immersed it feels like your high

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@raw willow

raw willow
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As a person who reads books for a living

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This

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Is amazing

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It definitely describes

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What u wanted to

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The feeling of

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Being the story

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Well written bro

open mauve
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i appreciate it bro

raw willow
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Proud of u gangalang

dull pine
limpid karma
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The atmosphere is doing a lot but you balance it well with clarity when it matters. The maze aspects make it feel like your wandering through someone's inner world with the finale grounding out the rest. It feels complete.