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[noble locust]

"He saved her from her own knife" I GASPED LIKE SO LOUD

OMGGGG

THAT WAS DELICIOUS

[spring relic]

BAHAHAHA

THANKS SO MUCH GURLLL

[noble locust]

YOUR WELCOME

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CAN'T BELIEVE I GOT A GASP JS FROM MA POEMMM

[noble locust]

YES A BIG GASPP

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hehehe

[sonic pumice]

This was just beautiful

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thank you so muchh

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@remote crescent

[desert plover]

I just woke up and saw this
Eyes blessed

[spring relic]

lolz omggg that made me so happy haha thank youu

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@onyx zenith

[untold dove]

BEAUTIFULLLLLL

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THANK YOUU
would appreciate a star thankss

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@sick maple

[sick maple]

yes lemme read it

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thank youuu

[tacit python]

Another nobody masterpiece as always.. this is beautifully written, I like the rythming.. keep it up!!

[cerulean eagle]

Wonderful! @tacit python has just progressed to level 5!

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thank youu

[onyx zenith]

This is so good and really creates emotion whilst reading.

In the last stanza "a man who erased pain" - to make it feel more personal and pack a more emotional punch, you could add the word "her" after "erased."

[hazy goblet]

@untold dove is now following @spring relic.

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thank you so muchhh buh he erases all pain not js mine lolz I like to keep it that way but I get what u mean thank youu

[placid mortar]

Aye, Stahp it. Every time you drop bangers i get all up in my feelings and inspired 😭 its indeed a great one

[rigid solstice]

I approve

I saw a grammatical error though

“She” should be capitalized

other than that good job I like the ornate design

[sick maple]

this is pure admiration
like there’s no confusion, no mixed signals, just a girl speaking about someone who feels like safety, healing, and light. that uncomplicated devotion makes this poem feel warm and sincere

lines like “changed galaxies and moved the moon” or “saved the planet’s demise / by bringing his light” reflect the depth of the feelings

for me, my favorite strongest stanza is the fourth one
“She fell—she drowned deep,
but oh how she’d let him keep
her heart, her soul, her life,
he saved her from her own knife.”

it’s the first place where the poem dips into darkness and that gives the devotion real stakes. it makes your love feel earned not just idealized and i really appreciate what you did here

genuinely a soothing poem to read!

[spring relic]

ima js do dis lolz thx