Ecliptic yearning

[lost frost]

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[tulip vigil]

Wpw😭😭

[scarlet fossil]

[tulip vigil]

Tragic romance?

Fav genre

The title wow

[scarlet fossil]

yer life is horrible lolz

[scarlet fossil]

yeah

[scarlet fossil]

I wrote like a guy version of it can I tag u

[tulip vigil]

I can understand

[tulip vigil]

Yess go ahead

[scarlet fossil]

hope things work out for u

[undone grove]

What happened!?!? Is it about the same person you wrote about yestredsyy?… this is beautiful, and so well put..

[tulip vigil]

Well
Have a loving gf now so

[scarlet fossil]

let's js say I've been bawling my eyes for idk how long also thanksss

[scarlet fossil]

awhh

[tulip vigil]

Blessed after 8 ducked years

Tag me there

[scarlet fossil]

lolz

[scarlet fossil]

did

[tulip vigil]

[scarlet fossil]

@vale solstice heree

[vale solstice]

He's lucky enough to have someone like you, you jsut are just too perfect 💔

[scarlet fossil]

he's better dude he can cook and I can't

lolz

I'm so trash

[undone grove]

Please don’t tell me something bad happened, those poems were so adorable, made me set the bar to that kind of love.. don’t make me lose faith😭

[scarlet fossil]

lolz nth happeneddd.. js yk u get really sad when u realize what u want might not happen.. it hurts super bad.. and yeah.. but in sha allah things work out that's the only thing I can say now and if it doesn't in sha allah he'll meet someone better

[undone grove]

I’ll pray for you two..

[scarlet fossil]

jazakallah khairan

[vale solstice]

CAP!

[scarlet fossil]

compared to him

now it's believable

[scarlet fossil]

did u read #1441600762819121343

[vale solstice]

Nahhh u are better in ur own way

[vale solstice]

yep

[scarlet fossil]

I hope lols

[scarlet fossil]

thanksss

[undone grove]

I did in a rush, wasn’t enough to give feedback, I’m going to a class now, I’ll read again after that..

[scarlet fossil]

thank youu

[vale solstice]

istgosh if something happens between u both.. I will never believe in love again.

[undone grove]

Exactlyy, I’m saying there’s no less or more, you both are better in your on ways, you compliment his he does yours..

Might have messed up spelling

[sour storm]

Okay this is a very raw piece and I love it, maybe you could add a bit more rhyme but honestly love it, good job ❤️

[scarlet fossil]

lolz noooo.. if not in this life then the after life in sha allah

[undone grove]

Same

[scarlet fossil]

nooo u didn't that made me happy thanks u both

[scarlet fossil]

if not dunya then akhira

in sha allah

[scarlet fossil]

thank you so muchhh would appreciate a star

[sour storm]

Of course, you deserve it ❤️

[scarlet fossil]

you deserve..
.
⠀⠀🌸🌷🌸🌷🌸🌷🌸
⠀⠀⠀ 🌸🌷🌸🌷🌸
⠀⠀⠀Λ🌷🌸🌷🌸🌷
⠀⠀ ( ˘ ᵕ ˘🌷🌸🌷
⠀⠀⠀ヽ つ＼⠀ ／
⠀⠀⠀ UU⠀/ 🎀 \

for your kindness today js know you've cheered up a broken heart and that means a lot so thank you I hope your life is full of good memories and happy times

[lost frost]

@scarlet fossil is now following @sour storm.

[sour storm]

Aww please don't mention. I am just giving my honest reviews to wonderful people like you. May you have a beautiful day ahead

And hi, as in Muslim community

[tulip vigil]

Can u take a look at mine?

[sour storm]

Of course!

[tulip vigil]

I will tag u there

[sour storm]

For sure! :).

[scarlet fossil]

ooo an ukhti?? as salaam alaikummm may Allah subhuhanahu was ta Allah bless your life ameen

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@rocky dragon @eager marsh @modern torrent

@odd belfry @pulsar crane @red hare

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[silent shore]

Shi so beautiful that I almost started dreaming about a girl like this for me

[scarlet fossil]

awhhh hopefully you'll meet her

[silent shore]

It's impossible

[scarlet fossil]

@dusty onyx @paper crow @safe silo

[scarlet fossil]

can't beeee

there are girls and guys that love deeply lolz

for me I'm prolly js messed up

he deserves better and I'm not dat

[wet scroll]

This showed me that I am not the only one longing for love but the poem is great and amazing

[paper crow]

“you made each breath feel like a gift, not a burden” and “you cleared my fog of each lie” now these are powerful imagery to make us feel the yearning and the aching sincerity of this poem. the way you describe falling, not as something accidental but as something you chose, like a dive, a search, a risk you took with your whole chest is genuinely beautiful and a really made me feel in my chest when i read it

[tulip vigil]

@paper crow can u critique two of mine?

[paper crow]

sure!

[tulip vigil]

Will tag there

[scarlet fossil]

trust me there are many lolz

[scarlet fossil]

awhhh thank you so muchhh

[scarlet fossil]

please leave a star thank you

[scarlet fossil]

btw I hope it all works out for you

@thick field @pastel galleon

[red hare]

“you made each breath feel like a gift, not a burden” god that’s one of the most beautiful things one person can do for another. you put into words that feeling of being lighter just bc they existed near you🥹

[scarlet fossil]

yeah.. not near me he's in a far away country but js knowing he exists is enough of a reason to making living worth it lolz thank you so muchh

[wet scroll]

I pray the same for you but I think I don't need love

I am happy as I am

[scarlet fossil]

awh that's nice and thank you lolz you lucky u can be that

[wet scroll]

Tho not happy but I am self aware of love and it's consequences

[scarlet fossil]

... yeah that made it sad and worse but I hope it still gets better

[wet scroll]

🫂 I also hope all your problems vanish

[scarlet fossil]

yeap in sha allah

[undone grove]

Okay earlier I was more concerned about the situation also was kinda busy but didn’t really appreciate the words..“You made each breath feel like a gift, not a burden” “each step feel like a reward for everything hard that breaks me”
Those lines are so real and deep, and better than any compliments like another ‘Oh to be acknowledged’ like this moment..

[undone grove]

Also my spelling was indeed wrong here, I meant complement not compliment lol

[scarlet fossil]

thank youu so muchhh

[scarlet fossil]

lolz my eyes blind

[scarlet fossil]

.

@undone grove

feedback when u can

[tulip vigil]

@scarlet fossil are u busy? If not me and yohan did a collab
If u could take a look at that-

[scarlet fossil]

ofccc omw

@tame bison

[undone grove]

I’ll do it noww, there were so many to feedback🥹

[scarlet fossil]

lolz understandable but thank youi

youu

[tame bison]

Masha Allah

[scarlet fossil]

ameen wa iyyaka

thanks

[sour storm]

Yes sista, ameen and same for you

[scarlet fossil]

[pulsar crane]

Thats an amazing poem, sorry i kinda skimmed over it this time to be honest because im doing some coding atm but from what i can tell its really emotional and hits on that longing that happens when one meets another that they truly love. I can give a bit more comprehensive feedback when im done with my code though

Also sorry i didnt see it earlier lol, 5:40am is a bit early for me 😂

[spring totem]

is it meant to be in lower case

[scarlet fossil]

yeah

bc it's not gullstopt

*fullstop

sorry abt thattt

[spring totem]

your good I meant if it held any

symbolism

or emotional significance

i’d take the 2nd ‘for’ and put it on the last line

greater emotional impact

in poetry you want your lines to be their own lines while simultaneously relying on the last line

you don’t wanna only rely on the previous line as if you’re writing a book

@scarlet fossil did you want it to rhyme

[scarlet fossil]

OOOO

[scarlet fossil]

MA'AM YES MA'AM

🫡

I MEAN SIR

I JS CHECKED THE BIO

[spring totem]

your good dw

[scarlet fossil]

AND SAW THE TAGS

SOREY

[scarlet fossil]

not much

like js a bit

iykyl

[spring totem]

ah ok because i had some suggestions for some lines you could rhyme

[regal helm]

*ah ok because

i had some suggestions for

some lines you could rhyme*

- chicaneries

[spring totem]

but it’s not that big of a deal

[spring totem]

what

[scarlet fossil]

ima post one that rhymes today later can I tag you innit

[scarlet fossil]

yeshh

[spring totem]

ofc i’ll be happy to read it

[scarlet fossil]

lolz

[scarlet fossil]

THANK YOU THAT IS VERY KIND OF YOU SIR

[spring totem]

overall I love the poem, one of the best I read in a while, remember that EVERYTHING in poetry is considered of equal importance; every placement of the word, every capitalized or lowercase letter, every time you repeat a word, every time you increase, decrease, or remain the same lines in stanzas, everything

i can’t wait to read more

[scarlet fossil]

I'm so really happy you love itttt

[scarlet fossil]

thennn could we follow each other

[lost frost]

@scarlet fossil is now following @spring totem.

[scarlet fossil]

that way I won't have to add u to the list of ppl to ping lolz

[regal helm]

*that way I won't have

to add u to the list of

ppl to ping lolz*

- nobody

[scarlet fossil]

YESHHH

I can wait

[spring totem]

how do I do that

I’m new here I joined today

[scarlet fossil]

"/" and then write follow next to it

[scarlet fossil]

OOOOO

WELCOMEEEE I HOPE YOU LIKE IT HEREEE

can't wait to read your poemssss

[spring totem]

thank you

chat what’s happening

[scarlet fossil]

u gotta

cut the zeros and hashtag

and try

[scarlet fossil]

don't mention it

[spring totem]

ohh

[scarlet fossil]

did it work

[lost frost]

@pulsar crane is now following @scarlet fossil.

@spring totem is now following @scarlet fossil.

[spring totem]

let’s gooo

[pulsar crane]

that shi aint never worked until now 😭😭

[scarlet fossil]

lolz crazyyy

[scarlet fossil]

thank you sirrrr

[rocky dragon]

I love this so relatable too 😭

[scarlet fossil]

awhh thank you so muchhh

[forest jasper]

i likeeeee

[undone grove]

@scarlet fossil Ukhti are you good? I just saw all the deleted poemss, and you like disappeared too..

[scarlet fossil]

alhamdhullilah all good I found out recently that in Islam it's not that good to actually post love poems and stuff in front of non mahrams and like basically to the public I mean kinda obvious but I didn't know astagfirullah so I deleted those and I had exams, if I'm posting anything it'll be halal and Islam related in sha allah