With You

[dire swift]

<@&1145760802666717234> @flint spade

[dense bough]

It's beautiful

[dire swift]

thank you!

[dire swift]

<@&1145760802666717234>

what do you think about it

@velvet acorn

[velvet acorn]

Soooo beautifullll

[dire swift]

@odd raven

[dire swift]

thank you so much!

[odd raven]

Beutiful perspective to show love

[rough loom]

Wonderful! @odd raven has just progressed to level 4!

[dire swift]

thank you!

[rough loom]

Wonderful! @dire swift has just progressed to level 1!

[fierce shore]

Wowwww

[dire swift]

thank you brother!

[fierce shore]

Wanna check out mine

[dire swift]

sure! mention me there or dm me

[dire swift]

@cursive nacelle

[fierce shore]

I did
Buried talent

[dire swift]

yeah I saw it and read it, pretty!

[fierce shore]

Tyyy

[cursive nacelle]

Oh this short and neat gng the rhymes are very well constructed. also, that damn repetition always gets me because each repetition grows in intensity. this one grows in the rhythm, the rhymes, the story itself

also i noticed you were rhyming internally too which is always good

[dire swift]

yeah

thanks for noticing that!

[waxen spire]

I really like it!! Want to check mine too?

[fierce shore]

Repetition?

[dire swift]

when you reuse the same words or sounds

[waxen spire]

Allitteration and anaphora?

[fierce shore]

Oh yes that i am sleepy ig

[dire swift]

sure!

[dire swift]

exactly

[cursive nacelle]

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1441713948566098041 this is my poem

for the trade

[waxen spire]

i pinged you for mine

[dire swift]

I'm reading it

[dire swift]

okay!

[dire swift]

@topaz tartan

[topaz tartan]

ooo it's so sweet and cute and I feel like since rest is repeated u could add smth else like

So I'll lay my head on your chest
or smth smth yk but js what I feel it's really good thooo I feel like you'll write really good long poemss

[rough loom]

Wonderful! @dire swift has just progressed to level 3!

[topaz tartan]

don't mention it

[dire swift]

I already have long poems, I'll publish them someday

[dire swift]

what?

[topaz tartan]

oooo I'll be waiting can't wait to readd

[topaz tartan]

don't mention ur thanks lolz

[dire swift]

your poems are amazing! @topaz tartan

you deserve more likes

[topaz tartan]

yeshhh most of them reached starboard alhamdhullilah

[dire swift]

you deserve that!

[topaz tartan]

you're too kind

[dire swift]

if you're into collab, we can work together

[topaz tartan]

sure when do u want to

[dire swift]

when you're free tell me

[topaz tartan]

rn

hbu

[dire swift]

okay!

[topaz tartan]

u too?

[dire swift]

yeah now

[topaz tartan]

alright let's go to collab

[dire swift]

great!

[dire swift]

@waxen spire