Thief.

[deft wyvern]

i clamp down on my own thoughts, too heavy a burden
Running from the clasps of no one, i believe everyone.

Scram! Scream! Swear! Steal!
That's life! Yes it is!

Running from the grasps of myself
While my mind screams

explain thyself!!

*Holding a golden glint of my fate
Holding it as if a gentleman fighting a debate.

Wreck! Reck! Cut your neck!

Here comes the words, all verbs and nouns, i can't comprehend
I hide myself, I am a master to blend.

Skim through the waves like a tidal wind
After all i am just a thief through a mental chagrined.*

[distant falcon]

@deft wyvern has sent a notification! - @slow glen @topaz shoal @haughty viper @slate igloo @bright nest @rare wadi

[deft wyvern]

I erm, tried a new style today:p

@umbral vigil

[bright nest]

Wonderful 🙌🏻

[deft wyvern]

Thx moon

[deft wyvern]

@rare wadi

<@&1145760802666717234>

[dry geyser]

Beautiful ✨

[deft wyvern]

Thanks moon

Appreciate it

[dry geyser]

If you dont mine me can i tag you in mine as well

[deft wyvern]

Sure

[deft wyvern]

@formal yoke

[feral iris]

this feels kinda like a tornado it jumps straight into the thick of all this chaos and emotion and it really is overwhelming(but like in a good way)<3

[deft wyvern]

Was made to be :p

Cause i was feeling overwhelmed at that time

@slow glen

[slow glen]

I'm not a good critique, but in my own opinion, while the chaos of the poem is apart of the theme, it's done in a way that makes it harder to follow and get what's being expressed. at least it is to me

[deft wyvern]

Ya ;-;

I mean i too found it random to myself

But sometimes that's poetry

[slow glen]

the style itself isn't done badly at all so keep it up

[deft wyvern]

Thenk you:3🫂

[slow glen]

sometimes, but it depends why you're writing a particular poem

[deft wyvern]

Yas

[slow glen]

of course! sorry I can't be much help

[deft wyvern]

No, zou already are amazing

You*

[slow glen]

🪞

[deft wyvern]

Aww

[formal yoke]

OOOOO

NOW THIS IS UNIQUE

AND VERY INTERESTING

BUTIFUL

[distant falcon]

@formal yoke is now following @deft wyvern.

[deft wyvern]

@magic crescent

@high furnace

@cunning fable

[cunning fable]

I’ve been summoned i see

[deft wyvern]

Mm hmm:3

[cunning fable]

Well here’s another Friday feedback with zee on special demand……

I really find your writing style interesting. The dialogues the fast pace, the wordplay and a gush of thoughts indicating the urgency and raw emotions.
It was a great read.
Keep writing
Well penned mate 🖊️

[deft wyvern]

Thx zeela :p

You really do a deep review

[magic crescent]

"Here comes the words, all verbs and nouns, i can't comprehend
I hide myself, I am a master to blend."
~~ My fav part ~ I adooored this poem so much, it's a very unique style of writing and I honestly enjoyed reading it, keep goin' you have a way with words, that's fs

[deft wyvern]

@rare wadi

[deft wyvern]

Thx love :3

[rare wadi]

oh i already read this one

[deft wyvern]

Mb :3

[rare wadi]

This is very very good

I really like it

[deft wyvern]

U don make much poems

I*

[magic crescent]

Ofc <3