#Final Moments - shark

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little palm
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Final Moments

This simple suburbanite void-
Filled with liminal voice.
An endless stroll-
Time takes its toll.

Insanity seethes its way to my head.
Now wondering if I were dead…
Who would remember me?

My brain squabbled in existential dread-
From the words my thoughts have said.

Forever thoughts run rampant-
Wondering, should I keep the lamp lit,
Or should I extinguish my flame?

Every moment the air grows colder.
Every moment I get a shiver in my shoulder.
All my coats are gone.

Study the sky-
My last moments of life.
Ran from my lies-
Now, gouged are my eyes.

What a surprise.

gray joltBOT
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violet locust
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I would not consider this short, this is more normal length

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Or I guess I just want a micro tag?

little palm
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nevermind, i can't change tags

violet locust
random spire
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Great flow! A bit explicit in direct narration for my tastes but still good. You had a strong start with the imagery of an infinite, liminal, suburban sprawl. I'd love to feel the dread, though, instead of be told that it's there. Really put me in your shoes as I wander, strolling past house on house unending, all the same and grind the wear into the mind.

little palm
tropic thicket
tropic thicket
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It’s good

gray joltBOT
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little palm
drifting silo
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woah

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this is so good

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drifting silo
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carna is gonna be mad at me lolz

atomic bone
drifting silo
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I'll try not to do it again

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for today

little palm
velvet zincBOT
rancid timber
rancid timber
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STOP SPAMMING AND INFLATING MY TAGGSSS GAHHH

drifting silo
drifting silo