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#ROOTED IN THE DARK
molten agate
sick tapir
This is so good, the deep rooted meaning of the poem is amazing.
In the last stanza id personally suggest instead of "i stayed, rooted on the dark floor", I would evoke stronger emotions by using stronger language -
"I knew the way out,
a door I could have shouldered open.
But I turned from its frame,
and chose instead to learn the dark by heart—
to trace the familiar bruise of you,
and call the ache my home."
weary jackalBOT
This is so good, the deep rooted meaning of the poem is amazing.
In the last st...
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molten agate
This is so good, the deep rooted meaning of the poem is amazing.
In the last st...
Thank you so much!! And thanks for you're suggestions 🫶🏻
@verbal hatch @iron prism
verbal hatch
damn. this is really romantic and kinda sad yk
molten agate
damn. this is really romantic and kinda sad yk
Maybe it’s meant to feel that way… beautiful, but never enough.
wary heart
green lava
I loved the last poem I read of yours and I love this one. As if showing you're willing to wait and reach and long for something...it's a more powerful show of devotion. And again with the strong semantic field: 'want', 'chasing', 'searching', 'ache', 'long for', 'reach', 'faith'. Really makes the poem feel cohesive
weary jackalBOT
I loved the last poem I read of yours and I love this one. As if showing you're ...
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molten agate
I loved the last poem I read of yours and I love this one. As if showing you're ...
Thank you so muchh 💖
molten agate
@old pumice
old pumice
"Even when I knew
there was a way out,
I stayed,
rooted on the dark floor,
as if absence
were a kind of faith." 😭
I just woke up dont get tears in my eyes
but, anyway that was really beautiful. It was a Good, nice poem
uncut prawnBOT
molten agate
but, anyway that was really beautiful. It was a Good, nice poem
thank youu
iron prism