His Chorales | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

muted grove Oct 22, 2025, 3:32 AM

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Bach’s Chorales were made
for four—

which is what I think
as I sit on the cold
cafeteria floor,
watching a sixth grader
play a Chorale
on my school’s grand piano.

The sound, which probably
should feel uplifting,
is swallowed by
the large room.

It’s a grey day outside—
like even the clouds
want to hear four voices
raised in prayer, and not
the solo clack of piano keys.

Or maybe they’re frowning on
the solitary grey Honda
in the parking lot,
though

I wouldn’t be able
to guess what it did
to deserve that sorrow.

I wipe a single tear
from my warm eyes
as I focus back
onto the Chorale,

played by the lone pianist.

Any and all thoughts greatly appreciated and don't forget to leave a heart and a star if you liked it :)

mellow thornBOT Oct 22, 2025, 3:32 AM

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bitter scroll Oct 22, 2025, 3:41 AM

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my ex was in chorale

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i quite enjoy the seemingly ominous storytelling, amazing work bro!

muted grove Oct 22, 2025, 3:54 AM

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Thanks!

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Which part of it made you think it was ominous?

bitter scroll Oct 22, 2025, 3:55 AM

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its a lot of parts

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the diction you used throughout gave me that vibe

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i can easily say grey day and sorrow

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and the image alludes to an ominous tone with the lighting

muted grove Oct 22, 2025, 4:01 AM

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cool!

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I was going for a more chill tone

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But... yeah

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Reading it like that I see it

high creek Oct 22, 2025, 10:47 AM

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I love the overall theme and story, the flow was a little difficult to follow for me however, but again, overall it had great imagery in my head. Nicely done

mellow thornBOT Oct 22, 2025, 10:48 AM

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muted grove Oct 22, 2025, 2:49 PM

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Thanks for following! Could you elaborate a little on how the flow is difficult to follow and where?

high creek Oct 22, 2025, 2:57 PM

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muted grove Thanks for following! Could you elaborate a little on how the flow is difficult ...

Absolutely, I can't tell how you said it in your head or how you intend it to be read, as in the pattern of words or if there is a cadence. I hope I'm making sense? xD

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I re read it just now and for me it's that the pattern switches up multiple times, there's a pattern to your words and how your phrasing them, how many words per sentence, but it changes up randomly, makes is difficult to follow, for me at least, doesn't have to be true for anyone but me ^.^

polar spindleBOT Oct 22, 2025, 3:00 PM

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high creek I re read it just now and for me it's that the pattern switches up multiple time...

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muted grove Oct 22, 2025, 3:01 PM

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hm

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I think I see

muted grove Oct 25, 2025, 4:39 AM

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I mean the more the merrier :)

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Thanks

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NoizeLoves

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Honesty is good

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Wow, really?

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Your poems are pretty fire too

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Though I think you write quite differently than me

polar spindleBOT Oct 25, 2025, 4:46 AM

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muted grove Oct 25, 2025, 4:46 AM

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I saw a few

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Awwwww

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Why?

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I wasn't really going for a sharp ending— I was thinking of a more meditative poem, and I feel like the quiet ending reflecting back to loneliness is more fitting, but I do see your point about the pacing

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There are certainly some unnecesary parts

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hmmmm

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I'll definitely think on that

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Oh cool! Ping me in some please

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alrighty

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