Nobody
Nothing
Empty
Machine
Work
Work
Work
Work
Work
Work
Work
Work
#Empty Machine
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this composition is stunningly onomatopoeic and narrative while balancing a sense of minimalism. I've found it by chance, as a worker who randomly looks at a moving speck while inspecting that a machine is working. That very moment, they may be tempted to stay in a bit longer, when, in reality, the room is free of risk. I am in AWE at the detail of there being exactly eight "Works", for not only does it give the poem a proper rhythm (considering how modern music; about 98%, is written on 4/4, in other words, making it suddenly catchy, all this while extending on the link to a mechanical workspace.
"Nobody / Nothing / Empty / Machine" also has a certain ring to it. I love how it also acts as a prelude to a day, you know, a morning before getting to work, a moment to cooldown. However, the detail that it's ONLY one stanza feels like the system reminding you that it's not a day that is split into multiple bits, but a single lapse occurring each day, which you must fulfill. Honestly, brilliant.
I would love to hear your thought process and / or inspiration writing this, maybe tips on how to improve such concise writing, idk, if you're fine with that :/
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this composition is stunningly onomatopoeic and narrative while balancing a sens...
Thank you very much for reading and sharing your fascinating insights. I’m grateful you found meaning in my work.
I’m afraid my inspiration is a secret. if you’re looking for tips, try hearing your poem in your mind, or even speaking it out loud before writing it down.
Keeping a diary is also important. Daily writing is one of my most cherished practices.