My dearest friend

[dapper cape]

What you guys thinks not full poem yet

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Life feels so empty heavy and true, what make me suffer this pain so true I hurt everyday there is no renewal the scars the pain is one long lasting battle, I hope one day I'll get dismissed from these shadows. My dearest friend so help me please pull me out this void I'm trapped drowning and consumed by the pain of worries and doubt so please my dear friend help me lend me your hand don't let go or I'll fade again

[warped mirage]

Wow

This is amazing

Ngl it has raw emotions

It’s really nice

I love it

@dapper cape

[dapper cape]

Thank you! @warped mirage

[regal plinth]

@dapper cape hello, the message behind your poem/prose is relatable.
The lack of ponctuation and line breaks makes it mentally demanding to follow.
As a reader I had to decide my own pauses and connect the thoughts...

[stiff snow]

I agree, I enjoy the emotional expression but I struggle with understanding the writers intended flow.

@dapper cape I would like to feel and hear how you thought it / said it when I read it, so some punctuation would be helpful ^.^

I also write lyrical rhyming poetry, so its exceptionally hard on me to follow xD but I enjoyed the read none the less

[dapper cape]

@stiff snow @regal plinth I appreciate the feedback I'm still working on it