adoring

[fringe lance]

To me heaven isn’t up above
It’s underneath our shared sheets
It’s my head on your chest and your hands in my hair

Your heartbeat the metronome to my songs
Your soul the muse to my poems
Your face the subject of all my art

Oh my love, the man you are
I’ve never imagined myself down so bad
Though I don’t intend on turning back

I’ll patch every hole of your fractured sole
The only bruises that shall be left by me
Are purple with love and marks of my teeth

You don’t need any fixing
Just need to loved
I’ll adore you even when we are angels above

[hidden basin]

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[ebon imp]

I wasn't expecting the freaky at the end

[fringe lance]

IT WORKED WITH IT OKAY -

[drifting vine]

[fringe lance]

😔
elaborate?

[drifting vine]

Maybe later
It's 1:42 here my head's spinning i woke up at 4 am yesterday

[fringe lance]

Bruh
Go to bed

[drifting vine]

Fs I will give detailed feedback later

[fringe lance]

Wait
Pm or am

[drifting vine]

Ok so last time I slept was at 14th October 11 PM and woke up at 4 AM on 15th and now it's 1:43 16th October here

So 22 hours

.

[fringe lance]

sleep

[drifting vine]

Yep 🫡

[fringe lance]

Besides that what do u think

[naive nova]

I love the fact that you use metaphors.

I generally describe things to no end. So it's a breath of fresh air

[fringe lance]

It’s new for me too
Like I got feedback on show not tell so I’ve been trying my best

[naive nova]

I see, I understand. But showing and not telling is a bit overrated imo lol

[fringe lance]

Lowkey Agreed
I think it’s situational

If your poem is more stream of conscious and such telling is good but if it’s more like
Idk
Flow-y and such witj metaphors I think show is better
I go between