butterfly effect

[modern vault]

Love this part

Strangers are faceless except for the eyes, 
that watch me like how a shirt clings 
to flesh when wet.

[crimson acorn]

yayyy thank you :3

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[crimson acorn]

revision of an old poem 🙂

[next coral]

crossing a road, i look right into the lens,
a glimpse of light through the rain.

nice detailed imagery though

these verses feel filler to me

it is not poetic,
but i would rather it not mean nothing.

that this
present moment is a long
instance of the world
snapping at the midpoints.

i feel like this is a strong ending

[crimson acorn]

Oohhh filler, how? If I may ask

[next coral]

like i feel like it dont need to be there if that make sense

[crimson acorn]

I see, interesting! I can see how it can come off that way, actually

[next coral]

or maybe that was the intent to let the reader know that it wasnt poetic?

but i think you couldve expressed that differently

[crimson acorn]

Yeaaa now that I'm rereading it, I agree

it's a bit ambiguous what "it" is referring to so I think I'll specify that in my next revision