GoG - So it Begins (1)

[hidden rose]

we will keep the 1,000 mark

by deleting our comments

[sage yacht]

Lets try getting to 10000 now

[hidden rose]

make it a thousand

[night saffron]

Too much work. We'll be a legacy, frozen in time.

[blazing gazelle]

Rob the pary-ers

they pay without consent

for using your house

[opaque wigeon]

you're welcome

[sage yacht]

Yea ask the gusts for money for emotional distress

[night saffron]

BTW guys did we define poetry finally or no?

[hidden rose]

let's ping everybody we know in this poem

[sage yacht]

Sush

[hidden rose]

let's get this to 2,000 comments

[tight heart]

Lol

[night saffron]

What was the conclusion?

[blazing gazelle]

I hereby define poetry as:

Words but deep

[brisk idol]

@hidden rose has sent a notification! - @grizzled grove @lucid jolt @worldly plover @digital iris @hollow fjord @upbeat swallow @amber cargo @jovial glade @light delta @vivid furnace @vague pelican @stable topaz @tight heart @lusty dagger @wheat ember @placid pelican @vast mulch @pliant ravine @sage haven @sour trench @grave cradle @manic depot @tranquil yacht @snow spade @grand steppe @winter trellis @kind tiger @tight heart @west roost @hushed lava @acoustic swallow @west oar @blissful tinsel @bold totem @urban hill @mortal stump @outer dock @half vigil @random harness @wind cove @west veldt @cyan drum @wary kayak @proven cipher @wraith lagoon @flat edge @turbid owl @real light @cunning mulch @urban ibex @restive night @steep terrace @coarse nebula @elder raft @hearty cargo @kindred geyser @simple scaffold @weary frigate @maiden topaz @wintry spear @glass iris @somber coyote @midnight yarrow @tight heart @hazy wasp @last pilot @native sable @minor basin @jagged yew @night saffron

[blazing gazelle]

GAH

[sage yacht]

Ik like 7 ppl dave

[night saffron]

Yay!

[blazing gazelle]

JUMPSCARE

[tight heart]

Why are we even redefining poetry, poetry in form of sentences as if one is talking exist

[hidden rose]

I saw that rem

[sage yacht]

Look this is how many ppl follow me

[night saffron]

Idk

[sage yacht]

Me too heheheh

[brisk idol]

@sage yacht has sent a notification! - @past trellis @vague pelican @amber cargo @night saffron @elfin fossil

@opaque wigeon has sent a notification! - @uncut cedar @maiden topaz @ionic iris @hybrid patrol @cunning mulch @grizzled grove @ornate forge @grand steppe @stark sluice @outer dock @earnest sierra

[sage yacht]

This is the ppl ik

[opaque wigeon]

im new ok? geesh

[sage yacht]

Well no this r the ppl that follow me but ok

[blazing gazelle]

i have a grand total of two people in my follower’s list, including Beau himself

[cunning mulch]

WHAT IS HAPPENING STOP PINGING ME T-T

[brisk idol]

@blazing gazelle has sent a notification! - @night saffron @proven cipher

[blazing gazelle]

im so famous

[sage yacht]

I joined later than u HAHHAHa

[cunning mulch]

3 times pinged

[sage yacht]

WEE HAVE 1000 COMMENTS AND GOING FRO 2000

[sage yacht]

It wouldve been 4 if ud follow me

[cunning mulch]

2000?

[sage yacht]

Kihih

[night saffron]

THIS IS THE POEM

[cunning mulch]

I DONT FOLLOW U?

[sage yacht]

Nuh uh

[cunning mulch]

shi I forgor

[blazing gazelle]

you should be able to pin stuff it’s so annoying when you cant 😭

[brisk idol]

@cunning mulch is now following @sage yacht.

[night saffron]

THIS IS THE LORE

[cunning mulch]

sorry for the wait

[sage yacht]

I just tag u wenever i post lol

[cunning mulch]

likewise

[night saffron]

Guys, pls actually read the poem too

[sage yacht]

Yeah

[sage yacht]

I did

[blazing gazelle]

I actually did so I’m exempted right

[night saffron]

Ofc

[blazing gazelle]

IT’S A GREAT POEM GUYS HIGHLY RECOMMENDED

IT INSPIRED ME TO MAKE SOMETHIGN SIMILAR

[sage yacht]

It inspired me to make a russian ruolette poem

[blazing gazelle]

…and by inspired me… I mean I’ll start… eventually… maybe next week… or later…

[opaque wigeon]

me too

[night saffron]

🤣

[sage yacht]

Copy cat

[night saffron]

Srsly tho, that's very sweet.

[amber cargo]

why am i getting pinged so much

[night saffron]

Idk bro

[sage yacht]

We going for 2000 comments

I wanted to go for 10000 but they didnt

[blazing gazelle]

Sweet? I call it honesty

[night saffron]

1 MILLION COMMENTS!

We can do it!

[sage yacht]

Ok thats over reaching

[blazing gazelle]

*G R A H A M ‘ S N U M B E R *

[night saffron]

Its sarcasm 😂

[blazing gazelle]

P I W I T H O U T T H E D O T

huh

[sage yacht]

Yk what isnt sarcasm tho

[blazing gazelle]

there ya go

[sage yacht]

50000 COMMENTS

Whyd yall go silent

[opaque wigeon]

silence

[night saffron]

TREE OF TREE(3)

OK seriously tho, lets close off the shenanigans for today guys.

I'll retag the poem and the lore, and we'll leave it at that.

---

For all newcomers:

THIS IS THE POEM

THIS IS THE LORE

[sage yacht]

Heheheh no

[supple trout]

over 1100 messages... just wow

[tight heart]

my goat

i love this guy

i absolutely love this guy

that sounds like a whole lotta yap, icl

bob dylan won the nobel prize in literature for one of those songs u refuse to call poetry

so unless you're claiming to know better than dylan and the ones who gave him that prize, i wudn't be quite so eager to get on that high horse

holy cow, this man is absolutely based

and you're the arbiter of what is deep too, now? wow, someone has a high opinion of themselves

[sullen badge]

ikr

[tight heart]

amen to that, brother

[sullen badge]

was it the “in the wind” one?

[tight heart]

💔 check some of her songs out, dawg, her lyrics aren't bad

eminem is a goat fr

i love taylor but even i wudnt say this lmao

that's a fantastic analogy, actually

this^

bravo

dance with the devil is poetry

listen to songs by the immortal technique and you'll see what i mean

[wet parcel]

*listen to songs by

the immortal technique and

you'll see what i mean*

- hobo100

[tight heart]

bet, let's do it

[tight heart]

blowin' in the wind

[tight heart]

lmao, and shamelessly unapologetically accepting it too. sent u a friend request, homie

[sullen badge]

“how many roads must a man walk down
‘fore you can call him a man”

[tight heart]

honestly tho, i prefer dylan's "knockin on heaven's door" far, far more

[sullen badge]

that’s the only one i listened to😭

[tight heart]

blowin in the wind is also a masterpiece, ofc, but the music and writing in that one is just impeccable

[tight heart]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rm9coqlk8fY

check it out

will definitely be worth your while

this man is my spirit animal

[sullen badge]

i like

[tight heart]

🔥 i told you you would

Tharooq Mornhail, Scourge and Slander,
En'my Expedit'ry Commander!

@night saffron these two feel very heavy on the tongue, fam- even with the contractions

rest of it is pretty good

it marches

which suits the theme quite well

[opaque wigeon]

Then don't ask my opinion, problem solved, I have no issue with keeping silence for those whose my opinion doesn't matter

[tight heart]

I have no problem staying silent around those who do not value my opinions*

do you see what happens when you allow emotion to overtake form? your words lose the ability to express correctly that which you wish to express.

form and structure are not barriers- they're scaffolding

[opaque wigeon]

idc about your opinion

[sullen badge]

ye, constraints force you to get creative and say things in a way you usually wouldn’t say

that’s smth people done think about enough

[tight heart]

exactly

some of the most beautiful phrasing emerges because you cannot say it the simple way

[tight heart]

😔 rem doesn't care about my opinion, guys, whatever shall i do with my miserable life now?

[sullen badge]

poetry would be pretty pointless if it’s just prose with hitting the enter key a few times

[tight heart]

someone says it, hallelujah!

[sullen badge]

i feel like a lot of people said it before me

just not in this server cause most people here write for fun or as a hobby

[tight heart]

even i only write for fun

but whatever you do, you gotta do it properly- or don't bother doing it at all

[sullen badge]

i submit to competitions and stuff so there’s that

i just submitted young arts

[tight heart]

there r no competitions for me to submit them to lmao- not in my area, at least

[sullen badge]

like national competitions

[tight heart]

and im too lazy to go out and find online competitions or global opportunities, so i've just ended up writing for myself

[sullen badge]

i just submit to the big ones lmao

i won gold for scholastic last year

and i was like what the heck

[tight heart]

oh damn

[sullen badge]

i started writing 3 months ago 😭

how’d i win gold

but yea let’s see if i win nationals this year or smth then

[tight heart]

💀 i started 11 years ago and i doubt i could win a gold

[sullen badge]

i think my main thing is that i’m always just trying new forms

[tight heart]

what do you think, tho? u've read my writing. if i entered a competition like the one u enrolled into, do u think i have a shot at winning anything?

and don't give me false assurance, tell me no if u don't think i cud

[wet parcel]

*and don't give me false

assurance, tell me no if

u don't think i cud*

- hobo100

[sullen badge]

i doubt you’d find 5 poems in my 120 page collection that you’d call similar

[sullen badge]

send me one to read

lemme see

[tight heart]

#1415546299847151698

[sullen badge]

i don’t think you could win with that

the technical skill is there, but the ideas of contradictions/paradoxes is well worn

and there’s no real insightful or novel commentary

[tight heart]

hm, that's fair

what entry won you the gold?

[sullen badge]

and the meter does stumble sometimes

[sullen badge]

i forgor

i think i deleted it

cause i thought it was doodoo

[tight heart]

only in one stanza, as far as i know- the crumbling monuments one

[sullen badge]

i have a gold key tho

[sullen badge]

i noticed two

[tight heart]

💀

[tight heart]

what was the other?

[cunning mulch]

this is so bizzar, does anyone else how bizzar this is

[sullen badge]

“where young ones don’t ever grow old”

[sullen badge]

i think i won gold, silver, and honorable mention with three diff pieces

i don’t think gold was poetry tho

i had like 9 poems back then

poetry i won honorable i think

[sullen badge]

swap it to “where the young will never grow”

[tight heart]

i didn't particularly like that line, I agree

[tight heart]

Where the young will never grow old?

[sullen badge]

just remove the old part

[tight heart]

that leaves it at 7 syllables and a slant rhyme, tho

[sullen badge]

its implied in “grow” anyways

[sullen badge]

hmm

how many syllables are you aiming for

[tight heart]

8

the poem is pretty consistently 8

one stanza bloats to 14-10-14-10

[sullen badge]

it’s where the young will never grow

just add an extra unstressed in the beginning

[tight heart]

hmm, what if i go with "Here, the young will never grow"?

the it implies an object or a place, and i've deliberately avoided doing that anywhere in the poem

lends it a certain gravitas

[sullen badge]

that works

but that’s still seven syllables

[tight heart]

depends on how u pronounce here

i pronounce it the same way you pronounce fear

so it's two

[sullen badge]

but

fear is also one syllable

😭

[tight heart]

💀

differences in pronunciation, i suppose

i pronounce both with an ee-yur

like ear

fear

[sullen badge]

…

[tight heart]

IF YOU SAY EAR'S ONE SYLLABLE

ISTG

[sullen badge]

BUT EAR IS ALSO ONE SYLLABLE

😭

[tight heart]

YEET THIS DUDE OUT A WINDOW

😭 ok, fine, year

[sullen badge]

uhh

[tight heart]

BEER

BEER, OK?

[sullen badge]

THEY’RE ALL ONE

SYLLABLE

[tight heart]

JESUS CHRIST

[sullen badge]

THREE

[tight heart]

it's ee-yur

[tight heart]

EF YOU

[sullen badge]

WHAT IS THIS HARRY POTTER ENGLISH

[tight heart]

THIS IS BRITISH PRONUNCIATION

AND THEY CREATED THE BLOODY LANGUAGE

[sullen badge]

BRITISH IS STILL ONE SYLLABLE 😭😭😭

[tight heart]

right, out the window you go

[sullen badge]

https://tenor.com/view/cats-cat-muscle-muscle-cat-meme-gif-551006329262101208

[tight heart]

fee-yur

hee-yur

the second is unstressed but still there

[sullen badge]

nuh uh

[tight heart]

😭

like i said, pronunciation differences

[sullen badge]

ITS ONE BLOODY SYLLABLE IN BRITISH

😭

[tight heart]

ok, i looked it up

[sullen badge]

what about: here, where the young have failed to grow

or smth like that

[tight heart]

it's one 😔

[sullen badge]

I TOLD YOU

[tight heart]

i've been pronouncing all these words incorrectly

[sullen badge]

😭

[tight heart]

my entire life 💀

[sullen badge]

…

[tight heart]

what's next, fire is one syllable?

[sullen badge]

there no way

[sullen badge]

no it’s theee

three

fi-r-e

[tight heart]

IT'S TWO

FAA-YUR

😭 😭 😭

[sullen badge]

i was messing with you 😭

[tight heart]

oh, thank god

bro shaking my world rn

wait no, these servers warn u for that stuff

[sullen badge]

get warned buddy

[tight heart]

I can't curse at you thanks to the censors and that is rly cramping my style 😭 😭

so ykw, here's an idea

im gonna invent a world

grug for f***

so now every time i say grug you

ykwim

[sullen badge]

😭

[tight heart]

grug you

[sullen badge]

what the heck

[tight heart]

i have to figure out ways around this damn system man 😭

[sullen badge]

“blueberry muffin you, you sprinkle top goo” ahh conversation

[tight heart]

💀 that sounds like smth sheldon would say

or a britisher lmfao

[sullen badge]

what a pancake mcmuffin

such headphoneness

[tight heart]

what an ineffably, incorrigibly asinine individual

[sullen badge]

that’s totally what it meant

💯💯💯

[tight heart]

lmao

they've even censored the short forms

cant say m and then f

[sullen badge]

i’m gonna buddy ol’ pal you, old sport

[tight heart]

the britishness is killing me, gah

[sullen badge]

guh

🥴

fish n’ chips

[tight heart]

😭 😭 what's next? bo'o'wo'oh?

[sullen badge]

true dat, innit

[tight heart]

I'm gon wallop your behind from saturday to chewsday, mate, if you keep at it

[sullen badge]

erm

i’m a minor

😭💔

[tight heart]

so am i, thankfully

[tight heart]

AND THAT'S NOT WHAT I MEANT, A-HOLE

[sullen badge]

didn’t you say

you were poeming

for 11 years

😭

[tight heart]

since i was 6

[tight heart]

yes 💀

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https://tenor.com/view/chainsawman-chainsaw-man-makima-reze-quanxi-gif-17036160170537358019

[tight heart]

https://tenor.com/view/what-the-hell-is-even-gif-20535402

[sullen badge]

“i saw big cat
it was so fat
i like cat”

[tight heart]

grug you 😭

[sullen badge]

fat cat

[tight heart]

i'll show u smth from when i was 11

[sullen badge]

gurgle gooble goo gaboose

[tight heart]

In a universe far away,
Very different from this one,
There was a war, so they say,
A war that could never be won.
Such a war none had seen,
A war concerning all,
Threatening all that would be, and had ever been,
This War was an Empire's fall.
Ashes to ashes,
Dust to dust-
Such were the augur's flashes,
But fought, this battle be must.
A war, for peace!
For when all are dead, what remains?
A battle, that'll never cease,
For minimal and scanty gains.
Alas, such was the fate of this great land,
To be utterly and completely razed,
From being mighty and grand,
To being completely erased.

[sullen badge]

better than my first poem

the gurg

[tight heart]

i just realised the first few lines of this hover around tetrameter- and i didn't even know about meter until a month ago lmao

[sullen badge]

😭

[tight heart]

mothergruger

[sullen badge]

11 years gang

[tight heart]

11 years

[sullen badge]

i’m reading my first poem rn and i’m cringing so hard

[hidden rose]

let's get this to 2k comments

[tight heart]

now i wanna see

[sullen badge]

NO

[tight heart]

SHOW ME

[sullen badge]

😭

what is this cartoony poem bruh

[tight heart]

Even when there’s an ugly beast in ponds. 😭 😭

[sullen badge]

SHUT

[tight heart]

that was so random

[sullen badge]

THE

GRUG

UP

[tight heart]

LMAOOOO

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😭

[tight heart]

come on, man, it was not as bad as u made it out to be

[sullen badge]

it’s so bad

let’s cleanse our eyes with smth good

[tight heart]

it's better than half the poems on this sv 💀

[sullen badge]

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1424096507816050831

[tight heart]

"poems", my bad

[night saffron]

Could it be?

Peace at last!

Peace at last!

Peace at last!

[night saffron]

All jokes aside I'd really prefer if we actually get people to read the poem instead of spam. I got 1k, dont need much more

[opaque wigeon]

grug

[night saffron]

WHAT? 😂

[opaque wigeon]

it's poetry, interpret the meaning

there is a reason

I don't like facebook either

[night saffron]

It's about the dangerous effects kf lack of education.

[sullen badge]

better pin the poem lmao

[night saffron]

I cant. I tried.

[tight heart]

call a mod

@lusty shadow help?

[night saffron]

Check Dave's message from https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1426502995121537134

[chilly prism]

@grizzled grove can you pin this for bestie ty

[night saffron]

If we're pinning, pin this (poem)

[rigid geyser]

Wonderful! @night saffron has just progressed to level 21!

[night saffron]

And then this (lore)

[opaque wigeon]

I'm curios to see your poetry

🙂 ❤️

[tight heart]

didn't you tell me not to ask for your opinion coz our aesthetic tastes differ?

but alright- check it out. i doubt you'll like it, tho. #1415546299847151698

[opaque wigeon]

im not going to give you my opinion cause clearly is ego driven, I said I was curious about your poetry I didn't say "I want to give you my opinion even tho our aesthetic tastes differ" nor did I claim you asked me to give my piece of mind

[tight heart]

clearly what is ego driven? missing a word there, buddy

[opaque wigeon]

the way that I give my opinion about poems, cause who am I to say what can be considered deep or not

[night saffron]

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

Full anthology (for future reference) is here:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[opaque wigeon]

https://youtube.com/shorts/9SciXpwFyqQ?si=HC6fJBWHehgj37Ut

[sage yacht]

Not enough comments

[opaque wigeon]

are you sure its a poem?

[sage yacht]

Rem

U do it for the rage bait I swear

[opaque wigeon]

im just farming levels

[sage yacht]

Why here and not off topic

[opaque wigeon]

for love 👉 👈

[karmic egret]

I’ll love you 🙂

[opaque wigeon]

thank you ❤️ someone finally understands

[karmic egret]

Yeah I do

[hidden rose]

did everything got deleted gng

dang

[opaque wigeon]

what did?

[hidden rose]

oh wait

i thought something for deleted

nvm

[opaque wigeon]

@hidden rose why did u tag me to see ur other poem? Idk if u even appreciated my last review so idk if I should

[hidden rose]

I appreciated your feedback very much

[opaque wigeon]

explain in what ways

[night saffron]

I swear guys shut up.

[hidden rose]

you know for giving honest feedback how there was problems in the poem

[wet parcel]

*you know for giving

honest feedback how there was

problems in the poem*

- Dave

[hidden rose]

all that kind of stuff

[night saffron]

This is the Poem

[hidden rose]

i was busy so i couldn't respond but i saw your feedback

[night saffron]

This is the Lore

@chilly prism @lethal sail

[hidden rose]

the lore was amazing gng

Matpat analysis worthy

[opaque wigeon]

do you think there was some truth to it or was I completely missing the mark?

[night saffron]

Thanks mate ❤️

[hidden rose]

there was some

but it's your opinion you know

[night saffron]

Only just the beginning, I assume you 🙂

[hidden rose]

i won't take feedback personally you know

feedbacks are the steps towards improvement

[night saffron]

Its 2:30am here, so it must be at least 3:30 in the Philippines?

[mental valley]

azgaars?

[hidden rose]

yes

[opaque wigeon]

like...? im curious

[night saffron]

Yep!

[hidden rose]

4:57 actually

[hidden rose]

there was some

i wouldn't going to details but i noticed

[mental valley]

reminding me of the time wah

[night saffron]

Technical details are here:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

But I must've mentioned it here too. Here... somewhere.

[mental valley]

I use azgaars, very easy to notice if you're familiar with the program. Love it though.

great program

for mappin

[night saffron]

Agreed.

[chilly prism]

Oh god scrolling time

[night saffron]

^

[chilly prism]

Ty.

[night saffron]

^^

[night saffron]

Ive actually had this particular map for 3.5 years

[wet parcel]

*Ive actually

had this particular map

for 3.5 years*

- Lighthearted Literarian

[night saffron]

I wasn't in a position where I could do my vision justice earlier, but its different now.

[opaque wigeon]

@last kraken

[hidden rose]

I wonder how much time will it take to see your poem by scrolling all the way to the top

4 minutes 19 seconds

[chilly prism]

I don’t quite care for this piece but I’m interested in seeing other works of yours and seeing if that’s a constant, since I do enjoy some things this offers

This simply isn’t my music taste, for no great reason really

[night saffron]

Hmm. OK. They are standalones tho, not quite part of this storyline.

[wet parcel]

*Hmm. OK. They are

standalones tho, not quite part

of this storyline.*

- Lighthearted Literarian

[chilly prism]

That mayhaps might get a better shot outta me

[night saffron]

Not into this kinda worldbuilding? I see. Thanks for reading it still 😄

[night saffron]

Dave, have you finally eaten?

[hidden rose]

nah

i'm still underneath the depths of their fury

where hanging puppets chugs a barrel unruly

i hate how i can't eat

they are still singing

what the hell

[night saffron]

Oh lord

Honestly, wish I could mail you food from here. This is just a sad situation.

[opaque wigeon]

me too? im hungy

https://tenor.com/view/hungry-im-food-dog-cute-gif-25254825

[restive night]

What is happening

I can't even reach the poem

[night saffron]

Nearly 1.5k messages here

[night saffron]

Gimme a sec.

[hidden rose]

i feel bad for the newcomers

[night saffron]

This is the poem

[hidden rose]

they have to scroll all the way up

[night saffron]

This is the Lore

[night saffron]

Tagged them here now.

[night saffron]

What about me bro?? 😭
I need to repost the same 2 messages constantly.

[chilly prism]

I respect your works more than I enjoy them is the conclusion I’ve arrived to

[night saffron]

Ayy. I'll take it. Thanks 🙂

[mental valley]

I only read through the first part briefly but I couldn't catch a good flow so I stopped in my eepiness

[night saffron]

I see. Goodnight!

[night saffron]

It's read as a trochee BTW.

Maybe that'll help?

[mental valley]

I saw that!

Perhaps the syllable count was slightly off in my head. I'm peculiar so pay it not much mind

[chilly prism]

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1424659899870085140 since we were trading I suppose

[night saffron]

Sure! Can't read tomorrow, but 100% the day after!

[chilly prism]

Does remind me to work on my aesthetic as well…

[night saffron]

This does look pretty daunting when seen in https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1040728773127061514

@restive night thoughts?

Wait. We're only 8 comment away from 1.5k!

[chilly prism]

Yippee

[night saffron]

Well @chilly prism, if I may, you mentioned you respect my work but don't vibe with em. What kinda works are your type?

[chilly prism]

Good question! Hard to answer. If you gaze my anthology though, I have collected a few of my favorite works from others in this server

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1418037683028099275

Weird to include, I know; I figure if my readers resonate with my work they may resonate with the works I enjoy

[night saffron]

I see. It'll take me a while to go through them, but from a glance I wouldn't be able to tell a pattern 😅

[chilly prism]

Because there really isn’t one!

It’s what I like or not.

[night saffron]

Not at all.

[chilly prism]

Keyword may!

[night saffron]

Buf there must some unifying aesthetic right? Maybe not thematic, maybe just a style?

[chilly prism]

To each their own. If you like works anything similar to gates of garion I could see why readers would be interested in the pieces you like in the server

[night saffron]

I do actually! Have you read "Jerusalem Delivered" by Torquatto Tasso?

[chilly prism]

I just like promoting others works that I hold highly and sharing more of my soul with anyone who’s interested

[night saffron]

That was my chief inspiration for Garion and this larger anthology.

[chilly prism]

Precisely

[night saffron]

I see. I'm still unable to ascertain where my poems fell short. Was it becoz they were too rigid maybe?

[chilly prism]

Absolutely not, though to judge a book by its cover I can’t say I’m quite interested

Very cool though

[mental valley]

I just checked these out (I'm lurking don't mind me)

[chilly prism]

Love hearing other’s inspirations

[mental valley]

have any of you read or listened to a narration of ''Boots'' by Rudyard Kipling?

[night saffron]

Not quite. I dont like him as a person, so I don't really make an effort to keep up with him.

[mental valley]

I do not know anything of him as a person

[night saffron]

He was pretty racist to us Indians.

[mental valley]

that's unfortunate to hear

[chilly prism]

Asking Violet “have you read” is a bad start to any question. I read about nothing. I am no active reader, just active writer.

[mental valley]

I'll remember that

[chilly prism]

I am quite poetically uncultured and if it’s not about containing multitudes, or how nothing gold can stay, I don’t know it.

[opaque wigeon]

pour your heart into them instead of just your brain

[night saffron]

But I am.

Which is why its taking so long.

For Canto 2*

[opaque wigeon]

are those emotions that you pour tangible to real life emotions you had?

[mental valley]

can we trust you with human emotions, rem?

[night saffron]

No. And I dont think they need to be to write a compelling story-poem.

[opaque wigeon]

I have BPD, so probably not, and Im scared of affection

[wet parcel]

*I have BPD,

so probably not, and Im

scared of affection*

- remiscray

[chilly prism]

I recall how you said you can’t imagine writing something that you don’t feel personally; I think that shows in the works you enjoy quite a lot bestie

[night saffron]

I can't relate to having a civil war and being under siege. J can still write on it tho.

[mental valley]

I'm sorry I don't know how to respond to this

[chilly prism]

Yet you still did

[opaque wigeon]

to me it was never just a hobby man i dunno

[mental valley]

yup

[chilly prism]

J

[night saffron]

J

[night saffron]

BTW any feedback or suggestions for this poem @chilly prism ?

This is the poem

This is the Lore

@restive lagoon @raven maple @outer dock

@grizzled grove

[chilly prism]

I don’t do feedbacks in this server

[lusty shadow]

@night saffron pinned

[night saffron]

Ill need one more pin mate.

This too ^

That's the lore behind the poem

[tight heart]

💯

[tight heart]

is that character growth i see 😱

[night saffron]

I think this is the maximum viewership this gets.

Not bad.

Thank you all very much for all the love, support and enthusiasm!

[hidden rose]

2k comments we are coming let's go

[night saffron]

Nah. 😅

I doubt it at least.

Wait, they removed the sparkles from our names

Well, whatever.

For one last time guys.

This is the poem

(Also finally pinned by now)

And this is the Lore

Lastly, this is a link to the full anthology as it develops:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

Its been a real pleasure guys. We'll meet again in Canto 2!

[opaque wigeon]

@last kraken

[night saffron]

Youre too kind Rem. Thank you.

[sage yacht]

Do is still have sparkels

Aw

Yooo 1570 comments so closeeee

[night saffron]

@pearl path here.

You mentioned putting a caesura after praised be. I was going for a more rhythmic and marching motion, so chose against putting any pauses anywhere in favour of this more 'March to the Drums' vibe.

Youre the only one who's got it so far.

IK its night time and youre prolly pretty sleepy, but whenever you do wake this is the Lore of the world so far.

Oof 💀

Oof. Thanks a lot bro. Thats pretty high praise.

Thanks for taking the time to read my poem, despite your lack of sleep. I really appreciate it. 🙂

If you want, you could follow me? I dont post often due to exams (still in high school unfortunately ), but you'll be tagged as the story progresses 🙂

If you ever want BTW, the full anthology will be linked here:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

Fair enough.

Anyhow, thank you again 🙂

Aight.

Good night!

[opaque wigeon]

This was fixed by invention of new words to rhyme, genius fix if you ask me

[night saffron]

Remember guys.

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

[native sable]

Oh my it was hard to find til I saw big bold letters in comments 😓😓

[wet parcel]

*Oh my it was hard

to find til I saw big bold

letters in comments 😓😓*

- k1sses.for.ivyx

[native sable]

uhhh in my opinion you don’t need to justify people that it’s ai but uh you do you.. but I’d say as fantasy goes..you’ve really hit the mark I really liked how you used the 6 lines instead of the 4 most use. I really like how your style is more like complex but well understood if that makes sense idk

[night saffron]

Thank you for reading my poem mate

[sage yacht]

1 day later

[night saffron]

@umbral scaffold

[night saffron]

@potent aurora

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

This is the Anthology:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[night saffron]

@past meteor @lethal sail

[brisk idol]

@potent aurora is now following @night saffron.

[potent aurora]

This is great! I really like the storytelling, especially how medieval it sounds while reading out loud!

[night saffron]

Thank you for reading my poem mate 😄

Im glad you liked it.
I did try my best to give it that 'March to the beat of the drums' kinda rhythm, so I'm glad people caught on to it

[night saffron]

Almost 20 hearts and 5 more stars for 20 stars!

Lets goo!

[sage yacht]

20 hearts and five more for hearts light

?

[night saffron]

My brain is being damn foggy rn

Corrected the sentence. Thanks for pointing it out.

[sage yacht]

Yw

[umbral scaffold]

Sory for the late answer, i was at school

Well i have to say 1 thing

I personally would be feeling proud for the rest of my life

The Dedication, THE IMAGINARY

honestly, i wish i was like that

i cant find the words to describe what im thinking\

[night saffron]

Im so glad you read and liked my poem 🙂

[umbral scaffold]

OH i didnt like it

I more than loved it

[night saffron]

I see 😅

[night saffron]

Oops. Pressed my message too soon.

Hey, thanks for the support

[umbral scaffold]

here for ya man

[night saffron]

Would you like to follow me BTW? I'll be posting sequels to this gradually, so you'd remain in the loop as the story develops.

[umbral scaffold]

Oh i am

[umbral scaffold]

Even if i wasnt i would be after reading th epoem

[night saffron]

I see. Doesn't show up tho?

[umbral scaffold]

uh hold on soryr

now?

OH WAIT

[night saffron]

Ohhh. No, you're following this poem thread, not me 😅

[umbral scaffold]

OOOH

MB

[night saffron]

The command is "/follow:(username)"

[brisk idol]

@umbral scaffold is now following @night saffron.

[umbral scaffold]

done

[night saffron]

Thanks a bunch mate!

[umbral scaffold]

ofc anytime

[night saffron]

Just FYI when you wanna notify your own followers about a poem you've released, the command is "/notify".

[umbral scaffold]

Ah okay

[brisk idol]

@native sable is now following @night saffron.

[sage yacht]

Here is poem

[sage yacht]

Here is lore

[sage yacht]

and anthology

And if u wanna ask why I did this instead of light

It's bc he's asleep and the poem Is a few thousand comments away

[brisk idol]

@night saffron is now following @native sable.

[night saffron]

Thank you mate! 😄

[sage yacht]

I'm not sure if ur thanking me or ivy, but if it is me, yw

[wet parcel]

*I'm not sure if ur

thanking me or ivy, but

if it is me, yw*

- azars.txt

[tight heart]

Insane stuff , It has that fantasy touch to it quite well
I think this is a GOTR based thing (Ofcourse I know that cuz u mentioned it once and well , never watched the show) But it is beautifully written. You were right , I usually do find Long form poems boring but this is more like a story rather than the poem , It is more like a song to be honest , I like the repetition of "Gates of Garion".

I like you adding the lore about the Duchy and Thalorion , It could well belong again , as a story more than a poem , Thank you for giving me the right corrections and stuff because I can sense you clearly have applied whatever you said into this , Wow ⭐

Overall I think I like the "He'll avenge King Talanor's Death" Stanza because , It feels the best of em all

And sorry if this is a bit vague , trust me , Im not that good in feedback 😭 , Wonderful stuff man , you earned that follow

[brisk idol]

@tight heart is now following @night saffron.

[night saffron]

You are most kind friend.

And in fact, you've hit the nerve perfectly. I intend to write a full-on story through poetry!

Best part, I'm about to release Canto 2 soon. Just need some finishing touches to be applied ofc, but its almost done!

Again, thanks for the follow brother 🙂

[night saffron]

@ebon vector

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

This is the Anthology:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[night saffron]

@latent orchid my friend, behold the beginning of my series and lmk if you like it.

Guys, Canto 2 of the Gates of Garion has been released:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

[night saffron]

Thanks bro. Youre too kind.

[latent orchid]

This is absolutely great, I love it

[night saffron]

@latent orchid @tight heart thanks for reading my poem guys. 🥰

You both are too kind.

As y'all probably figured, Canto 2 to this lineup has been released:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

But more importantly, and I know that this might sound a bit forward, but would you guys like to follow me? I'll probably need to take a hiatus considering my exams are coming fast, but then when I do update the storyline afterwards y'all will be notified.

Thank you 😊! I'm glad you like my poetry.

I think the command to follow a person in "/follow:(username)". Later, should you want to notify your followers, I believe its "/notify".

[brisk idol]

@tight heart is now following @night saffron.

[night saffron]

@keen juniper

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

If you find the concept interesting, I've made a Canto 2:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

And you'll find the full anthology here:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[keen juniper]

Lmaooo I’ve already fallen for this poem when ya recited it. It was sooo surreal and majestic broda specially with you narration loveddddd it

[night saffron]

Oh yeah! Totally forgot I recited it once 😂

[keen juniper]

Sure will give it a read as well

[night saffron]

Thanks buddy.

Well, there's lore to it if youre interested. I like this poem in particular becoz its in pure trochaic meter (except the last line of every stanza, which acts as a refrain).

[sage yacht]

Light how do u find so many ppl to tag in ur poems LOL

[wet parcel]

*Light how do u find

so many ppl to tag

in ur poems LOL*

- azars.txt

[night saffron]

Exchange of reviews mostly.

[sage yacht]

…dude

Is that how u got 18+ reviews to do…

[night saffron]

No no, thats just becoz of my followed poets writing more stuff. 😅

[sage yacht]

Ah okey

If it was u would be ded

Darn that sounds like im gonna kill u

Ded from burnout*

[night saffron]

Oh damn. Speaking of follows, @keen juniper wanna exchange follows? I think we both like each other's forms of poetry. I'd love to hear more poems from yout. Meanwhile, I am officially on hiatus and wont post poetry for like 9 months, but once I do post I'd like to keep you in the loop with the anthology.

[night saffron]

I intend to go at the rate of 1 review per day.

[sage yacht]

Yu gona have a poetry baby?

[night saffron]

It'll ensure a break from the preps, whilst ensuring no burnout occurs from reviews.

[sage yacht]

Tru tru

How many reviwes do u need to do now?

I was gonna post my poem but ill do it later if u have too many

[night saffron]

No no, dont let me stop you plz.

[sage yacht]

Nah its fine

[night saffron]

16

[sage yacht]

Darn dude

Thats a lottt

[night saffron]

Enough to keep me occupied, yep.

So pls, do go ahead and post your own.

[sage yacht]

Ehhhh mabey later

Once i finish the roulette poem ill post the other poem

Finish the draft*

[night saffron]

You gotta finish this one bro

[sage yacht]

Procrastination is very fun

Oh great poem idea

Ill add it to my list of poems i need to make and never will… probably

[night saffron]

And you know what @sage yacht?

Theres officially 1700 comments now!

[sage yacht]

YAYY

THE GOAL OF 10000 IS CLOSERRE

[night saffron]

Nah, but 2000 may be reached within our lifetimes 🥲

[sage yacht]

I'll invite ppl to read the poem

[night saffron]

No no

Lets not clutter the chat.

There's no point in comments earned that way.

[sage yacht]

Lol ok

Welp I'ma start a new poem since I finished the peacock one

[night saffron]

Aight. I gtg too, so perfect timing.

Bye!

[sage yacht]

Cyaa

[keen juniper]

Sure but I think i alr follow you still lemme check

[brisk idol]

@keen juniper is now following @night saffron.

@night saffron is now following @keen juniper.

[night saffron]

Thanks mate 🙂

@cunning mulch @zinc jewel

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

This is Canto 2:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is the Anthology:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[zinc jewel]

@night saffron

I personally am pleased with his speech so eloquent,

Grammar, thoughts, expression so diligent,

A breath of fresh air,
And speech I'm fluent in.

Light heart, I greatly enjoyed being immersed in this world you've created, your casual rhymes, soldiers cadence, and story telling is top tier, thank you for tagging me and sharing your works. ^.^

[night saffron]

Thank you very much mate.

[night saffron]

If youre interested, I have released a sequel.

[zinc jewel]

Does it rhym too, I'm a sucker for rhyming poetry.

[sage yacht]

It's lyrical

So yea

[night saffron]

Its a literal song mate. Theres a lot of constraints involved. I think you'll like it.

[zinc jewel]

You're lyrical 😛

[zinc jewel]

Word! Not all songs rhym though =/ I'm glad this one does, however.

[sage yacht]

U sound like my sister with that emoji, she always does that

[zinc jewel]

I wish it wouldn't convert to the emoji and would just stay = P but we don't always get the outcome we desire

[night saffron]

Oh BTW @tight heart have I tagged you here before 😅

[night saffron]

@peak igloo

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

This is Canto 2:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is the Anthology:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[tight heart]

Nope :p

I did visit this thread when reaching 1000 messages was the goal xd

[night saffron]

Ah, makes sense

We'll reach 2k in due course of time BTW 😂

258 comments more...

Can be done!

@urban bolt @dusty pumice @exotic owl guys ek baar dekh lena if you get the time.

I'm writing an anthology, and I think y'all will enjoy it.

Obviously abhi JEE ke baad hi karna hai, but like Part 1 and 2 are here so what do y'all think?

[urban bolt]

ofc I'll give it a go

[night saffron]

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

---

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is Canto 2

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

This is the Anthology

[urban bolt]

damn this is DETAILED

[night saffron]

I hope you do like it.

@restive lagoon @real light @young ocean same for y'all. Do lmk what you make of this poem plz (whenever you have the time).

[wintry spear]

Reading good poetry will improve your poetic ability

I absolutely love this

Is the world of the poem your own creation?

[night saffron]

Yep.

[night saffron]

Thanks for reading my poem mate 🥰

[wintry spear]

It was certainly my pleasure 🫶

[hybrid patrol]

This is soo cool I love how fantasy it is

[night saffron]

@hybrid patrol @wintry spear I'm so glad you guys liked my work.

I knoe this might come off as a bit forward, but would y'all like to follow me? I don't post all too often due to exams, but this way once I do eventually release its sequels y'all could remain in the loop with the storyline.

--
@pearl anvil this is the poem I was talking about.

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

--

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is Canto 2

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

This is the Anthology

Oh, you've been here!

Hey, thank you so much!

I'm glad you liked my poems.

You're 14 tho right?

Whatever. Not my place to question.

What 😱

Y'know what? I won't bother you about it.

I hope things turn out OK, and you make it out stronger in the end.

Fair fair.
My uncle died of alcohol sadly, so just be careful tho OK?

[night saffron]

Also @pearl anvil; honestly, same request to you though.

Long ago, so its OK. But still, remain careful.

[brisk idol]

@pearl anvil is now following @night saffron.

[night saffron]

Be that as it may, death is not something any of us should need to witness.

I hope you'll be better in the end, whatever be your history 🙏

Nothing can last forever. This too shall pass.

Things will get better, becoz they must get better.

Anytime.

And, for the people joining us now:

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is Canto 2

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

This is the Anthology

Oh.

And everyone?

Thanks for 1,800 comments on this poem 😂

[young ocean]

Woah, This totally gives the vibe of "La Marseillaise". Beautifully written

[rigid geyser]

Wonderful! @young ocean has just progressed to level 10!

[young ocean]

Really interesting! This story has lots of potential man I hope it helps you reach places

[night saffron]

@young ocean this is the full lore FYI.

[night saffron]

Still, Im so glad you liked it

[wintry spear]

I thought I was following you 😭

I could be wrong though

[brisk idol]

@wintry spear is now following @night saffron.

[wintry spear]

I don’t want to miss anything, fs

[rigid geyser]

Wonderful! @wintry spear has just progressed to level 3!

[young ocean]

I absolutely love how this takes inspiration from our very own histories. Generally i'm not really the kind of guy who loves fantasy, but there's really no problem if the fantasy sounds like history!

PS. The names are so badass.

[hybrid patrol]

Following 👍

[night saffron]

I see. Look, what youre doing is following 'the thread' which is this

What that means is, once THIS chat is updated with more text, you'll be informed.

But for NEW poetry, you need to follow the person

How you do that is, you use the follow command from the @brisk idol bot.

It is "follow:(username)"

Anyhow, for those joining now:

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

---

This is Canto 2

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is the Anthology

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

@neon sorrel

@remote hamlet

[hybrid patrol]

Ahh I see

[night saffron]

It reads like this:

/follow user:@night saffron

Altho Folly will help you out half-way.

Anyhow, enough self glazing and hustling from my end. @hybrid patrol do you wanna share a poem of your own? If you want, I could review it 🙂

[hybrid patrol]

Ugh it’s not letting me do it rn I’ll do it later Dw

[night saffron]

Honestly, it's fine 😅
Not worth this much effort.

[remote hamlet]

My eyes have been blessed
Its very good
Ive never read something like this
:My opinion

[night saffron]

@ebon vector

This is the Poem

This is the Lore

---

This is Canto 2

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

This is the Anthology

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1425489873439035512

[ebon vector]

thank you for the explanation of the poem

[night saffron]

GoG - So it Begins (1)

[night saffron]

@cosmic prairie, do go through Canto 1 for context into what's going on.

[cosmic prairie]

Okay, I will

[next onyx]

As a fellow worldbuilder and amateur poet I absolutely adore this, stunning work!

[night saffron]

Oh hello, hi there!

I am surprised beyond measure that my poem could still receive traffic. How'd you even manage to find it? 😅

[night saffron]

Be sure to check out the follow-up in Canto 2, and follow the Anthology page for more updates!

Canto 3 has been conceived. Actually making it is going to be a pain, but it'll definitely happen once exam pressures cease.

[night saffron]

It's this link:

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1429545325538050150

[next onyx]

Yeah I sort of just happened to stumble on one of your poems on Garion, I looked it up on post-own and here we are lol.

[night saffron]

Thank you for reading my poem mate 🙂

[next onyx]

No problem! 😊