#metal snow

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craggy tinsel
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. 金
溶 の
紅 け 雪
緋 な
け い
り し
び
れ

kane no yuki
tokenai shibire
kōhikeri

metal snow—
numbness will not melt
the scarlet gash

vocal pollen
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i like it very much

craggy tinsel
# vocal pollen nice

i use 金 for metal, as it is more commonly read as 'kin' for money or gold, but classically can be 'kane', and can refer to metal in general.

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so i want suggestion of greed also, in addition to the suggestion of war

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also element of eros in the scarlet gash

vocal pollen
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the poem really pretty imagery

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for a haiku. it's very good

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short and compact